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Oh no, it's okay. My friends always correct my grammar when I talk to them and I use the wrong word. So I'm used to it.

"in lieu' That's french isn't it? "en lieu" or "instead". Ehehe! >.<

Yes, you're right. It is nice. I also pay attantion to pronounciation. Atkeast in real life. I can't really do that on the computer! sweatdrop

Yes, I just got down to reading it, checking for errors and whatnot. 3nodding

Seyla

Length and Pacing: Well, I would have to personally say that you have made one of the longest posts in this tests history. I think about as long as Sakura's, but maybe longer. You paced rather nicely, even despite adding the recollection of Seyla's first move in the beginning. All in all, this was very nice, it wasn't too long-winded or anything, though I figure the memory was just included to sweeten the post. 3nodding Still, this was a very good post, there was progression and I really happened to enjoy that. Heh, it's almost surprising how long this came out, in comparison to most of your other posts normally in Ria. But still, this is an entirely good thing.

Grammar: There was one letter missing when I saw ". . . didn'. . ." at one point. I know that you meant "didn't". There may have been one capitalization error in my opinion, and a few instances in which commas could have been added. Also, you had used "lapel" which usually refers to a coat. Though that could be a specific type of microphone that I am simply unfamiliar with. But really, your grammatical errors were few and minimal, mainly lying with scant commas. Also, I think that you had used "2" instead of "two" at one point. One rule is that for numbers ten and lower, you should write them out in letters. So I think that you did rather well.

Personality: You didn't really lack much here, though there could have been more thought in some places. But you did make up for this with facial expressions and conversation, which is just fine. You maintained your character's personality very well, which was very good in my opinion, so I have no complaints in this category. Though since the icy opponent appeared to be a humanoid, she could have been given, a bit more expression herself. Unless she was simply meant to be mute and emotionless. But you did very well in showing how Seyla grew cold in the rooms, especially in the dome, as it took on an ice-land facade.

Use of environment: You did rather well to describe the room towards the beginning, and the waiting room that came before it. I also found it comical when she was having complications with the door at first. That was a nice touch. Though, when everything began to melt towards the end, you could have added a bit more description. Like, if there were ice caps, you could have shown them melting, toppling onto each other, though the scenery is plainly simulated. But other than that, I thought that you had done rather well here.

Details: You were really descriptive for the most part, which made me really happen. Heh, I think just for you, a thesaurus can come in handy. Though, you could have gone more into the ice maiden's fall, like how she simply became ashes, since you gave me the impression that she had been made from ice. So maybe, a mist instead of ashes, steam, or even a puddle could have been better. And, that's it really, just keep up the good work.

You did very well, and I hope that you are able to improve in any way for future tests.

7/8

Oh, heh, I see. And that's understandable. 3nodding The lack of focus at such a late hour. Hhmm.... is English your first language? Just curious, though your disliking of school could be the only thing. Also, I'm guessing that due to your apathy... you're probably not doing that well in school. Also, my grade doesn't determine everything... I could be a bit off, but I know that I had wanted to give Miki a 7, though Kurai has already rated him.

Yes english is my first language,I am doing well in school just lets just say I didn't pay enough attention in the grammer years.Next time i'm just going to wait til the next day to write it lol.oh and just to point out that don't blame me on the commas and such I spell checked and grammer checked it and thats what the corrections were.I am also curious are you an english major?

yeah well I remember someone suggesting that we do it all in one post. So thats why. And commas definately are my weakpoint. Xx