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 Posted: Mon Dec 20, 2010 11:12 pm
Azure Destruction Rpc Name: Ichirou Arata Village: Konaha Rank: Academy Student Bloodline or Clan applied for: Naga What you know about the clan/bl:Takes three more posts to learn genjutsu, are weak against genjutsu and weak against Raiton. They can have snake companions which can be venemous and they are short to start off but get huge. They don't care about people much. Other than that what is listed in the sample. Rp Sample: It had been a few days since Ichirou had left his home, it now being charcoal, and he was interested in the documents he had taken from his mother and father. Plus his fathers heavy sword was killing him. So he took a rest under a tall tree. He slowly unfurled the documents, feeling as if they were delicate and valuable. Turns out they were valuable, but to nobody other than him. It was his families bank accounts, birth certificates, and documents on his ancestors. His mothers side of the family went back to more poor farmers. Generations of great poor farmers! Just kidding, ******** them. Rip. His father on the other hand, went back to the Naga. The Naga was a great clan that used snakes as companions and had snake like abilities and appearances. My eyes! Ichirou thought. Some were able to extend their limbs and could secret venom from their teeth, or fangs, they could even shed their skin. Even fewer could turn into the true form. Naga shinobi are the best! If i could do this, i could become stronger and kill my parents! I could get them back for what they did to me! I'll get them back so help me god. I could inject venom into them or become the true form and tear them limb from limb! Or or i could shed my skin and strange them with it! The possibilities are endless and there is more to go! He thought excitedly grinning a devilish smile. "The Naga clan is so great!" He yelled! "They can summon snakes at a super low rank! And they're really smart and learn real fast! I could learn the greatest technique ever and blow my parents to smithereens! The Naga are like superheroes how don't they rule the world! They totally could if they wanted too! Man I hope I'm a real Naga, I gotta be with these eyes!" He said talking to himself ~ Ichirou is now seventeen and is ambushed by a gang of rogue ninjas. The ninjas encircle him moving closer, step by slow step. Now i can see if i'm a real Naga! He thought as the men enclosed on him. One swung his sword and he moved his huge sword in the way. blocking it. He let go of the sword and took his dagger in hand. He jumped over his large sword, and landed on the attackers. He grabbed the mans arm and pulled him closer and bit him at the base of his neck, his fangs slowly sinking deeper and deeper. Finally he could feel the venom seep out of his fangs, and before he could celebrate he was hit with a Raiton jutsu right in the back. He pulled his mouth off the mans neck and fell to the ground in pain, just as the man he bit did. He groaned as he got up and faced the other three men. Another man hit him with a stick to the back of the head, and he fell to the ground again. He could feel his companions slithering around inside his shirt. Assist me, Ryo, Kiyoshi. Yesssss, Massster The snakes voices chimed in his heads in unison. He suddenly moved his arms upward at a man and two black vipers struck him. One in the neck and the other his arm. The men were stunned and taking the chance, Ichirou plunged his dagger under the rib cage of the closest man. The last man ran in terror and Ichirou never saw him again.
First I'd like to say thanks for your patience in waiting but unfortunately, I must deny this application until it is fixed.
-) I want as much information as you can get from the Naga Clan Profile. Don't push it all into the Rp Sample. It's good that you incorporate it into the rp and all, but I want to make sure you understand the Clan fully even before you start typing up your sample.
-) Clean up your sentences and just like I said to -Havok-; make it more smooth. Right now it is quite sketchy and sorta difficult to follow. Not that it is bad, but I'm sure you can do better ^^
-) As I said to the other, be more descriptive on the snake like appearance your character has. Now it doesn't have to over-imposing like my character, but those of the Naga Clan will have more than snake-like similarities in the eyes and teeth.
-) Look back on the abilities of the Naga and make sure you have a good understanding of it while you re-vise your sample.
Overall, it was nice ^^ But I know you can do better. Revise it, check your spelling and work on your fighting scene and I'll look back over it!
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 10:06 am
Panthers7 Azure Destruction Rpc Name: Ichirou Arata Village: Konaha Rank: Academy Student Bloodline or Clan applied for: Naga What you know about the clan/bl:Takes three more posts to learn genjutsu, are weak against genjutsu and weak against Raiton. They can have snake companions which can be venemous and they are short to start off but get huge. They don't care about people much. Other than that what is listed in the sample. Rp Sample: It had been a few days since Ichirou had left his home, it now being charcoal, and he was interested in the documents he had taken from his mother and father. Plus his fathers heavy sword was killing him. So he took a rest under a tall tree. He slowly unfurled the documents, feeling as if they were delicate and valuable. Turns out they were valuable, but to nobody other than him. It was his families bank accounts, birth certificates, and documents on his ancestors. His mothers side of the family went back to more poor farmers. Generations of great poor farmers! Just kidding, ******** them. Rip. His father on the other hand, went back to the Naga. The Naga was a great clan that used snakes as companions and had snake like abilities and appearances. My eyes! Ichirou thought. Some were able to extend their limbs and could secret venom from their teeth, or fangs, they could even shed their skin. Even fewer could turn into the true form. Naga shinobi are the best! If i could do this, i could become stronger and kill my parents! I could get them back for what they did to me! I'll get them back so help me god. I could inject venom into them or become the true form and tear them limb from limb! Or or i could shed my skin and strange them with it! The possibilities are endless and there is more to go! He thought excitedly grinning a devilish smile. "The Naga clan is so great!" He yelled! "They can summon snakes at a super low rank! And they're really smart and learn real fast! I could learn the greatest technique ever and blow my parents to smithereens! The Naga are like superheroes how don't they rule the world! They totally could if they wanted too! Man I hope I'm a real Naga, I gotta be with these eyes!" He said talking to himself ~ Ichirou is now seventeen and is ambushed by a gang of rogue ninjas. The ninjas encircle him moving closer, step by slow step. Now i can see if i'm a real Naga! He thought as the men enclosed on him. One swung his sword and he moved his huge sword in the way. blocking it. He let go of the sword and took his dagger in hand. He jumped over his large sword, and landed on the attackers. He grabbed the mans arm and pulled him closer and bit him at the base of his neck, his fangs slowly sinking deeper and deeper. Finally he could feel the venom seep out of his fangs, and before he could celebrate he was hit with a Raiton jutsu right in the back. He pulled his mouth off the mans neck and fell to the ground in pain, just as the man he bit did. He groaned as he got up and faced the other three men. Another man hit him with a stick to the back of the head, and he fell to the ground again. He could feel his companions slithering around inside his shirt. Assist me, Ryo, Kiyoshi. Yesssss, Massster The snakes voices chimed in his heads in unison. He suddenly moved his arms upward at a man and two black vipers struck him. One in the neck and the other his arm. The men were stunned and taking the chance, Ichirou plunged his dagger under the rib cage of the closest man. The last man ran in terror and Ichirou never saw him again.
-) I want as much information as you can get from the Naga Clan Profile. Don't push it all into the Rp Sample. It's good that you incorporate it into the rp and all, but I want to make sure you understand the Clan fully even before you start typing up your sample.
-) Clean up your sentences and just like I said to -Havok-; make it more smooth. Right now it is quite sketchy and sorta difficult to follow. Not that it is bad, but I'm sure you can do better ^^
-) As I said to the other, be more descriptive on the snake like appearance your character has. Now it doesn't have to over-imposing like my character, but those of the Naga Clan will have more than snake-like similarities in the eyes and teeth.
-) Look back on the abilities of the Naga and make sure you have a good understanding of it while you re-vise your sample.
Overall, it was nice ^^ But I know you can do better. Revise it, check your spelling and work on your fighting scene and I'll look back over it!Yea, i know it was pretty bad, in fact I'm re-doing the whole thing, mainly because i thought it was a rp sample of how your character discovered the bloodline and strengths and weaknesses.
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 12:37 pm
Rpc Name: Ichirou Arata
Village: Demon Country
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Naga
What you know about the clan/bl:Takes three more posts to learn genjutsu, are weak against genjutsu and weak against Ration. They can have snake companions which can be venomous and they are short to start off but get huge. They don't care about people much because they are so power thirsty. You need to kill someone in could blood and be a jounin to be able to use the true form. Naga snake summon poison can only lock up muscles (15-20 posts until major lock up). Naga snake companions can only lock up muscles if it bites a major vein it can taint a poisonous area (10-15 posts until major lock up). And Naga member posion is more dangerous than the rest and can completely immobilize the victim and cause severe pain (1-10 posts until major lock up)
Rp Sample:
Ichirou had always known he was from the Naga clan. Well he didn't know that exactly, but he knew he was different. I mean he had fangs and slanted eyes like a snake, and his pupils were a black slit that cut through his forest green eyes. He wasn't normal, and he knew that all his life. Plus he never gave two shits about anybody other than himself and his snakes, Ryu and Kiyoshi, who had always been with him, hiding in his shirt, coiled around his torso like some kind of spring. They were with him even when he discovered he was a Naga. That day he was in his first fight, and was moving pretty slow on account of the large sword on his back. He was ambushed by a cocky thug who introduced himself before the fight.
"My name is Lee the great, i think you should learn the name of the man who kills you!" The loud mouthed idiot yelled. Ichirou didn't say anything but smiled. What a idiot, I'm going to murder him! Ichirou thought as the mentally handicapped shinobi charged him with his katana drawn. Ichirou managed to hold up his sword and toss it at the young ninja as he jumped sideways and rolled by a tree. The jungle air seemed incredibly fresh this afternoon and Ichirou felt peaceful even in the middle of the fight. Speaking of the fight, while Ichirou was commenting on the weather the shinobi got up and swung his sword at Ichirou's head. Ichirou ducked and smiled whne he realized the shinobi didn't notice the black viper that was wrapped around his swords handle, that had been there since he tossed it. This snake now struck him in the leg. Lee shouted and dropped his sword and Ichirou kicked it deep into the forest. "Wheres you precious katana now Lee the Great?"
The fight raged on and soon Lees muscles had cramped up and lee was moving extremely slow. The ball seemed in his court and Ichirou thought he was going to win soon, but it seems this Lee was a genjutsu specialist, which is bad because Ichirou and all Naga members are weak against genjutsu. This particular genjutsu made it seem like Ichirou was the one that was poisoned and not Lee. Lee seemed to move faster and Ichirou dragged on barely holding on. Ichirou had various scratches on his body where Lee tried to cut him but Ichirou would slowly dodge and just barely move out of the way. When he got so enraged by the cowardly technique, Ichirou grabbed onto Lees arm when he tried to cut him again, this time he succeeded and cut Ichirou's arm pretty bad, but it was worth it because Ichirou sunk his fangs into Lee's shoulder injecting him with the Naga poison. The pain from the bite and venom made Lee stop his genjutsu, setting Ichirou free.
The fight burned like a fire deep into the night. It raged on and on. Ichirou was tired and so was Lee. Ichirou wanted to end this so he was going all out, and Lee just wouldn't die. And he seemed to know Ichirou's weaknesses because apparently he was a Raiton user as well, The Naga clans other weakness. Luckily because Lee was slow Ichirou was able to dodge all the lightning bolts. This time he wasn't so lucky however. In the middle of a attack Ichirou was struck in the chest by a lightning bolt, pushing all the air out of his body and sending him tumbling. He rolled in the dirt and stopped laying on his back looking at the night sky. Lee came close to finish Ichirou off and Ichirou slowly drew his danger, ready to finish Lee off. Lee kicked him twice then bent over to grab him by the neck, but Ichirou stabbed him in the throat. Blood poured out and you could see the daggers tip out the back of his neck. Lee dropped to the ground and Ichirou landed next to him. Being to tired to do anything else, he fell asleep right next to the corpse of the young shinobi that dared cross his path.
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 8:22 pm
Rpc Name: Misaki Sumizome Village: Kumogakure Rank: Academy Student Bloodline or Clan applied for: Anigan What you know about the clan/bl: ♦ Anigan is an animal-based eye trait ♦ Anigan is activated by intensive training or intense mental/emotional stress ♦ A person gains all traits of the animal of choosing; All good and bad traits are taken in ♦ A person can only gain the traits of the animal after it had been previously observed and observe the animal at that moment with Anigan activated ♦ Different animal traits can only be called upon if they are originally a part of the same animal family ♦ Users must erase all barriers seperating man and beast Rp Sample: Quote: Mizaki slammed into the tree, panting. She slid down to sit and brace herself against its trunk, too tired and weak to move anymore. They'd been chasing her, tirelessly, and she ran, endlessly. She was ready to let them catch her if it meant the running would end. But her father had stayed behind to fight, even ordered that she run from that place. And when he gave an order, she always followed, which meant she had to keep running. Mizaki crawled pathetically to the other side of the tree, hoping to hide herself away from the trail leading there. She closed her eyes and concentrated hard, opening up her own power inside of her. The forest was unusually quiet, as if no one or nothing else was there, but her power told her otherwise. She wasn't alone there, could feel their presence everywhere. She was good at this, and trusted her power, even though everything else told her otherwise. She'd already impressed her father and mentor with observing about 24 different animals while still an academy student. That day.... She smiled just as she sensed movement coming from her left side. She watched, power still on high, as a small black cat wiggled its way from a bush. Silently, as it proceeded to clean itself, she crawled behind it and quickly snatched it up. The cat hissed and spat, trying to free itself from her hands. "Just.... Give me a minute, please" she begged it silently as it clawed at her hands. "I promise I'll let you go right after this." Instantly the cat's protests ended and looked curiously at her. She couldn't help but to smile about it all. It was working for her! Already she felt herself changing, could see the outline of the cat better and clearer. The midnight black cat now had ink-dipped ears and tail, along with white socks. She could hear alot better too, could hear the rat scurrying just behind her, could hear the birds in the tree ahead of her, could hear the heavy footsteps of men in front of her. "There she is!" The footsteps stopped a few feet away from her as she lowered and released the cat. "You're coming with us" the man barked as he stepped forward. 1 step, 2... She looked up slowly at him, and he shyed away from her. "Monster" he whispered as he stepped back towards his group. 1 step, 2... She smiled widely. She knew what she looked like. She'd spent a lot of time looking at her reflection in the lake near their house, staring at her bright-red eyes with it's orange-ish tint. she was of this clan, the Anigan, and was so proud of herself for it. The cat brushed itself against her leg as it took off to the right of them. Immediately, she scrambled to run after the cat. She heard their angry shouts and heavy steps follow her soon after and realized that the men would never leave her be. She knew she didn't have much time before she would have to fight them. She ran a little faster, urgency in her steps, as she picked up the cat and stared into its eyes. The kitty was cute and she couldn't help but love it, but she needed deadly and she needed it fast. "Ikimono Henkan- Animal Transformation!" Pouring chakra into the cat and altering it's genetic coding, the palm-sized cat transformed into a full-sized wolf. "Ah! Much better!" The men were closing in on her now, but she still needed to do more for her life. "Ikimono Gekido- Animal Rage!" She poured out more chakra into the newly formed wolf, giving it more strength and power. Before charging out, she mimicked the speed and strength of the wolf as she swung around, got on all fours and began charging towards the men before they could even have a chance to react. All that could be heard were large growls and screams coming from the men as they were being ripped apart and eaten. Blood covered the mouth of Misaki and her new wolf companion as they looked at each other and Misaki smile. "That was fun wasn't it?"
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 10:35 pm
Ok it was much better. But here are the points that I'd like to address because I don't want you to do the same thing that you are doing with your application that you may do in the actual rp:
-) Being an Academy Student... You won't really know your weaknesses yet UNLESS someone exploits it. So take him having knowledge of it out until further notice. Now I can understand him possibly learning about his heritage. That was alright... but don't push it too much.
-) And your getting dangerously close to being accepted except for one last thing.Try not to copy and paste the information. sweatdrop [[ Talking about the information about the poison.]] Write it in such a way that I can tell you know about the information without it sounding like you just copied and pasted it.
Other than that, good job, as I indeed see the improvement. I'll wait until you edit it once more and then lets see if we can't get you rping soon!
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 10:39 pm
@keishi and TC
ACCEPTED
I know that the both of you know the Anigan very well. If you have any questions at any time though, don't hesitate to contact me.
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 10:54 pm
Panthers7 Ok it was much better. But here are the points that I'd like to address because I don't want you to do the same thing that you are doing with your application that you may do in the actual rp:
-) Being an Academy Student... You won't really know your weaknesses yet UNLESS someone exploits it. So take him having knowledge of it out until further notice. Now I can understand him possibly learning about his heritage. That was alright... but don't push it too much.
-) And your getting dangerously close to being accepted except for one last thing.Try not to copy and paste the information. sweatdrop [[ Talking about the information about the poison.]] Write it in such a way that I can tell you know about the information without it sounding like you just copied and pasted it.
Other than that, good job, as I indeed see the improvement. I'll wait until you edit it once more and then lets see if we can't get you rping soon! I didn't copy and paste lol, i did however have it in another tab and kept checking it for the correct numbers. And that was a flash back that was how he knew. But i wouldn't worry about the poisons, because I'm only going to really use the companions in that field.
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Posted: Thu Dec 23, 2010 12:36 pm
Rpc Name: Ichirou Arata
Village: Demon Country
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Naga
What you know about the clan/bl:Takes three more posts to learn genjutsu, are weak against genjutsu and weak against Ration. They can have snake companions which can be venomous and they are short to start off but get huge. They don't care about people much because they are so power thirsty. You need to kill someone in could blood and be a jounin to be able to use the true form. Naga snake companions can only lock up muscles if it bites a major vein it can taint a poisonous area. And Naga member posion is more dangerous than the rest and can completely immobilize the victim and cause severe pain.
Rp Sample:
Ichirou had always known he was from the Naga clan. Well he didn't know that exactly, but he knew he was different. I mean he had fangs and slanted eyes like a snake, and his pupils were a black slit that cut through his forest green eyes. He wasn't normal, and he knew that all his life. Plus he never gave two shits about anybody other than himself and his snakes, Ryu and Kiyoshi, who had always been with him, hiding in his shirt, coiled around his torso like some kind of spring. They were with him even when he discovered he was a Naga. That day he was in his first fight, and was moving pretty slow on account of the large sword on his back. He was ambushed by a cocky thug who introduced himself before the fight.
"My name is Lee the great, i think you should learn the name of the man who kills you!" The loud mouthed idiot yelled. Ichirou didn't say anything but smiled. What a idiot, I'm going to murder him! Ichirou thought as the mentally handicapped shinobi charged him with his katana drawn. Ichirou managed to hold up his sword and toss it at the young ninja as he jumped sideways and rolled by a tree. The jungle air seemed incredibly fresh this afternoon and Ichirou felt peaceful even in the middle of the fight. Speaking of the fight, while Ichirou was commenting on the weather the shinobi got up and swung his sword at Ichirou's head. Ichirou ducked and smiled whne he realized the shinobi didn't notice the black viper that was wrapped around his swords handle, that had been there since he tossed it. This snake now struck him in the leg. Lee shouted and dropped his sword and Ichirou kicked it deep into the forest. "Wheres you precious katana now Lee the Great?"
The fight raged on and soon Lees muscles had cramped up and lee was moving extremely slow. The ball seemed in his court and Ichirou thought he was going to win soon, but it seems this Lee was a genjutsu specialist. This particular genjutsu made it seem like Ichirou was the one that was poisoned and not Lee. Lee seemed to move faster and Ichirou dragged on barely holding on. Ichirou had various scratches on his body where Lee tried to cut him but Ichirou would slowly dodge and just barely move out of the way. When he got so enraged by the cowardly technique, Ichirou grabbed onto Lees arm when he tried to cut him again, this time he succeeded and cut Ichirou's arm pretty bad, but it was worth it because Ichirou sunk his fangs into Lee's shoulder injecting him with the Naga poison. The pain from the bite and venom made Lee stop his genjutsu, setting Ichirou free.
The fight burned like a fire deep into the night. It raged on and on. Ichirou was tired and so was Lee. Ichirou wanted to end this so he was going all out, and Lee just wouldn't die. Luckily because Lee was slow and Ichirou was able to dodge all the lightning bolts that had been flying at him from the Raiton user. This time he wasn't so lucky however. In the middle of a attack Ichirou was struck in the chest by a lightning bolt, pushing all the air out of his body and sending him tumbling. He rolled in the dirt and stopped laying on his back looking at the night sky. Lee came close to finish Ichirou off and Ichirou slowly drew his danger, ready to finish Lee off. Lee kicked him twice then bent over to grab him by the neck, but Ichirou stabbed him in the throat. Blood poured out and you could see the daggers tip out the back of his neck. Lee dropped to the ground and Ichirou landed next to him. Being to tired to do anything else, he fell asleep right next to the corpse of the young shinobi that dared cross his path.
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Posted: Thu Dec 23, 2010 1:05 pm
Ok I'm going to accept. But here's the deal... You'll be be monitored for a little while over the next month to ensure you RP correctly with the Naga Clan. I have to take such precautionary measures as, well for one it is my clan that you have, and two the clan can easily be abused by others. And to ensure that doesn't happen I have to take these type of measures over anyone who joins it. Just wanted to let you know so you don't think it's just you who is under surveillance. =^^=
In any case, congratulations and welcome to the Clan. blaugh
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Posted: Thu Dec 23, 2010 7:21 pm
Rpc Name: Deidalus
Village: Iwagakure
Rank: Sanin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Chakra Mouths
What you know about the clan/bl: Although originally thought to be a special bloodline, the Chakra Mouths are actually created through the use of a special Kinjutsu passed down in Iwagakure. It allows one to infuse Chakra into an object and mold it. Deidara, who enjoyed making clay sculptures, used clay as his basis creating an explosive art form. Despite the mouths being small, the technique allows for objects of even enormous size to be created. Even flight is capable of being achieved through the creation of a winged creature of sufficient size.
Rp Sample:
Deidalus stood watching as column after column of nobles entered the hall. He had been tasked with ensuring the welfare of the Earth Daimyo himself. The Tsuchikage had received word, through her spy network, that an assassination attempt would be made by one of the nobles during the reaffirmation of vows. The former Daimyo, Kounosuke Nadare, had passed away in his sleep and his successor was his son, Saidomaru Nadare. As was tradition, each time a new Daimyo inherited the title, every noble was expected to renew his or her vow of support. The Daimyo, concerned for his life had requested protection during this sacred event. “I bid you warm welcome, my friends.” The Daimyo said as he stood from his throne. “I trust that you all had a safe journey to the capitol. It is with great sorrow that we lament the loss of my father, whose illness had been plaguing him for years. However, I have accepted his position and in keeping with our customs, have invited you here to once again deliver your vows.”
Having never been the best at keeping his attention on any one thing at a time, Deidalus began reminiscing of his earlier spar with a friend. “Come now Deidalus, You’re a master at Ishi no Karada, There should be no reason you’re running away.” Roronoa Toguro said as he swung one of his blades towards him. Dodging to the side, Deidalus laughed, “You and me both know that I suck at it. I much more prefer the delicate art of sculpting.” Deidalus promptly threw a small clay weasel at his opponent. Knocking the explosive aside with the flat of his blade, Toguro leapt at Deidalus. “Taste my blades, Hyou Kin Dama!” Toguro shouted as he spun, the blades seemingly contouring into a ball shape. “Oh no, I’m doomed!” Feigning despair Deidalus continued, “At least I’ll go out with a …bang!” Just as Toguro was about to make contact, Deidalus performed a flawless Doton: Bakuyaku Iwa Kawarimi, replacing himself with a boulder. The boulder was special however, and the moment when Toguro made contact, it exploded. Toguro was launched backwards, crashing into the ground. Planting a blade in the ground, he pushed himself to his feet. “I’ll get you soon enough, you can’t run for-“The Roronoa’s statement was cut off however, when a familiar weasel leapt from the ledge above him and latched onto his face. “Game set and match, “ Deidalus said as he looked down at his friend, “You haven’t won against me yet, but you’re certainly getting better.”
Deidalus was brought back to the situation at hand as he heard the Daimyo finish his speech. One by one, each noble approached the dais and bowed to the Daimyo. Sekiya Kintaro, head of the East mining district was the first to re-establish his ties to the Daimyo. Yonshi Abaki, Owner of the Dragons Den, a fine restraunt establishment that catered only to the elite, was next. As more and more passed by, Deidalus regarded each with distant contempt. It was people like them that made politics a hassle. He would’ve rather been at home, studying in the library, than dealing with people who skulked in the shadows. He had never been fond of things that took very long, his attention strayed easily. Perhaps that is why he found his clay explosives so beautiful. They were simple and to the point, an exquisite creation that existed for only a fleeting moment.
It was when Sousuke Amano approached the dais that Deidalus first felt that something was wrong. Whether it was his walk, which appeared to be a little to forced, or his posture which appeared a bit stiff, that set an alarm in his head off, Deidalus wasn’t sure; but he was certain that this man was the assassin. Sousuke was a cousin of Saidomaru and was next in line to inherit the throne, should Saidomaru die. A prominent member of society, he was well known for having connections to other villages and provided a great deal of income from trading. It would be easy for such a man to hire an assassin from another village. “My lord, I humbly stand before you to reassert my position as your firmest supporter. As is Tradition, I have come bearing a gift for my dear cousin.” Reaching into his robes, the assassin pulled out a Kunai and lunged towards the Daimyo. He never made it close enough to harm him, as his head suddenly exploded. The corpse fell to the floor at the daimyo’s feet. The kunai slipped from its lifeless hands, and tumbled down the steps. “What? But How?” The Daimyo stammered as he stood up from his throne, having sat back down at the end of his speech. “The only way to ensure an assassin could reach you was if they impersonated a noble through an advanced Henge. I merely placed an explosive ant on each person who entered this room.” Deidalus explained, “It is obvious that your cousin, seeked to remove you from your position so that he may assume it himself.” Shock turned to anger as the Daimyo realized the full extent of the treachery. “He is to be stripped of his title and all of his holdings. Tell the Tsuchikage that he is to be a dead man by the end of the day.” A cruel smile adorned his face as Deidalus replied, “I’ll see to it personally.”
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Posted: Sat Dec 25, 2010 11:34 pm
Rpc Name: Naga, Ryuugi
Village: Otogakure
Rank: Academy
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Naga
What you know about the clan/bl: Has the abilities and likenesses of snakes. Nagas can summon a specific type of snake although most of their summons are not, and will never be as strong as their original animal familiar. They have a secondary form, which is called their true form, in which they take on severe snake likeness and even can enlongate their necks to the point it would appear they are a snake ending in a human body. In this form they lose all intelligence, and merely attacks without fear of death. The clan's members are almost always cold blooded, and those who aren't are seen as weak, and aren't considered true members of the clan.
Although really it is a bloodline.
Rp Sample:
Sonji stood in the middle of the cathedral where he normally spent most of his time. hundreds of bodies littered the floor around him, and blood was beginning to stand, such that until the door was opened Sonji's shoes would be completely submerged in the blood. This really didn't seem to bother him, except for the fact he was standing there muttering to himself. His snake, Kami-Naga, didn't seem bothered by it, and was actually crawling around on the ground lifting it's head above water. Sonji began to shudder, his eyes opening, in their weird snake like way. His pupils started out rounded, but became slits exactly like how a snake's would. His tounge flicked out, it was a normal human sized tounge aside from the fact it was flayed to that it made a much louder hissing noise. Through all of this Sonji never stopped his shivering or muttering. " The doors open inwards..." He repeated over and over.
Suddenly the doors burst open, and the blood flowed out the door, and a man walked in, followed by a large sword that the man was carrying. " Oi. What be ye' talkin' 'bout? " The large man asked, pulling up his blade to his shoulder nd smiling running forward, slamming the door shut behind him.
" The door opens inwards. " Sonji said, looking at the man his eyes filled with tears. Kami-Naga shot out of the blood, and slammed headlong into the side of the man. This wouldn't have normally affected someone, but the ten or so bodies currently in Kami-Naga's body kind of increased his pushing force. Kami-naga quickly recoiled, slithered to Sonji's side and vomitted the bodies and slithered up Sonji's back, under his shirt where he coiled, increasing Sonji's size drastically so that he went from skin and bone to completely massive. Kami-Naga slid his head out of Sonji's neck hole and rested it ontop of Sonji's head, so that he could see and evade any close calls. Kami-naga began hissing violently. " No... I don't want to... " Sonji said clutching the sides of his head, where his ears should be, but since he lacked them it was slightly odd. " I... I don't like that... " He said, thrashing around, yelling that he didn't want to. The man had regained his footing and began his charge again. He closed in on Sonji and swung his blade down at Sonji's right shoulder. Kami-Naga shifted his body to the left, making the man miss completely. " These doors open inwards!" Sonji yelled, bending backwards and then snapping upright, thrusting his hand onto the man's neck, Kami-naga's head disappeared. and the man's grunting turned to odd gargling. " These doors open inwards... " Sonji said smiling his eyes taking on a wild stare that showed he was no longer there. Suddenly the man surged backwards hundreds of kilograms of snake flying from Sonji's arm, pushing the man directly into the door, and slithering aroung his arms and legs. Soon the only thing exposed was his head. His face began to turn pale as Sonji walked forward, laughing. " If the doors didn't open inwards, then you might have survived. " He said laughing, stopping halfway across the cathedral's Nave. He threw his arms straight out, so that his arms were perpendicular to his body. He smiled snakes exactly like Kami-naga except smaller flowed out of his sleeves like water. " now my children feed, and when you are finished return to me... " He said laughing. He lowered his arms and made a couple of handsigns smiling as his jaw dislocated itself. " Soft physique technique, followed by... " He said laughing making more handsigns. " Nan no Kazo! ":He said, his neck enlongating to thrity feet, closing the gap between himself and the man in a matter of milliseconds. The man's last immage was Sonji's crazed face, enlongated Canines dripping poison, and his lips mouthing the words " Food! " ane then he died due to his throat being released by a fearful Kami-naga. The Man was never found, neither was his " Legendary " sword.
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Posted: Sun Dec 26, 2010 9:34 am
Rpc Name: Yami Yugi
Village: Iwa
Rank: Jounin
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Blackwing
What you know about the clan/bl: Well as the creator I know everything there is to know about it. The blackwings excel in Raiton and Fuuton Ninjutsu and in fact are unable to learn any other elements. Their biggest weakness is the fact that they have weak bodies. Taijutsu does more damage onto them and they have a hard time learning it. The Blackwings biggest power relies in their ability to summon large humanoid birds from their cards. Each bird has different abilities and power levels as they can be called upon at the cost of chakra. Since they have the ability to use these birds they are unable to sign summoning contracts.
Rp Sample:
Things in the village had been progressing quite nicely over the past few weeks with all the new security that has been placed in. All of the villagers have had their mind at peace lately without the thought that Kumo would attack. The days were beginning to turn quiet, but a bit too quiet for Yami's liking. Even after checking in for any reports at the Anbu HQ and the security towers, his suspicions were still left unresolved when they showed that nothing was happening. Perhaps he was worrying too much, just like the Tsuchikage had said the night before. She had advised him to relax and calm down, as well as have a couple of drinks. It was odd though, since being given the position of Jounin, he had never seen her so relaxed before. Actually, he thought that of all people, she would be the one to agree with him and start investigating. Yes, there was something odd about her that night. In fact, she hadn't been acting like herself lately at all. Even though he had just met her, he could tell by her personality and mannerisms.
Yami has been sitting down at a table in a local cafe that had their dining room on the outside. While critical thinking he always enjoyed French Vanilla flavored coffee with a bit of cream floating on the top. His train of thought was leading him down a track that he didn't like but he would have to stay on to investigate for the sake of the village. Reaching for the deck of cards, specially incased in a small fireproof box, he pulled out on card and placed it on the table. He closed his eyes as he applied chakra to the card. "Blizzard the Far North, release!" The card began to glow as the chakra spirit emerged from it's container. The rather large bird began flapping it's wings while it stayed in place to kind of hover in front of Yami. "Blizzard, I want you to go and follow the Tsuchikage around. Something is not right with her. I can sense it. Make sure you stay unnoticed." Yami watched as his bird flew away and he stood up, reaching for another card but just holding it rather then releasing it.
Moments passed by as he began to hear Blizzard's excited call. He began running instantly as he activated the card that was in his hand. "Shura the Blue Flame, release!" A large screech could be heard as the card began to glow and the large humanoid bird emerged from it's seal. It wasn't long until he was able to pin point Blizzard's location as she seen woman dressed as the Tsuchikage and two men. That's when it hit him. She must have been using a genjutsu to change her facial appearance. Pissed off that he had been decieved he send Shura flying into battle. "Attack! Use your blazing fists!"
The bird's hands went ablaze as it flew quickly at one of the two men, punching him in the head before he even got a chance to turn around. The other two quickly turned as they seemed marvled and confused as to what Shura was. Using the element of surprise, Shura lounged after the woman but was stopped by the man who seemed a bit more skilled then the one who had just fallen. The man kicked Shura dead in the chest as the bird flew backwards and was grounded. As soon as it hit the ground the man ran and jumped on it as he began swinging and punching the bird.
"Dammit! Blizzard get down here!" Yami began performing handsigns as Shura and Blizzard began to glow completely white, and Blizzard literally flew into Shura. The chakra force was enough to push the man off of Yami's creatures as new one came to life. "Blackwing's Armed Wing! Activate!" BAW, was a large nine foot tall humanoid bird with a spear launcer in his hands. Chakra eminated from him at an alarming rate, causing the man to crawl backwards in fear. Yami's new summon began to walk slowly towards the man on the ground, leaving large footprints with each step. He couldn't take it anymore, getting up from the ground, the coward began running for dear life. The girl started yelling at him, spitting foul curses as he revealed his true colors and abandoned her. BAW began to rise as it's freakishly large wings began to flap. Locking on to it's target, he dove down like and eagle with his spear launcher pointed outwards, giving him the shape of a large black missile. The man had no chance. He was skewered as the spear tore through his chest and ripped out his heart. He was killed almost instantly in the most brutal of manners.
Using his stealth and the distraction of Armed Wing, Yami was able to sneak behind the girl and catch her in a full nelson. BAW stood as he left the spear and the spear launcher stay in the man's chest. Walking over to where Yami and the imposter kage were, her grabbed the girls neck, sqeezing a bit tightly. "Tell me where the kage is before I let his rip off your neck." Yami demanded in a firm voice. The girl remained silent as if she would rather die then tell. Yami released her from his hold as he backed up. Instantly, BAW lifted her in the air as he performed a massive chokeslam on her, and then stepped on her chest. Still she remained silent. Suddenly BAW began performing some handsigns as electricity ran through his arms. Becoming wide eyed the girl screamed and begged for her life but still said nothing about the kage's whereabouts. Yami quickly came close to BAW as he began performing some Fuuton handsigns. "Static Wind: Sutatikku Kaze no jutsu!"
To be continued...(not really)
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Posted: Sun Dec 26, 2010 10:51 am
I'll edit this as I go along!
Duck: Denied. You didn't really show any usage of the techs for Clay mouths.
Neru: I'll let Panthers get you since you're going for Naga as well.
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Posted: Sun Dec 26, 2010 11:19 am
Rpc Name: Kyousuke Hatake
Village: Kumogakure
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Hatake
What you know about the clan/bl: Allows the user to have a special White Chakra that increases the power of weapon and the cutting size of them. They also must have Raiton Element.
Rp Sample:
Kyo was on a Recon mission with his squad, Sara Ghost and Yukio Yami. They were all simple Genin and just had to check out some suspicious activity with their Jounin Leader, Shinsui Suou (DRAMA!!! XD JK). They had to go into the mountains and set up lookout points then gather info. Suou led each of the to their locations. Kyo to the North, Sara to the West, and Yukio to the East. Suou was traveling through the mountains around the village to make sure nobody was breaking in. As Suou had gotten to a point that he wouldn't notice the approaching rogues from the North, a few men creeped up from behind Kyo. They kicked him over and laughed heartily. "Hey kid! What the hell are you doing up here?" Kyo quickly sprung to his feet and pulled out his shortsword. "So you're the guys who've been snooping around, aren't you? Well you aren't gonna make it to the Cloud Village! Not if I have anything to say about it!"
Kyo now charged forward at the enemies. There were three of them and they were about D-Rank Rogues. Kyo slashed a few times with his shortsword before getting kicked down again. "Damn kid! You're really getting on my nerves!" one of them yelled before punching him in the face. Kyo went down, but got up again. "THAT'S IT!!! I'm tired of fooling around!!!" Kyo then concentrated his Chakra into the shortsword and his Chakra then began to crawl from the hilt of the blade all the way up to the tip, and then it began to grow wider by a few inches and then almost a full foot longer. The White Chakra of the Hatake Clan shown brilliantly over the blade as Kyo charged forward and slashed one of the rogues across the chest. He yelled and the other two came in for an attack. Kyo then slashed each of them on the arms. Quickly, Yukio and Sara noticed what was going on and called Suou for help. Suou came and was quickly there to rescue Kyo. "Thanks Kyo-kun! Looks like I'll be taking it from here!" Now that Suou was there, Kyo, Sara, and Yukio got back to the village as fast as they could before that section of mountains had been completely blown to pieces.
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