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 Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 2:07 pm
Seaphron @Zen- Added and thanks wink
@Betman- The will eventually get longer, if you noticed CTG or any other writings I have done, they always begin small and grow larger.
@Sauvie- You really didn't see that coming? XD Wow I thought that was an obvious choice, oh well. You'll see who took over Trenn's place soon.
@Fish- Of course didn't portray that to well sweatdrop Think about the state you are in though at this point you aren't exactly thinking straight.
@Demonix- XD you know what ok sure I was second in command there but I thought I was.... too Sauvie to lead I thought you would just send over a person from another base sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 2:24 pm
@Fish -It's cool, my fault XD
@Godstone - Glad you liked it.
@Sauvie - Ah, well you are to Sauvie but you are leading. What you suggested is what has happend with SHQ though.
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 7:24 pm
biggrin great second chapter, Seaphron. seemed shorter than most of your other ones, but it was really good. biggrin I like the description of Maul. very awesome.
and the idea that they'll actually be able to say goodbye is a really nice one. =)
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 12:22 am
Chapter 3 Added.
Thanks Koosei, Glad you liked the description and hope you like the next chapter, It was shorter than most of them. Glad you caught that (if i am thinking what you are anyway), cause that is going to happen.
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 7:19 am
Nice chapter Seaphron, it was a little short but it was pretty descriptive in what has been happening over the five years after the wedding and nice touch there with the kids often produce comic relief. The Bodewyn part was unnescecary but I still liked it an the fact that it is probably just a humorous way to move into a plot element. all in all it is a pretty good chapter even if short
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 7:20 am
Sauvie's comments pretty much cover it. I just want some action. D= Oh well, I'm sure you'll get to it.
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 7:22 am
o.o cool chapter ...... but ... o.o the idea of ME having kids .... *twitches slightly* that's kinda creepy. gonk I didn't want to think about that yet!!!
whee they ARE cute though! ^_^ love the names too. very awesome.
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 8:28 am
ninja awesome
>_>
Koosei's children have .. very familiar sounding names =P
xd
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Draken [The.Spork.Ninja.]
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:01 am
@Sauvie - Thanks, beileve it or not that is the longest chapter so far, I think who knows I could be wrong. The Bodewyn part may seem unnesceray now just keep in mind later on it will of slight importance.
@Betman - Yup, dont worry action is coming soon.
@Koosei - XD Sorry for causing you to think about that, but I am glad you like them.
@Draken - Yup. rofl
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:03 am
I was thinking that it would have future importance, and it is the longest...wow
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:06 am
Yeah it leads to what Yofu has been up to and a little back sight there. My chapters always begin small and grow bigger. I can tell you right now that chapter four is bigger than chapter three and I am not done writing it yet.
Also I need a choice, choose one or two please.
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SESauvie generated a random number between
1 and 2 ...
1!
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:10 am
ok I choose...1
Could you read over my prologue?
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:13 am
Thanks, and sure thing PM it to me whenever you are ready.
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 9:20 am
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Posted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 1:26 pm
Not bad. Not too in depth, but it's just the beginning. I can now see why exactly it is called Next Life. When they said "Uncle Fish," I thought Michalia was having kids! Let's just hope for no little Fish Juniors.
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