Bloodline and Clan Application

[White Water Lilly]

X_Oxy_X

White Water Lilly

X_Oxy_X

White Water Lilly

@Oxy: I saw that and yes that's a big weakness but what about the others mentioned in the weakness section of the bloodline? Like mercury being inferior to other elements and it being suseptable to raiton? Sry if I seem a bit picky but I really want to see as much of the bloodline incorporated in samples a possible. Mentioning more strengths wouldn't hurt either like how doton is one rank higher or how you can extend the range of raiton techs (not sure which is your primary element choice). Overall, like I said, a solid first try. Just requires a little twicking and it'll be fine.

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Alright. That's fair, the jutsu amount is good.

Mercury is inferior because it is a weak metal and pretty rare both aspects I accounted for in my RP sample. The raiton thingI didn't add in because I made it a taijutsu user that I was targeting taijutsu users normally avoid using ninjutsu.

@Oxy: Alright, since you've explained youself clearer I'll accept it. Also you might want to keep an eye out for your grammer. The wording in some parts of your rp sample were a bit confusing and hard to read. But anyhow, APPROVED!

sweatdrop Yeah I mess up my grammar a lot I try my best but english is my second language and I havn't fully gotten the hang of it.

Well keep trying and I'm sure it'll improve with time. Have fun rping! smile  

[Unrelinquished Despair]

RPC Name: Mizax Kero Kunizake
Village: Sunagakure no Sato
Rank: Genin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Tendril
What you know about the clan/bl: People from this bloodline are like that creepy doll on the shelf across the room that seems to stare at you when you try to sleep. You know, the old that that's been stitched countless times, and is probably missing an eye? Yeah, like that, except these guys can move, nom on your heart. They can detach/reattach body parts, and are capable of sewing up wounds, but not as effectively as a true treatment. When they 'eat' a heart, they really take it for themselves, and gain the element of said heart, to a maximum of four. Each element, and their own. So yeah, they're old, rag doll cats with five lives. Cool, eh?

RP Sample:

Mizax stirred as he came awake, startled by a rabbit which happened to hop into a bush he was sleeping near. The world around him was bathed in a soft red light, and it seemed like nothing was alive, aside from the rabbit which had moved earlier. There was no wind, no movement, just silence in the red dark of the night. A few moments passed as his mind gradually began to awaken, memories flooding in, reminding him of why he was out in what seemed to be in the middle of nowhere at night. Recognition appeared in his steel grey eyes as he remembered why he was there. He had been assigned to assassinate the local daimyo because he had become too power hungry, and they suspected him of being a shinobi spy. Once again he noticed the red hue that coated everything in view. "Cool, never thought that my mission would turn out to be right on the Harvest Moon."

Gradually Mizax pulled himself up, dusting himself off to remove any debris that would have attached to his rear as he had slept. A wide grin curled his lips upward as he picked up his shinobi tools, turning northward and moving into a small trot. His booted feet rhythmically struck the ground, small twigs and leaves crunching as he passed along. He was running for only ten minutes when a large wooden castle in Japanese fashion slid into view. That was his destination, and he needed to get inside to kill the daimyo. If he wanted to get the mission done quickly, he could easily just walk right in with his trained stealth, but that would be boring. The boy was going to challenge himself tonight, and try to kill the man without sneaking past any of the guards. Ultimately, that meant he would have to kill and dispose of all the guards before any alarm could be raised. He set down his bag and rummaged through it's contents, pulling out a 10m coil of steel wire, and a few kunai. Nothing else in his arsenal of tools would be needed.

He climbed into a nearby tree and peered over the wooden castle from his cover, spotting each visible guard and mentally marking their places. There weren't that many outside, which meant that the man wasn't expecting to do tonight. They would be easy enough to dispose of, and with that, he hopped down from the tree, landing on the ground in a crouched position. Mizax crept towards the wall of the wooden castle, halting himself behind a rather large bush. One of the guards stood vigilantly at an erected tower along the wall, peering in a direction other than his. He unwrapped some of the steel wire and tied it about one of his kunai, grasping it firmly, and launching it towards the guard. Within seconds it plunged itself into the man's chest, and with a quick tug, he pulled the guard out of the tower onto the ground. The body landed with a soft thud upon a thick grassy portion of the land before the wall. He needed to move quickly before the one of the ground noticed the disappearance.

He glanced around the corner of the gateless archway, his steel grey hues spotted the man casually standing about, smoking a f** and generally not minding what was going on. Taking the opportunity, Mizax began to slowly make his way towards the man, another kunai in his hand as he approached. The moment he was within arms reach of the guard he reached up and slit the mans's throat, bracing his body so that he wouldn't just plop over onto the dirt. He dragged the body under one of the wooden walkways, and tucked it out of sight. Now he just needed to infiltrate the daimyo's bedroom, and kill him.

Seconds later he was creeping down the wooden hallways of the castle, the boots that were on his feet earlier now tucked under the walkway along with the body. Walking around in them would have easily revealed his presence. He was about to step around another corner when one of the patrolling guards suddenly came around it first, startling the pair. Acting quick, Mizax shoved his fingers down the man's throat to silence him, and then drew another kunai to slit his throat. The blood sprayed across his face, and his torso, causing him to flinch as the man fell to the floor with a hard thud. Hopefully anyone else nearby would mistake it for something else. Unable to find a suitable place to hide the body, panic almost set in as he looked around hurriedly. Now he needed to find his target fast, before any other patrolling guards discovered the body. He began to lightly jog towards a room at the end of the hallway, which was the daimyo's bedroom, and was stopped midway as another guard stepped right up to the body, and shouted. He need to kill the man, now.

The moment he heard the shout was the moment he bolted straight for the room, opening the door and sliding in before anyone could notice his presence, although if one looked, there were partial footprints in blood which covered his progress. Killing was so messy. Mizax let out a sigh, but now was no time to relax, they would no doubt know who he was coming for, and he needed to kill the man was fast as possible. Luckily, he was renowned for being a heavy sleeper, which made him that much easier. He quickly stepped over to the sleeping figure and placed his fingers firmly about the man's neck, bringing him awake. The man who was about to die was met with a smiling, cheery face of a boy not over the age of fourteen, stained with blood from his previous kill.

"Hi! I've been hired to kill you, and I would've ended it while you were sleeping, but you've got something that I want. You see, I'm special, I can sort of eat people's hearts, and make them mine. So, I want yours. Please endure this torture." The boy said with a cheery tone, his high-pitched voice matching the part. Mizax opened his mouth, and black tendrils began to seep out, poking and prodding the figure before him, searching for the beating heart which it would take. Once they found the general area, they seemed to hungrily pierce the flesh, ripping into it. Not ten seconds later, with the choking man screaming as loud as he could, his heart was fully exposed to the air. The black tendrils encased the beating organ carefully, and then with a sudden movement, tore it from the daimyo's chest. Blood coated the area around the two, and even stained much of the boy's clothes as the tendrils backed up into his mouth, which seemed to open up wider so that the heart could fit. The organ disappeared from sight down the boy's throat, moving itself to his back. On the hidden skin beneath Mizax's shirt, on his back, a tattoo of a small phoenix appeared above the area where the heart was situated. With the few seconds of life the man had left, he spoke again.

"Ah, you're the fire type? Well, thanks for your heart! Hope to do business again!" He said, immediately moving away from the body and bolting out the side of the building, crashing through several of the paper doors in the process. His legs pumped with what seemed to be impossible speed, quickly leading him away from the wooden castle as the alarm finally went up. They were all too slow, and now they had lost the man they were sworn to protect. A childish giggle escaped his grinning, blood spattered expression, and he sped off into the night, the moon still high in the sky, and still red. What a beautiful night for an assassination.


The sun had just bean to peek over the horizon of the forest, washing away the dim grey color with it's brilliant rays. Mizax was just returning home, stepping through the portal to a rather average house. "Onii-chan! I'm home!" He shouted, removing his dirtied boots and placing them near the door. He could hear someone in the kitchen, and moved into the room with, yet again, a childish grin plastered across his face, albeit unfitting due to the dried blood stains. He launched himself towards the figure and wrapped his arms around him tightly, snuggling his head into his chest. "I missed you Onii-chan!" The boy said, which was all he was able to say before a blade slid directly into his chest, moving straight through his heart and out his back. His eyes widened intensely with surprise as tears began to gather in them, stepping backward with the blade following him. "W-Why...?"

"They told me you were easy to fool, but not this easy." The figure chuckled, the jutsu fading. It was a man who easily towered over the boy, his brown hair unkempt, and kept fairly short. He was laughing like mad, apparently amused by how easy his mission had been. Tears which had before been because he thought his brother had betrayed him, much like his father had many years ago, turned into tears of rage. He dared to impersonate his brother, the figured which he idolized, and held most dear! The shinobi world of full of heartless, cruel men, and he had become one to remedy that, with the support of his older brother. "You... You..." Mizax began, seeming to stutter as he fell to his knees, both to play the part of him dying, and because of the overwhelming amount of emotions that were flowing through him. "You b*****d!" He screamed, pulling the sword out of his chest. Using the weapon which had come so close to killing him, the boy stood up and lunged forward, plunging the blade into a new body. His would-be killer was frozen in shock, he was sure that he had killed the boy.

Gradually, the man began to crumble to the ground, his kneels buckling, and his body falling forward. Fresh blood began to pool on the floor. The boy sat on the back of the newly dead man, his face contorted into an uncharacteristic frown. "I just acquired a new heart too, looks like yours is replacing it." He said, beginning the extraction process anew, before the heart became expired.

~~~Extension~~~

Moments later, with the replacement heart now comfortably situated inside of his body, Mizax surveyed the situation. There was blood staining the wood of his house, and in plain view, a dead body on the kitchen floor. His brother had a weak stomach, and this view would no doubt put him out of commission after vomiting for a bit. "Well, I better start cleaning." He said, his right hand detaching itself from his forearm, and dropping to the floor. It got a solid hold on the body, and began to drag it to the back yard, so that it could be buried. He grabbed a pail of water, and a scrub, and began to furiously scrub out the blood before it could set into the wood. While he was doing this, small threads appeared over his sword wound, front and back, and began to carefully stitch it back up. An hour or two later the blood mess was gone, and the dirty water gone down the drain. He moved out back where his detached hand was at work, futilely digging at the dirt. The threads from the hand, and his arm extended towards each other, attaching, and his hand eventually coming back into place upon his arm. Himself now whole, he put himself to work burying the body.  

[iAkura-kun]

Rpc Name: Akura Bashirou
Village: Suna
Rank: Genin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Pin Point
What you know about the clan/bl: Well, long story short, the pin point bloodline allows the users of this mercenary clan control over their weapons. The users have to place a seal on their weapons, which allows them to remotely control them. Along with this ability, they also have incredible throwing speeds and deadly accuracy, every assassin’s dreams. The members of this clan are very weapon proficient, making them a shoe in for bladed combat, throwing kunai and such other things that people can take advantage of. These clan members have a bonus while learning weapon jutsu, making their training easier [ -2 posts ] but in exchange for that they have a harder time with everything else [+ 2 posts ]

If this is how the bloodline is used, and if I can control puppets with it, then I want it, if not, ignore this.
Rp Sample:
Lightning came down in the vast Sunagakure desert, something that wasn’t seen very often within the village, but this was a sight for Akura, one of Jade’s strongest and most respected ninja, and more importantly, her adopted son, so to speak. The Jounin reached for his ninjato, looking around the desert, the sand slowly moving around. ” So, you’re the first line of defense?” A voice echoed throught the desert, Akura quickly shot his eyes toward where said voice came from, and took out his ninjato, knocking a kunai out of trajectory, which was thrown at him. ” I am the only line that Is needed for scum like you.” The jounin said as he took off the bandages that covered one of his eyes, revealing a implanted sharingan, which he had gained during his genin days. ” A sharingan? That means you are one of the two flash brothers, the fact that it is your right eye, means you are the puppet user, which means we’ll be able to take you down pretty quick.” The man told Akura as a large number of men gathered behind him, which where around seventy five men, more or less. The sand ninja sighed, seeing the sheer number of men he would have to kill, but he guessed it would become pretty fun after a while. He looked over toward his weapon’s hilt, making sure he brought the right one; the weapon that already had the seal attached, he didn’t want to give his enemy a chance to figure out what his abilities where, sure, they knew he was a puppet user, which meant that taijutsu users where going to be coming for him, but these Iwagakure ninjas had no idea what they were getting themselves into, Akura just hopped that they did not have the Konaga within them, he knew quite a bit about them, he had spent some time studying the strongest members of Iwa, among them Shinji Konaga, Kai Nara and Kaze Arashi.


Seeing the symbol of fire in the hilt, the jounin nodded, being assured that had brought the right weapon to the battle. He weaved a few seals and afterward he reached for three kunai. Once the kunai were in his hands he covered the tools with chakra and ran toward the large crowd, his blade in one hand, and the three knives in the other. The man whom had talked to Akura first charged at him, something very dumb to do. The jounin threw his ninjato at the man, but all he did was take out a kunai and smash it against Akura’s sword, which made his weapon spin in the air, this was just what Akura wanted. Seeing his blade spinning he rapidly moved his eyes downward toward his target, this made the sword stop spinning and become stiff, with it’s edge aiming down at the man, whom was running toward Akura. The jounin smiled a bit as the sword came down and stabbed itself on to the man’s back, piercing his heart pretty easily. ” Never underestimate me” He said as the man fell on the harsh hot sand. Akura placed the palm of his hand on the sword’s hilt and glanced over toward the army. ” Well then… Who’s next?” He asked, gripping the hilt and pulling the sword out of the dead body. His enemies took a step back, in fear that they would be next. ” Out of our way.” A commanding voice echoed through the large arrangement of people, out of the group, three ninja stood in front, Konaga Shinji, Kai Nara, and Arashi Kage. ” Leave him to us. Kai said in a soft, yet commanding tone, letting the ninja know that they should head over for the village, which only made Akura’s life better; taking down these three would mean taking out two of the three nukes Iwa had, and the Nara was taking all of its stealth bombers. He wanted this, yes, but not all three of them at once, that would make this pretty hard right? Wrong. He had foreseen this coming, and he was ready for it.


” Konaga Shinji; Kai Nara, and Arashi Kaze I presume?” He said, pointing at each one as he called their names, taking a small pause with each name, this only for the drama of it all. Shinji looked at Akura, examining the boy a bit. ” And you would be?” Kaze asked him, taking a step forward ” My name is Akura Bashirou, The Red Flash of the Sand.” He said as he reached for one of his scrolls, he had built a puppet to fight him and his Jinchuriki, but the timeing had to be perfect, and Shinji shouldn’t interfere, which would be hard, as far as he knew. With one scroll in hand, and three kunai in the other, he smiled and fired all three of them, just as the kunai left his hand they turned as hard as stone, very heavy and hard to destroy, along with that, the sand under it began to flow away, making cracks on the ground due to it’s power. Seeing the effect that the kunai held, Shinji ran up toward them and placed chakra on to his arm, smashing all three kunai on to the ground with his arm. Just as he did this, a screen of sand covered all three ninja. "Kai, grab him with shadow posetion.” Kaze said and she nodded, extending her shadow toward him, meanwhile, Shinji dashed toward the enemy ninja. Akura slid open the scroll and he took Azura out, along with three snake puppets, two of the snakes where made out of steel, while the other one was made out of wood. Azura began to run toward Shinji with no strings attached. The two metal puppets coiled around Akura, this as a defense mechanism, to protect him from any incoming attacks, meanwhile the wooden one burrowed under the sand, and slowly made its way toward Kai. Azura smashed his hard metal head on to Shinji’s torso, making the Konaga flinch and jump back. ‘ So he’s the puppet user.’ The konaga thought as chakra surged out of his hand, he was going to smash a hole through the puppet, and then one through Akura, if he could reach him. Shinji ran toward Azura, meanwhile, the puppet just made its two blade’s visible, and so Azura ran toward Shinji, just as it moved, he noticed two things; the first being that the puppet had no strings attached, and the other was a single seal on it’s shoulder, which made the Konaga wonder what was going on.

” Got him!” Kai told both of the boys, letting them know that he was caught with the shadow jutsu. Kaze nodded and ran toward Akura, trying to kill him with just one attack, but once he got away from Kai, the wooden snake wrapped around her, making her release the jutsu, as well as suffocating her. ” Predictable.” He said as Kaze looked back, and just as he did, one of the two snakes blasted toward Kaze, slithering around, trying to catch the Yonbi host, and put him down as well. ” KAZE WATCH OUT!” The konaga yelled out, looking in his direction, and just as he did, Azura stabbed both of his blades on to his shoulders, stunning him, the sheer speed of that attack was incredible; how was he able to attack with such speed? There was no way that a normal puppet could respond so swiftly, not while Akura couldn’t see clearly what was going on. Upon hearing Shinji’s voice, Kaze looked back, and he saw the Snake’s tail stabbing into his body, releasing a powerful poison into his body, but it would not take effect yet. Seeing the tail Kaze made a few seals and sent a stream of flame at the puppet, reducing it into nothing very fast, this is what fire does to carbonated steel afterall. With the snake out of the way, Kaze began to run toward Kai, but he soon began to feel dizzy. ‘The hell?’ He thought as everything around him began to spin. Meanwhile, Akura got off of the other snake, and ran toward Kaze, making a single seal; he extended his right arm to the side and created a katana, using the Weapon creation technique. Shinji saw Akura running toward Kaze, along with Kai being stuck and he sighed. ” Alright… We’ll pull back… I will not see my comrades killed right before my eyes… if you can immobilize me, and take Kaze down without breaking a sweat… Iwa stands no chance against Suna.” Shinji surrendered, making Akura smile.  

[White Water Lilly]

@Kano: Not bad for the information section and as for your rp sample, I have to agree that it did lack a bit on the weakness part. Your grammer was also fairly off making it a bit difficult to read. Something to keep in mind is that we rp in third person so adding it 'my' suddenly without it being a thought doesn't really work. Anyways, I'm not here to lecture you on grammer, just be more careful. I know there's not much to this bloodline but I would like to see some more examples of how the bloodline works. Like how you steal hearts, how it can be used to sow up wounds, stuff like that. It was a good first try though it was just seemed to lack something. Feel free to try again and know that you don't have to make the rp sample fit your current rank. Feel free to write the sample as if you were a jounin. Its up to you. Good luck and as for now,Denied!

@Unrelinquished: Gread job. A nice solid rp sample. But for now, Denied. If possible, I would like to see some more moves other than the heart extraction in the sample. Like how tendril users can use their tendrils to seperate their limbs for an attack or how it can be used to stich up wounds. Not a bad first try but you were just missing some minor details. Give it another go, I'm sure it'll be fine next time. Good luck.

@Akura: I'll get back to you on it once I'm sure you can have both a transplant and a bloodline. With a transplant, it'll be like recieving a bloodline ability so yeah. Sorry for the wait.  

[White Water Lilly]

@Unrelinquished: lol, I guess not. Well, maybe I am being a bit too picky but everything little thing does ties together to form the bigger picture. Have to make sure you know all aspects of your own bloodline. Anyways, that little snippet covered it. APPOVED!Have fun roleplaying!  

[Lance Fulgurant]

Name: Lance Fulgurant
RPC's name: Atsureki Hyuga
Bloodline Applying for: Byakugan
Why do you want it: Because I don't have a second character, and I was the one who crafted our Gentle Fist style
What will you do with it: defeat my enemies
What you know about it: When activated it gives the user nearly 360 degree vision, with only one blind spot near the base of the neck. It also allows the user to see the charka flow of others, allowing them to use their clans signature jutsu which allow them to strike at the chakra network of their opponents
RP Sample:

Atsureki led his team through the forest, his byakugan allowing him to see what was ahead of them. The target was close, soon their mission would be done. They had been sent on a sabotage mission, tasked with planting charges at and destroying a bridge that the enemy army was using transport supplies to the front line. As they neared the target Atsureki signaled for his team to stop. He quickly scanned the area, trying to see how many enemies were stationed at the bridge. He was able to make out several soldiers stationed on either side of the bridge, nothing his team couldn’t handle.

He signaled the numbers to his squad and they all nodded, Kanzuki drawing a kunai from his holster. Atsureki then signaled for the team to move, he and Kanzuki would take care of the guards while Yamatano planted the explosives. Kanzuki took the near side of the bridge, throwing a light bomb at the enemy to blind them and disorient while he began his attack. Meanwhile Atsureki moved across the bridge to take care of the other three guards. Kanzuki’s attack had of course alerted the other guards, but it would matter little whether they were aware of Atsureki’s presence.

He could see that two of the guards wielded spears while a third held a sword. As the guards closed in on him, Atsureki dropped into the Juuken fighting stance as he readied himself for the guards’ attacks. The first spearmen rushed forward, going for a simple jab aimed for Atsureki’s chest. Atsureki easily side-stepped the blow and caught the spear with his right hand. With and open palmed thrust he broke the tip off of the spear, and then flipped forward as the second spearmen attempted to stab him in the back. Before he even touched the ground he threw the spear tip at the swordsman. It plunged deep into the man’s neck, slicing open his jugular. The man reached up with shaky a shaky hand to touch the few inches of wooden shaft that now protruded from his neck, and then fell to the ground dead.

Atsureki then fell once more into a defensive position as he waited for the spearmen to make their move, his face calm and composed. The two spear-men circled Atsureki, the one with the broken spear now wielding the shaft like a club. Well he gets points for determination, Atsureki thought to himself as he shifted his hands so that he could react more easily to the soldiers next attacks. The second soldier then rushed at him from behind, holding his spear forward to try and plunge it through Atsureki’s spine. At the same time the other soldier attacked from his front, clearly trying to distract Atsureki.

He couldn’t help but smirk as he brought his arms in toward his body, and then spun his body in a counter-clockwise motion while pumping chakra out of every part of his body. Before the weapons could make contact, a dome of pure chakra spread from Atsureki’s body, pushing the weapons away and protecting Atsureki from harm. The soldier who was wielding the broken spear was so close to Atsureki that he was caught in the rotation. The chakra tore at his body and then flung him away, off of the bridge and into the ravine below. As Atsureki came to a stop he muttered to himself, "eight trigrams… palm rotation", then looked up at the final soldier, his byakugan literally seeing right through him to his internal chakra network.

The soldier stared in disbelief and horror at his now destroyed weapon. He began to back away slowly, but before he could get away Atsureki rushed forward, striking the man with an open palm thrust right at his heart, pumping chakra into his hand as he did so to strike directly at the man’s internal chakra network. The man staggered back and then coughed into his hand. When he held his hand away from his face he saw that it was covered in blood. Looking up at Atsureki he whispered, “what… are you?”, and then fell to the ground.

Atsureki walked forward until he was standing next to the body and said, “I am Atsureki Hyugga, the All-Seeing.” With that Atsureki made his way to the other side of the bridge to see how Kanzuki was faring.
 

[White Water Lilly]

@Lance: Well it was approved in VR and I can't seem to really find much fault with it... APPOVED!Enjoy! btw, you should have came to Leaf, Hyuuga's originated there! jk jk, have fun in Suna!

@Arashikage2:Denied!The information section was good, informative and you even added in the guild limits. Nice. As for your rp sample, it didn't really show all that the sharigan poccesses. You mentioned it turned your eyes crimson and saying that you saw everything's a bit general and doesn't really say much about the bloodline ability. Try to mention how you can copy abilities or how it becomes easier to read movements due to the sharigan in your rp sample as well. You can also mention a bit of chakra drain as well as to incorporate the -1 chakra deduction that Uchiha members face for every post they keep the Sharigan active. Not a bad first try and good luck.