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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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 Posted: Sat Jun 11, 2011 9:43 am
iSix-kun Your Rank:Chuunin Name of Jutsu: Sound recollection Rank of Jutsu: C Range of Jutsu: The range of the otosan Guild-Wide? Anyone with the otosan, so guild wide. Jutsu's Element: Otosan Clan jutsu Description: THis technique is rather peculiar in that it actually recalls lost sounds. Every thing that makes a sound to an Otosan member leaves a ghost in their Otosan. Using chakra, A clan member can recall the "ghosts" left behind to replay a situation for up to an hour before his arrival. It would be like stepping outside of time itself and viewing the events as they happened without being affected by any of it. Am I correct in that this allows you to view events that happened before you entered the area? It doesn't seem plausible to me if so. Another option I'm getting from the way this is written, is that it allows you to memorize events you see, and replay them like a tape recorder. That is much more plausible, but doesn't seem to be the exact intention. This technique is written in a very confusing way. Hikaro_rin Hinote:Suna Ryuusei: a 100 foot ball boulder dropped on an opponent seems pretty strong for a C-rank jutsu doesnt it?Even if they survived they'd probably have to break out of the debris which would probably take a whole post... Raijin: The Hyoton jutsu you reference (Raikou Koori No Jutsu?) only does one thing, attacks. It also doesn't say that it is absolutely unstoppable.
If it can be dodged take out the bit that says it can't. Suna: It's 100ft before compaction. 50 afterwards, so a fifty foot ball dropped on an opponent. It's extremely easy to dodge, and would likely never be used on a human target, only monsters. I first used the technique as part of the Ichibi sand manipulation in the fight against Cloverfield, who was almost as big as the city, making him an easy target. A human sized target would have no trouble at all avoiding it if I decided for some reason to use it on them. It's meant for fighting things like summons and NPC monsters. Raijin: Quote: Raikou Koori No Jutsu [Lightning Ice Technique] Description: Forming a highly intensified ball of water infront of their hand, the Snow-nin begins to compact the ice into a perfectly formed icicle about the length of a kunai. When the kunai is formed the supercooled water behind it releases all of its pressure behind the kunai sending it at a speed so fast that it cannot be seen. The result of this pressure being released is a loud sonic boom. This kunai can travel for about four miles before it is stopped completely and cannot be redirected once fired. Needless to say that anything caught in it's path will be most unfortunate. The unstoppable in the other technique is implied by the "travel for about four miles before it is stopped completely" and "anything caught in it's path will be most unfortunate." The not being able to be dodged in Raijin is easily seen as a "If you're in front of it.". Adding something to show that though, or removing it completely, will only end up in people avoiding it without any effort even, whereas the technique is meant to be an end all trump card. As for Raikou Koori only doing one thing, it also only costs the equivalent of a single S rank jutsu, and has no charge time, where Raijin costs three, and can take up to 9 posts to charge assuming a lightning jutsu is used in every post. Without that assumption, who knows how long it could take. Of course, being the creator I obviously have multiple plans on how to make it work more easily, but sharing those would be bad business, and doesn't really apply to the technique itself. Convenient Link
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Posted: Sat Jun 11, 2011 6:55 pm
Well yeah that was the general plan, seeing events that happened before your arrival that is. But if that's too much than fine. This was just something I thought it would be cool to be able to do.
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Posted: Sat Jun 11, 2011 7:20 pm
Hinote: thanks for bringing my attention back to this thread, I admit I have forgotten it a bit. sweatdrop
I-Six: Hinote can work with you on this one hopefully.
Tim: I don't really see why the whips vanish after use. Not only would some of the uses you mentioned be pointless (binding someones hands with a whip that vanishes after use wouldn't do much more than stop them for a moment before it vanishes.) It seems like you should make it one use or ten posts. Honestly there's not much reason to limit that much either. Why not make it last as long as you need it and just make it clear that it is weak to fire and isn't all powerful?
Martin:
Presence detection:
Make it clear that the user can't instantly know everything about what they can sense. They might be able to know it's relative size, maybe get a sense of it's weight and be able to tell how many feet it is using but that is about it. You certainly can't determine the person's identity, clothes or even the exact number of toes they have.
Even for an Ushio if there are too much at once they will probably be a little overwhelmed a
This is really bordering on byakugan here, even if it is only limited to things that touch the surface you are using it on.
one chakra point every post it is used would be acceptable, though there is still a C-rank activation cost.
Advanced Clone jutsu: Why not make it a constant rank. We are trying to avoid jutsu that can have scale in rank. Also, I'm really hesitant to let you have regenerating bunshin. The kage bunshin takes most of your chakra and it still only takes one hit to destroy. Bunshin are fodder, you send them to battle to distract, tire or set your opponent up for your own ends. I can see bunshin that can regenerate once, that would be fairly acceptable. Twice is pushing it a lot and I probably wouldn't approve it for anything less than A-rank.
Hinote:
Suna Ryuusei: since it's a demon ability I think that is acceptable. go ahead and edit into the demon list. Remember that any other crew can dispute this, especially Hinote as the other jutsu acceptor.
Raijin: I discussed this with Luo and he seems to agree with me on the following points. No jutsu weapon or anything can be unstoppable, undodgeable, unbreakable etc. This is a solid rule in POTS and a perfectly understandable one at that. If there is a jutsu that breaks this rule then it needs to be edited not used as an excuse to break said rule again. Both of us think that this should be at least SS rank, and Lance adds that SS rank jutsu should have a much heavier price than just chakra, like a risk of losing one's own life.
Lance also brought up how the distance is insane, I don't remember if I brought that up before, I might have overlooked it, but it is certainly too much especially considering all the things the jutsu already does.
Honestly, unless you nerf it a lot this jutsu just seems OP and it breaks POTS rules. If I approved this not only would it ruin rp if it were used, but I'd get in trouble for playing favorites, you'd get in trouble as a crew member breaking rules, and everyone will want super jutsu approved as well. It may be true that any jutsu can be made to work, but this one needs a lot of nerfing to work.
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Posted: Mon Jun 13, 2011 5:48 am
Your Rank:
Genin
Name of Jutsu:
Advanced Clone Jutsu
Rank of Jutsu:
C
Range of Jutsu:
N/A
Guild-Wide?
Village Specific[Otogakure]
Jutsu's Element:
N/A
Description:
This technique was developed by a loyal shinobi native to Kariko Village though he never actually mastered the technique, sucumbing to a combination of tuberculosis and pneumonia. By manipulating a larger amount of chakra to create a clone, the user is able to give it the ability to repair itself from damage done against it. While the clone CANNOT repair their entire body, they can reconstruct a lost limb though the amount of damage that can repaired is based on the chakra applied. A direct attack cannot destroy this clone even if the damage is immediately fatal however if nothing is left of the clone it cannot repair itself. Otherwise the clone follows the same Bunshin rules.In essence, the one hit that it takes to destroy a clone will not dispell this clone. Instead it will take TWO strikes to dispell the clone.
Your Rank:
Genin
Name of Jutsu:
Presence Detection Technique
Rank of Jutsu:
C-Rank
Range of Jutsu:
40 meters
Guild-Wide?
Clan Specific[Ushio]
Jutsu's Element:
N/A
Description:
The orginal technique was known by both the Second and Fourth Hokage but was believed to be lost after the death of the latter. Later, a similar technique was developed by the Ushio Clan By placing their finger on any surface the user extended a small amount of chakra into the ground where it would spread, undetectable, like roots from a plant. In actuality, these 'roots' act like an exterior nervous system and pick up on distant vibrations allowing the user to detect any movement on the surface they are in contact with. Due to an Ushio's unparalled computing ability and the extensive connectivity between their nervous and chakuratory system they are able to determine what type of creature[whether it is humanoid, size, weight] within a few seconds though they cannot determine the identity of the creatures. They can only "sense" the individual, not actually see them. Like someone poking your arm when you are looking away. You can tell someone's poling you, and you can tell how hard, but you can't tell exactly what's poking you.
It has a C-ranked activation cost and a one chakra point per post upkeep.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 13, 2011 7:03 am
iSix-kun Well yeah that was the general plan, seeing events that happened before your arrival that is. But if that's too much than fine. This was just something I thought it would be cool to be able to do. Yeah, seeing events from before you arrived is a bit much I think. I would allow the other aspect though, if you wanted to edit it around to that instead. Reasoning being that seeing things prior to your arrival is a pretty massive form of metagaming, and people likely wouldn't like that at all. Not to mention time is completely relative in RP guilds, and what you claimed as an hour for yourself, could have been a week for the other RPC. Hikaro: All valid points, though I truly wish they weren't. I had thought of most of them myself, and I will admit I was somewhat using the Hyouton jutsu as an excuse to allow it, since this is basically a crystal/lightning version of that. With obvious differences of course. I'll check it over sometime and see what I can do to tame it down some. It'll still be a super jutsu, cause I like the way it's set up, but I'll tame down the range and such, cause, yeah, the range is ridiculous. Technically though, it's already an SSS jutsu, if you go by chakra cost. Just saying.
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Posted: Mon Jun 13, 2011 2:40 pm
Martin that looks sufficiently toned down. I will make sure we are allowing creation of village specific jutsu, but we probably are in which case it is approved.
For the sensor you should really say outright that they can only "sense" the individual rather than see them. Like someone poking your arm when you are looking away. You can tell someone's poling you, and you can tell how hard, but you can't tell exactly what's poking you.
I think this is your basic intent, but it should be clearer in case others learn it and don't understand it's use.
Also add that moving your finger breaks the jutsu.
Hinote: I like the idea of a charge-up jutsu, but as it is it is way too strong. A good starting point would be changing the "impossible"s to "difficult"
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Posted: Mon Jun 13, 2011 3:11 pm
Your Rank:Chuunin
Name of Jutsu: Sound Recollection
Rank of Jutsu: C (possibly B)
Range of Jutsu: The range of the Otosan.
Guild-Wide? Otosan Clan only
Jutsu's Element: Otosan Clan Jutsu
Description: This passive jutsu allows you to somewhat record and remember everything that happens in the range of your Otosan for five posts. Then using the ability to create sound based jutsu with the Otosan, you can play the events back around you as if you were living them again. It is useful when analyzing information after gathering it.
((How does this sound?))
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Posted: Sat Jun 18, 2011 7:14 pm
Your Rank: Genin, soon to be Chunin.
Name of Jutsu: Ninja Tool Summoning Theory
Rank of Jutsu: E
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Guild-Wide? No, if the technique wants to be learned he/she must go speak to Akura and get his approval before he teaches it.
Jutsu's Element: Universal
Description: Though not a technique, the Theory is the first thing that the user must learn before even dreaming of using any other Ninja Tool Summoning jutsu. The theory consists in a combination of Sealing and Summoning crossed over, during the posts it takes to understand the theory the user must understand that every ninja tool jutsu consists of three steps:
-Creating the weapon within the scroll.
-Summoning the Weapon.
-Creating the weapon once more.
Unlike other summoning jutsu, and sealing jutsu, the Ninja Tool Summon does not need the objects to exist before the technique, simply because the theory teaches the user to create the weapons with their chakra, and this is done by molding the chakra into it's form within a special scroll which materializes the user's chakra. In order to complete the theory studies the user must sign a contract in blood which states that they give up one of their elements in order to do the research of this style any further. [Note: These jutsu cannot be taught by NPC ]
Name of Jutsu: Ninja Tool Summoning: Class Add-ons
Rank of Jutsu: E-S
Range of Jutsu: N/a
Guild-Wide? No
Jutsu's Element: Varies
Description: As different users explore the style, they learn to use their innet abilities on the weapons as follows:
-Ninjutsu specialist: By raising the cost of their jutus by one rank, the user is able to coat the weapon in their elemental chakra.
-Weapon Specialist/Sealing Master: They are able to add an extra 15 weapons per jutsu or they are able to boost the damage of the jutsu by one rank.
-Genjutsu Specialist: They are able to make the catalyst for any genjutsu, regardless of the user's rank. This costs one extra rank in chakra.
-Assassin: By adding one chakra rank on to the technique, they are able to make the jutsu move faster, making some of the techniques suitable for an assassin, making the jutsu of this style perfect assassination tools.
Name of Jutsu: Ninja Tool Summoning: Kunai Summon
Rank of Jutsu: E
Range of Jutsu: Hand
Guild-Wide? No, Must seek out Akura, or anyone whom has the technique, in order to learn it.
Jutsu's Element: Universal
Description: After learning the theory the user will put it to practice. By taking out the scroll handed to them by the creator of the technique the user will put his/her hand on the scroll and allow their chakra to flow on it, molding it into the form of a kunai, after the chakra is flown within the scroll the user will summon the kunai on to their hand.
Note: This jutsu isn't affected by the Weapon Specialist/Sealing master Ability.
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 11:25 am
iSix: Sound recollection: While it may seem like common sense you need to add specifically that it only replays sound, and that the user must have heard the sound to replay it. (if he was asleep/not paying attention or just plain didn't hear something)
The recollection cannot replay sounds any clearer than the user already heard them. For instance someone says something while you are underwater, so when you replay it it would come out just as garbled.
C is probably good, B would be really expensive. (since it's passive, the chakra drain would only occur when you replay events)
iAkura: This really seems like it belongs in a clan or bloodline. (And it could create a rather interesting one as well)
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 11:26 am
Hikaro_rin these are guild-wide Name of Jutsu: Infestation Rank of Jutsu: A element: Bug Description: If used on a corpse, the special Aburame Jutsu Infestation can be used to set an effective trap. The Aburame must make contact with the target corpse, animal or human, for 3 turns. During these turns the Aburame is pouring bugs into the body to build a temporary nest. The aburame is also supplying a temporary source of chakra. The temporary nest allows the kikaichuu a home. In return, if a ninja attempts to reclaim the body the Kikaichuu burst through the body and attach to the target, draining chakra. The release is so forceful that the host is rendered unrecognizable. Name of Jutsu: Insect nuisance Rank of Jutsu: D element: Bug Range: 1 yard around user Requires:Must Know bug gathering technique Description: The bug-user forms chakra the same as the bug gathering technique. They then tap a target, and the chakra forms a light web on the area about 3 inches in diameter. It takes the form of a normal spiderweb, though it is very light and hard to see. It draws nearby bugs to the target for 5 posts. This causes no more damage than a several bugbites, and makes the targets movement more limited. Someone who is observant enough, or familiar with bugs could probably notice the behavior of the bugs and use them to find the target. Web cannot be easily removed without water. If removed, the bugs will simply circle wherever the web is.
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 9:58 pm
Hikaro_rin iSix: Sound recollection: While it may seem like common sense you need to add specifically that it only replays sound, and that the user must have heard the sound to replay it. (if he was asleep/not paying attention or just plain didn't hear something) The recollection cannot replay sounds any clearer than the user already heard them. For instance someone says something while you are underwater, so when you replay it it would come out just as garbled. C is probably good, B would be really expensive. (since it's passive, the chakra drain would only occur when you replay events) iAkura: This really seems like it belongs in a clan or bloodline. (And it could create a rather interesting one as well) Well have you read the clan, it doesn't really work to the effect of "I wasn't paying attention so I didn't hear it." Even underwater he'd hear it all pretty clearly. And no while asleep it wouldn't work. It would only affect things he heard. It would be like if you could replay everything you saw.
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Posted: Sun Jun 19, 2011 11:30 pm
I kinda get that this kinda thing should be common sense. Still common sense isn't, so it's just to avoid unusual circumstances. Though all of that can probably just be summed up by adding "As heard by the user" into the description.
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Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 9:38 am
Hikaro_rin iAkura: This really seems like it belongs in a clan or bloodline. (And it could create a rather interesting one as well) Thing is I don't want it to be a Bloodline, I want everyone whom my Rpc deems worth to learn these jutsu : /
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Posted: Thu Jun 23, 2011 11:53 am
Name of Jutsu: Ninja Tool Summoning Theory
Rank of Jutsu: E
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Guild-Wide? No, if the technique wants to be learned he/she must go speak to Akura and get his approval before he teaches it.
Jutsu's Element: Universal
Description: Though not a technique, the Theory is the first thing that the user must learn before even dreaming of using any other Ninja Tool Summoning jutsu. The theory consists in a combination of Sealing and Summoning crossed over, during the posts it takes to understand the theory the user must understand that every ninja tool jutsu consists of three steps:
-Creating the weapon within the scroll.
-Summoning the Weapon.
-Creating the weapon once more.
Unlike other summoning jutsu, and sealing jutsu, the Ninja Tool Summon does not need the objects to exist before the technique, simply because the theory teaches the user to create the weapons with their chakra, and this is done by molding the chakra into it's form within a special scroll which materializes the user's chakra. In order to complete the theory studies the user must sign a contract in blood which states that they give up one of their elements in order to do the research of this style any further. [Note: These jutsu cannot be taught by NPC ]
Name of Jutsu: Ninja Tool Summoning: Class Add-ons
Rank of Jutsu: E-S
Range of Jutsu: N/a
Guild-Wide? No
Jutsu's Element: Varies
Description: As different users explore the style, they learn to use their innet abilities on the weapons as follows:
-Ninjutsu specialist: By raising the cost of their jutus by one rank, the user is able to coat the weapon in their elemental chakra.
-Weapon Specialist/Sealing Master: They are able to add an extra 15 weapons per jutsu or they are able to boost the damage of the jutsu by one rank.
-Genjutsu Specialist: They are able to make the catalyst for any genjutsu, regardless of the user's rank. This costs one extra rank in chakra.
-Assassin: By adding one chakra rank on to the technique, they are able to make the jutsu move faster, making some of the techniques suitable for an assassin, making the jutsu of this style perfect assassination tools.
Name of Jutsu: Ninja Tool Summoning: Kunai Summon
Rank of Jutsu: E
Range of Jutsu: Hand
Guild-Wide? No, Must seek out Akura, or anyone whom has the technique, in order to learn it.
Jutsu's Element: Universal
Description: After learning the theory the user will put it to practice. By taking out the scroll handed to them by the creator of the technique the user will put his/her hand on the scroll and allow their chakra to flow on it, molding it into the form of a kunai, after the chakra is flown within the scroll the user will summon the kunai on to their hand.
Note: This jutsu isn't affected by the Weapon Specialist/Sealing master Ability.
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Your Rank: Genin
Name of Jutsu: None Explosive Clay
Rank of Jutsu: D
Range of Jutsu: N/a
Guild-Wide? No
Jutsu's Element: Chakra mouth bloodline jutsu
Description: This is a special technique that allows the member of the chakra mouth clan to use their clan and cancel the explosives properties, allowing the user to maintain none explosive versions of their explosive clay.
Name of Jutsu: Clay Formation: Clay Dragon Blast
Rank of Jutsu: C
Range of Jutsu: 20 feet
Guild-Wide? No
Jutsu's Element: Chakra mouth
Description: After making a dragon out of clay, Akura will make an extension on the dragon's tail, allowing the dragon to take the clay into it's body and then firing it toward it's target. The dragon fires up to three clumps of clay that explode within proximity of the target.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jun 29, 2011 9:40 pm
@Hikaro: Infestation looks fine to me. Horribly cruel, but fine. Approved.
Nuisance on the other hand, looks like you may have been half asleep while writing it? Please edit it to be a bit more legible. I get the basic idea, but it's difficult to understand fully.
@Akura: As Hikaro already said, the weapon summoning jutsu look like they should be part of a clan, if not the very basis for one. Pin point particularly, if I were to link it to an existing clan.
None Explosive Clay: First of all, you're looking for the word "Non". Besides that, I'm seeing this as defusing your own explosives, correct? If so, and assuming it can't be used on another's bombs, Approved.
Dragon: Isn't this one of Deidara's jutsu? We don't have it already?
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