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 Posted: Fri Feb 22, 2008 9:20 pm
Hey man i'm not that good at battling and you said you need practise lmao if you accept juss a drop a verse
No Min- 9 bar max No Recycling No Biting
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Posted: Sun Feb 24, 2008 1:22 pm
xd No problem. You spelled it right, I'd say. How many lines per bar? And who goes first?
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Jaiden Stryker Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 24, 2008 3:53 pm
Erm... he kinda already put the rules in the first post. neutral
If you accept, you drop first.
As far as bars, no minimum, but no more than 9 bars. So basically, you choose the number of bars during your drop, as long as it isn't more than 9.
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Posted: Sun Feb 24, 2008 11:15 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 12:05 am
Figuring you're off point like a Lack Luster Luchador
Your future's foretold what you're already shooting for.
With blanks to bank, you're short on chances shanked
Making advances preemptively for an oxygen tank
Life support and an IV if you really wish to try me
In rhyming. I seem a beginner but the crime scene's
All a smaller issue until you figure what just hit you.
Like blowing your nose with blood on the tissue
Through the ears and elsewhere, beginning menstruation?
Worse than the Clinton Campaigning Administration
Growing into womanhood already? It's not propagation
But venom in your vicinity like a vaginal assassination
Five days of blood? You've only got one because
Drainage of bodily fluids through abuse undoes
Whatever you spit, excrete then eat. Give it a rest
Before you're crushed like the Wicked Witch of the west.
Or better yet, stay bound to the country that found you
Before you're called a cadaver in your round too.
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 3:29 pm
Damn you killed it man
you rhymes were a trainwreck yah flow was a catastrophe//
i dont even gotta diss you with that lyrical blasphomy//
each bar keeps going and you digging yah self a bigger hole//
you a never was a wanna-be bob dole//
you can call me Obama the Future president//
i'm the ruler a lyrical Precendent//
i'm unstoppable my rhymes are an obamanation//
you call it a verese i call it your assanation//
alright Zeudokai? you names sounds like a panda's//
you can be hilary this is my lyrical ******** WRITERS BLOCK scream stressed burning_eyes )
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 3:31 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 4:07 pm
the only word out of the both of yall raps i understood was the word 'you' lmao.. exaggarating a lil bit but u get my idea rofl
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 4:59 pm
xox__iLuv u more cookiez the only word out of the both of yall raps i understood was the word 'you' lmao.. exaggerating a lil bit but u get my idea rofl Understood. I'm not the battling type. Hence why I said I needed practice. Plus one thing I believe I heard about battling was that nothing was suppose to be anyone's head. Out of reach ideas don't get votes. Guess I wasn't speaking English then.
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 8:16 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:24 pm
Well Zeudokai tried too hard to be deep. Usually, people prefer blunt and easily comprehendable yet still creative lines in battles. BUT WA's verse did absolutely nothing for me so I vote for Zeudokai. Just tune down intricate factor and lean towards more simplicity while still hitting with hard punches.
Vote: Zeudokai
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Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:48 pm
vote Zeudokai because yall both had bad versed but Zeudokai had better structure and i could see wat he was trying to do
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Jaiden Stryker Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Feb 27, 2008 12:27 am
I'm going to have to give this to Zeudokai. Neither verse had anything that really stood out though. My advice to you both is to start practicing punchlines. In text battles, those pack the most power.
Look for examples from other battles.
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Posted: Sun Mar 02, 2008 10:27 am
Thanks for the advice guys.
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