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 Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 7:35 pm
Gaia Name:andaries
Character Name:James Shadow
Gender:Male
Age:32
Race:humen
Character Description: medum build black hair and yellow eyes
Home Planet surprised nderun
Starting Planet:Corcent
Relations:none
Character History:was born on onderun adn trand ias a jedi then his master was killed ands he traind as a sith and became a sith master after traning sevrel folwers
Alignment:dark
Occupation:sith lord but covers as a sentor from onderun
Skills:dark and neutrul force powers and has poltical knowldge
Weapons:light saber
Ship:a blocked runner
Personal Belongings:seantor robes and sith also mony and a crystal that is red
Roleplay Sample
*he walked the govermetn halls after hearing of ana ssnition plane for his support of a miltry action*
*the assins move threw the shadows and jump at him*
*james duck and side step then cuts them in half*
Completely unacceptable. Do you know what a comma or a period is? How about correct spelling and sentence structure? Put on top of that you can't learn anything about being a sith, while being a senator, especially when you'd start at the level of initiate. So you can't have been a master that trained several apprentices.
Oh and your roleplay sample completely sucks. It's the worse bit of letters pretending to be words, masquerading as a roleplay sample. I'm sorry i don't think i've told ANYONE that, but yours managed to achieve that singular honor from me.
Here's what you need to do to correct it. Fix the horrendous spelling.
humen, medum, Corcent, adn, trand, ias, ands, traind, sevrel, folwers, sentor, onderun, knowldge, blocked (should be blockade), seantor, mony, govermetn, ana, ssnition, plane, miltry, assins, threw (should be through), duck (should be ducks), step.(should be steps).
All of those are either spelled wrong or used improperly. Add to that, that there is absolutely no description with your roleplay or history. Both of those need to be 4 or 5 times as long and detailed.
Do it again, but do it better! ~~~~Merissa
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Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 9:50 am
I didn't even relise my history was a run on thanks for fixing it for me , but I don't know what you mean by fix my role play structure , do you mean it is also mispunctuated, or that I need to change the dailouge and descriptitave parts around?
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Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 4:36 pm
Gaia Name: lilbratassassin
Character Name: Gomma
Gender: Male
Age: Unknown
Race: Hutt
Character Description: A very large hill could not describe this Hutt. He was one of a kind. Standing, or slouching at 3 meters his massive body can barely exit the cantina door. His red eyes blend with the grey scaley skin covering him from head to tail. His left arm shorter than the other due to an awful incedent concerning a door, is used to assign bounties to Bounty Hunters.
Home Planet: Nal Hutta
Starting Planet: Tatooine
Relations: None
Character History Gomma was sent to Tatooine as a slave when he was a young Hutt. But no slaver ever wanted a Hutt as a servant. Therefore Gomma was left along in the streets of Mos Espa. A kind wanderer had offered Gomma a job at a very young age. This Job had him paid many many credits. Until one day he had been promoted to a nearby cantina in Mos Eisley. There he took on the role of assigning bounties on Jedi because of last encounter with one. When Gomma had tried to exit the cantina he accidentally became stuck in a door. A fallen Jedi had come to his aid and sliced off most of his left arm which was stuck behind the rest of his body. The Jedi was soon seen by Gomma, but this time there was no more left of him besides his head on a platter. Gomma has dedicated his life to killing Jedi with the help of bounties and Bounty Hunters.
Alignment: Neutral
Occupation Bounty Assigner
Skills: Eating
Weapons:
Ship None
Personal Belongings: A very large boomerang shaped wishbone from a Bantha, awarded to him from a fellow hunter who had died the day after Gomma assigned a bounty on a Jedi for not doing a task.
Roleplay Sample
((This is taken from an earlier Roleplay Sample when I first registered as a Jedi))
As the wind blew his cloak fluttered while he stood near the landing platform in Tatooine. His Master whould arrive shortly and Aezon had very astonishing news. Darth Melex had been captured. The Jedi plan on interrogating the Sith Lord of his new intentions. Aezon spotted his ship the Frozen Falcon coming into Coruscant and landing on an unfamiliar landing strip. To his surprise his Master was not the first being to exit the mighty ship. But a Sith followed by his Master.
"Master what is the meaning of this?" Aezon had shouted.
Through his training his Master always lectured him on turning to the Dark Side and how it could corrupt you. But Aezon had never expected that his own Master, would turn to the Dark Side. "My apprentice," whispered Master Devon "Join me, Join the Dark Side. I have seen the truth. The Republic is a lie, they want power to themselves they are the enemy!" Master Devon had ignited his lightsaber and threatened to kill Aezon."Forgive me my Master. For I am a servant of the light, as you once were. I will never serve a Sith Lord. My Master there is still good in you, you can turn back now and leave the Dark Side!." Aezon had not ignited his lightsaber knowing that his Master had not fully turned to the Dark Side.
"Then you shall die!" Master Devon was no more. He was now a Sith, he was now Darth Devon. Darth Devon charged at Aezon with his lightsaber and engaged in battle. "Then your fate is set." Aezon muttered as he igniteed his lightsaber and clashed with his former master.
The application looks fine to me. I can't really see any flaws with it. It's a fairly excellent character. I'll be interested to see what you do with it Not much I can comment on as far as corrections or advice. You're Accepted!~~~~ Merissa
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Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 9:08 pm
Rothsephi Gaia Name: Rothsephi Character Name: Axel Talc Gender: Male Age: 32 Race: Human/ Zabrak Character Description: Underneath Axel's armor is a white, male, human with black hair that appears very messy. Green eyes that sparkle brilliantly in the sun. He has many scars across his face and among othetr parts of his body. He's '6"2 in height and 211 lbs in weight. He is fairly muscular and had a medium build. A robotic right limb from the left elbow down is viewable, and is made of platinum alloy. Black armor that bears the mark of many cults and religions, a cape flies from the shoulders of it. It includes a battle helmet with a visor and laser targeting. Home Planet: Tatooine Starting Planet: Tattoine Relations: His son that had been killed in a shot out in the local cantina, hsi ex-wife who was killed in the same incident. Character History: In his childhood he was raised by his father in the way of the warfare. In his teenage years he and his father got into a street brawl, he and his father won the brawl but left Axel terribly wounded. His father became sick and died two months after that. Upon being fully healed he accepted his father's final wish for him to become an adventurer, as he did with the help of his armor which he stole from a museum. He found love once in his twenties bringing him a wife and a son, both which were killed in a shootout in a cantina. On a mission a couple years ago he met up with a Krayt Dragon which took his arm from the elbow down, which was replaced with a mechanical one. He is now a bounty hunter, and a deadly one to boot! Alignment: Neutral Occupation: Bounty Hunter Skills: -Quick reaction -Blaster handling -Piloting Weapons: -E-11 blaster rifle -Armor, which has many hidden weapons in it as toxic darts, a flamethrower and whipcord -Thermal gernades -Blaster pistol which is in his fake limb Ship: Light's Eclipse, which was manufactured by Kuat Drive systems has the appearence of a battle tank. Two turrets on each side fire rapid bursts of plasma bolts. Seismic missles and mines are also released/fired by tubes on the bottom of the ship. A shield generator is present above the cockpit as well as the engines and boosters are on the back of it. The heavy weapon, a large ion cannon takes five minutes to charge. Personal Belongings: Spider droids (with venom), armor Roleplay Sample An example of your RP style: (I'll be using a post that I just made up!) Axel ducked and slid underneath the closing gate, he quickly managed to get his blaster out and fired at a couple of bodyguards of the bounty he was hunting. He continued along the rooftops, stopping at the local starport, the bounty was getting away! As the ship began to take off Axel latched onto the bottom of it with his whipcord. He fired an opening in the floor upwards so he could get in! About 50 feet up in the sky he came hurdling down with the bounty, trembling in his cord as they tumbled into a cart in the bazaar. Axel stood up with the dead bounty's corpse's collar in his hand. "Too bad he was worth more alive..." Axel said chuckling afterwards, dragging the body. Not a bad application. But you can't be a mandalorian. They DIED. Period. With as many people who applied to be a mandalorian, you'd think they still had an entire planet. They don't. NO MANDALORIANS! I also recommend to you (as i do everyone) that you change the font color of dialogue so it stands out.
As it is, fix the mandalorian part, and you'll be all set to go! ~~~~~ MerissaThis any better?
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Posted: Sun Jul 31, 2005 1:37 am
Gaia Name: Pyrotechnic Oracle
Character Name: Sarin Saretti
Gender: Male
Age: Unknown
Race: Lorrdian (A species of human that evolved slightly differently then the rest of their race. There genetic structure, however, is exactly that of a human.)
Character Description: Like the rest of his species, his physical appearance is some what altered from the rest of the human race. The difference is his species unique ability to read a species through their body language, which the Lorrdian gained through their ancestors slavery generations ago, in which they were forbidden to speak to one another. Not just this, but they are capable of matching the body movement and voice of another person almost exactly. His features are extremely soft and some what boyish. This is a hides the fact that he is a cold killer perfectly
His body is toned to perfection through constant rigorous training. This however is hidden under the gilded and jewel encrusted robes he is almost always wearing. Underneath the robes he wears a custom gray hiroka. Hs boots are made from the skin of a Ysalamiri combined with synthetic material for strength and support.
His attitude is friendly, business like only when negotiating, and cruel only during execution. He is openly welcome to guests staying aboard his ship, but is paranoid about bounty hunters and others like them. When dealing with scoundrels and the like he communicates through use of a hologram accessed through any holonet terminal through use of a triple encrypted and extremely tight band connection line. Very rarely will he allow a bounty hunter on his ship, and very rarely will he allow them to stay for more than an hour or two. There have been exceptions in the past however.
Home Planet: Lorrd
Starting Planet: N/A
Relations: Unknown
Character History Though not the owner of a vast organization like the Hutts, Sarin is however the owner of a great income of wealth. He has won, purchased, or simply taken the owner ship of bars, casinos, and brothels all over the galaxy. The only open thing known about him is his partial ownership in glitterstim mining and smuggling.
There is not much to speak of his personal history. He was raised the same way that all Lorrdian children are. His parents brought him how to read another's body language and how to mimic another's voice. He has taking the reading of body language to extremes and has nearly invented his own style of swordsmanship. His style relies on watching the opponents movements to guess his next attack and striking them before they make their next move, or simply parrying the attack. This body language reading ability can give him a split second advantage in dueling or just before a fire fight. Just by the way they twitch he can tell if they are going to simply stand there, draw their weapon, or turn and run.
From the fact that he carries and knows how to use a lightsaber, it can be guessed that he was once a Jedi Apprentice. However, he shows very little signs that he may be Force sensitive. And the fact that he has surrounded himself with Ysalamiri partially suggest otherwise. He may have simply come across teaching and training records from lost Jedi archives. This seems more logical in that part of his fortune is driven from illegal archeology and the selling of the artifacts on the black market.
Alignment: Neutral
Occupation Crime Lord
Skills: Practitioner of forms two, three, and four of light saber combat. The ability to read one through their body movements. Hand to hand combat. Marksman skills. The ability to mimic another's voice and body language almost exactly
Weapons: Green Lightsaber with a curved hilt, disruptor pistol, several adhesive grenades.
Ship The Queen's Deuce is a luxuries space yacht that resembles an immense catamaran 120 meters wide and 150 meters long, but with out the large sail pole and the open deck. The entire ship serves as his mobile base of operations.
It is heavily armored and reinforced with a triple plate durasteel layered armored hull and arrayed with the best weapons that money can buy. Ten ball mounted and fully pivotal disruptor turrets line either side of the ship. In they rear, on the top and bottom of the ship, are concealable ion cannons used for immobilizing attacking ships. These ion turret have a full swing in nearly every direction and a capable of quickly pivoting in order to keep up with the faster fighter craft. The common attack pattern used by the gunners is immobilization through use of the ion cannons, and then vaporization through use of the disruptors.
Located in through out parts of the ship are small atriums filled with a number of trees native to the planet Myraka. Living on these trees are a salamander like creatures known as Yslamairi. These creatures create a bubble shaped region in which the Force does not exist. Since these bubbles only extend ten meters in every direction, the Atriums have been located all over the ship and there are enough of the creatures to create a system of overlapping areas just barely covering the entire ship. This Force dead zone, coupled with the radar hyper jammers, and the stygium cloaking array makes the ship nearly impossible to find.
On board is every thing you would expect to find on a yacht. Luxury bathing, bed, and eating facilities; and a communications room that rivals those found on board Imperial and Republic communication ships.
The entire ship is run and controlled by both himself and a crew of slaves he has purchased of over the years through gambling, debts owed to him, or simple purchasing through the black market.
Personal Belongings: His ship, his saber, and his slaves.
Roleplay Sample Hmm...Maniac said I could skip this. You may want to check things out with him incase I might have misunderstood him. The creation of this character was to provide the RP with a crime lord who could take out bounties on NPC or PCs and to hopfuly bring in a new section that has nearly nothign to do with the more major role play. We've had few to no bounty hunters here.
True, because you could just as well paste something from an RP topic and it would be good enough anyway. Accepted -Mr. M
Yea, thats true. I would end up using the same sample I always do any ways.
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Posted: Sun Jul 31, 2005 6:23 pm
Gaian Name:konnichiwa_Inuyasha123 Character Name:Kia Gender:Female Age:16 Race razz lain Human Appearence sad The one way on the left in purple)  Home Planet:Earth Starting Planet:Corruscant Relations:Has one sister who she doesn''t even know Character History:Kia was born on Earth. She was an uncared child, but when Kia was young, hewr parents died and was forced to live on her own. On her own, Kia had learnd to fight and defende herself. At the age of 13, Kia was asked to join the Jedi alignment, because they thought since she could live by herself and survive the cold, cruel world that she would be good use for them and she could really help them. And of couse Kia had accepted. And thats where Kia''s journey begins as a Jedi, on Corruscant. Alignment:Republic Ocupation:Jedi in training Skill''s:Healing and Piloting Weapon''s:A single blade, blue lightsaber Ship:None Yet Personale Belonging''s:None RolePlay Sample:Kia was now sensing she was being folowd, so she did as thought. She started to get her lightsaber ready in case for a battle. But Kia was only starting to get trained, so she had decided to run...Bad choice...Kia was now surrounded by 5 sith assasin''s. Kia had to fight her way out. Kia then took her lightsaber out and attacked three men that were in her way and started running for safety but she had no time because the other sith''s had already catch up to her and started to attack her, so Kia then took her lightsaber out again and fighted her wayback to safety. K says: "Far left? Don''t you mean far right?" It''d be great if you could go into some description instead of putting a picture in. ^_^ In your own words, what does your character''s hair look like? Physical prowess? How about eye color, skin tone, et cetera? I''d love to see some of your descriptive writing style. :3
In the "Star Wars" galaxy, there is no Earth. "Earth" would be in another galaxy, which is theoretically impossible to reach due to sort of a block at the edge of the galaxy. Why don''t you shift her history up a bit so she was from... say... Corellia? That way, she could have some travel time between her home and Coruscant.
Some of your spelling is a bit awkward. It''s not enough to make the posts unrecognizeable, but enough to make me raise an eyebrow. I suggest using an online dictionary or spell check for your posts to ensure fluidity. x3
If you could fix up your character a bit following my instructions, I''d be more than happy to check it again. ^_^
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Posted: Sun Jul 31, 2005 6:49 pm
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Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 7:18 am
Howling Fury Howling Fury Gaia Name: Howling Fury Character Name: Alla Gender: Female Age: 19 Race: Human Character Description: Alla has long black hair, she wears black clothes and is a good Jedi. She is easy to anger, easy to be friend, and doesn't act on her emotions. She thinks things out first. Home Planet: Tatoone Starting Planet: coruscant Relations: none Character History Ever since she was young, Alla was told tales of those who would save the world. She grew up with them until the age of 10, when her parents were killed by the Hutts. At that age, she was trust out into the world until a jedi found her and started her training. Now, at the age she is, she is a great Jedi and a great friend. Alignment: I don't understand this one as well. But if it means good or evil, I'm good. Occupation Jedi Knight if possible Skills: Those of a normal Jedi and a few she picked up from traveling. Speed, hearing, strengh. Weapons: lightsaber, laser gun. Ship Don't know. Personal Belongings: A few books, a hologram and the clothes on her back. Roleplay SampleAlla looked around. The town was dark, very dark. It seemed normal, but she could tell that it wasn't. The darkness had come. "Alla!" a voice yelled, "Watch out!" Alla had no time to move because a stinging pain erupted in the back of her head and she blacked out. Waking up was one of the worst things there were. She saw that she was in a house of evil. The house was dark, but had an evil sense around it. She was scared of the evil, the evil had plauged her all of her life. Now, how was she going to get out? The starting planet is the place you are when your story starts. As a jedi, it would probably be coruscant. Please, make an RP sample before I can accept you ~Mr. M ah sorry I forgot! Here is the sample Alla looked around. The town was dark, very dark. It seemed normal, but she could tell that it wasn't. The darkness had come. "Alla!" a voice yelled, "Watch out!" Alla had no time to move because a stinging pain erupted in the back of her head and she blacked out. Am I in? K says: Sure you can be, once you spit-and-polish a few things. ^_^ I'd like to see a more descriptive character played out: right now, you just have the bare basics. It's kind of like the framework of a character that you either haven't thought out very well, or just didn't transfer to computer.
I'd also like to see a character history. :3 I fixed it, am I good now? And I did think it out, but I sometimes have trouble putting my thoughts into words. I am ever most sorry. YEs, it looks much better. ^.^ Welcome!
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Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 8:32 am
Gaia Name: nintendoneard Character Name:Darth Blaze Chikara Ryuuichi Gender: Male Age: 197 Race: Only the best with the highest midi-count. See Character History. Character Description: Height: 7' 1" Weight: 207 lbs HairColor: Crimson EyeColor: Glowing flame  Human like- Blaze can turn almost human looking, he can absorb his extra appendegs into his skin. His wings fold up and suck into his back and his two extra eyes close and seal shut. Blaze still has black scales and blazing red eyes but every good Sith does. twisted ^Pic for Comparision ^ Basic Full alien form but less dragon and more human. Normal Form- Blaze's normal form, which is when he is completly relaxed, has two large black wings, with red membrane, four arms, two of them smaller then his normal ones used for blaster firing and small force powers. Blaze has all four red eyes open and his large pointed teeth shine like his saber. Blaze's long, thin tail with the classic devil tip is black and reached past his feet. Blaze's coolest feature is his red tripple forked tounge, It accually can grap objects, it's color changes from red to black as if grows farther from the tip, and it can reach lengths of 2-3 feet Home Planet: Unknown Starting Planet: Space, he has no true home except his ship. Relations: He had several Sith Apprentices including one girl he found when assassinating the leader of her world. Character History Blaze was created in a lab by a Sith to be one of the greatest Sith Masters by combining the DNA of many different Races of alien, including a couple predatory creatures. But after he was created, and learned many things, he was only 10, his master was killed infront of his face mercilessly by a Jedi. Blaze was hiding behind a crate but he saw everything. Blaze made his way around the galixy as he obtained a lightsaber after killing a pathetic jedi with only Blaze's two blasters. He then found his way to La Citta Dorato (La Chee-tah Doh-rah-toh), The Golden City, on the planet of Euria (Yoo-reye-yah), after customing his lightsaber to his liking. Alignment: Evil Occupation Bounty hunter/Jedi killer/Previous Sith Master Skills: Lightsaber combat Weapons: Two custom blasters, and a Red/black lightsaber (The red side is made from one large crystal that power a light saber so it's thicker, longer, and stronger. And the other side is a electrocharged, lightsaber repelling spike.) Ship His ship was also costomized by none other then himself. Blaze likes power over everything. So natrually his ship has good speed bad Defence and AMASING firepower. The ship has ruin markings in what seems to be deep red but kinda brown looking paint. I reality it's blood. Personal Belongings: Blaze has only the clothes on his back and the memories in his head. Roleplay SampleBlaze grinns as he enters the dusty area. He doesn't see his oponent yet but he does notice the Emperess as judge, so he bows stating the fact he's ready for the fight to begin and he knows what she says goes. Blaze opens his outfit and calls his lightsaber to his hand but waits for his opponent before extending it.
The 7 foot high, black scaled, and four glowing red eyed beast bowed to his opponent. Spinning his unextended lightsaber he awaited the word from the judge. He saw a large crowd. "Yes, we shall now see which is greater..." he stopped the lightsaber handle with two hands as he used his pinky finger to spin a little nob. As the nob spinned the lightsabers other end, the one the blade didn't extend from, began to glow then spark. It was not electicly charged, the point could stab but the sides where only good for repeling lightsabers. Blaze released the saber with his right hand and held it firm with his left. His thumb laying on the blade extend button.
((Battle Sample))
Blaze grabs his blade with two hands as he crouches down doing a full frontal assult, but with Blaze's raw power and lightsaber with a larger then average power crystal, defending wouldn't be easy with all those blades. His low, about mid chest, horozontal slash was filled with so much power that even the strongest of warriors would be knocked back just from it's shear force. *Merissa pulls out the almighty hammer of smiting and begins to bash the application*
COMPLETELY unacceptable. Let's see how many things we can find wrong shall we?
First off, on a completely technical note I broke the links to two of your pictures because they're TOO BIG. 500x500 is the terms of service limit for gaia, those pictures both FAR FAR exceeded the size limit so they were unacceptable.
Now lets get into your character. Putting aside the fact that your spelling at times is fairly horrid. Let's just look at the actual character. COMPLETELY UNACCEPTABLE! What did you expect you could come into the roleplay and go "I am god"? NOT A CHANCE. You can NOT be the character you made. You're just like every other cliche wanna-be world beating sith. Only in this case you couldn't come up with one concept that you liked. You had to try and jam a whole bunch of concepts togethor and make yourself even more bad a**. Most kids learn at a young age that mixing all your favorite foods togethor doesn't produce a very good tasting meal. but you not only tried to mix them togethor, you stuck them in a blender and tried to pass it off as a gourmet meal O_O.
All your character is able to so is run around and stick your lightsaber in anything that moves, breathes, looks at him wrong, or offends him by being exactly the wrong shade of pink. (I said ROSE not SALMON!!! *snap HISS* DIE!!!!) NO you can not be genetically crafted to be a half dragon or half demon, or half donkey, (not REAL sure what you were going for). No you can't be crafted to "have the highest midi chlorine count". No you can't be the ultimate bad a**. (Ever heard of god-moding?)
This character has no depth whatsoever. It's a combat monkey plain and simple. So my answer is HELL NO. And since I conferred with another mod on this I'm pretty sure it won't be overturned. Usually I tell people where to correct and improve their application. The only thing you can improve is your spelling. The rest of the application needs to be trashed and redone.
Do it again, and do it better.~~~~ MerissaI'm not sure what made me laugh harder, the actual App or Krome's reply! xD. " Alignment: Evil" *snicker* I completely agree with Krome on this one, your app is just, well, shite :3 ~ Sephi
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Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 9:44 pm
Gaia Name: Jedi Master Luke Character Name: Luke Skwalker Gender: Male Age: like twenty or something Race: human Character Description: cocasion, dirty blond hair, blue eyes, 1.72 meters tall Home Planet: raised on tatooine Starting Planet: Yavin 4 Relations: Anakin Skywalker, and Leia Solo Character History my life began as a simple farmboy. i spent my restless childhood on the backwater desert planet of Tatooine, toiling away on my uncle's moisture farm. my guardians, Beru and Owen Lars, never told me of my true heritage. While i believed my father to have been a navigator on a spice freighter, i never suspected that he was once a famed Jedi Knight and incredible starpilot. On my uncle's moisture farm, i learned the essentials of desert survival and droid repair. Boredom was not as scarce as water on Tatooine, and i often dreamed of adventure and excitement. i had a circle of friends who would loiter around Tosche station in Anchorhead when not occupied by their chores. i never quite fit in with my friends; they often teased me and called me "Wormie." Biggs Darklighter, though, was different and i considered him a true friend. i honed my piloting skills alongside Biggs in Tatooine's infamous Beggar's Canyon, racing my T-16 skyhopper. Biggs and i often spoke of joining the Imperial Academy. Despite my dreams, i was not allowed to attend. my uncle needed me on the farm, and so when Biggs went away to the Academy, i was stranded on Tatooine. my life changed when my uncle purchased a pair of used droids from Jawa dealers visiting my homestead. The droids, Artoo-Detoo and See-Threepio, were Rebel property fleeing from the Empire. The Rebel droids led me on an adventure, uniting me with Obi-Wan Kenobi, a desert hermit and war hero whom i knew as Old Ben. Imperial forces in pursuit of the droids murdered my uncle and aunt and destroyed my home. With nothing left on Tatooine, i decided to follow Kenobi. The wise man taught me in the ways of the Jedi Knights and the Force, ways for which i showed an affinity. Kenobi gave me my dad's lightsaber. Obi-wan and i hired the smuggling duo of Han Solo and Chewbacca for transit off planet. we were destined for Alderaan, to return the Rebel droids to their owner, Princess Leia Organa. we discovered Alderaan destroyed by the Imperial superweapon, the Death Star, and were taken captive aboard the monstrous station. There, my droid discovered that Leia was also held captive. i helped free the Princess from the clutches of the Empire. Using data stolen by Rebel spies, Alliance tacticians formulated an attack plan capable of destroying the battle station. i piloted an X-wing starfighter in the final attack against the Death Star, and fired the proton torpedo volley that, with the aid of the Force, destroyed the Imperial weapon. i eventually accepted a commission in the Alliance military, and achieved the rank of commander. On the new Rebel base on Hoth, i served as a scout on the frozen plains of the ice planet. While on patrol, i was injured by a wampa ice creature, and dragged to its lair. Using my growing expertise in the Force, i escaped. Han Solo eventually rescued me from the frozen wilderness. i then led Rogue Group's snowspeeder pilots in the delaying actions taken to hold off an Imperial invasion of Hoth. After narrowly escaping death by Imperial walker, i boarded my X-wing fighter with R2-D2 to leave the ice planet. Instead of going to the scheduled Rebel fleet rendezvous, i went to a planet mentioned to me by the spirit of Obi-Wan Kenobi: Dagobah. On the swamp planet of Dagobah, i learned the ways of the Force from Yoda the Jedi Master. Yoda honed my Jedi abilities, but my training was cut short as i had to go rescue my friends on Bespin. Little did i know that it was all an elaborate trap devised by Darth Vader. i confronted Vader in Bespin's Cloud City, and was bested by him in a lightsaber duel. i suffered the loss of my hand, and the revelation that Darth Vader was in fact my father. i was rescued from Cloud City by Leia, Chewbacca, and Lando Calrissian, and eventually returned to the Rebel fleet. Droid surgeons equipped me with a cybernetic replacement hand. i returned to Tatooine to construct my new lightsaber in the abandoned hut of Obi-Wan Kenobi. i concealed my Jedi weapon inside R2-D2. This was all part of the plan to infiltrate the palace of Jabba the Hutt and free the captive Han Solo. Sending the droids in first, i then challenged Jabba the Hutt for the return of Solo. Jabba refused, sending me to fight his hideous pit-beast, the rancor. Han Solo, Chewbacca, and i were then sentenced to death at the Great Pit of Carkoon. Artoo delivered my weapon to me, and i was able to destroy the Hutt's forces and escape with my friends. Before returning to the assembled Rebel fleet, i went to Dagobah to complete my Jedi training. There, i found Yoda sick and dying. Yoda and the spirit of Obi-Wan Kenobi told me i had one trial remaining before achieving the rank of Jedi, and revealed the truth about my past. i found out that my father, Anakin Skywalker, had succumbed to the dark side and became Darth Vader, and that Leia Organa was my sister. For me to become a Jedi, i had to face Darth Vader again. Once back at the Rebel fleet i joined General Han Solo's strike team to the moon of Endor. This team was to deactivate the deflector shield protecting the new Death Star from Rebel attack. i feared i was a danger to the strike team since my presence could be felt through the Force. Before leaving, i confided the truth about our relationship to Leia, and left Endor to face Vader one last time. i believed there was good in the Dark Lord, and that was why Vader offered me a chance to join forces rather than kill me outright. i turned myself in to the Imperial forces, and Vader brought me before the Emperor on the Death Star. There, the Emperor planned to turn me to the dark side by goading my hatred and forcing me to kill my father, thus sealing my future as the Emperor's student. The Emperor almost succeeded; in a fit of rage, i viciously wounded Vader. my thoughts and feelings recollected, i refused the Emperor's promised power. The Emperor, enraged, used the dark side to cast deadly lightning at me. The Emperor almost killed me, but my dad arose to save me and hurl the Emperor down the Death Star's reactor shaft. i took my father's crippled body to the Death Star hangar bay. In his final moments of life, Vader ceased to be, and Anakin Skywalker, Jedi Knight, returned. i removed Vader's mask so that Anakin could see me with his own eyes before becoming one with the Force. i then commandeered an Imperial shuttle and flew to Endor. i built a funeral pyre to commemorate the Jedi, and to destroy the Dark Lord's empty armor. i returned to the victorious Rebel Alliance, and could see the spirits of Obi-Wan, Yoda, and my father that night at the Ewok celebration. later on i went to Yavin 4........ not telling rest Alignment: Republic Occupation: Jedi Skills: pioliting, force sensitivity, and lightsaber battling Weapons: mostly my lightsaber though occasionally a blaster pistol Ship X-wing Personal Belongings: lightsaber Roleplay Sample Jedi Master Luke Darth Vader Jedi Master Luke Darth Vader the force is strong in this one*draws his lightsaber* you'll find im full of suprises *draws his lightsaber in defense* *attacks* *fights with you*
No, NO. NOOOO! Not only does your roleplay.... well.... suck. You apparently can't read the rules, or the setting.... or pretty much anything else.
This setting is OVER 100 years in the future after the second death star blew up! So luke would be dead. Second it says quite clearly in the rules that NO PLAYING OF STAR WARS CHARACTERS or relations of major star wars characters allowed. Period. I'm not even goign to tear into you any more cause it's not worth it.
Do it again but do it better~~~~ Merissanow that was harsh. well i am very sorry but i cant change it it just wouldnt be me i guess im not cut out for this guild......... *sighs* i even donated like 500 gold to it well im leaving. peace
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Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2005 10:55 pm
Gaia Name: skurie the cursed
Character Name: Skurie
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Race: human
Character Description: he has waist long blue hair, his eyes are a dark blue, he is 5'5 in height and weights about 130 lbs. he is built more for activities that require upper body strength but can run fast too but only for short distances aout 200 meters.
Home Planet: Antar
Starting Planet: Korriban
Relations: all family is dead and has left everyone he loves on Antar behind
Character History his parents were imperial scientists and were killed by the rebels. After growing up alone on a farm on Antar to get by till he could leave and get a ship to take him to Korriban.On his way to Korriban he recieved some sabers skills and techingues for self denfese but nothing then using a Vibro sword. he has spent some time on Korriban selling items to get by but nothing so far on his attempts has he been able to join the sith academy
Alignment: imperial
Occupation sith/dark jedi(( not yet though))
Skills: force sensitive,strong upper body, strong will
Weapons: a semi sharp/dull vibro sword
Ship a little cargo ship used to deliver goods called the Damperon
Personal Belongings: A special gold nugget ring left to him before his father was killed
Roleplay Sample(( this is in another guild that is pretty dead now but I was the clone of revan in it though its not the best its all I have right now))
-he turns around to Sakai and in a rage of angry in rememberance of his once true form as Revan when Bastilla was taken from him and killed by the old sith empire before Revan destroyed it and took over with his empire his hands flys up in the air then he looks at Sakai then the force flows around him in a tainted form then a wind comes in and begins to spin around him then he uses Force Storm the much more powerful verson of Sith lighting and he cause Sakai to be within an inch of death and in so much pain it cause his body to shut down and he fall unconscience-" NO ONE WILL TAKE HER FROM MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE"
Ummmm... the history was... adequate, (BARELY) but your spelling needs some MAJOR work. Try using a spell check before posting.
Your rolepaly on the other hand was pretty much crap. It needs to be fuller, more descriptive, more concise abotu what's going on Not to mention it was ONE BIG RUN ON SENTENCE! oh wait, did i mention that? Well at least you get my point!
Do it again, but do it better!~~~~ Merissa
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Posted: Tue Aug 02, 2005 3:58 am
Here is my application!
Gaia Name: Ray_01
Character Name: Ruunmar
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Race: Human
Character Description: He has ruffled brown hair, blue combat jeans generic boots, he was slightly underweight, wich was accompanied by his hyperactivity, and was of somewhat average height. A sheathed daggar is clearly seen on his right leg.
Home Planet: Couruscant (sorry if i spelled it wrong)
Starting Planet: Tatooine
Relations:None, he is a loner, but will gladly work in a group.
Character History: Mainly shrouded in boredom, deceipt, and hologames, he mainly led a life if trying not to die, and eating.
Alignment: Republic
Occupation: Jedi
Skills: Saber Skills, Electronics, Strategy
Weapons: Twin blue sabers, a blaster, and an eversharp dagger.
Ship: A relic X-wing
Personal Belongings: L337-N00b (astromech droid), an old Idol, His father's old pocketwatch...
Roleplay Sample: none.
Your app was short, so my response will be the same. You put in no effort. Your history sucked. Your roleplay sample was non existant. Not acceptable
Do it again, but do it better!~~~~Merissa
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Posted: Wed Aug 03, 2005 12:22 pm
Gaia Name: Shining Tidus
Character Name: Hazar Star
Gender: male
Age: 23
Race: Human
Character Description: His hair is dark with his hair spiking up with red highlights, his right eye is the color brown and the other side is blue, his build is good but still skinny, and has a pretty boy look.
Home Planet: Datooine
Starting Planet: Dantooine
Relations: his foster dad which is a jedi master
Character History: As a child he was raised as a farm boy, his mother and father was killed by kath hounds, even though his father was a jedi outcast he could not fight off 20 kath hounds. He watched from far away as his mother and father were being bitten to death when he was just 5 years old. He was terrified that day of kath hounds and never went near one after seeing his mon and dad killed.
he was sold to and was made a slave since he could not make a living as he was only a child. A jedi saw him work day and day and couldnt let him work like this so he bought the kid and raised him as his own son. He would train him in the ways of a jedi and teach him not to fall to the dark side. As he grew older he helped kids with out parents as best he could. He knew that his parents would be proud of him if they were still alive so he did good deeds around the planet.
Alignment: Republic/light side
Occupation: Jedi
Skills: Piloting skills, healing, duel weilding skills.
Weapons: A collection of blue and green lightsabers[some purple] that he has built with his foster dad
Ship Your character's starship:A jedi starfighter
Personal Belongings: He owns 2 battle droids, an astromech droid, a chest were he keeps his lightsabers, and his mothers locket.
Roleplay Sample: It is a beutiful day on Dantooine as i walked on the plains of Dantooine I wondered "what ever happened to the jedi's on Dantooine". As i ponderd i saw a temple but went closer and saw it was an enclave of some sort.
I walked into the enclave deeper and saw that their was a battle of some sort here with corpses of people. I stumbled onto a corpse and triped. something rolled over to me and i was scared wondering and hoping it wasn't the head of the corpse
. I turned around and saw a lightsaber, wondering if it still worked. I ignited it and it was the color blue. I checked more of the corpses to see if there were lightsaber on them. To my surprise every corpse had a lightsaber. Some were blue, green, yellow, orange,etc. Then to my amazment there was a red. I thought to myself "my father has told me of there being sith with red lightsabers.
I was thinking maybe there was a battle here where the jedi and sith did battle. I went to a room and found a holocron were the jedi and sith battled each other feroucisly. I found a holocron hidden away and saw that it was the history of the jedi masters here. Their names were kavar, Atris, then the portion of the holocron was batered. I walked out of ther with the lightsabers in my bag.
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Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 12:17 pm
Gaia Name: [ Jack Frost ]
Character Name: Darth Nox
Gender: Male
Age: ???
Race: Human, at one time or another, now mostly machine.
Character Description: His thin Mechanical arms, and legs are generally covered by a hard, but lightweight armor. The rest of his body is covered by a lighter armor, the reaches up for a headdress over his exoskeleton light head. The headdress coveres most of his face except for his lower jaw, with is generally clung tightly to his upper jaw. Whenever he is not in the presence battle, he wears a long black cloak covers his barely 6'3 Ft. body. His legs can fold up for jumping for great distances. Each mechanical arm can also propel a lightsaber into each mechanical hand. The color of his headdress/mask is a deep blood red, and a pearly white, the rest of his body is an incredibly dark black.
Home Planet: ????
Starting Planet: Korriban
Relations: ????
Character History The only Information Held by the Imperial Forces is the detailed surgey to repair Nox's body, this is accompanied by a Hologram, there has also been proof that Nox was a sith before his untimly Run in with an extremely powerful Jedi.
Alignment: Imperial
Occupation: Dark Jedi Master
Skills: Well diversed in dual weilding lightsaber skills, and able to defend himself with most types of melee or long ranged weapons.
Weapons: Two Red Lightsabers. An enlongated electro staff with long electrical prongs.
Ship: He Flys a Modified Sith Fighter, with Concussion missile launchers, and large dual rapid fire plasma cannons.
Personal Belongings: 6 IG Magna Droids, 2 for each color.
Red biggrin ual Pistol weilding Droids.
Blue: Guided Missile launcher carring droid.
~Both Red & Blue carry Large Holosheilds to protect from Lightsaber or Other melee attacks.~
Green: Personaly Trained for lightsaber combat, the very close and personal guards of Darth Nox, Both weild dual bladed lightsabers.
~All Six of the bodyguards fly in Standard Sith fighters.~
Roleplay Sample:Darth Nox slowly stalked towards the Jedi. He put out his arm, telling the bodyguard Droids to Hold back, he was going to deal with him. His arms stretched out, his lightsaber handles flying into his palms, he ignited the red lightsabers, spinning them in Arch's.
He moved swiftly striking his lightsabers towards the one lightsaber weilding Jedi, he swung swiftly, using his mechanical leg to knock him down and plunge his lightsabers through the Jedi. He looked to his Bodyguards Nodding and stalking away towards the Ship Docking pad, the bodyguards fallowing close behind.
Yes! a dark jedi!!! Some people prefer longer RP posts, but for a sample, it'll do, accepted
I only did it that way because its only my sample, my real rolepaly posts are about 2 paragraphs long.
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Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 7:20 pm
Gaia Name:ss-ace Character Name:Miek Gender:Male Age:15 Race:Kel Dor Character Description: Home Planet:Dorin Starting Planet:Coresant Relations:Miek has no known family members Character HistoryAs a child he grew up on the planet of Dorin. He grew up in a house hold of fauster parents. He never knew his actual parents. He was taken by the jedi council for his exceptional skills at a young age. He was trained as a youngling until he was of an older age and was given a master to be trained under. (I will edit once I figure out what class of Jedi I am) Alignment:Rebuplic OccupationJedi Skills:Piloting,electronics, saber mastery Weapons:Orange crystal Light Saber ShipWinged Knife  Personal Belongings:An astromech droid named T-2209 Roleplay Sample Ace was wondering the hallways of the Jedi temple in the planet city known as Corresant. He was just a young padawn and wondered where his master was at right now. He knew he shouldn't worry about where his master. His astromech driod, T-2208 rolled down the hallway. " Beep, boop, beep" Beeped the droid. "I'm fine 08 just fine. I also wonder why I am here, but that doesn't matter" He said calmly. He didn't know how, but he could understand what his driod was saying. Ace walked toward the other end of the temple where the library was. If anything from this walk he would get some exercise. Try to make RP posts longer in the future, but I'll accept you, you can develop in play. Just note, It's coruscant
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