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 Posted: Wed Sep 05, 2007 10:53 pm
This is a very short story I wrote when I was told to write a "Walter Mitty". For those of you not familiar, Walter Mitty was a guy who's ordinary life was boring and he kept escaping from that reality into a fantasy world. My escape wa for a slightly different. The 'fantasy' portion is actually from a novel I wrote. The assignment was only that we had to write a few sentences of reality, then fantasy and endd with a sentence or two of reality. I got in a lot of trouble because it was assumed that we understood it was supposed to be comedic. I didn't and it's not. I'm rather found of how it turned out. It's not a graphic or gross story, but it is rather depressing. Comments appriciated.
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Posted: Wed Sep 05, 2007 11:16 pm
The Nightmare
The shots rang out, seeming to come from all directions. War. The word sent shivers down her spine.
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"Come my little one, you must hide."
She woke with a start, as lightning flashed and thunder crashed. The wind was screaming rage.
"They have come, hide in the passage. Here take this." He handed her a small satchel with food and a bottle of water. She knew her mother was in the next room, doing the same thing with her brother.
She climbed silently out of bed and crept, a lithesome cat in the sinister night, to the entrance of the passage. She knew she would be safe, for the facade was a closet and no one would think to look past what few clothes she had. Muffled sounds were audible.
"I told you already, we have no children."
Footsteps pounded on the stairs. The door was opened with such force, she gasped. The night man rasped out a warning. She could not determine what was said. The door slammed and the night men stormed angrily downstairs.
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Another shot was fired. Her mother was dead.
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 8:48 pm
It's effective in that it tells a lot about whats going in a very small space. I really liked it.
Are you going to post any more of it?
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Posted: Sat Sep 08, 2007 6:14 pm
I don't know? That was the very short stand alone story that I actually used intact in another story about a girl at the end of her life going through her possetions that mean the most to her. Otherwise the fantasy portion is a very condensed beginning to a Star Trek OC fanfiction (TNG and DS9) that spans about sixteen years and I have been working on for longer. It's my baby, I've only shown it and spoken in depth about it with two people, mostly to try and help me decide what would be most likely because I need to stay true to the canon (incidently, it means I know really odd detailed facts about Star Trek like how many crew routations they have per day and when it changed and when it went back (and even that it changed and that it went back)).
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Posted: Wed Sep 12, 2007 9:40 pm
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Posted: Thu Sep 20, 2007 1:32 am
It's amazing to me how much can be said in a few potent words. I definitely like your talent for being concise and effective.
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