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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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 Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2007 11:02 am
I remember how the moon looked
On that starry February night
I remember how I shook
When you touched me, oh so right
I remember I wanted to climb that wall
And sit on the edge to look at the sky
I remember pondering you, trying not to cry
I remember what you wore
And how your hair was done
I remember that I wanted more
Because my heart was won
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2007 6:57 pm
I like it. smile
But I prefer poetry that uses similes as oppose to stating whatsup.
I still like it though.
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2007 7:59 pm
Usually I'm more creative with poetry.
This, however, is a special case. I was working on my rhythm and I was working off of an actual memory.
It's easier for me to write poetry when I'm making it up.
Thanks, though!
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 8:17 pm
Hey it's better than I could do!
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I'm schizophrenic
And so am I
rofl
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 8:27 pm
Grinders Thirteen Hey it's better than I could do! Roses are red Violets are blue I'm schizophrenic And so am I rofl LOL I love it! :}
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 8:39 pm
It's from What About Bob?
The show with Bill Murray and he plays a psychologist's patient that won't leave.
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Posted: Sat Dec 01, 2007 6:09 pm
i dig both those poems,,,, albeit i identify more with the second was there two poem? or did i post in the wrong place or what?,,,,, anyways i can dig that one sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Dec 03, 2007 7:33 pm
tourniquetsmile I remember how the moon looked On that starry February night I remember how I shook When you touched me, oh so right I remember I wanted to climb that wall And sit on the edge to look at the sky I remember pondering you, trying not to cry I remember what you wore And how your hair was done I remember that I wanted more Because my heart was won i just got into poetry, especially haiku's but this is good...i really like it~ 3nodding
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carry on wayward daughter Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 5:48 pm
Czarinas Knife tourniquetsmile I remember how the moon looked On that starry February night I remember how I shook When you touched me, oh so right I remember I wanted to climb that wall And sit on the edge to look at the sky I remember pondering you, trying not to cry I remember what you wore And how your hair was done I remember that I wanted more Because my heart was won i just got into poetry, especially haiku's but this is good...i really like it~ 3nodding I like haikus, too I was more into that when I was younger though Alot of the stuff I wrote in that style is laughable now I guess I wasn't that good >,< And thank you
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