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 Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 10:57 am
Soft heart beats,
beating into the darkness of alone.
Gentle touch near, yet so far away
Heart breaks, repaires, and breaks once more
Calling into the shadows,
Hoping for the return,
Yet nothing echos the calls
Not until my heart curls,and dies
Longing for that gentle touch once more
Gentle touch returns
Softly gliding down my cheek
Keeping my soul together
As I lay in his arms
Warmth wraps me tightly
Almost capturing me in its Love
No, His love,
As I reach for this faith
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Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 11:06 am
OOO!!! I like it. It has a very steady rhythm to it. The meaning is deep.
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Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 11:08 am
Guitar Lover424 OOO!!! I like it. It has a very steady rhythm to it. The meaning is deep. Yeah, I wrote this right after my date with my boy friend....
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Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 2:49 pm
yeah i love it to nice piece
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Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2007 7:31 pm
I like it. It's got strong imagery and great emotion. smile
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Posted: Fri Nov 23, 2007 10:36 am
This really is a wonderful peice. I really like your imagery, It's very lovely.
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DreamingWithin Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Nov 24, 2007 11:54 am
the best time to write poetry is either when yer really happy or really sad..emotions caught on a page are a good thing :]
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Posted: Sat Nov 24, 2007 2:17 pm
yea dreaming within has a point biggrin 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Nov 25, 2007 7:48 pm
I have no idea, but this really touched me*tear* heart
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Posted: Mon Nov 26, 2007 9:09 am
thanks roxace,nice mount surprised
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DreamingWithin Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Dec 09, 2007 4:36 am
Nice work! Love how the words seem to have rhythm as you say/read it. Keep it up!
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