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 Posted: Mon Jun 16, 2008 3:07 am
I will wait for the day
i have pined over for years
a day filled with joy and tears
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Posted: Tue Jun 17, 2008 5:00 pm
I think that this is a good beginning for a poem. It's a bit abrupt and I cannot get a feeling for how the emotions are played out with only three lines to go by. Try adding a bit more emotion and exploration to make the journey complete. smile
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