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 Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 1:12 pm
Well, after seeing the "Best Day Ever" thread, I thought maybe this place could use a thread where people could post poetry, lyrics, or whatever. And not have it plagiarized. stare So I guess I'll start off. This is a song I wrote a while ago.
I'm being smothered by a pain that you don't know
It comes with you when you're here and stays when you go
And it's been killing me for oh so long
And you're oblivious to what you're doing to me
I can't simply sit around to wait and see
'Cause you don't even know that something's wrong
chorus
Should I find someone new
Or not
Every night I dream of you
Every day try to make it stop
I've been thinking this through
A lot
How can I know what to do
If I don't know what I want
Every day I wear a smile but it's not real
I only wish that I could tell you how I feel
I should have said what I had to say
But now I'm thinking 'bout it all the time
Looking back there were just so many signs
Oh well, I couldn't change it anyway
chorus
I'm dying slowly from this pain that you don't know
I have to keep you here, but I can't make it go
And I can't keep up this facade for long
You're still unaware just what you're doing to me
I'm sick of being blind but I can't see
I gotta fix it 'cause I know it's wrong
Still don't know what I'm gonna call it. confused Oh well, let's see what you guys have to offer.
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Posted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 4:00 pm
I like it, maybe you should call it "Oblivious" I don't know.
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Posted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 7:08 pm
omg, i luv that!!!! i've never tried to write a song, and i suck at rhyming, so i always do free-verse poetry, but maybe i SHOULD try to write a song. wish me luck!!!!
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Posted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 10:41 am
I wrote this awhile ago...It's pretty, um, cheesy...yah...
anyways:
I was once a child of the darkness,
stricken with anger and insanity.
I thought humanity to be hopeless,
having lost the principle of charity.
That is when I first met you,
caring only for me and my plight.
You helped me see the world anew,
leading me from darkness, into the light.
Many a day passed we spent together,
telling each other of times long past.
In those days, I did not know whether
it was a spell o'er me you cast.
Those were truly the best of times,
memories quickly fading in my head.
Now as I sit here, telling these rhymes,
I hope I am not a memory left for dead.
Now, as I write this ballad of tears,
I begin to realize what I had let go.
What my heart feels and my mind hears,
I cannot believe I have fallen so low.
I let you go, without saying a thing.
I should have said, "Thank you."
At this moment, as I sit thinking,
Our friendship I hope to renew.
But I can see you are gone now,
off to seek your own destiny.
Hopefully you can hear my solemn vow,
"I'll hold to the light. Thank you, from me."
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Posted: Tue Aug 16, 2005 9:11 am
~Escape~
When harsh reality does loom
presses 'round like a small, cold room
a room with no doors, no windows, no light
filled only with sorrow, and you can not fight
that feeling that fills your very mind
and a chilling hand 'round your heart does bind.
When all you wish to do is cry,
sit there screaming, begging "why?"
You must be strong my dearest friend
for if you aren't, it shall be your end.
You can not escape from your exitless room
if all you do is scream of doom.
You find an exit, or make one if
of one you can not find a wiff.
It may hurt, yes it will hurt alot,
but once you are out, you will know you have fought,
for what was right, and had to be done.
you stood your ground, you did not run
from the horrors in that terrible place
filled with feindish thoughts that haven't a face.
Though you felt you were truely alone,
you have now realized, you now have known
that others have dwelt in that horrible place
where of love and hope there is no trace.
They have come back to help you through,
just as you would have them do.
You truely need them, dearest friend
if that terrible place is to have and end.
For although you escaped, however way,
return to that place you easily may
until it's destroyed, for good and ever,
that place where want to go you never.
To break you must first unify
and to strongly bind you musn't lie.
Let the experienced help you frightened one,
accept their help, don't from it run.
Return to where your ment to be,
destroy your prison and be free.
Return to where the living dwell.
Think no more of your darkened hell.
For it's now gone for good and ever,
that place where want to go you never.
~*~so... what do you guys think? Sorry it's so long.
P.S: Nadils Head, i don't know what you should call it, but it sounds brilliant!
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Posted: Tue Aug 16, 2005 9:32 pm
Thanks for all the positive feedback. whee It's so rare in real life. And the stuff so far is awesome! I love it when I start things that result in...other...things...um...
Anyways, I'll probably be posting a couple other things whenever I get them done. I tend to write songs only about goofy things or personal experience. Case in point: The song above was about my girlfriend (before we started going out [and thus before we stopped going out ^_^]), and I'm working on another about this guy that's about to get laid but doesn't have correct chage for the condom machine. <- That would be an example of not personal experience. eek
And in response to the posters so far...
Torch: I've considered it, but I have this weird thing about using lyrics for titles. confused Dunno why, but it's just me. I also don't particularly like static guitar parts, but that's a little different...
Ryuu: Cheesy? That? Have you even looked at my chorus? I am the master of cheese, my friend. And I think I've actually been partly on both sides of the (event? situation? state of mind?) you describe.
Yoshi: Hey, long is good. Short is good too. It all depends on the poem/song. And I like yours because, unlike many similar writings I've seen before, it means something. Meaning is good. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Aug 16, 2005 9:43 pm
Nadils Head Every day I wear a smile but it's not real I only wish that I could tell you how I feel I should have said what I had to say Love it... especially like this part. Only caus' it says so much that is true. 3nodding I have a couple poems.. but I'd first like to say that I write down what comes to mind and I usualy don't go back and edit.. in fact I don't really ever go back and edit.. so if you have an idea please tell me! whee ((This one is actualy religious.. I wrote it in church.. I don't think it's offensive.. but if it is, please tell me)) I was brought from heaven to here Now I spread the gospel for everyone to hear And I know my family is always near When I am full of grief and fear I know my father in heaven loves me Church opens my eyes so I can see When you can love everyone, it can make you happy Even at desperate times when you want to flee But when you are really blue And you forget everything you knew Friends and family will try to give you a clue To choose the right thing for you to do So lets try not to shove Instead pull on a glove Then do charity work from above Caus' the greatest thing you can do is love. ~oogie xp
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 4:52 pm
Nadils Head Ryuu: Cheesy? That? Have you even looked at my chorus? I am the master of cheese, my friend. And I think I've actually been partly on both sides of the (event? situation? state of mind?) you describe. event, and thanks for recognizing the (uncheeziness?) of it. Good to hear you've been on the giving side of that "event". I'm trying to better myself so I can do it too. Thank you Nadils Head, Masta of Cheese ninja I may post some more if I don't think it... "cheesy" or "lame" or "a piece of crap that just happened to pop out of that grey mass known as my brain..." 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 7:57 pm
Wow, who knew there was so much talent in this forum. I bow to you all! *bows*
The only thing I have to contribute is this:
The sun is shining brightly,
There''s a twinkle in my eye.
The birds are singing gaily,
And I''ve never seen a brighter sky.
And why you may ask am I so glad, to greet the day anew?
Becuase you see, my dearest friend.
They haven''t found the body yet! ninja
mrgreen Not much, but I like it. (no, I''m not I''m not really that bad, I just play one on TV 3nodding )
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Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 8:39 pm
k, ive posted this in other places, so you may have seen it, but its one of the few that ive written that i actualy think turned out ok, so here it goes
Eye Games
I look at you
And we make a connection
I look into your eyes
And see nothing but perfection
I turn away
Surprised by my own darring
I cant belive I looked at you
At the same time you were staring
I turn arouond
To look once more
And the same thing happens
Just as before
These eye games go on
For quite a while
I think to myself
And I begin to smile
But then I realize
He's never liked me and he never will
I picture his face
And my eyes beging to fill
I now stop my game
Because of the tears it brings
What I once thought was fun
Is now pain beyond dreams
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Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 9:54 pm
Seikia- Love it! I like how you turn many life experiences into detailed poetry!
Gijis02- I had to read it to figure out what was going on, but after understand it... it gave me a laugh (good one). Good Job! ^^
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Posted: Mon Aug 22, 2005 9:17 am
This is a song on ocremix.org by Hale-Bopp called Summertime. I don't know why, but I can't stop listening! Anyways... Drifting away back into sweet slumber again. I'm waiting for you to bring me back to life some day. Wake up from bliss, now that the night has come to pass. I'm now dreaming of a life I hope to live one day. CHORUS Far away from your confusion, understand you are only human. Why-- try-- to fake resolution? Look around you. It's all an illusion. Now on my own, never to see summer again. I'm not looking back on what my life became that day. CHORUS Drifting away back into slumber again. I'm waiting for you to bring me back to life some day. CHORUS Yeah--- I suggest you listen to it. You can find it here Summertime - Hale-BoppOkay sorry, looks like the link won't work. Just look for Summertime under Star Ocean and you'll find it. It's on the front page wink
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AmmonSuperCombo Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 3:14 am
*reserved for my poem that will be typed eventually*
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