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Kakashi_of_Talos
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 17, 2008 7:33 pm


You say you love me through thy tears,
Yet you deny me your heart my dear.
Through darkness and pain I trudge,
Yet you never waiver or budge.
Yet love comes to me from another place,
I watch the hate and pain cross your face.
Yet still you try to stand your ground,
And still you come tumbling down,
I watch you fall as you watch me.
As you break I look away,
Cause I can’t bear to watch,
You fall to piece and crumble to dust
 
PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 11:29 am


Kewl, I really like it. However, you shouldn't use the word "thy" (unless it rhymes with something else) because I can tell you're not using your own voice.

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 30, 2008 8:26 pm


..is 'thy' up there?

*looks again*
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