Hey...this is just a shor poem I just wrote...


I just wanted to have some feedback so let me know what you think of it

you probably don't know me so don't mind being kind! xD

(there's no way of improving without constructive critisism...but theres' no room for destructive critisism scream

Shooting Star


Just the way a star vanished in mid air
Your presence here, quickly flew away
But this given feeling is rather rare
Since my hears throbs for you, even astray

And like a star you brightened me with your light
To leave my eager heart now in total darkness
But just a whisper of you helps me ignite
My feeling which in my mind remain harmless

For you’re my shooting star, beautiful and ephemeral
And just a glimpse of you sets me in euphoric state
For you’re my shooting star, bright and magical
And my wish to see you again forever will be the same

If all the Milky Way would be torn apart
A star will always shine inside my heart
And the day all the planets just collide
Your face will be carved in my mind…


(Keep in mind that I'm from Argentina and that my primary language is Spanish...not Enlgish so if I have any sintax problem please tell me!)