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 Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2005 8:12 pm
Yeah, man. Traps need bait.
Politeness will only get you so far.
ninja
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Posted: Mon Mar 28, 2005 8:04 pm
Haru please please can you draw a picture of me for your swimsuit calendar?
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Posted: Tue Mar 29, 2005 7:42 am
Wow... I look damn near sexy in color...
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Posted: Wed Mar 30, 2005 6:47 am
Most of our MSU ladies do. 3nodding
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Posted: Wed Mar 30, 2005 4:52 pm
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Posted: Wed Mar 30, 2005 5:20 pm
I'm going to go ahead and announce that I'm beginning a new little art-project, tentatively titled MSU: Secret Origins.
No word yet on how long it will take me to get bored and shelve it.
ninja
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Posted: Wed Mar 30, 2005 7:31 pm
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:47 pm
can you all please help me? i need your feed back and comments on this picture of my avi: Use one of these links cuz one of them might be too big SaikoKoneko1SaikoKoneko2
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Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 10:48 pm
Saiko Koneko can you all please help me? i need your feed back and comments on this picture of my avi: Use one of these links cuz one of them might be too big SaikoKoneko1SaikoKoneko2 definately a good start for sure. I'd be interested to see how it looks when finished.
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Posted: Sun Apr 03, 2005 12:27 am
(I'm a mean old man...)
These are my editing notes for Flame Maniac's Story over in the Fireplace:
Your writing is way too sparce, as far as setting goes. You need to describe places, people, where the people are in the places, the things that are in the places, where the things are in relation to the people in the places...
Y'know... details.
Setting the scene is part of setting the mood of a story, and it makes the action easier to follow. 'In this place,' or,'In this other place,' doesn't cut it. You're captioning a story with no pictures. The pictures need to be drawn by your words.
Important note: Don't use *these* to describe action. That's what the narative is for. If you want to write an effective story, don't cop out on us with little internet shortcuts. It makes you look lazy.
Now onto the story itself.
I would suggest talking to the members of Monster Slayers United about their characters. Movement, method of speaking, etc. How they would say certain things, how they go about entering a room, the way that they wear their hat...
Just try to get a feel for each character... their methods and motivations, or whatever. We're all pretty over-the-top people.
Trust me, you'll get some kind of answer out of us. We all have some sort of image of our characters in mind... and make sure to take each with a grain of salt. The MSU is nothing if not a pack of liars.
And don't be intimidated by guys like me that show up and yack about how to be a better writer... I'm full of s**t.
Just describe what it is that you see in your head... and don't assume that other people will know what you mean. You have to show them.
Oh, and if St. b*****d's Hammer hits something... it dies. His strength is in... his strength, not accuracy. He doesn't hit every time, but when he does he almost certainly won't need to hit again... especially if it hits a head os other vital area (unless it's some sort of end-of-the-game type boss monster).
Excelsior!
ninja
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Posted: Sun Apr 03, 2005 7:05 pm
Thaddeus (I'm a mean old man...) These are my editing notes for Flame Maniac's Story over in the Fireplace: Your writing is way too sparce, as far as setting goes. You need to describe places, people, where the people are in the places, the things that are in the places, where the things are in relation to the people in the places...
Y'know... details.
Setting the scene is part of setting the mood of a story, and it makes the action easier to follow. 'In this place,' or,'In this other place,' doesn't cut it. You're captioning a story with no pictures. The pictures need to be drawn by your words.
Important note: Don't use *these* to describe action. That's what the narative is for. If you want to write an effective story, don't cop out on us with little internet shortcuts. It makes you look lazy.
Now onto the story itself.
I would suggest talking to the members of Monster Slayers United about their characters. Movement, method of speaking, etc. How they would say certain things, how they go about entering a room, the way that they wear their hat...
Just try to get a feel for each character... their methods and motivations, or whatever. We're all pretty over-the-top people.
Trust me, you'll get some kind of answer out of us. We all have some sort of image of our characters in mind... and make sure to take each with a grain of salt. The MSU is nothing if not a pack of liars.
And don't be intimidated by guys like me that show up and yack about how to be a better writer... I'm full of s**t.
Just describe what it is that you see in your head... and don't assume that other people will know what you mean. You have to show them.
Oh, and if St. b*****d's Hammer hits something... it dies. His strength is in... his strength, not accuracy. He doesn't hit every time, but when he does he almost certainly won't need to hit again... especially if it hits a head os other vital area (unless it's some sort of end-of-the-game type boss monster).
Excelsior! ninja Sorry... I thought I got most of the mistakes out... Well, I'll try to get the rest of the errors out in later chapters 3nodding Thanks for the feedback whee
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Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 2:10 am
Flame Maniac redface Sorry... I thought I got most of the mistakes out... Well, I'll try to get the rest of the errors out in later chapters 3nodding Thanks for the feedback whee You should take his advice and ask around the MSU for some info about each character :3
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Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 5:57 am
Haru Mania Flame Maniac redface Sorry... I thought I got most of the mistakes out... Well, I'll try to get the rest of the errors out in later chapters 3nodding Thanks for the feedback whee You should take his advice and ask around the MSU for some info about each character :3 absolutely, we love to talk about ourselves.
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Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 8:11 am
What about giving 'Diel avatars of yourselves to draw? I've already done phil, started on Pode, Haru, and Archmage... but I'd appreciate ref pics in the outfits you'd most like.
^_^'
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Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2005 8:13 am
Phil Srobeighn Most of our MSU ladies do. 3nodding Most. yes, this is correct. Please do not die if the picture of me is too accurate when it's done. I'd be sad if I caused death by ugly.
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