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 Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 7:21 pm
My Large Vocabulary is no longer Accessable
My words,
they are not elegant.
My thoughts
are quite limited.
Emotions over-rule my thoughts
if you could read my mind - you'd see white space.
Instead of words,
I see the image
and I feel the scene.
I apologize for my lack of expression
you see, I'm trying to ponder.
Instead of dazed, instead of pleased, the look you see
is brooding.
Trying to back-track,
knowing what had occurred,
I've lost the feeling of what it was.
Again, I apologize.
My words,
they are not elegant.
My thoughts
they are quite limited.
I am not a skilled poet
or a popular romantic;
the only words I have to give
are I love you.
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Posted: Sat Sep 29, 2007 6:51 am
wow.. thats a good poem eek bravo! lol make some more.. those are the kind of poems id want to read (i dont like reading xd ) burning_eyes
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Posted: Sun Sep 30, 2007 7:43 am
This isn't good at all. Why are you praising it?
There's absolutely no feeling whatsoever in this poem. Absolutely none. If there was, there'd be more of a declaration, more emotion, more soul. There'd be praise of the subject, devotion. But there's not. There's none at all.
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 5:49 am
lol cuz i dont know anything about poems but i liked it alot (mainly cuz i understood it .. or most of it) burning_eyes
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 6:01 am
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 8:55 am
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Posted: Tue Oct 02, 2007 5:56 pm
Why? It's a piece of crap.
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Posted: Thu Oct 04, 2007 4:52 pm
i like it quite a lot. its honest. though lacking the usual elements of a poem.
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