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 Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 4:13 am
HAWT.
EEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
... I wasn't expecting a lot of that. And that's why it's SO COOL. Is it bad I wanna draw all these people now? I have enough to draw! gonk
(I keed... *Goes searching for artist to commission*)
Your take on all these characters is so new and interesting. This is really addicting because we already know who the characters are based on, and you have your own secret plans for them. *__*
In other words, AUGH WHAT HAPPENS TO MEEE!? *grips laptop*
( heart heart heart )
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 4:19 am
Oh, yeah:
1.) Poor Raa. ;__;
2.) *Hits on Weston* Mwahahahahaha
3.) When I get down there, DON'T GIVE ME TO RUE. gonk
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 7:34 am
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 8:08 am
Ah, the classic tale of towing the line of good and evil. How far is too far? What lengths does someone go when they can convinve themself it's for the better good?
I love it. I love that you hinted to "him" again, and my reactions to "him." And I love how Weston chastized me, and how very upset Arcadian and Ananel were. If I'm not careful, my actions will disbar me as leader.
This is also the first installment in which the story flows from more than one point of view. We have Graye and the Legion, which I appreciate.
Very good, dear. Relationships are being clarified and characters are fleshing out nicely. I can't wait until the next chapter.
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 8:20 am
Yep. I'm hooked. More talking is good. I really like the back-and-forth.
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:09 am
NEW CHAPTER. *---*
THoughts as I read! <3
1. Rue. You're cruel! crying Only one hour next time, please! Although I guess if it took that long that means Danti or I were holding out pretty well... or you're just a poopie head.
2. Charactor developement is love, and you do it really well.
3. Must learn more about these people! ;o;! Must... read further...
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:24 am
*chokes on her tea, sputters* Grayed? And Weston? And...WHAT?! But that's fraternizing with the enemy! That's against the rules! That's not very nice at all! That's...oh...wait, they've probably just got history, they're not still together, duh. sweatdrop
Rue so got told. domokun
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:30 am
*Sticks her tongue out at Mory* XP
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:35 am
Moryera *chokes on her tea, sputters* Grayed? And Weston? And...WHAT?! But that's fraternizing with the enemy! That's against the rules! That's not very nice at all! That's...oh...wait, they've probably just got history, they're not still together, duh. sweatdrop Awww. You jealous? :3 Still got my knives, b***h. twisted
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 10:43 am
Ruevian Moryera *chokes on her tea, sputters* Grayed? And Weston? And...WHAT?! But that's fraternizing with the enemy! That's against the rules! That's not very nice at all! That's...oh...wait, they've probably just got history, they're not still together, duh. sweatdrop Awww. You jealous? :3 I never said that... #>_># Ruevian Still got my knives, b***h. twisted Aww, but Queen Usagimom isn't gonna be too happy with you if you cut me up for no good reason~... surprised Yeah, whatever happened to that subplot, anyway? I'm not saying this 'cause it's the one that involved me, I'm saying it because I'm wondering how it all ties back into that. I mean, what's Grayed after, other than blood, Weston, and the mysterious bag of goodies from the party? Will we get back to the castle once we pwn her senseless? Also, 500 gold says I know who's on the other end of Grayed's communicator.
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 12:57 pm
Pshaw, Mory, I'm SOOOOO over him. domokun ...Hey! Who's gonna get pwned, Princess? scream Ruevian Still got my knives, b***h. twisted I don't. ;_;
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 2:58 pm
Grayed Pshaw, Mory, I'm SOOOOO over him. domokun Ohhh, so it's one of those mind game thingies. ...cool. surprised Grayed ...Hey! Who's gonna get pwned, Princess? scream YOU'RE gonna get pwned. I'll pwn you myself, if I have to! scream I've gotta have some sort of useful power...I mean, apparently I'm pretty handy with a sword...
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 3:22 pm
1) zomg I'm in!
2) ...But then it seems like I randomly disappear to, say, Santa Fe while my close and personal friend is tortured instead of reacting at all. That was freaky and I did not see it coming. If it's really obvious who the guy with the red ponytail is, please shoot me because I can't figure it out.
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 5:14 pm
Danti If it's really obvious who the guy with the red ponytail is, please shoot me because I can't figure it out. *blows you away* It's Alliance. Who else has long red hair, other than Kyraa, who is not a man?
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 5:49 pm
Ruevian *blows you away* It's Alliance. Who else has long red hair, other than Kyraa, who is not a man? Kickin' with the crossbow, moving in the trees. I'm loving it. heart I'm quite enjoying all these different viewpoints, and the different (yet similar) character descriptions from each of these viewpoints. It's always good to see the same character through different sets of eyes; makes us spot things we'd have missed before. I've been trying not to piece clues together, but it's so second-nature to me that I'm noticing things earlier than I probably should. One thing that's bugging me, but don't answer if you don't want to: what connection is there between the names "Graye Death" and "Gray Legion"? With the new (possible) plot twist of Graye and Weston's (assumed) past, the connection seems to be more than just coincidental nomenclature. I use the words possible and assumed because Graye might just be ******** with them. Wouldn't surprise me if she was, it'd fit with the character so far. But I might be reading a little too much into it. Then again, that is probably your intent. ....my head hurts. whee Anyway, sorry about the double-chapter review. I'll try to make comments on each individual chapter from now on, barring any other trips I need to make. Once again, this is amazing stuff. Keep it up; this is certainly not an exercise in futility. 3nodding
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