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 Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 11:13 am
Okay. Here's what I want to do. I'll allow you to join my squad with a new character. However, I want to ensure that the character is in all ways fair and balanced with any other RPC that may come down the pike, so I'm going to screen the profile and make sure it's acceptable. Sound good?
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Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 11:30 am
((Ok, but I hope you don't mind I give you the sample first. I will have the profile done in no time flat.))
Luke was walking through the dark jungle, scard, out of his own wits. He didn't know what was going to happen to him out there. He could here the birds singing, and apes roaring in their usual confidence. They were pounding of their own chest; you can see their pure intention poring through their own souls. They were nothing, but, pure savage, evil if you may.
"Why do act this way?" Luke asked himself with a scard tone of voice.
As he carefully scanned the area around, he seen a bundle of yellow bananas, and they smelt ready to eat. Luke wanted to pick them, but, he didn't know if there was anything wrong with them or if the apes would kill him. At any rate, he didn't want to be killed for usual recklessness, greed, and hunger. How far would he go for those bananas, if he really hade his heart set on them.
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Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 12:52 pm
Well well! What a pleasant surprise. It seems Ky did a wonderful job whipping you into shape! That was well done, but you've got a bit of the same problems as Kalineza.
8th.
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Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2009 12:55 pm
I will get a better seat in no time flat. And when do think I can my trainning. Plus during the trainning I will show how I will get a better seat.
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Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 1:47 pm
Kazuki Red,,Requesting to Join
:RP Sample:
Kazuki was taking a stroll after he graduated from Shinigami Academy, and as he was taking a stroll he felt suddenly weak, and he felt that he can barely stand. So he found a chair and sat down for a while, where suddenly a voice echoed in his mind, so he tried to listen to the voice, as he listen to it. It spoke and said
"Name me Shinigami"
At first Kazuki was hesitant and confused as to what the voice was saying but when the voice said it louder the second time, kazuki became aware and so he spoke back to the voice
"I name you Akuma"
As he gave a name to the voice a sudden burst of energy came upon Kazuki and he was able to release his Bankai.
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Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 4:45 pm
Kay, before Fefnir gets to you, I just want to inform you that requests to join should have a link to your profile. Also, as for your sample, I want to let you know that NO shinigami names their zanpukato. The zanpukatos name is born with it. Also, there's no way you'd ever be able to gain bankai directly after leaving the academy. It's just not possibe.
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Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 4:45 pm
Profile is complete.[Hagi Hakimodo, profile], requesting to join. Role Play Sample: Hagi slowly walked into the training grounds with a smile on his face, and excitement boiling under his skin. It had been his first time visiting the training grounds of squad 1 since his acceptance, and he was all the more, excited to get started training. Wind brushed against his body, causing his long hair to dance in the wind. His hand tightened on his zanpukto, and finally, when the right moment came he drew his zanpukto, causing a small amount of spiritual energy to abrupt. As so settled birds on trees flew away, well others came to watch. Ready to see, Hagi's fighting spirit abrupt, hopefully he wouldn't disappoint them they thought, chirping away, feasting upon the moment.
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Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 7:12 pm
KyrosDevil XIII Kay, before Fefnir gets to you, I just want to inform you that requests to join should have a link to your profile. Also, as for your sample, I want to let you know that NO shinigami names their zanpukato. The zanpukatos name is born with it. Also, there's no way you'd ever be able to gain bankai directly after leaving the academy. It's just not possibe. About the Bankai I am well aware of that, but since this is just a sample RP i thought of pretending to have a bankai already but when I RP for real I would not use Bankai till I learn it and naming my zanpaktou when I said that I was referring similar to what Ichigo went through when he regain his shinigami powers and zangetsu said that "The attack is 1000 times greater if you know its name" so It's similar to that. I'm sorry if I didnt make it clear. But I do have one question when you said a link to my Profile I was going to create one but theres a note saying you can only make a profile when you get accepted to the squad so I hesitated to create one. So now I am just waiting to get accepted before making my Profile..
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Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 7:51 pm
Animi_luver Hagi Hakimado, requesting to join. (Working on profile...) Role Play Sample: Hagi slowly walked into the training grounds with a smile on his face, and excitement boiling under his skin. It had been his first time visiting the training grounds of squad 1 since his acceptance, and he was all the more, excited to get started training. Wind brushed against his body, causing his long hair to dance in the wind. His hand tightened on his zanpukto, and finally, when the right moment came he drew his zanpukto, causing a small amount of spiritual energy to abrupt. As so settled birds on trees flew away, well others came to watch. Ready to see, Hagi's fighting spirit abrupt, hopefully he wouldn't disappoint them they thought, chirping away, feasting upon the moment. You're grammar is okay, but these sentences are a little on the run-on side. That and, while I see what you're trying to convey, some of the words just don't even belong or need to be properly replaced. There is definitely potential, but work is still needed to lock it down tight.
As for your profile you need to make a thread in the Character Forum and link it to here, not just plop it here. Makes things a little messy and stuff.
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Posted: Wed Oct 28, 2009 7:59 pm
Kazuki_Red KyrosDevil XIII Kay, before Fefnir gets to you, I just want to inform you that requests to join should have a link to your profile. Also, as for your sample, I want to let you know that NO shinigami names their zanpukato. The zanpukatos name is born with it. Also, there's no way you'd ever be able to gain bankai directly after leaving the academy. It's just not possibe. About the Bankai I am well aware of that, but since this is just a sample RP i thought of pretending to have a bankai already but when I RP for real I would not use Bankai till I learn it and naming my zanpaktou when I said that I was referring similar to what Ichigo went through when he regain his shinigami powers and zangetsu said that "The attack is 1000 times greater if you know its name" so It's similar to that. I'm sorry if I didnt make it clear. But I do have one question when you said a link to my Profile I was going to create one but theres a note saying you can only make a profile when you get accepted to the squad so I hesitated to create one. So now I am just waiting to get accepted before making my Profile.. That's just an odd loophole of confusion in the policy of this guild.
Most captains I know want a link to the profile or have it PM'd to them before being accepted. The easiest way to deal with that is just to titled it with your character's name and leave everything else like rank and squad for inside the profile. Unless you want to do what some people do and display their rank in the title of their profile. Then it's just a simple matter of using Brackets ( these []) to show you are a shinigami and replace that with your rank and squad (ex. Tezuka Matsushima [Unseated, Squad 1]) when you get assigned.
That clear that up?
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Posted: Thu Oct 29, 2009 7:51 am
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Posted: Thu Oct 29, 2009 11:08 am
Alrighty then.
Now we play the waiting game.
Since you have all the basics down needed for the request you just need to wait for the captain's approval.
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Posted: Thu Oct 29, 2009 5:00 pm
Alright, the two new applicants.
Kanzuki, you're unseated until we can get your actual writing up to a higher level. Before that, I can't justify giving you a seat. In the future, please do not do things like post your profile before you're accepted into the squad. Also, I'm fairly sure you're going to need a once-over to make your profile acceptable, because even though Aizen is a canon character, he's the big bad of the show, and your character will likely NEVER be that powerful, especially not in shikai alone.I'll get back to you about edits.
Animi_luver, I have a feeling you're one of Meluk's alts, since your account has been active for 16 days, it seems, and your writing style is near identical. However, I'm nice enough, and I could be wrong. You'll be given no seat either, but that's just a precaution. I'll move you up when you are deserving of a spot.
COV, In my absence, can approve people to join the squad. That should help with keeping things moving.
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Posted: Thu Oct 29, 2009 6:16 pm
Fighting Fefnir Alright, the two new applicants.
Kanzuki, you're unseated until we can get your actual writing up to a higher level. Before that, I can't justify giving you a seat. In the future, please do not do things like post your profile before you're accepted into the squad. Also, I'm fairly sure you're going to need a once-over to make your profile acceptable, because even though Aizen is a canon character, he's the big bad of the show, and your character will likely NEVER be that powerful, especially not in shikai alone.I'll get back to you about edits.
Animi_luver, I have a feeling you're one of Meluk's alts, since your account has been active for 16 days, it seems, and your writing style is near identical. However, I'm nice enough, and I could be wrong. You'll be given no seat either, but that's just a precaution. I'll move you up when you are deserving of a spot.
COV, In my absence, can approve people to join the squad. That should help with keeping things moving. Thanks and I'll edit my profile once you get back to me about my edits.
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