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 Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 8:12 am
07Keersa- character concept looks ok. The ability of "No actual eyesight, but being able to see everything," is too vague and could use a lot more description. Also, please watch grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Especially in your RP.
What you've got right now is not an acceptable RP sample. You can't put actions in parentheses like a stage direction, rather, you need to explicate fully as though you're writing a scene from a book. All writing should be in the past tense. If you have any questions on these grammatical stipulations, feel free to PM me. It might also help to look at pre-existing RPs within the guild. Please revise your RP sample and maybe run your profile through some flavor of spellcheck. You've got more than a few errors on that count.
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Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 9:31 am
Name: Kouzan Heiwa
Kouzan, High Mountain.
Heiwa, peace
Number: 10/23
Aliases/ Nicknames:
Red eyes , and other insults. (those who dispise him)
Physical Description: blood red eyes, short/mid length black hair.
Fairly handsome, but very gloomy complexion. never simles.
6ft 2" fairly muscular but slim 152 pounds (10 stone 12).
Sheath worn on left hip.
Standard arrancar uniform.
Hole on left pectoral muscle 5 inches in diameter.
Zanpakuto:
Name: Kage Kasumi – Shadow mist
Charcoal black blade with a gleaming white hilt, covered in a blood red silk cloth criss crossing along the hilt and flowing off the end for one and a half metres.
(part of the cloth tends to be wrapped round hand prior to battle. this scarf can be used as extension, for more freed movement and a varied and surprising way of fighting, as it can be implemented at any time during the battle.)
Wields with right hand, sheathed on his left hip for easy access.
& Resurreccion:
Release phrase: Atone
Ghost/grim reaper like creature, eyes are completely with black pupils, no white present. Nothing can be seen except the torn black cloak and red eyes.
However generally nothing is seen anyway, due to the resurreccions ability.
But has a skeletal being behind the cloak.
Shadow mist.
This is completely surrounds the opponent by shadows, somewhat like a mist but completely blocks out the light. The opponent is free to move, and the shadows only cover around 120-metre perimeter, as well as vertical height being 120 metres, but being able to manipulate these shadows and eyes allowing Kouzan to see everything this allows him to keep the enemy permanently engulfed in the shadows.
The shadows also withhold the screams, moans, and shrieks of those who have previously encountered the mist. Leaving the opponent disorientated and no way of being able to hear his approach. His reiatsu is hidden by the shadows, the only notice the opponent gets is when my eyes reach exactly 63 cm away from them. Meaning they have a very short period of time to attack him.
He can also make the shadows denser, this obviously means condensing the shadows, which takes away from the height and width off the perimeters.
Abilities:
No actual eyesight, but being able to see everything.
Being able to see both him and the rest of the world at the same time, being able to see rocks form every angle, and every distance. A complete sight of the world.
This ability is allows him to see everything in the world he is in (Hueco Mundo, Earth etc.) this ability allows him to see anything, from every possible angle and distance.
However this is obviously a great deal of information so is generally filtered to be just a short perimeter of sight of about 20-40 metres. Certain reiatsu’s may spark his interest, say that of a Shinigami or anyone/anything that may spark his interest.
This may be 2 miles or 200 miles away.
This ability is not based on seeing his reiatsu but their actual physical being, therefore they can not hide by suppressing there reaitsu, but may avoid his eyes until they reach a closer vicinity.
Personality:
As a Fraccion Kouzan's loyalties stay with his leader, 'Sigeric', the 10th Espada. Being apart of something allows him to feel a sense of comradery, this being a new, exciting and purposeful feeling compared to his previous life, he works only protect that bond he shares with so many, and will do anything to protect that.
Kouzan is extremely respectful and polite, aware of others opinions thoughts and beings, despite rank, race (Shinigami, Human, Hollow, Vizard etc.). He maintains this even when they disrespect him.
His manner when speaking is never condescending and in a tone slightly like Byakuya's. When people talk to him they feel a cold presence, chilling, a fear that there life is coming to an end, but at the same time they know he won't harm them (this only being the Espada who know him, enemies are generally completely fearful). The only one exempt of this would be those who refuse to show fear and Sigeric.
A great sadness is always upon him. His mind riddled with thoughts of his past life, he conceals this not with a smile but more of a gloomy shell. This shell does distance himself from others, which he despises, however Sigeric has befriended him and this is the closet thing he has had to a friendship or a family member.
Because of this Kouzan would do anything for Sigeric, even if higher Espada directed him otherwise, however he does have a respect for authority, and does as he is told without fault, of course with the exception of Sigeric's word.
The way he addresses an opponent always follows the same guidelines: a small speech saying how he does not wish to fight; but if he must then he shall not be frivolous and take his time, he will fight to the full extent of his abilities straight away.
If a battle draws on long enough there maybe some form of conversation, but this is generally just a response to something they opponent has said, as to not disrespect, otherwise he is comfortable fighting in silence.
However although this is extremely unlikely.
If they do manage to touch a nerve then he may react accordingly, depending on what they said, and the nerve they touched, for example; something that shows insight on his gloomy exterior or his inner sadness could lead to him being inquisitive etc.
Anger is something Kouzan felt a great deal of during his human life, something he still feels now, however he does not show this, again withheld by his gloomy exterior. However as time goes on and his bonds begin to grow stronger and more plentiful, this anger seems to diminish, but those who are disrespectful and aggressive towards him, even though this never shines through his exterior, his anger levels within build. But no one knows whether these two actions are balancing or if one is dominating only time will tell.
Biography/History:
During his human life there were many tragedies, he was born into the world and brought up by a single mother, and the added bonus of being blind, with an unusual trait, blood red eyes. as the years go on a few phrases become more and more familiar to him, 'your an accident' 'I hate you, you red eyed freak' 'I wish you were never born' . These phrases being memorised from the age of 5, as he grew older and started school, his life wasn't much easier, never going on any trips, or having any lunch, no new clothes, no unripped shirt, the only time he has heard his real name was when the teacher called it out on the register.
As he began to learn about the world, he began to become more and more disgusted by his mother, by the people he saw on the street, he learnt what an alcoholic was, what a ‘druggy’ was, what a prostitute was, what his mum was. All of these things angered, saddened, confused him. However he had decided that no matter what others did, he did not want others to feel what he had his entire life, he never wanted others to be sad or angered, so he made sure no matter what others did he would always be respectful and polite.
His mother died of a drug overdose and at the time he was 9.
With no other family, no friends, no one. he didn't know what to do.
So he laid in the corner of the apartment, already 4 months overdue on rent and waited. He didn't know why he was waiting but he didn't know what else he should do. Eventually death came upon him. But he still lay in the same corner; even in death he had no purpose. Many weeks later, no one knows how long for sure a hollow found him
Laying there. The hollow asked, "Why are you not afraid of me little boy, why do you not run" he did not reply he just laid there the hollow persisted to ask again, and again why he just lays there. Just said, "my hunger is growing and whatever your purpose, I am losing interest goodbye strange boy".
Hollow life.
Kouzan became a strange creature, awakening he found himself being able to see in a way he could have never imagined possible he wondered if all humans saw like he could, he was memorised by his red eyes the only thing he truly knew about himself. He felt a strange hunger unlike that of the one he felt as a human, this felt like am unbearable urge to hunt, this being the only true purpose he began to grow stronger, eating weaker hollows, changing into stronger and stronger forms. Consuming, and eventually finding himself becoming an arrancar, and becoming stronger still.
He starts to feel apart of something for the first time as he joins Sigeric's fraccion, Sigeric befriends him, he begins to feel comeradery for his team and many of the other Espada and certainly for Sigeric.
Sigeric becomes the most important thing to him, and this is the first real for of friendship he has with anyone, even though he is still very emotionally distant Sigeric understands him and treats him exactly like everyone else and this brings joy to him, even if he can't show it.
His life continues from that moment onwards...
Powers:
Cero
Bala
Sonido
Hierro
Garganta
During his normal state, he has the ability to control shadows already on the ground. No physical harm is formed from this ability, neither to the opponent nor Kouzan. However he can make them stand vertical momentarily. This can surprise and distract opponents allowing him to strike first.
Role-Play Example:
Kouzan walked along the embankments where both Las Noches and the desert like sea of Hueco Mundo collide, Kouzan strolled casualy, consumed by thought and sorrow.
He pondered the thought of what his future with holds for him.
For 2 miles he travelled along the vast walls. Eventually reaching an old oak door, riddled by notches and cuts. Dressed in bolts, hinges and a distorted handle.
Grasping the handle and twisted it in a clockwise direction, the door made an unpleasant screech whilst it opened, and then closed.
The door led straight into a long narrow corridor, lit only by a series of torches along both sides of the wall, spanning 2 metres apart from each other.
After awhile just shorter than 30 minutes he reached another door, it lead into circular room, 9 ½ metres in diameter and a height of at least 20 metres, with which concealed 12 doors.
Kouzan reached the centre of the room, and a sound of an opening came from behind him. With his ability he had already seen who came through.
Gin Ichimaru entered the room, paused and began to walk towards Kouzan
“Why aren’t you moving, are you scared to be in my presence.” Gin asked in a mocking tone.
“ No sir, Ichimaru-sama.”
Gin walked round to see the face of this strange figure, and what he saw surprised him but his face did not compromise.
“Ahh I see, very interesting. What is your name?” Gin’s tone changes to a more serious and inquisitive tone.
“Kouzan Heiwa.” His voice remained at a constant tone. However he was incredibly intrigued as to why Gin was carrying a conversation with him rather than just walking on.
Gin stood still for a few seconds and then spoke.
“We have a common trait.” Gin begins to walk away.
Before Kouzan has a chance to reply Gin used his flash step and disappeared from the room, Kouzan again began to walk on continuing on the thoughts that consumed him.
I've done multiple spell checks, along with grammatical changes. i've added parts to the abilities section. also i've added zanpakuto name and ressurecion release phrase.
changed the roleplay to hwo you specified.
And it has been checked over by Pad cheif.
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Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 1:30 pm
Doesn't seem that vague to me.
Anyway back to the mimic ability, no if they can control an element he can't do the same thing as that is an ability not a move. For example Hitsugaya can manipulate ice, that is an ability. He can also use this ice to perform moves like Hyoten Hyakkso. Pa Rot would be able to use something like this simply because it is a move. Furthermore the move must be named. He can't manipulate ice outside of using it for the named moves he has seen it used for however. Similarly if he was to watch Ichigo swing his Zangetsu around he wouldn't learn diddly. If Ichigo performed a Getsuga Tensho though, he could use that.
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Posted: Tue Oct 20, 2009 3:29 pm
-shrugs-
Ok. You're approved, then. I'll wait to see how you use your ability in battle.
@07Keersa- also approved.
Both of you, please post your profiles in the appropriate thread.
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 12:58 pm
Name: Calamar Sufrimiento Number: n/a Type of Hollow: Vasto Lord Physical Description: Oh how would one ever describe Calamar, if you where cute and didn’t expect to live much longer, you could say he has a head of a octopus with a body of a man. No outer reproductive organs or the body features of a human mammal. Such as no nipples or bellybutton; it’s skin is a pale gray purple but where his fingers, the tips of the tentacles and where the cartilage closest to his skin. It is because Calamar is an aquatic creature, having no bones, and being very much like a octopi allows him natural flex to both his “bones” and his joints. This very intellectual creature does not have the ability to speak verbally, but only with clicks and burbles but instead, speaks telepathically. The voice sounds very deep and has a hint of a metallic like echo. Now Cala has no body hair, and it’s eyes are all white. Having very lengthy limbs, Sir Sufrimiento stands at seven foot tall, and looms over many people. The height from a distance is enhanced by his long torso and long arms and hands. Having only three fingers and a thumb they all end in sharp deep purple talons. A natural frown is applied by the deep eye sockets and the curvature of his eyebrow and cheek bones. One little fun fact about Calamar Sufrimiento is that it cannot be given a gender because “it” has none. In it is unclear if this Hollow even had a past life before it became such a creature. It is highly suggested that this creatures was created within death. Garbed in heavy robes, the creature is covered in a thin layer of slime which a natural lubricant added to the skin when out of its natural habitat. Which naturally Calamar lives within Las Noches’s underdark where there is a natural emptiness and while within this underdark the state of the hollows that occupy this dangerous environment are soaked with raw spiritual matter which both heals and rejuvenates hollows. Because it doesn’t live there anymore Calamar must continually consume spirits, either minus or plus. Depending on how much energy it uses dictates how much new energy it must consume… Zanpacto & Resurreccion: Scimitar – Classically the weapon is seen used in Egyptian weapons, but this form of Scimitar resembles a katana in many ways except that the blade has more of a curve, and the hilt is much longer with a hand guard. It’s user has it held within an elaborate leather bound sheath and has golden decorations scribed into the leather. The blade itself is a burnt gray, but perfectly polished looking like stone. Resurreccion – (“Gran Mente”) – Gran Mente translated from the Spanish language means “Great Mind”. When released Calamar transforms into a titan, a huge squid. Normally it will only release it’s true form when it is near a large body of water because within this form he resembles a oversized kraken. The power of this release isn’t within this massive size because his reflex’s are much too slow to keep up with the movements of most opponents but it lays within the special property when in this form. More or less, with or without water the beast pushes out an unavoidable psychonic blast that renders all creatures unconscious within a giant two hundred yard radius that instantly causes all creatures within that bubble to black out instantly. All said people are awoken within an alternate universe where any person trapped within this mental prison can breathe underwater. The Universe is an unending water world, where no matter what direction a person travels they will travel through nothing but water. There is no natural light, or sound. It is a perfect replica of the deepest ocean. All powers are accessible but the effects of the crushing ocean depth and the density of the water will either enhance, or completely nullify all effects and powers. Calamar in this realm is within his sealed form but with it’s webbed feet and hands and the body shape can naturally move freely within the water world, and can see perfectly within the darkness. Special Accessories: To contain his repulsive characteristics, Calamar contains his tentacles within a large helmet that resembles a pyramid allowing lots of comfort for the retained tentacles and fits perfectly over his odd shaped head. There is a one way screen that blocks the view of those on the outside of the helmet but allows near perfect vision from within. These vents are on either side allowing near perfect vision. Abilities: Flyer Infiltration [10 Sided Dice(Calamar) vs. 50 sided Dice(Opponent)] There is a chance that Calamar will be able to infiltrate a person’s mind and learn everything about them. However, even if failed, by default, Calamar will know their full name and what faction they belong too. This is because these two topics are arguably the most thought about aspects within a person mind. Flyer Coup De Groh If Calamar has the ability to kill an opponent, it will latch its tentacles around the person’s head and use the hard peak within its jaw and suck the brain from the skull learning everything the person once knew before they died. Cero (“Zero”) Basically an energy blast, it consists of firing a blast of concentrated spirit energy at the target. While in most cases it is fired from the mouth, some Arrancar and Vizard are capable of firing Cero from their hands, fingers and other parts of their bodies. This often requires the user to undertake a specific pose. The power, force, speed, and blast area of the Cero is dependent on the strength of the user (i.e., the stronger the user, the stronger the attack), and there are some Arrancar and Vizard who have come up with their own variation. Bala (“Bullet”) Technique that hardens the user's Reiatsu, and releases it from their hand like a powerful bullet. [Not Achieved]Granray Cero (“Grand King Zero”) Cero that only Espada are allowed to use. It is performed by mixing an Arrancar's own blood with the Cero. The result is a Cero with a much greater attack power and speed as well as a change of color unique to the Espada. It is also many times more powerful than a normal Cero, capable of disturbing the fabric of space, it also seems to spin like a razor upon release as compress and decompress due to the sheer speed and raw power. It is a drastically potent Cero, used only by the Espada themselves. [Not Achieved]Flyer Cero (Signature Cero) In the form of a bala, these attacks will pass right through the user harmlessly but with each pass the bala’s give insight into the opponent. Letting Calamar listen into and know what the opponent is thinking and feeling for the duration of the fight. Personality: Calamar Sufrimiento is very reclusive, not wanting to interact with anything that has not lived within the Underdark. Though Calamar will work with others if ordered to, it will make all attempts to be alone. Along with this, Sir Sufrimiento does not enjoy combat, but will not hesitate to fight because it lived its entire life within the Underdark fighting to survive. It isn’t because of morals, but if ordered or for survival. Though it would be fun to color this creature a colorful portrait it is very dry, cut and paste, black and white. The special trait about its personality with that it is very much robotic and analytical. If by chance it is trapped with others, Calamar will remain distant, observing everything with facts. If a person would want to exchange words, they would have be to be very versed in whatever topic they wish to discuss with Calamar, so that it can either learn from the conversation and use it to better it’s well being. Though Calamar is very anti personal it is in fact very very curious and will prod at any topic that it is not known completely. The only time it will start a conversation is to suggest a better idea to a scenario, or to gather information… Biography/History: Being created in the Underdark from another being such as himself, Calamar is accustomed to the ways of all hollows, and treats any scenario as if it is alone. From creation it was not the only one to be made, it had several other siblings not by blood but simply because it was created the same time several others where. To be blunt, Calamar was the only one to survive this long because of the harshness of the Underdark. Evolving to the point of Vasto Lord, Aizen had sought out this strangely rare creature in the environment that it existed in. Quickly Calamar calculated that it would be better to live above the Underdark and to serve under a somewhat greater being. Though it would never admit to Aizen being more powerful, Sir Sufrimiento has decided that serving Aizen will better it’s well being. Powers: Cero Flyer Infiltration Flyer Coup De Groh Bala (“Bullet”) (X)Granray Cero (X)Flyer Cero Role-Play Example: Quote: Diablo was ordered to attack the Labrynth to appear like a person with a mission. He was told to test the Executioner’s limits, and to take his time with the fight. Aizen wanted to observe everything about either person. Diablo has to this day to reveal his Resureccion, and it was the same story for Verdugo. Though the man didn’t go by any name Aizen had named him himself. Each Arrancar created was perfection in Aizens eyes, the perfect fighting creatures. Beside the Espada stood both Diablo and Verdugo as his prized creations… Now he stood looking at the large white wall that hid the labyrinth under Las Noches. A small frown played across his half lidded eyes, looking at the wall he never took the time to walk this far into Heuco Mundo. Looking over his shoulder he seen the vast white desert. It was so empty and barren of life… or even death. Shifting his stance to face the wall completely he lifted his hand at the wall, his hand was balled up and with another moment he charged his Rietsu in the shape of a solid ball that covered his entire arm. Throwign his elbow back he pushed more energy into the imaginary ball. Raw energy crackled around his arm as his spiritual pressure faded completely for a second. All of his energy was pushed into this imaginary ball, and as his arm blurred forward he could feel his vision blur for just a second as his spiritual pressure dropped to nothing. Quickly however his vision returned as the ball hurtled towards the wall as he grunted with exertion. The ball traveled the thirty foot distance in a blink of an eye and crashed into the wall, the attack sent cracks through the wall and into the foundation around the wall, with one quick kick with both feet forward he blurred from view and the wall exploded in all directions as he smashed through it. Just seconds before he exploded through the wall he shut his eyes and threw both arms in front of his entire form forcing a small bubble to form around his body as he shot like a bullet through the crumbling wall. As he appeared on the other side of the still crumbling wall, dust and debris still fell towards his body as he re-appeared for only a matter of a half second before kicking off down the halls. He could feel his spiritual pressure leave his body as the wall acted like a sponge absorbing all spirit energy from his body. It was fine, he only needed the energy in his body to push himself forward with Sinodo. As he traveled down an endless hall he quickly realized that he was lost within the Labyrinth, trapped in a door less hall. He continued to push himself forward with a single kick and blindingly blurred through the air. Focusing the air to in front of him to solidify he then kicked again but kicked off the air and with a hollow pop the air where eh stood exploded shaking the remaining dust off his body leaving a feint trail of dust behind him. Now all he had to do was wait until the security kicked in.
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 1:08 pm
Interesting. I'll approve. I'm just curious how you're going to play off that psychonic blast fairly, but I trust you know the rules of RP xd
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 1:37 pm
Yup, I don't plan on using it against just anybody.
I'll keep it against captain class characters.
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 7:07 pm
Alright. Well you may post in the Profile Thread now whee
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 7:08 pm
I posted it in the Profile Sub-Forum.
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