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 Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 7:26 pm
Here's the prologue of my next-to-lastest idea.
It'll be slow coming, and I'm not even sure whether this will be a novel or just a novella. Heck, I don't even know the genre yet. We'll just see where it takes me.
NOTE: Yeah, my title changed. Because the whole feel of the book changed. That's going to happen. A lot.
Prologue
I am afraid.
Here, in this town of 1022, where you can walk down the middle of the road and not worry about being hit, go into what few dark alleys we have and not worry about being jumped, leave the doors unlocked and not worry about being robbed. Here, in our own house, I am terrified beyond words.
At night I lie awake listening to breathing, counting, making sure everyone is still here, still alive, still ready to awaken should the apparent calm be broken. Below me, the deep, slow breaths of our little cousin. To my right, in the next room, shallow sucks of air from our elder sister, and across the hall, shaky snore from the man who gave me reason to check each night.
Two sleepers are missing. The one I’m used to; working nights as a nurse at the hospital means Mom is rarely home in the evening. But the absence of you I have yet to grow accustomed to. After two weeks one might think differently, but your breathing, soft and whispery, is the sound which, like an ocean’s tide, always lulled me to sleep at last.
Now I just lay here, waiting for exhaustion. But that doesn’t come but every other night, and as I distinctly remember waking up this morning, I have a long wait ahead of me.
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Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 10:30 pm
eek I... have no idea what to say, but I am intrigued.
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Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 1:04 pm
I have to agree with Serenity. It's good. Very good. Intriguing.
Even in your few lines, I can feel/read/sense the tension here. Maybe your description of the different breathing styles... I dunno. But amazing job. And that one line: ...shaky snore from the man who gave me reason to check each night. Wow. Perfection if there ever was such a thing.
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Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 7:02 pm
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 9:25 pm
That's it!! It reminds me of Kirby. Don't ask why. I don't know.
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Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 5:56 pm
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Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 7:17 pm
Interesting, really makes me want to know more.
...shallow sucks air from.... Kind of confuses me there. Should there be an "of" between "sucks" and "air"? It doesn't sound right to me.... maybe its my lack of sleep catching up to me.
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Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 1:00 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 2:12 pm
No, not exactly. Tell me what you mean nowz before I consider being offended.
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Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 5:58 pm
Well, you see it's kind of disturbing and raw. Like your stories. ANd your threats.
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Posted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 8:06 am
........my stories are disturbing and raw....?
.....THANKS!!!!! heart heart heart heart
That's what everyone said about Z. *love* and he's.....he's Z!
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Posted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 9:32 am
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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 7:25 am
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