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 Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 3:38 pm
Next installment, please! heart
Damn. I wonder who is following NOW???
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 4:04 am
Next installment: installed.
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 5:38 am
"We have ways of making you talk."
Heh. Good update, Gen. It's nice to finally see Kyraa's motivation for trailing my little entourage. There's a lot more character development in just this chapter alone, and your dialogue is getting better, too.
I hope you keep at it, regardless that you aren't getting enough comments. You are still getting feedback.
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 6:25 am
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 6:26 am
RAWK. I'm sad I missed reading it right as you posted, but that's what I get for sleeping. sweatdrop
I'm glad to find that Raa's- err, Kyraa's hunting the Legion for a specific purpose as well. This chapter was an interesting reverse of roles for them (punctuated nicely by Kyraa's first conscious thoughts), and it Kyraa's thoughts before about being the hunted instead of the hunter make sense now.
Of course, now I'm daydreaming about people who wear red. ^^ And eee Legion!Rue is my hero. Ine. heart
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 8:45 am
Oooh. Plot advancement, conversational dialog, introduction of disparate groups, and layers of intrigue. I love it.
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 8:49 am
"No 'and then'!" Damn, I've seen "Dude, Where's My Car?" too many times! sweatdrop But really... excellent job, Gendou!!! That Rue's one scary b***h!!! wink heart
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 12:02 pm
Rue is scaring me! Don't hurt me, Miss Rue! ...okay, maybe a little... gonk crying heart heart heart
So there's a prediction and a future now. And the Kyramazons Kamrin have a motivation instead of just randomly stalking us. And there's more plot and whatnot. And Arcadian is super sexy. And I STILL WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS~! ;_; *comments extra much so Mr. Gendou doesn't run out of ideas?*
I wonder what I'm gonna do when I wake up. 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 4:54 pm
Alrighty. Let's try something new!
Hear Kyraa's thoughts on the story as she reads it. whee
~Kamrin tribe? Was that intentional, or just coincidental genius?
~ Ohmymodrueisscary crying She's gonna get me, and burn down my village! Although she's quite smart to figure out I'm a Kyramazon and use her feminine clever as seen fit.
~I'm surpised I still had the nerve to spit at her, actually. Go me.
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 7:40 pm
Ooh, I need to do an as-I-read-it commentary next time. Most of the time I read the chapter and like it a lot, but have absolutely nothing to say. And it's not a problem with the story, it's just a problem with me. Maybe then I'll have more useful comments. biggrin
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Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 11:14 pm
Moryera Ooh, I need to do an as-I-read-it commentary next time. Most of the time I read the chapter and like it a lot, but have absolutely nothing to say. And it's not a problem with the story, it's just a problem with me. Maybe then I'll have more useful comments. biggrin You could do a vocal commentary. Useful for catching *snerks* and making quick comments.
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Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2005 11:26 am
Westonian Moryera Ooh, I need to do an as-I-read-it commentary next time. Most of the time I read the chapter and like it a lot, but have absolutely nothing to say. And it's not a problem with the story, it's just a problem with me. Maybe then I'll have more useful comments. biggrin You could do a vocal commentary. Useful for catching *snerks* and making quick comments. Great plan, wise guy. How am I gonna get the sound files onto the thread? I've got nowhere to put them. And since when do I snerk? xd
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Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2005 7:48 pm
Rue seems like a very frightening sort of person, I don't want to go near her. gonk She'd eat people alive!
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Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2005 8:22 pm
Lasreaine Rue seems like a very frightening sort of person, I don't want to go near her. gonk She'd eat people alive! *__* <3 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Jul 10, 2005 3:43 am
New chapter up. More talking, less fighting. Sorry.
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