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Sound Ninjas apprentice

PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 2:38 pm


Okay this one is one I've had floating around in my head for a while. I hope you like it.


I'm standing staring at it.
The edge of a canyon
A canyon with no bottom to see.

I stand here looking at it.
Knowing that it's my future.
Nothing to be scared of
I keep telling myself
But I'm still scared.

I stand here looking at it
Knowing that one day
I'm going to step off of the edge
And see if there really is a bottom
Or if it just keeps going
And if there is a bottom
I hope I survive the fall
Hopefully it won't be the end, it'll be the begging

One day I'm going to find out
One day I'm going to step off of it
And find out

But for now I'm just standing here
Looking at it
Knowing it's my future
Knowing I'll step off of it
And hoping I'll survive

So for now I'll just stand here
Staring at my future
Staring at the edge.
PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 12:16 pm


I like the repetition of it at the end, especially. A good poem.

Oh, but you spelled "begging" instead of "beginning". ^^

Mt Oceans

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Sound Ninjas apprentice

PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 3:24 pm


Thanks, yeah I'm not sure If everything right with the spelling. My spell check is on the fritz at the moment.
PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2008 8:59 pm


Sound Ninjas apprentice
Thanks, yeah I'm not sure If everything right with the spelling. My spell check is on the fritz at the moment.

Ah, I see. It's not bad though. ^^

Mt Oceans

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