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zsorry for my crappy account sweatdrop . I just liked starwars alot and thought that this would be a good place to come to.Thanks for the Ideas on me redoing it later on so it will be better. How do i get to use a lightsaber later on though?

*nods* And you took constructive criticisms a point in your favor. This is a good place to come to and if you want to improve your roleplay skills here is a good place to be. You either have to go to the jedi temple, or the imperial fleet and be trained and when whoever guides your training thinks your ready you can get a lightsaber. It WILL take awhile though so don't be expecting one very soon. I look forward to seeing your improved app~~~ Merissa

hey sepheroth2000 said i did okay.

No.... Sephi said, and I quote



Does that sound good to you? He told you IT STINKS, and not only that but he gave you subtle hints about capitalization and punctuation and you didn't even listen to him about that. So no. he didn't say you "did okay' in fact he said the exact opposite. The answer is still that your application is unacceptable ~~~ Merissa

Gaia Name: William15
Character Name: Nicolas
Gender: Male
Age: 24
Race: Human
Character Description: Short Sturdy young man blonde hair, green eyes, 5"8, 125lbs, muscular build. Left hand is a prostect and is actually robotic.

Home Planet: Born on Imperailst ship.
Starting Planet: Starting at the imperalist ship
Relations: Nicolas came from a long line of Sith jedi, when he was about 14 the ship he was on veses I223 was destroyed he and a few other crewmen narrowly escaped the ship, his two parents and older brother however werent so lucky as to escape however. He swore to himself that he would revenge his fallen family. Now he works for the imperalists as an assasin or mercaniare to whoever might pay the most. His hate fuels his desire for power.

Alignment: Imperial
Occupation: Jedi, Bounty Hunter
Skills razz iloting, Agility, Stealth
Weapons: single bladed red lightsaber
Ship: A smaller vehicle heavily reinforced with armor and armed to the teeth in weaponry capable of light speed.
Personal Belongings: prostectic hand, silver ring

Roleplay Sample: (wakes to find himself in a cold sweat} "what just happended" he said then realized that it was a dream "was it a dream or something else" (as he recalled his previous dream of encountering jedi sent to destroy him, he thought to himself he'd sort it out in the morning and drifted back to sleep)


Hmmmm. Well your spelling was moderately bad, but your roleplay sample was absolutely horrendous. That isn't a roleplay sample. That's a few sentences tacked togethor. It's obvious you put almost no effort into this. Your character is basically ok (except that it's IMPERIALS not imperialists) however based on your roleplay sample, this application is not Acceptable. Try adding more description, more feeling, seperation for dialogue. In essence, do it again, but do it better. ~~~~ Merissa

Gaia Name: Padme..Amidala
Character Name: Shaak Tenn
Gender: Female
Age: 25
Race: Togruta
Character Description: She has the traits of any of the other Togruta. She has red skin with white circles around her eyes. She has horns on the top of her head and 3 zebra like stripped head tails. She stands about 5 feet and has black eyes.


Home Planet: Shili
Starting Planet: Coruscant.
Relations: None. Her entire family was wiped out shortly after she was taken to be a Jedi.
Character History When she was at a young age a group of Jedi showed up to her home. It was then she learned that she was 'force sensitive'. The Jedi took her back to the council who, in turn, put her with the other younglings. It was a year after she found out that her family had been brutally murdered. She vowed revenge on whom ever had done it and this pressured her to work her hardest to become a Jedi Master.

Alignment: Republic
Occupation Jedi
Skills: Force sensitive, weak healing powers, and

Weapons: A blue Lightsaber
Ship Starfighter.
Personal Belongings: A small pendant her mother had given her before she left for her training as well as a R4 droid.

Roleplay Sample

Shaak Tenn walked towards the council room in a huff. Her training for that day had ended badly. One of the droids she had been sparing had malfunctioned and she ended up recieving a blow to her upper arm. A bit of blood trickled down her arm and it burned a bit, but she dismissed the pain. Entering the room she looked around. It was completley empty.
"Hello?" She called out. "I thought we had a meeting?" She added.
She was a newly elected council member and took her position seriously.
"Master Yoda? Anyone?" She called.
Turning and walking out she walked throught the Temple in search of another one of the council members. Seeing a few Padawans running through the Temple she gave a small smile.
"Be careful young ones." She said as they passed her.
A few moments later she saw their masters run by in pursuit of them.
The joys of being a young Padawan. She thought to herself as she kept walking.

((I hope the Rp example was long enough.. sweatdrop Thankies))


The rolepaly sample was long enough. A few points though. This is taking place a hundred years or more after the destruction of the second death star. Just keep that in mind (you can't know master yoda) Also i would include more description in your posts, specifically your roleplay. Just an idea. You've got the rank of initiate. Congratulations, you're Accepted!~~~~ Merissa

Gaia Name: lilbratassassin
Character Name: Aezon
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Race: Human
Character Description: Short spiked hair with the traditional Padawan braid. His tunic is a metalic black color which is covered by his pitch black cloak. His boots are knee high but hidden in his tunic. A scar that runs down his eye brow was from an incident when he was still a young child. His mechanic led is covered by a special boot made with the same metalic material made from his tunic.

Home Planet: Dantooine
Starting Planet: Coruscant
Relations: His astromech droid, R5-G8
Character History Aezon was orphaned when he was just a young boy. The Jedi Council in Dantooine decided to adopt him and even though he was over the age limit, he was very strong in the force. Master Morex had trained him in the Jedi way until his untimely death. Master Morex was the only father and mentor he had. Aezon's training had ended early but he was well trained in the force. He had many skills and one of those skills earned him his companion droid R5-G8. Aezon finally found a Master who completed his training going by the name Kor Bagdam. But after his training was completed, Master Bagdam had vanished. He now aids the Republic to destroy the Sith once and for all.

Alignment: Republic
Occupation Jedi
Skills: Force Sensitivity

Weapons: Red Dual-Bladed Lightsaber
Ship The Frozen Falcon
Personal Belongings: The lightsaber from the very first Sith Apprentice he had slain.

Roleplay Sample

As the wind blew his cloak fluttered while he stood near the landing platform in Tatooine. His Master whould arrive shortly and Aezon had very astonishing news. Darth Melex had been captured. The Jedi plan on interrogating the Sith Lord of his new intentions. Aezon spotted his ship the Frozen Falcon coming into Coruscant and landing on an unfamiliar landing strip. To his surprise his Master was not the first being to exit the mighty ship. But a Sith followed by his Master.
"Master what is the meaning of this?" Aezon had shouted.

Through his training his Master always lectured him on turning to the Dark Side and how it could corrupt you. But Aezon had never expected that his own Master, would turn to the Dark Side. "My apprentice," whispered Master Devon "Join me, Join the Dark Side. I have seen the truth. The Republic is a lie, they want power to themselves they are the enemy!" Master Devon had ignited his lightsaber and threatened to kill Aezon."Forgive me my Master. For I am a servant of the light, as you once were. I will never serve a Sith Lord. My Master there is still good in you, you can turn back now and leave the Dark Side!." Aezon had not ignited his lightsaber knowing that his Master had not fully turned to the Dark Side.

"Then you shall die!" Master Devon was no more. He was now a Sith, he was now Darth Devon. Darth Devon charged at Aezon with his lightsaber and engaged in battle. "Then your fate is set." Aezon muttered as he igniteed his lightsaber and clashed with his former master.


Not Accepted. Read the storyline. Not only are we over a hundred years in the future from the destruction of the second deathstar, you can't be taught by luke skywalker, or know anyone from the original series. You need to change the history of your character. The roleplay isn't bad, though i suggest making dialogue a different color than actions and thoughts. (I also reccoment leaving the font it's normal size) Fix your history and then put a note below this and I'll check your application again. ~~~~ Merissa

I hope that works and if not I'll be glad to fix it up again....

It's not bad, but your character will start at the level of padawan. so you won't have been able to complete your training (or even come close yet). But aside from that it's perfect. Thank you for changing the dialogue. It's so much easier to read! ^_^ Accepted!~~~ Merissa

Gaia Name: Demonic Expert
Character Name: Rik Faa
Gender: Male
Age: 47
Race: Human
Character Description: Rik stands at a average 5'11 and weighs at 140lbs, he is the owner of some very scruffy black hair and a pair of blue eyes, he is a very kind and wise man and he would prefer a calm and still moment then anything anybody could offer.

Home Planet: Coruscant
Starting Planet: Coruscant
Relations: A Mum and Dad, somewhere.
Character History: As a young boy Rik was always shy and seamed to spend most indoors reading or playing games some as dejarek, or other mental pass times. After being found to be force sensitive Rik was whisked away from his parants, parants he never remembers. When he became part of the Jedi order his shyness seamed to melt away in this enviroment, in fact Rik seamed to flourish like the late blossem on the tree. As he made his way through life and his training he began to see a side of himself that was calm and peaceful.
Alignment: the Republic
Occupation Jedi
Skills: Wisdom and Patience

Weapons: Single Green lightsaber (If Knight or above)
Ship He has no ship.
Personal Belongings: He has nothing personal apart from his cloths.

Role-play Sample

-This was taken from a role-play am doing, if you require a Star Wars themed role-play sample tell me.-

High above the white bleak landscape Kay'Dor flew, his wings outstretched, feathers shining in the morning suns glare, the cold wind biting into him as he flew. Slowly he scanned the ground hoping to find a safe refuge nearby, because he had heard many tales of the racist attitude of the town nearby. Looking down his eyes focusing on the opening of a cave Kay'Dor made a slow decent as to get a better look at the cave, it looked big enough for him and it seamed safe enough to glide down into the cave and settle down maybe, but his hawk eyes picked out something in the gloom but he just passed it off fatigue.

Lower and lower he went until he was inside the cave and he began to slow until he had stopped some 8 feet inside the cave, he could see embers of a fire died and he then pulled his wings in and moved to the side of the cave and snuggled down hoping to not be noticed if it was a group of humans from the nearby town.

Be a bit careful on your spelling. It seems when you're in a hurry you make mistakes, so just be careful there. It's a decent application. Nothing great, nothing horrible. You get the level of initiate. Accepted! ~~~~ Merissa

Gaia Name: Reyo Notama
Name: Reyo
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Race: Human
Description: My picture at the bottom that Says Jedi Master Reyo
Home Planet: Telos
Starting planet: Coruscant
Relations: Dead by Sith
History: unknown
Alignment: Jedi
Occupation: Jedi (anyone will do)
Skill: Speed, strenght, the usual force powers
Weapons: Dual Lightsabers 1 blue, 1 green
Ship: Jedi Starfighter
Personal Belongings: none

Roleplay Sample:
:Reyo walked the Jedi Temple wandering weither or not he should go talk to the council: It would be best to ask them if i can go to Telos but i don't know i don't want to go i might find something their that might anger me :Reyo decided to go into the council's chambers and ask them if he could go back to Telos:

:Reyo jumped down off the ledge and cut threw three sith: then looked to the right and seen that the Sith Master had cut down 6 of his young padawns: You'll pay for that :Reyo then charged at the Sith Master and ingaged him in a battle:

":Both Reyo's lightsabers and the Dark Jedi Masters lightsabers collided they blocked and attacked each other neither one giving up the fight continued with no winner still they both kept blocking and attacking each other:"

": Still the battle goes one Reyo attacked the Dark Jedi Master Blocked, the Dark Jedi Master Attacked Reyo Block the battle still knew no end Reyo was getting tired the Dark Jedi Master could see it and wait for his time to attack and end it for the young Jedi Master but Reyo still didn't give in knowing he was getting tired compared to his enemy:"

"Dark Jedi Master start talking to Reyo while they were fighting" You Jedi Master your strong in the force come join the Dark side and know unlimited power or die here

:Reyo answered: No i will not Join the Dark Side for power i protect everyone for peace in thats how its going to stay Dark Jedi

"The Dark Jedi Master answered" Well so be it then Young Jedi Master you will die here

": Then the Battle continued to go on Reyo attacked the Dark Jedi Master Blocked, the Dark Jedi Master attacked Reyo blocked:"

thats from my forum that i have going right now


This looks long enough, but the quality.., I will leave it to one of the other mods ^^ -Mr. M


Enter one of the other mods. Namely me. Length doesn't always mean quality, and that stands true in this application. That roleplay sample is long, and the font color for dialogue is different, but the content of the sample is horrendous "I swing he block, he attacks i block" BAD!! and the rest of the character you barely touched.
Do it again but do it better.~~~~ Merissa

Gaia Name: Vanair
Character Name: Lor Syone
Gender: Female
Age: 26
Race: Human and Clawdite. Clawdites are a race of shapeshifters who can manipulate their appearence but cannot change their mass.
Character Description: Lor Syone is a beautiful woman, which in her line of work is a positive attribute. She has long flowing black hair, about waist length that frames her moderately pale face.
Her eyes are a velvetty green, piercing and powerful like the rest of her rather feminine frame.
Dressed mostly in ceremonial garb she tends to favour the colours black and green in her dress of robes and gowns. All ceremonial in nature.
(Picture just for fun! )

Home Planet: Wanderer as a child but her roots take her back to Zolan, the Clawdites native planet.
Starting Planet: Coruscant, the seat of government at the heart of the Galaxy.
Relations: Her father was her only close relation for several years, her mother and brother having died in an accident when Lor was rather young. Her father, Kovorn Syone, was a noted mechanic and pilot as well as a poitician of sorts on Zolan.
Lor lived her with father until he passed away, his death moderately unexpected at the hands of bounty hunters.
Syone has distant relatives on Zolan but she tends to stay away from that part of her history, Lor somewhat ashamed of her Clawdite blood.
Character History Lor grew up as a traveller. Her mother piloted a ship that would take medical supplies from planet to planet. She was employed by the leading medical facility on Coruscant for several years before coming private.
Unfortunetly, when Lor was a young girl she and her mother parted, her elder brother assisting his mother on a mission. She stayed with Friends on Corusent but after two weeks they received news her family was killed in a raid on the vessel.
Fourteen years old and alone Lor went to live with her half Clawdite father, Kovorn.
There she learned a history of her blood, talents with mechanics and a growing passion for politics. She aided her father in governing a small community based at a starport on Zolan for serveal years until she was 20.
He passed away in an accident and Lor was left alone on a world she'd never really loved.
Taking a ship and what little she had of her own Lor travelled to the Heart of the Galaxy to begin her life as a politician, a Delegate for the New Republic.
She has soared through the ranks and resided on the planet only when she isn't to travel to outer worlds, bringing the promise of a New life to places untouched by the Republic.

Alignment: Republic
Occupation Lor is a Replublic delegate. She represents the New-Republics interests on planets and colonies where there is minimal support or enforcement. Her 'presence' is not military or malicious is any way, but supportive and contructive towards uniting more peoples into the New Republic.
Skills: Lor, if anything, is a persuader and a manipulator. She uses words to the best of her ability to get what she intends to have. Her intelligence exceeds that of most and her knowledge of the force is stunning for a one who cannot manipulate said power.
But that's not where it ends. Lor is a mechanic like her father, a scientist and a linguist. Though unfortunetly Piloting is not one of her better skills, merely mediocre and acceptable.
A marksman of note on a few planets she travelled to with mother gave Lor a reputation as a child prodigy until she lay down her weapons when taking up her position as a Delegate.

Weapons: Your a-typical blaster. But Lor was also trained in Wookie Bowcaster's, a handy weapon that she takes pride in being able to master.
Ship V-19 Torrent StarFighter 26 meter wide, 6 meters long, 9 meters tall (when in flight). The ship was her fathers, procurred as a gift many years ago.
Made by Slayn & Korpil, the craft has exceptional speed and maneuverability. The only downfall is that it took years of training for Lor to be able to use the craft and it is now the only vessel she really can pilot with moderate profficiancy.
An added bonus Republic technicians later added a Class-1 hyperdrive to equip the vessel for escort missions and is equiped with Blaster cannons and concussion missiles, though to this day Lor has had no need for them.
Personal Belongings: Lor keeps very few things with her save the essentials. She carries her mothes locket, a picture of her brother and herself inside. Lor also has a small clawdite figurine. It shapeshifts from a biped to a quodroped of legend, a token given to her by her father a few weeks before he died.

Roleplay Sample

"That is Rediculous! Where are your findings to support such an accusation?!" Lor's commanding voice towered over the other men in the room. They seemed shocked at this outburst when the accusation had been made.
"You mean to tell me Delegate Syone you have no knowledge of such an offence?" Syone stood from her seat, her green and black gown silently swaying behind her as the chair was skid back across the metalic floor.

Silence echoed in the conference room as the men waited patiently for another outburst.
"I have knowledge of the incident in question, but General," Syone looked up from the table, her hands bracing her body as keen velvetty eyes stared him down.
The man suddenly looked so much smaller.
"I will not tollerate an allegation that I, or any of my subordinate's have had any involvement in such a vile crime." the man hesitated before standing to match Syone's threatening pose.
"One of your men was seen leaving the scene, Delegate." The man's words were seething with sarcasm and emphasis.
"I will not sit here and listen to this. Upon my return I will request all Republic aid be removed from the cities limits and that all demands and 'requests' be rejected."

The General's eyes widdened.
"YOU CAN'T! You don't have the power to do that!" Syone grinned.
"According to you, I can murder men in the streets and get away with it. Whats one more little task? Denying a small colony troops for a civil war is nothing but a piece of paper with a signature. That's all it takes, and your fate is sealed." Delecate eyes narrowed into a scornful glare as she stepped back from the table.
"But of course, should discussion take a turn, General, we may be able to reach an understanding."
Nodidng respectfully Lor moved from the table and exited the hall.


((PHEW! Finally done!))

I love the app, you're accepted, K19 will add you to the republic and all, but you can start Rping if you wish ^^ -Mr. M

Beautiful application hun! ^_^ I agree with Mr. M. I don't really have to post here, but I did want you to know someone else appreciated it. I would recommend changing the font color for dialogue, but that's just to make it seem a bit clearer. You rock!!! Accepted!~~~~Merissa