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For Hilaritys Sake

PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 10:58 pm


Whoo-boy, I am rustyyy. This is filled to the brim with cliches, and don't even try to tell me it's good. Where this came from, I'll never know. Take it as it is, and critique it as seen fit.


It was her smile
it struck every chord
it played every tune
it unlocked everything
deep inside my very being

It was her touch
it gave me warmth
it made me shiver
it triggered every emotion
locked away in my heart and soul

it was her voice
it was her mind
it was her heart
it was her everything

All that she was
was everything I could ever need

She gave me happiness
she gave me love
she gave me life
when everything around me was dead

And so, in her parting
she took it all away
and left me with nothing
but my sorrow and longing

Always, I sit by her stone
thinking and reminiscing
of her smile
of her touch
of her voice, mind, heart

All of my love, now long departed
PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 10:32 am


Hm. Well, I didn't think it was bad or anything. I liked it. ^^

One thing, though:
For Hilaritys Sake
it was her voice
it was her mind
it was heart heart
it was her everything


Do you mean to say "her heart"?

Mt Oceans

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For Hilaritys Sake

PostPosted: Fri Jun 20, 2008 9:04 pm


grayangel2992
Hm. Well, I didn't think it was bad or anything. I liked it. ^^

One thing, though:
For Hilaritys Sake
it was her voice
it was her mind
it was heart heart
it was her everything


Do you mean to say "her heart"?


Ah, yes; I did.
Thank you. x3
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