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 Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 6:09 pm
Dreaming Noose
I look back at what she had.
Images of you wrapping your arms around her waist
your lips dancing gracefully together
like silk ribbions blown in the wind,
and the reflection of stars from her eyes in yours
make my heart turn every shade of bloody green.
She had you wrapped around her finger
with all your dispair and agony
drowning in a single tear from her deep eyes.
Your love and devotion engulfed her in
the waves of sea green collected tears.
She had You.
Your words sprawl across the paper
Each delicately placed and penned,
Songs and poems intended just for her blushing eyes.
Words strangle me, and the fog of sorrow fills me
and cascades over the stone walls my heart built
many years before you graced my presence.
Razors and bloodied knives become my dearest friend
because every thought of someone else having you
is like that very dagger tearing me slowly away.
I despise myself for peeking into your past
for looking in the deep crevice of your heart,
which so tenderly holds her picture and smiles.
I know you love her.
Your dark eye sparkle with the North Star
whenever your hear her name.
So tonight I'll close my eyes and try to forget
my haunting past that would lead me to want
the only man, who my fingertips can only grace
his hallow flesh, a man who will never recognize me
because your compass will never point earthbound.
Tonight I will cut away this noose he has so happily
placed upon my neck, as if it were the diamond of his
eye, his very pride and joy.
Vivious words of "b***h", "whore", and "worthless"
won't dance in my dreams tonight.
Instead, be wrapped in your arms will be my saving grace,
my very breath, the last star in the sky of my world.
I'll forget that your heart is locked away for her,
and enjoy this final moment of this warm sunshine.
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Posted: Fri Oct 19, 2007 7:17 pm
I like the tone of it at the end (keeps it from being too bleak). I think you captured the feeling well. There is no worse thing than jealousy, I think one has to decide not to be jealous in the end, however they can convince themselves about it. It's not something that just 'goes away', it's like hunger.
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Posted: Wed Oct 24, 2007 10:13 am
Thanks for the comment.
I know jealousy can devour us alive if we let it.
smile
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Posted: Thu Oct 25, 2007 8:39 pm
It's so refreshing to put our thoughts down on paper, though- sometimes it's like leaving your worries and not having to keep them inside! surprised
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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:26 pm
True that! Lol.
I love let what is in my heart pour onto a page, and then to look at it on the page is like a gift that you gave yourself.
3nodding
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Posted: Thu Dec 06, 2007 8:21 pm
wow, that is deep... it made me want to cry crying ... you really put a lot of feeling into it
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:56 pm
Thanks. There are a lot of emotions tied up in this poem, but that is what makes it work! Thanks again for your thoughts; they mean a lot!!!
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Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2007 9:21 am
No problem, your welcome 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2007 5:08 pm
I loved your poem. I feal that I can really relate to it! mrgreen
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Posted: Sat Mar 01, 2008 10:14 pm
Thanks a bunch, Starchaser!!
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