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 Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 1:41 pm
Stu-Stu13 My character is Niame Henka from Iwagakure. I did not realize i had to do the Rp academy and i am actually done with my profile. here is my sample Niame dodged the projectile kunai, and flipped into a forward somersault, getting closer to Mouko, his enemy. Mouko was a persistant shinobi though and he began a series of hand signs. "Rat, Ox, Boar Tiger, Rat, Dragon, Boar, Snake....." Mouko mumbled to himself, sparks starting to surge through his hands. Niame knew that if he didn't close the final gap soon he was going to be defeated, so he concentrated his chakra into his feet and sprang up at Mouko. Finally finishing his technique's preparation, Mouko called out its name, "ARASHI!" "Not this time", Niame said as he triggered his bloodline, shaping himself into a tiger and clawing into Mouko's right arm, and sinking his teeth into Mouko's left. Mouko screamed in pain and his hand fell limp against his sides. Niame pushed himself off Mouko as he fell to the ground in pain. Although he tried to remain emotionless while looking into his former friend's face, he still felt guilty and he pittied Mouko. He dashed away from him, knowing he would be paralyzed by pain for the time being, allowing him to escape. pass
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Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 3:26 pm
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Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 4:15 pm
Rin Kairiu x_king29 Rp sample: Kobushi looked out over the herizon as he he reached the top of the hill. He looked at the sunset marvelling at its beauty, breathing heavily from the exertion of climbing the hill. It was worth. The sight he saw was breath takingly beautiful. He sighed contently at the sight and smiled thinking back to memories of his father. He scratched at the shoulder of the jacket he was wearing, his father's old Jounin jacket. "Why him?" he asked wondering why his father had to die. He wasn't sad anymore just questioning why it had to happen. If there was a reason behind everything like people said then what was the reason for this. Ko just couldn't figure it out. He turned his back on the sunset heading back down the hill and towards his village knowing he would be back like always to visit this site as he did every in memory of his father.Very good, you pass. Just remember though... it is 'horizon' not 'herizon'. Thanks
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Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 7:27 pm
do i pass??? i re-did it
Aku was woken up by a soft cool breeze. As he sat up he saw that his body was covered in sweat. He wasn't really surprised in his condition, but still was concerned. Aku was asking himself why he was sweating. He knew that he only sweated if he was under a great deal of pressure and stress. Then he remembered he had his Academy exam tomorrow. Trying not to think about the exam he closed his eyes tight and finally went to sleep.
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Posted: Fri Aug 29, 2008 12:12 pm
anbuwolf7 do i pass??? i re-did it Aku was woken up by a soft cool breeze. As he sat up he saw that his body was covered in sweat. He wasn't really surprised in his condition, but still was concerned. Aku was asking himself why he was sweating. He knew that he only sweated if he was under a great deal of pressure and stress. Then he remembered he had his Academy exam tomorrow. Trying not to think about the exam he closed his eyes tight and finally went to sleep. yeah, you pass.
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Posted: Fri Aug 29, 2008 6:28 pm
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Posted: Fri Aug 29, 2008 7:37 pm
Sample RP:
miroku unimuro woked up, wondering what was for breakfast he looked beside his bed and saw his small dog buddy rup scratching the window "whats going on" he said, as miroku pressed his face against the window he spotted 2 ninja running with a bag that seemed heavy "time to go lil bud" he said as he ran after the ninja still in his pjays and while carying rup.
well thats it hope u like it
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Posted: Fri Aug 29, 2008 8:44 pm
Demon Hunter10 Sample RP: miroku unimuro woked up, wondering what was for breakfast he looked beside his bed and saw his small dog buddy rup scratching the window "whats going on" he said, as miroku pressed his face against the window he spotted 2 ninja running with a bag that seemed heavy "time to go lil bud" he said as he ran after the ninja still in his pjays and while carying rup. well thats it hope u like it Eh... Proper capitalization, please and keep an eye out for run-on sentences. Also verb tense in the first fragment bothers me... O.o *Worked is not in the dictionary. We basically present text like in any books. Try not to use chat-speak (pjays). xP Overall, there wasn't much "effect"...besides being the post have to be a little longer than that. O.o Anyways, back to the effect part. You should put in more descriptive phrases (or perhaps elaborate on why Miroku would consider it is a logical and wise course of action to go after random shinobi =d).
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 1:22 pm
Sample RP
After miroku woke up he noticed his dog rup scratching the window "whats going on rup" he said, he then looked out the window and saw the old lady next door running after two masked ninja with a broom he also noticed the window was broken, so he ran after them still in his pajamas as he jumped from roof to roof trying to catch them the two ninja noticed him and threw a couple of shuriken at him miroku managed to dodge some of them but got hit in his right shoulder still willing to run he jumped on one of the ninja's back and knocked him down, as he turned around the second ninja was about to stike him with a kunai when he suddenly froze the ninja fell to the ground and miroku saw rup with a broken shuriken piece in his mouth
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 3:24 pm
Demon Hunter10 Sample RP Miroku woke up , noticing his dog Rup scratching the window . " What 's going on , Rup ?" He asked . He then looked out of the window and saw the old lady next door chasing after two masked ninja with a broom . He also noticed that (his?) window was broken. So he ran after them , still in his pajamas, as he jumped from rooftop to rooftop, trying to catch them . The two ninja s noticed him and threw a couple of shuriken. Miroku managed to dodge some of them but got hit in his right shoulder . He was still willing to continue the chase ; he jumped on one ninja's back, knocking him down . As he turned around, the second ninja was about to strike him with a kunai when he suddenly froze . The ninja fell to the ground and Miroku noticed Rup with a broken piece of shuriken in his mouth. capitalize proper nouns. Like all sentences, the first letter of something that is said is also capitalized. You still have problems with run-on tendencies. Use commas when detonating a descriptive phrase about the main character - Miroku. Watch out for punctuation too. xP Another thing. We abide by a game system that requires rolling for attacking/sneak attacks and also notes on dodging. =d So please do not use something like this in the actual rp. Most "results" of attacks are mentioned in the future tense (or with if)... Mn...though you're not really limited to just that. But anyways, leave "results" to attacks as sort of like a cliffhanger (e.g. if I strike him with this blade, he shall be poisoned). Fix your grammar and it's a pass. I'll assume you'll take the note on attacking seriously though. Always wait for the opponent to respond first before determining a result. xP
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 5:11 pm
Sample RP
Miroku woke up, noticing his dog Rup scratching the window. "What's going on, Rup?" He asked. He then looked out of the window and saw the old lady next door chasing after two masked ninja with a broom. He also noticed that (his?) window was broken. So he ran after them, still in his pajamas, as he jumped from rooftop to rooftop, trying to catch them. The two ninjas noticed him and threw a couple of shuriken. Miroku managed to dodge some of them but got hit in his right shoulder. He was still willing to continue the chase; he jumped on one ninja's back, knocking him down. As he turned around, the second ninja was about to strike him with a kunai when he suddenly froze. The ninja fell to the ground and Miroku noticed Rup with a broken piece of shuriken in his mouth.
so i pass?
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 7:45 pm
Eh, I did make your job easier since you just had to copy and paste... But fine, as long as you understood, it's a pass. =d
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Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2008 4:50 pm
Kumori walked into the library. Ahhh...a place of learning, what wonders will great me today she thought as she walked through the shelves stacked high, full of wonderful instruments of learning. Then she asked herself, What should I read today? A ninja scroll on training, a ninja scroll on healing, a ninja scrool on gathering intelligence?. Then she said aloud to herself, "I believe the intelligence gathering scroll will fill my learning needs for today." Though in fact she had alreadly read that scroll, and almost all of the others in the library, and had everything she had ever read available to her as information stored in her brain.
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Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2008 10:41 am
Inu-Yasha_Kitten Kumori walked into the library. Ahhh...a place of learning, what wonders will great me today she thought as she walked through the shelves stacked high, full of wonderful instruments of learning. Then she asked herself, What should I read today? A ninja scroll on training, a ninja scroll on healing, a ninja scrool on gathering intelligence?. Then she said aloud to herself, "I believe the intelligence gathering scroll will fill my learning needs for today." Though in fact she had alreadly read that scroll, and almost all of the others in the library, and had everything she had ever read available to her as information stored in her brain. pass
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Posted: Sun Nov 16, 2008 1:11 pm
Um, I haven't been accepted to any village yet, I'm still kinda looking for one. Since I'm not part of a village, the character name I'm using is only one off the top of my head. Quote: Hikaru Ukitake had never exactly been one for school or studying, often taking his chances with sheer luck and raw talent. But recently there was rumor of a teacher who'd decided that they were going to try and bring the young ninja in. It was funny, there had been plenty of others that had attempted to bring him in, although the results had been the same every time, they'd catch him and he'd play along and then as soon as he was out of their sight he'd escape using either the subsitiution jutsu or the clone jutsu. "So, you're Hikari Ukitake hunh? You'll be coming with me." said a female voice from behind Hiraku. The young boy turned and swept his dark blonde hair out of his face. "Did I do something wrong? Or are you that new teacher everybody's been talking about? If so then I guess we should play." he said standing up on the tree branch and smiling. The teacher didn't seem like she was in the mood to play, which suited Hikaru just fine because the more serious they were the funnier it would be when he finally escaped.
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