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 Posted: Thu May 15, 2008 3:18 pm
In Your Head
I want to be in your head
not on your mind.
I want to fight the doubts in your head
since they've sapped your strength.
Unfortunately, I'm not in your head
So all I can do is talk.
You and the world fed the doubts in your head
So you must starve them.
There will always be doubt in our heads
but we can keep it in check.
The doubt in our heads
only hold us and pull us back.
So let's fight the doubt in your head.
C'mon! Let's achieve our dreams!
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Posted: Thu May 29, 2008 12:50 am
There was a word misspelled. I loved the message in your poem, very good. I think you could have formatted the poem a little different, shortened some lines. Other wise I liked it.
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Posted: Thu May 29, 2008 2:08 pm
Cool, thnx. I'll edit it and post a new verison here.
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