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 Posted: Thu Sep 01, 2005 3:11 pm
The darkness speaks to me
It speaks of things I've left unsaid
It calls to me
Go into the night
Follow your blackened heart
I move
As smooth and seductive as a blood-thirsty vampire
Searching for it's prey
I stop
In front of a tombstone I stand
It still remains clean and untouched
Waiting for the next faceless corpse to claim it's place
Will it be me?
As immortal as I feel,
Nothing is certain
Is it you?
Being carried now,
to your eternal home
The casket is lowered
Through all I feel
One thing is sure
The beauty remains.
[Comments are appreciated. ]
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Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2005 9:46 pm
It's nice. Unusual in a sense, because its content is dark, but at the end it leaves a feeling of a sort of... contentedness, I suppose.
heart pero, me gusta.
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Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2005 5:22 pm
^_^ Thanks for the comment.
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Posted: Wed Sep 21, 2005 12:22 pm
I like it!
Especially the last line. It's very very good. I like the vampire part
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Posted: Fri Sep 23, 2005 3:46 pm
Thanks so much. I was determined to make that vampire line work into this poem. >.<
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Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2005 4:09 pm
I like it a lot...it's dark...but it works...
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Posted: Mon Oct 10, 2005 8:12 am
I quite like it but I'll probably need to read it a few times before I work out why
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Posted: Mon Oct 10, 2005 4:33 pm
Thank you for the comments. <3
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Posted: Tue Jan 03, 2006 6:41 pm
It's very good. I think it's unique and different, that's the best kind of poem.
-Kay-
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