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First of all... is her grandfather's name Caption? *confused* Or did you mispell Captain?

The sentence structure/capitalization/punctuation needs work to be honest.

There are a couple things about her story that I'm a bit confused on. Are you implying she and her grandfather were manning a delivery vessel alone ? If so, thats nearly impossible to do on such a large ship. Also, are you trying to imply that her grandfather was trying to deliver things specically TO Feral Labs? Feral Labs would have their own shipping lines and wouldn't outsource.

Lastly - we've stated several times now that combo animals have to have some kind of a rhyme or reason to them. Such as trying to create a "dragon" with Zach, or testing what happens with put a bunch of agrressive animals together with Chubbs. THe staff wouldn't just arbitrarily pick random animals and squish them together, so I'm having trouble seeing why a Dalmation/Monarch?

History and Character sound great. How he got the island would work as well. though just to be specific, he would head to Americas and then to an island, not head straight for the island as there would be no informationn exactly were that was. He probably left from Florida.

As for the manticore, however, there are a few specifics that are bothersome. Mostly the addition of the "poisen arrows." For one thing the reason a poisen dart frog is poisenous is because of the insects they eat in the wild, which eat poisenous plants. In captivity - they're harmless.

Also, porcupines, contrary to popular belief, can not "shoot" their quills. They merely get stuck in a victem then released.

So, if you manage to procure a Manticore serum, I think the porcupine and dart frog would have to be omitted for the construction of the tail, and stick with the scorpian tail. Not only for the mechanics of it, but also because Moreau would not engineer an animal that had a projectile weapon anyway. wink If you're okay with these changes, then: