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 Posted: Wed Aug 01, 2007 5:34 pm
love is like a rose nothing is forever,if its not true then it shal wither.when you love true thers no question of who.so befor you say i love you make sure your not short sold.cause trule love will not wither its made of gold.
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Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 10:27 am
But when the sun goes down,
eyerything golden dies....
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Posted: Mon Oct 01, 2007 2:47 pm
I'm no writer. My tallent lies w/putting shapes together, not words.... That being said...
I think you should separate 'it's' into 'it is'
Love the poem by the way.
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Posted: Wed Dec 31, 2008 11:32 am
1 . Yuri Mono Said "I think you should separate 'it's' into 'it is'". I Agree With Her . Because That Would Make The Poem More Dramatic .
2 . "when you love true thers no question of who" Should Be "When Your Love Is True , There Is No Questioning Of Who"
3 . "so befor you say i love you" Change To "Before You Say I Love You" Throw Away So Because It Will Make The Mood Of The Readers Go Down .
4 . Overall Okay . Practice More And Read More Poem . You Got Potential . Good Luck
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