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PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 6:06 pm


Never Forget.

He walked away
From his one and only light.
How easily fooled,
his mind was.

He thought he was doing him self good.
Getting rid of the thing that was holding him back.
What he didn't know
Was she was the only
Pulling him through.

Not for a second
Did he feel guilty.
As she gasped for her last breath.
He just looked at her and smiled.

No, he couldn't just let her live.
He denied the tears
That fell from his own eyes.

Years from now
He's already forgotten.
Those perfect eyes
He once loved.

The blade was washed.
And the evidence destroyed.
But still he felt,
So very undone.

He raised his glass,
and drank every drop.
The poison was quick,
and he dropped to the floor.

How easily fooled,
His mind was.
All he ever needed
Was the thing he forgot.
PostPosted: Mon Jun 23, 2008 6:08 pm


About the Poem: I think this poem is pretty good. I'm sure it could use some work. Eh, tell me what you think.

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PostPosted: Tue Jun 24, 2008 3:10 pm


I love the idea behind it and the way you write down your words, made me read your poem till the very end without blinking my eyes once ^^. I love it !!
PostPosted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 5:16 pm


redmind200
I love the idea behind it and the way you write down your words, made me read your poem till the very end without blinking my eyes once ^^. I love it !!
Thank you very much!

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