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 Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 8:56 pm
omg will you lay off
yes i know need to write correctly
but just show me whats wrong and i will fix it
other that the stuff that was wrong what ya think
because i will fix them
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 9:17 pm
Well then. Here goes nothing X3...
.:RP Example:.
Oh he'd done it this time. That was for sure. Try as he might Pamuchi couldn't slink back into his student chair any further as his face grew warmer and started to bleed heat. He thought that his teacher had been playing around with him when he said that it had needed a little more salt in it, figures that the statement was supposed to be taken seriously and not as a joke. Turning his head slightly and glanceing to the side he watched with bright orange eyes as a group of teachers tried their hardest to untangle a group of students from a batch of home made mission food clinging angrily to their clothing.
"Well, at least I'm exempt from cooking class..." the petite, thin boy mumbled as he twisted his red crystal earring that hung limply from one ear.
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 9:52 pm
ekariu omg will you lay off yes i know need to write correctly but just show me whats wrong and i will fix it other that the stuff that was wrong what ya think because i will fix them
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 9:53 pm
Pamuchi Well then. Here goes nothing X3... .:RP Example:. Oh he'd done it this time. That was for sure. Try as he might Pamuchi couldn't slink back into his student chair any further as his face grew warmer and started to bleed heat. He thought that his teacher had been playing around with him when he said that it had needed a little more salt in it, figures that the statement was supposed to be taken seriously and not as a joke. Turning his head slightly and glanceing to the side he watched with bright orange eyes as a group of teachers tried their hardest to untangle a group of students from a batch of home made mission food clinging angrily to their clothing.
"Well, at least I'm exempt from cooking class..." the petite, thin boy mumbled as he twisted his red crystal earring that hung limply from one ear.
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 10:15 pm
question i am very confused
by what do you mean?
i can be a little bit slow some times
rofl
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 10:34 pm
...uh...I did something wrong with my words....I meant IF you clean up that stuff you're free to go XD
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 10:40 pm
HEY i said i was slow right now it didnt sound like you said that
jeez so mean XD
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 11:03 pm
Just read things carefully and make sure you check all sentences and make sure they don't go on and change subjects for no reason. If you use commas, make sure they SHOULD and could be used in that spot. Use proper punctuation and grammar. And make sure you don't god modeXD
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 11:09 pm
god mode ? ooookkkkkkkkkkkkkkk any ways im going to start now
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 11:13 pm
Err....god mode...it's when you control someone else's character, or a character other than your own XD
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 11:20 pm
? that was a name i thought of at the time
plus i was listening to hikari from utada hikaru
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Posted: Sat Jan 26, 2008 11:40 pm
A heavy mist hung over the river and seemed like it was never going to let up. Dew had began to develop on the grass around him and small droplets of had begun to fall from the leaves above him. Ekariu Inuzaka seemed to enjoy this weather but this time he wasn't. He was sitting on the floor and leaning up against a tree, his dog Kiaharu slept on his lap and had his ear being scratched. Ekariu looked up and moved his hair from his face "people seem to jump to conclusions with me" he thought, he had a soft look on his face with a bit of melancholy. He looked down at Kiaharu, the little black dog was sound asleep. He sighed and threw his head against the tree trunk and slowly fell asleep.
He woke to find Kiaharu pulling on his hair "ow hey let go!!" he said. Ekariu looked around and noticed that the moon hung over now and the mist had let up.
"oh" he said pulled Kiaharu off his hair and stood up, Kiaharu barked happily, Ekariu then put Kiaharu in his hood. Kiaharu snuggled in the hood and quickly feel asleep. He sighed again and said "better get home i hope Kiba isn't awake" he said and walked off into the dark forest.
ok if ya see anymore DON'T BE SO MEAN NEXT TIME i don't like to be yelled at and i am sure you don't either
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Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 12:59 am
ekariu A heavy mist hung over the river and seemed like it was never going to let up. Dew had began to develop on the grass around him and small droplets of had begun to fall from the leaves above him. Ekariu Inuzaka seemed to enjoy this weather but this time he wasn't. He was sitting on the floor and leaning up against a tree, his dog Kiaharu slept on his lap and had his ear being scratched. Ekariu looked up and moved his hair from his face "people seem to jump to conclusions with me" he thought, he had a soft look on his face with a bit of melancholy. He looked down at Kiaharu, the little black dog was sound asleep. He sighed and threw his head against the tree trunk and slowly fell asleep. He woke to find Kiaharu pulling on his hair "ow hey let go!!" he said. Ekariu looked around and noticed that the moon hung over now and the mist had let up. "oh" he said pulled Kiaharu off his hair and stood up, Kiaharu barked happily, Ekariu then put Kiaharu in his hood. Kiaharu snuggled in the hood and quickly feel asleep. He sighed again and said "better get home i hope Kiba isn't awake" he said and walked off into the dark forest. ok if ya see anymore DON'T BE SO MEAN NEXT TIME i don't like to be yelled at and i am sure you don't either
EX.
"Well, you see," Saiya mumbled under her breath, "he was trying to kill the spider."
If you just do that, you'll be fine. ^_^ I'll Pass you now~ Good luck with RPing XD
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Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 10:15 am
Really??? No one has done a Ninja cooking class RP example before??? Oh wow!
Thanks for the pass. X3
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Posted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 1:36 pm
im soory but JESUS CHRIST FINALLY
OK I WILL KEEP THAT IN MIND
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