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Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 5:12 pm
Christ was scare. His legs wouldn't move, his mouth wouldn't talk; the only movement capable of accomplish was the rubbing of the small red sweater. The girl raised her voice, imposing her status and confidence. She wasn't one of Christ's friends, those friends back at home. Then someone else spoke. He calmed her down, still Christ's heart was rushing, and an anxiety was filling his body with panic. A panic growing ever stronger when they came in. She asked Christ to come out of my supposed safe corner. For some reason, the shades gave him a sense of security. However it was to late, he was at the edge of freaking out.
After both stepped inside, an opportunity came in. It was a way out. In small and quick movements, Christ, looked at them individually, the he looked at the opening between the door and the strangers. He waited, in silence, gathering strength to move. He knew how to fight, but they were a whole other level; or so he kept repeating to himself in his mind. Fighting was the last resort for Christ. As soon as the girl was about to speak, he found the opportunity.
With a fast and powerful impulse, Christ gathered speed. He came out, his eyes glowed with the transition from the shadows to the light. One step was down, and he was already by their side. The second step was down, and this time he was out of the room. He didn't even looked where to go, he just turned left; and with shorter and faster steps, he ran away of the awkward situation. The encountered enemies were still, they didn't expected the situation, or they maybe just let him go. Anyhow, Christ had escaped for he moment, but he left something behind. An old piece of paper almost burned out. The only legible word spelled like: I . . . n sta . . .ith you. I do . . . ot belon . . .re. Good B . . . oh. Everything else was gone.
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Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 7:37 pm
((You know, neither of us had come into the room actually, we were OUTside the door. But, I'll let it pass this time. You need to do A LOT of work on your grammar and spelling, you've made way too many typos. If you continue to have posts that are almost illegible, I'll have to get you out. Just try to work on it please.))
Kiante immediately ran after the boy. He was faster. Drakonian's were usually faster than regular humans. Kiante was surprised at his burst of energy, a moment ago he could barely drag his feet along. Must have been adrenaline.
He was right behind the boy, and he lunged. He caught the boy who fell to the floor, pinned by him. Kiante held the boy's arms out to his sides and said, "Why are you running?!" He was very stern.
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Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 7:57 pm
It took a moment for Lily's brain to process the next mabye 7 seconds or so. The mysterious boy shot out of hte room and took off running. That meant he had something to hide; he would've stayed and explained himself otherwise. Seeing Kiante run off, she slightly panicked, then took off after them.........but wait, a paper. She picked it up and read it; it was hard to read, since it seemed burned out. She guessed at a few of the words, then put it in her purse for now. THEN she took off after them, shutting and locking the door behind her. Thankfully, she had the speed and agility of a cat, so it didn't take long for her to catch up. It felt like running down and endless hall, for every door she passed was the same other than the number posted on it.
She caught up to see Kiante pin the boy to the floor. Strange, the boy was tired a moment ago. She stood next to him, and let him take control of the situation. SHe had her staff out just in case though; one shot could fry the opponent.
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Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 8:20 pm
"Why would that be anything bad? You have been blessed with a marvelous gift." Deane's Father said back.
"I just didn't know what to do I'm sorry for lying to you guys. I've also been training with Squall to control these powers.... and.... and I.. I've been getting better too." Deane couldn't bring himself to tell them that he was leaving not yet atleast. "Speaking of Squall I think I'll go pay him a visit."
Deane said as he gave his parents a hug and escaped before another word could be said.
"Dont push yourself too hard Deane." was the last thing Deane heard before he departed back onto the city streets. With that Deane decided he would eschew his parents for a while.
Deane felt mildly awakward that his parents had been so accepting and walked towards the castle just thinking of the future. As Deane got back to the castle he reclaimed his spot on the ground and started to relax when a voice started at him.
"Lounging around again huh Deane? And where have you been all day?" A voice called from behind Deane.
"Well Squall I was at my parents house I told them about the Keyblade and they atleast didn't seem upset."
"Did you tell them that you were leaving?"
"Well... not exactly in those exact words."
"What am I going to do with you?" Squall finished with sigh.
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Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 11:08 pm
((Thank you for the feedback. I understand. I just began RPing in English and grammar is one of my greatest weakness. This helps me a lot to see where my errors are, and I really want to learn. ^_^))
Christ didn't know what to do. As he suspected, they were stronger. It was a good try, but all futile. The room began to rotate. It became hotter all of a sudden. The capturer's face began to fade slowly into a hazy shape. "I," Christ hesitated to answer the capturer,"I . . ." Ram's eyes went blind. Then, voices came to his ears. Familiar voices from the past.
“You can't help respecting anybody who can spell TUESDAY, even if he doesn't spell it right; but spelling isn't everything. There are days when spelling Tuesday simply doesn't count.” a mysterious, but familiar, kid told the yellow bear. Christ went near, but was ignored. Thoughts echoed, like a shout inside a deep cave, What do you want from me? The bear stared straight into Christ's eyes, as if directing his attention to him and not to the mysterious kid. The bear had deep eyes, innocent but profound. Then, the bear directed his attention to the kid. The kid looked at the bear, then, he turns and looked a Christ. With loud steps, steps which created a stronger headache the closer they were. the kid came closer to Christ. Immobile, Christ could only watched him walk towards him. The kid stopped at a personal distance, but his face became blurrier than before. Again, Christ was loosing his sight. Just before it was completely dark, the kid says, “I used to believe in forever, but forever is too good to be true.”
Christ recovered his sight only to find himself in the same predicament as before he had the dream like vision. "I, I don't know," he answered to the pending question while he tried to avoid eye contact.
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Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 7:48 am
Maki stood at the large building before her. She had seen a castle before, but none like this. A magnificent beauty; radiant, as she would put it. Though it seemed the grounds around the castle were attacked by an earthquake. She didn't quite know where she was, she wasn't in control of that yet, but she was in control of the wind enough to make it form a shape, a dragon more precisely, but she had yet to completely tame him yet.
She sighed. "Where have you brought me this time?" She looked up at her winded companion, who looked back at her and disappeared in a gust of wind. She sighed again and looked up at the castle. He had left her again. The last time he did this, she was stuck in that world for a month. She's able to conjure up the shape of her dragon, but that didn't mean he had to listen to her.
She decided it was time to do some exploring of this magnificent structure, since she knew she'd be here awhile. She only took two steps before she could fully hear a conversatin between two people, male by the sound of it. She stopped and listened, hoping they weren't bad people. She couldn't tell by just the few spoken sentences she heard, but she became more alert at the mention of a keyblade. She had met a boy before with, what he called, a keyblade, but he made it perfectly clear that he wasn't on the side of good, nor was he willing to help her.
Maki looked around. She was alone, and no doubt her dragon friend wouldn't aide her unless she was in real danger, and right now she wasn't. She stepped closer to where she heard the two men talking, though she still couldn't see them. They were obviously just around this corner, for they didn't seem far enough way to be...far enough away; their voices were too loud for that. Hopefully they were on the side of good, and might be able to help her out. She had made it a rule to befriend anyone that wouldn't mean her harm, that way she wouldn't be alone travelling a world she had no knowledge about.
((Sorry for taking so long in introducing her, but I needed the perfect opprotunity.))
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Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 7:53 am
Raven sighed as the world of Radiant Gardens came into view. He had been following the ship on his smaller one, not wanting to deal with anyone else, and also to think. He was sure his master would want that child, now that he thought about it. Any threat to the SoD his master would want dead. Hopefully that girl didn't get the wrong message about the ship leaving, he tried to convince her that she was still needed, now more than ever, considering she was the one on the same ship as the boy. In a few hours he planned on contacting her, knowing how dangerous it was. Maybe he shouldn't...Well, he had a few hours to decide. Right now, however, he was curious as to what Jeki had planned for being here.
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Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 8:24 am
Rydia rolled her eyes, furious. So maybe Teitri had been exaggerating a little, but the truth was he wasn't far off. And the fact that he'd actually said it out loud just made her mad.
So maybe she'd been a bit spoiled. Not like a princess or anything, but in the SoD, she'd been considered something of a prodigy, sort of. Then Jeki came and surpassed her in everything. After that, the SoD wasn't so blind to Rydia's faults. So her auspicious career in evil had stagnated, and she'd gotten a bit uncaring. But still, they hadn't completely forgotten her old status as prodigy, and so she still didn't have to do quite as much work as others.
Now she was at the very, very bottom of the totem pole, a place so utterly alien to her that she couldn't stand it.
Rydia decided to say nothing more to this man, only following him and sulking. Well, at least I'll get some food...
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Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 8:27 am
Yuffie yawned and looked at the sky. Hey, look at that, her shift was over. She'd been driven nearly mad by both the boredom of looking after an unoccupied castle and the worry that that other jerk was up to something, and she could do absolutely nothing about it. Now she could forget about it all and sleep.
After that, it was time to look for Leon, to tell him she was off to bed.
She found him--big surprise--near the castle. There were a couple other people nearby, but she didn't pay them any attention.
"Hey, Squall, I'm hitting the sack. Might wanna tell whats-his-name to get moving," she called tiredly as she walked by.
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Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 7:31 pm
((Sorry Kiante in all the other rps i was in i wrote like that I'll try to keep like this from now on. Oh and can you tell me if its still wrong? I just want to know so that it will always be right in the future.))
"Thanks for the advice Yuffie but I'm not letting him off yet. Deane has yet to train today, and with the launch near he needs to get all the training time in he can before he leaves. Oh and goodnight Yuffie." Squall said.
"Come on Squall give me a break. And Yuffie I do have a name." Deane said calling back to Yuffie and frowning at both statements.
"No if, an, or buts about it Deane, on your feet!" Squall said drawing his gunblade as Deane slowly got up and drew his Keyblade.
Squall quickly got up to Deane and knocked him back. Deane swung his weapon at which Squall quickly dodged, and then broke through Deane's defenses to push him back again.
"Come on Deane!" Squall said as he started at Deane again. This time Deane blocked Squall's attack with his Keyblade and they were both pushed back in the exchange.
"Hey who's tha..." Deane said as he noticed a girl in the backround and then was quickly knocked down onto his hind quarters.
"Don't get distracted not by anything. Hesitation can get you killed. Miss it's not nice to spy you can come out you know. By the way who are you?" Squall said with his Gunblade still drawn. Experience taught him to never let his guard down and experience was exactly what Deane was missing. Squall had faith in him though, just like Sora in time Deane would learn and make something of himself.
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Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 8:23 pm
((Sorry I've taken so long to post. Today is my B-day, so it was pretty busy. And you're welcome Ram. Now onto Deane, some things you need to fix really. The biggest is that, every time someone new speaks, it's another paragraph. Look at my posts to see what I mean. I.E.
Kiante said "Go die."
Sora said, "No."
See what I mean? It's easier to diffrentiate between speakers then, and it's simply proper writing. The other thing, try to use commas a bit more, periods probably too. Your sentences run on a bit.
Oh, and Pyscho, Maleficent's Castle is the remnants of The World That Never Was, not radiant Gardens...if you recall, she was kinda run out of there. At the end of KH2 (or near it) she decided to take the castle in TWTNW as her own. Since there's nothing suggesting it got totally destroyed, I'm guessing she's shacked up there.
Anyway, now to my post))
Kiante was getting angrier by the second. He really had a bit of a temper. He growled some too, something a bit strange for a human to do. Of course, he wasn't just human. "What do you mean you don't know! You MUST know why you were running! How'd you get into that room? Are you an SoD spy?!"
Meanwhile...
Teitri looked back, a bit annoyed that Rydia wasn't following. Annoyed or maybe...amused. "Are you coming?" He asked.
Meanwhile...
Mickey and Sora were in the Captain's quarters now, a room right off the bridge reserved for the captain of each ship or any higher ranking officer if needed. They sat on fuschia couches around a circular nook, drinking tea from cups that had been sitting on the table between them.
"I went ahead and smoothed things out with the residents here," Mickey said, "And sent some people to begin building an embassy. I explained to the King, Kiante's caretaker, the situation and that he would be coming with us."
"Thank you friend." Sora said, sighing a bit, he was clearly tired. "Mickey..."
"I know Sora. It's been our goal for a long time, reuinte the worlds into one and dispell all the darkness."
"Reuniting them would be first. We can dispell the darkness afterwards. I just wish we knew a way to do it!"
"I think it's still beyond our powers. Someone would probably have to harness all the power of Kingdom Hearts itself. But, let us talk about a more pleasant subject. About Kiante, were you...?"
"Excited? Yes. Happy? Yes. Worried? Yes. Uneasy? Yes. Everything's going to change for him so quickly. It may be in the best interest of most people for him to join us, but it may not be in HIS best interest. He'll lose the only family he knew. He'll lose his home, his whole world."
"Or," Mickey said encouragingly, "He can save his world from destruction! There have already been heartless in their world. Now that they are connected, we can protect them."
"Yeah...I guess you're right. Thanks Mick. You're always a good friend."
"That's ol' Mickey Mouse for ya'!"
Meanwhile...
Jeki's ship drew near The World That Never Was. They slowed down a bit, and proceeded to enter the atmosphere. Maleficent had built a dock for their humongous ship, which they appreciated very much at times like these. It had been a long day.
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Posted: Sun Mar 09, 2008 10:14 am
((Coolness! Hope you had a nice b-day. And I lol'd at your example post; the example RP sentences. xd ))
Lily grew nervous at the sudden anger that was rising in such a small boy. While she could understand what he was getting at, something told her that the chances of the running boy being a SoD spy were pretty low. For one, SoD people never ran away from a fight, unless it was hopeless or if they were too low a rank, and the low ranks were most likely not allowed to leave training until they were powerful. And he actually seemed...........scared. Another trait not usually used by SoD soldiers. From what she heard, they were trained not to show fear.
And she was one who somehow ended up at the castle after wherever she came from blew up to pieces. Perhaps something similar happened to this boy? He had no injuries, though, just frightened. Perhaps he found a portal to this place; but how? This ship was locked up from such things. Either way, perhaps the King would have a better idea than either one of them put together, she and Kiante.
Lily walked up and put a hand on Kiante's shoulder. "Calm down; yelling isn't going to help, since he seems scared as it is." she said. She had no right to pull Kiante off the boy, unless he started a actual fight; it was not her place as the mere servant. She then turned to the boy pinned on the ground.
"It doesn't help your case when you're not answering truthfully; it makes it seem like you have something to hide. Now, why were you running? And how did you appear in the room, on this ship even? It concerns us that that room was locked from both sides, that would mean you somehow snuck in a room that isn't yours, which isn't wise in a strange place, or any place really.
Now, you can either tell us the truth first, or you can explain yourself to our leader in command." She didn't say King, in case this was a spy putting on a very nice act.
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Posted: Sun Mar 09, 2008 12:02 pm
Rydia snapped out of a daze in which she'd been staring at the wall, bored.
"What? Oh--yeah, I'm coming..." she picked up her slow pace and caught up.
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Posted: Sun Mar 09, 2008 6:51 pm
((Thank you, thank you, what can I say?))
Kiante calmed down at Lily's words, he knew she was right. He got up, but held onto the boy's arm, pulling it up with him. He brushed off the boy's shirt a bit and said, "I apologize for scaring you, I was acting a bit rashly. Though, you kind of were too."
Meanwhile...
Teitri led Rydia to one of the ship's cafeteria. They had one on each deck. Obviously they went to the closest one. They came to the line and he stepped aside, bowing (rather mockingly) and sweeping his hand forward, "After you."
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Posted: Sun Mar 09, 2008 8:38 pm
"I, I don't know, I just happened to be there," he answered even more scared than before because of the growling and anger Kiante demonstrated before. "It most have been him, that Pooh." He was not really sure,but he needed to blame someone to escape the situation unharmed, or at least he thought. "My name is Christ, Christ O'fer Robeen, pleased to make your acquaintance, " said Christ introducing himself extremely more politely than normal. Christ looked at the small red sweater, still rubbing the inscription. "I, I need to find him, Pooh." Christ could not hold his emotions anymore. In an impulse of overwhelming sensations, he jumped on Kiante grabbing him with desperations and questioned him repeatedly, "Do you know who he is? Where is he? What does he wants from me? Why is he looking for me? Why he keeps appearing my dreams? Who is he?!" Suddenly Christ stopped. Still and quiet as a graveyard at night, he stared at Kiante with big and panicking eyes. He was sweating, trembling, confused.
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