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 Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 9:25 am
blah...stupid mods...take forever to do anything
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 9:26 am
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 3:24 pm
Keebee I'm trying to be really good and not buy this magical girl stuff... cause I'm a complete fangirl for it. >.<; Must be good. Must be good. No more cashing out for pixels. EDIT: Sold some old letters and went ahead and got it. I couldn't help it! I like the clusterf*ck though. Rawr! I need to read these new chapters o___O; But I've been bad and have been playing on Subeta more. Bad bad bad. Have a headache. @Neko: I loves you Neko! And you can still call Lone master -evilwink- "Because you are Master, Master!" @Ark: Oh noes! Report it? I guess? Bonne chance!
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 3:30 pm
The_Legendary_Lonewolf Yeah. I feel I should really work on this so I can someday make something of this story. Lonewolf's Dragoons may be a legend to us, but I want to make it a legend to the world. I even talked with one of my regular customers who is an expert at drawing and asked him if he could learn how to animate with his drawings so he could make me an AMV based on Lonewolf's Dragoons using the song in my profile. I offered him up to $200 dollars to do it. He said he'd see what he can do, so I don't know if he really will come through or not. Despite that, I already have the entire AMV planned out in my head, I just need someone who knows how to draw anime as well as animate. Personally, I think the story of Lonewolf's Dragoons would be far better as a video game then anything else. Or I might sell my story to a Japanese animator to make an actual anime. I really have no idea where I'm going with this, or what I will do with it, but I just feel that it is something I should work on. LWD's legacy truly means a lot to me and I want to share it with everyone out there who enjoys anime/fantasy. Will the world really like my story? I honestly don't know. My co-worker who I had lended a printed copy of the story to, had lost my story. She left it in her bf's room and he threw it away. She barely got to chapter 3, so she didn't even scratch the surface of the story and printing out my story was a major hassle since it was 58 pages typed at the time. It's probably in the 60's now. No way I'll be able to print out another copy at home. And there are no libraries around here that have internet/printers. So I'm pretty much screwed... She did, however, offer to draw certain characters from the story for me. So we'll see how that turns out. Honestly though? I have never been this passionate about anything in my entire life. So I feel I should really do something with this.
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Ocarina dude Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 5:29 pm
*walks into chatterbox and calapses on floor*
So... many... people! Stupid... President's day... weekend. Damn tourists... bleh. Okay. I'll read Lonewolf's latest chapter and review it. Then I'll make dcinner, eat, see if anyone is on, if not I'll play a video game and go to bed late because I may have work tomorrow, but I don't have school, and work doesn't start til the afternoon, so the morning is mine to sleep in. This is my plan. Now let's get to it!
*Mentally scolds self for over usage of commas*
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 5:56 pm
Let's get this Review on!
Chapter 22 review.
Well, I'll say this is a rather short chapter but omg what a cliffhanger. If you're like me and came in relitively later on in the guild or are otherwise unaware of some of the pass storyline, then you are going to be left wondering. I'm not sure if saying a chapter is a cliffhanger is a spoiler or not. Hmm? Eitherway, it'll leave you grabbed your moniter screaming, "Wha!?! Who? What? How? Hurry and put up the next chapter!" As for drama, well... Shadowkite, please brace yourself. I hope you read my reviews before reading Lonewolf's book, I try to give a decent warning on length, content, and such. This chapter while short is quite dramatic. Not nearly as dramatic as some of the past scenes with Stephanie, but then again, it's hard to top those. Still, be careful reading this chapter. I was suprized how much Lonewolf crammed into such a short chapter. I really am. I met pretty much all my different ratings. This chapter maybe small, but it packs a punch. Let's finish up with my individual ratings and you can get on with the book.
Action: 4/5
Drama: 5/5
Humor: 1/5
Detail: 3.5/5
Captivity: 5/5
Overall rating: 4/5 (I rounded it up for leaving me craving the next chapter)
*Side note: Look out for Lonewolf Dragon Book Review Thread Coming up soon. I'll actually be reviewing all the chapters. Including the ones before I started this new hobby. It may take awhile, But I promise to review each and every chapter. Keep an eye out for it.*
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Ocarina dude Vice Captain
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The_Legendary_Lonewolf Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 9:45 pm
I plan on going back and editing all the other older chapters because I had noticed how daunting the paragraphs are. I'm eventually going to cut the enormous paragraphs into segments.
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 9:48 pm
Looks like we both have a work cut out for us. But I'm sure it'll be worth it. I've got your back if you've got mine. Let's do this.
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Ocarina dude Vice Captain
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The_Legendary_Lonewolf Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 10:46 pm
Ok, I fixed the entire first page of my book's thread. I changed a few things to have it make more sense and fixed a few typos.
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 10:48 pm
and I finished adding reviews, and room for early chapter reviews, so everything will be in order. ugh, good thing I don't have school tomorrow.
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Ocarina dude Vice Captain
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The_Legendary_Lonewolf Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:00 pm
I fixed chapter 7 and gave Majik and Aerial last names since I felt they needed last names. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 12:30 am
The_Legendary_Lonewolf I fixed chapter 7 and gave Majik and Aerial last names since I felt they needed last names. 3nodding
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The_Legendary_Lonewolf Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 8:26 am
Thanks Neko, but I'd like to go back and edit myself so I can add some more detail to the story as I edit. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 8:29 am
good idea. please keep me updated on your edits, as I will start rating them after you finish editting, I started. Reviewing the first 3 chapters, just to get started. Keep me informed on your edits, as my reviews will change due to them. out of curiousity, where'd you come up with Aerial and Majik's last names?
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Ocarina dude Vice Captain
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The_Legendary_Lonewolf Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 1:29 pm
Honestly? I just went with the first name that came to the top of my head for Majik. For Aerial I figured his name sounded italian so I came up with an italian name.
So far I editted chapter 1-7. Though I'm going to go back and edit the first few chapters to add more detail and such whenever I get the time.
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