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 Posted: Fri Mar 26, 2010 11:34 pm
Hmmmm.....fine fine....It'll be edited a few secs. after this post.
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Posted: Fri Mar 26, 2010 11:53 pm
Panthers7 Your Rank:Genin Name of Jutsu: Pandora's Box Rank of Jutsu:Sanin Range of Jutsu:Short-to-Long Jutsu's Element:Universal (Kinjutsu) Description: Paradora's Box could be known as an evil technique but it's the designed to watch his opponent suffer. Basically,taking a highly condensed amount of chakra,the user will put both of their hands together and make a triangle shape. Once the required chakra is gained,they will expell the triangle from themselves and hit their opponent. Once caught in this prism it will slowly close.(For five posts) As it closes it also will be sapping chakra out of the opponent rapidly to constantly weaken the opponent while it closes;this box will close all the way until it is the side of ones hand. From there,the user will be able to 'eat' their opponent and gain one jutsu from them;taking the experience and any knowledge from that one jutsu they had. *Notes: - It takes a total of 5 posts for until your opponent is completely chakra-less. Once there,you 'eat' their experiences and gain a jutsu from them. (If the person doesn't want to kill their char. off then they will just be completely unconcious as well as having a jutsu 'stolen' from them. -Stages: 1)The opponent has just now been captured in the technique and is losing chakra quickly. To even capture the opponent you must do a PA(Post-Action) move;between 50-100. 2)The opponent is now continuing to loose chakra and is now feeling much weaker. You and the opponent will once again demostrate the PA move. User will do 50-100,and the opponent will do 45-100. This is because naturally the opponent is weaker than when they first started the technique therefore has less chakra or strength to break out of the prisim. 3)The opponent is extremely weak now. They will probably be having blurred vision at this point and won't have the ability to stand up at this point. Also their bones may start to fracture or split because of the closing walls the prism implys./ User will do 50-100 PA move. Opponent will do 40-100 PA move. 4)At this point,the opponent has certainly broken bones. Their chakra is near to depletion and this is their last chance to break out ouf the prisim.Even if the opponent does break out of the move by this time,they won't be able to neccessarily be a threat at this time./ User will do PA move 50-100,and opponent will in turn do 35-100 PA move. 5) The opponent has fallen to unconciousness at this time. Their chakra is completely depleted and two or three bones have been broken.When the opponent is defeated the prisim will close off and lay on his/her chest. (If they want their char. destroyed the prisim will just continue to close on them until it's the side of a hand.) At this point the user will 'eat' their charka and gain a jutsu. This will in turn grow you chakra reserve as well as you stealing a jutsu from them. Extra notes: *) If the user is of 2 ranks above the opponent then the PA ranking also differs. Meaning that the User will start at 50,but the opponent will start at 45. If it's 3 ranks under then the opponent will start at 40. *)Likewise,if the opponent is 2 ranks higher,they will start at 55 while the user will start at 50 * Also,if the opponent and user have a tie in numbers,that means the prism will stop closing for that one post. *If the opponent indeed does break out of the jutsu,the user's abilities are halved for THREE POSTS. *Last note,(or at least for now),the User must be focused on the opponent in order to keep up the prism. That means if the user is hit then the prism is broken. But that doesn't consist for if the prism is hit by the outside;if you hit the prism from the outside it will accelerate. This also means that the user cannot move to a certain extent during the jutsu. Meaning that they can only rock side-to-side,and forwards and backwards. Rp Sample Awwww,I think my descripy is rather self explainatory. eek alright, I'll accept it, though keep in mind that you won't actually be able to develop it until at least jounin rank
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Posted: Sat Mar 27, 2010 12:00 am
lol,I know. I'm just trying to make some techniques before some other people think them up. xp Thank you though!
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Posted: Mon Mar 29, 2010 11:44 pm
Your Rank: Genin
Name of Jutsu: Suiton: Shiro Fuuma Mizu Shuriken (Water Release: White Fuuma Water Shuriken)
Rank of Jutsu: Chuunin
Range of Jutsu: Mid-long range, since it is typically thrown
Jutsu's Element: Suiton
Description: This Jutsu may only be used by Hatake Clan members. This jutsu is an enhanced version of Water Release: Fuuma Water Shuriken. With the Hatake's ability to transmit their chakra into their weapons to extend range and power, Hatake Chakra effects weapon ninjutsu as well. As a result of using Hatake White Chakra with the Fuuma Water Shurkien jutsu, White Fuuma Water Shuriken is created. The White Fuuma Water Shuriken is, obviously, white, and has slightly extended range and cutting power.
EDIT/EXTENSION: Actually, I kind of want to make this an extension of the Hatake Bloodline. The Hatake's can already use their white chakra to make their weapons stronger, so weapon based Jutsu (This one, Pure lightning Kunai, Water sword, etc.) would also be Increased.
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 8:17 pm
Ok so here is how I want it to work
Name of Jutsu: Shiro Chakra Kouyou (White Chakra Enhancement)
Rank of Jutsu: same as base jutsu
Range of Jutsu: same as base jutsu
Chakra cost: base jutsu +1 chakra point
Jutsu Element: same as base jutsu
Description: This technique can be learned by any hatake clan member of at least genin rank. The technique allows for Hatake clan members to add their white chakra to any weapon based ninjutsu, increasing the cutting power and size of the base jutsu. When using the shiro chakra kouyou, the base jutsu will turn completely white, so if the technique was used with the mizu no yaiba (water sword) then the water the sword is made of would take on a white color, in addition the cutting power and range of the blade would be increased (the range would only change marginally, no more than six inches). The white chakra can be added at any time as long as the hatake is in direct contact with the weapon jutsu, but if it's a ranged technique the white chakra cannot be added after it has been launched at the opponent.
make sense?
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 8:21 pm
Yea, its a lot better than I wrote it. So..........approved?
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 8:27 pm
well, yes, and could you go ahead and place it in the hatake description thingy?
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 8:29 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 05, 2010 7:28 am
Well, I mise well do this in this forum...Cuz Gregie here wants jutsu for Suna the dragon XD oh well...anywho:
Your Rank: Genin
Name of Jutsu: Ranpu release: feza-kire (Light release: feather slice)
Rank of Jutsu: D-B
Range of Jutsu:
Jutsu's Element: light
Description:
these feathers are technically hardened, and strong as diamond...though the are still soft to touch. in a minor feather release, Suna can command feathers, and he can use them like darts. The damage and amount of feather increase by what level Suna's summoner is.
Genin summoner:
Feathers: 60
damage: + 1 level
durability: mid-low (lasts three posts)
Chunin summoner:
Feathers: 120
damage: + 1 level
durability: mid (last four posts)
Jounin summoner:
Feathers: 240
damage: + 1 level
durability: mid-high (last six posts)
Kage/Sanin summoner
Feathers: 480
damage: Max level
durability: maximum (last 10 posts)
Downside: Suna has to be able to see where the person/thing is, so he can take aim at it.. He cant use this in the darkness.
Rp Sample
((I'll have to fight as Suna the dragonkin for this one. NOTE: they are in human forms right now.))
Suna wasnt summoned yet, so he was perfectly fine from where he was at, and he had his own house to stay in...He had a ton of work to do, and things to discuss. But for now to keep in shape the group of dragons had to spar at their full limit.....So they had to pick names out of a hat, so he had his his turn to go first....like usual. Suna dug his hand into the the hat, and pulled out a paper, when he unrolled it he said aloud " Deepfreeze...." Suna frowned because he wanted to spar Enkou or aquatos for once...but He sighed, for there was nothing he could do about it.
" Oh come on! Can I get a girl to fight with? this goodie two shoes got too much frostbite the boy could handle" Deepfreeze taunted Suna Causing him to growl. "Oh the boy thinks he's better than me, huh? Well bub let see how strong you are then!" Deepfreeze yelled and aggressively attacked Suna whom swiftly dodged the swipe. "Use the jutsu, woman! that's why we do this! practice!" Suna said as he had 480 feathers fall towards the ground quite lightly.
Deepfreeze, on the other hand, was sending hail the size of a window shield and was spiked all over, and there was thousands of them coming down. As the hail crashed downward, Suna quickly moved about these, though he did get hit by few of them. The feathers were moving fast like humming birds now, and was slicing the ice to pieces, to they were the size of icecubes. Suna was slipping about, for this was a no dragon body fight, and his human body was quite small for the time. "Where are you, little boy?! I thought you were a strong boy.." Deepfreeze taunted him again, and kicked him in the back, an d then in his stomach....Suna bite deepfreeze when she done that. Deepfreeze screamed, as Suna had full concentration on her, causing his feather to go straight at her, slicing her ams and legs, immobilizing her at the time. "Deepfreeze is paralyzed! The winner is Suna!" Som yelled as Suna quickly healed both himself and Deepfreeze. "Good spar....yet scary..." Suna simply put as Deepfreeze grunted. "Yeah, whatever."
((Next jutsu for the list is coming soon))
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Posted: Mon Apr 05, 2010 10:18 am
keishi_rin Well, I mise well do this in this forum...Cuz Gregie here wants jutsu for Suna the dragon XD oh well...anywho:
Your Rank: Genin
Name of Jutsu: Ranpu release: feza-kire (Light release: feather slice)
Rank of Jutsu: D-B
Range of Jutsu:
Jutsu's Element: light
Description:
these feathers are technically hardened, and strong as diamond...though the are still soft to touch. in a minor feather release, Suna can command feathers, and he can use them like darts. The damage and amount of feather increase by what level Suna's summoner is.
academy student summoner:
Feathers: 20
damage: normal damage
durability: low (last two posts)
Genin summoner:
Feathers: 40
damage: x1 extra damage
durability: mid-low (lasts three posts)
Chunin summoner:
Feathers: 60
damage: x2 extra damage
durability: mid (last four posts)
Jounin summoner:
Feathers: 120
damage: x4 extra damage
durability: mid-high (last six posts)
Anbu summoner:
Feathers: 240
damage: x8 extra damage
durability: high (last 8 posts)
Kage/Sanin summoner
Feathers: 480
damage: x10 extra damage
durability: maximum (last 10 posts)
Downside: Suna has to be able to see where the person/thing is, so he can take aim at it.. He cant use this in the darkness.
Rp Sample
((I'll have to fight as Suna the dragonkin for this one. NOTE: they are in human forms right now.))
Suna wasnt summoned yet, so he was perfectly fine from where he was at, and he had his own house to stay in...He had a ton of work to do, and things to discuss. But for now to keep in shape the group of dragons had to spar at their full limit.....So they had to pick names out of a hat, so he had his his turn to go first....like usual. Suna dug his hand into the the hat, and pulled out a paper, when he unrolled it he said aloud " Deepfreeze...." Suna frowned because he wanted to spar Enkou or aquatos for once...but He sighed, for there was nothing he could do about it.
" Oh come on! Can I get a girl to fight with? this goodie two shoes got too much frostbite the boy could handle" Deepfreeze taunted Suna Causing him to growl. "Oh the boy thinks he's better than me, huh? Well bub let see how strong you are then!" Deepfreeze yelled and aggressively attacked Suna whom swiftly dodged the swipe. "Use the jutsu, woman! that's why we do this! practice!" Suna said as he had 480 feathers fall towards the ground quite lightly.
Deepfreeze, on the other hand, was sending hail the size of a window shield and was spiked all over, and there was thousands of them coming down. As the hail crashed downward, Suna quickly moved about these, though he did get hit by few of them. The feathers were moving fast like humming birds now, and was slicing the ice to pieces, to they were the size of icecubes. Suna was slipping about, for this was a no dragon body fight, and his human body was quite small for the time. "Where are you, little boy?! I thought you were a strong boy.." Deepfreeze taunted him again, and kicked him in the back, an d then in his stomach....Suna bite deepfreeze when she done that. Deepfreeze screamed, as Suna had full concentration on her, causing his feather to go straight at her, slicing her ams and legs, immobilizing her at the time. "Deepfreeze is paralyzed! The winner is Suna!" Som yelled as Suna quickly healed both himself and Deepfreeze. "Good spar....yet scary..." Suna simply put as Deepfreeze grunted. "Yeah, whatever."
((Next jutsu for the list is coming soon)) Well first off, Academy students cannot summon, even if they are jinchuuriki, so take that off. Second, Unless it was recently added, ANBU is the same rank as jounin, so there would be no difference there, so take that off. And a damage multiplier of x1 would not do anything, so there is really no point to it. I'm not sure if there should even be a damage multiplier, or a progressive system of how powerful it is at all. Personally, I dont think that it would matter how powerful the summoner is, this is a jutsu for the SUMMON, so it based on the summon's power.
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Posted: Thu Apr 08, 2010 1:17 pm
Correct, but the dragon is certainly stronger than the user though, for all the other dragons can use jutsu higher than the summoner, so I had to figure a way to make Suna strong too...though i must admit I have to fix the multiplying system.
Edit: I fixed the previous post to some extent.... And 100th post! WOOT!
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Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 3:27 pm
Your Rank: Jounin
Name of Jutsu: Nendo Kibaku: Zetsumei no Hara [Exploding Clay: Field of Death]
Rank of Jutsu: A
Range of Jutsu: Initial Explosion is 40m, Exploding Mines create 10m Explosions, but 100m are covered by the Explosives
Jutsu's Element: Doton/Katon
Description: The user uses whatever level of Exploding he/she wishes and then creates a massive statue of clay. By using the trigger command "Katsu" the statue will explode violently. It releases a powerful explosion as well as thousands of miniature versions of that statue. They are launched upward and then they divebomb ( xp Get it?) underground. They have a proximity limit of 5m. If you get within five meters of them, then they will explode. After the battle, they lose their proximity setting and will not explode unless manually trigger by the user.
Rp Sample
Name of Jutsu: Kugutsu: Kugutsu Bunshin no Jutsu [Puppet Style: Puppet Clone Jutsu]
Rank of Jutsu: D-S
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: N/A
Description: The user creates a simple clone of his/her puppet. It cannot use any sort of poison or explosive. No launchers can be used either. Only blades are useable. This is mainly used as a decoy and the clones can be dispelled if hit hard enough.
D-Rank - 1 Clone that is dispelled by a single hit.
C-Rank - 3 Clones that can survive a D-Rank Jutsu or 3 hits.
B-Rank - 8 Clones that can survive a C-Rank Jutsu or 5 hits.
A-Rank - 15 Clones that can survive a B-Rank Jutsu or 10 hits.
S-Rank - 25 Clones that can survive an A-Rank Jutsu or 15 hits.
Note: If the puppet being cloned is highly durable (Example: Massive Puppet made of solid steel with exceptional defense.), then only Chuunin or higher that is of Taijutsu or Weapon Master Class or a Sannin of any Class can physically harm the clones. The hit count is also raised by 5 hits.
Rp Sample
Name of Jutsu: Underground Puppet Manipulation
Rank of Jutsu: B
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: N/A
Description: The user performed a series of handseals that are similar to Doton: Earth Military Movement. They then sink underground and are able to manipulate puppets from underground.
Note: Must have Chakra Strings attached to puppets before using this Jutsu. Cannot attach Chakra Strings or Summon more puppets when already underground.
Rp Sample
Name of Jutsu: Nendo Kibaku: Tsuchisuima-Bomu [Exploding Clay: Earthswimmer Bomb]
Rank of Jutsu: S
Range of Jutsu: 80m
Jutsu's Element: Doton/Katon
Description: One of the most powerful Exploding Jutsu to be created so far. This requires a large amount of clay. Nearly 6 pounds of it. This takes 4 posts to prepare and takes 1 more post before it can go underground. The user first takes in 1 pound of clay orally and mold it in his/her stomach. They then do the same with 2 pounds of clay the next post and 3 for the next. They mold it and regurgitates it on the 4th post. It comes out in the form of serpent, but isn't very large. The user performs a single handseal and it transforms into a massive serpent that is about 10m long and is relatively wide. It is armored with hardened clay, but they are layed as scales to allow better movement. The serpent dives underground and will strike at whatever time the user chooses, but it must strike within 10 posts or it will shoot out of the ground and explode, catching verything within 80m inside the blast.
Note: If the serpent misses on an attack, it can immediately dive underground or go for another attack. It does not affect the count. It only last a total of 10 posts.
Rp Sample
RP Samples Will Be Added Later
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Posted: Tue Apr 13, 2010 5:33 pm
Your Rank: Jounin
Name of Jutsu: Nendo Kibaku: Zetsumei no Hara [Exploding Clay: Field of Death]
Rank of Jutsu: S
Range of Jutsu: Initial Explosion is 40m, Exploding Mines create 10m Explosions, but 100m are covered by the Explosives
Jutsu's Element: Doton/Katon
Description: The user uses whatever level of Exploding he/she wishes and then creates a massive statue of clay. By using the trigger command "Katsu" the statue will explode violently. It releases a powerful explosion as well as thousands of miniature versions of that statue. They are launched upward and then they divebomb ( xp Get it?) underground. They have a proximity limit of 5m. If you get within five meters of them, then they will explode. After the battle, they lose their proximity setting and will not explode unless manually trigger by the user. These bombs can be manually triggered at any time by the user even during the battle.
Rp Sample
Suou was fighting fiercely with his enemy. "I only have one more option. I have to use that Jutsu I've been working on." Suou began molding a C4 Level of Exploding Clay. The enemy charged and Suou threw out a small statue at him that soon transformed into a massive figure that took down the enemy, but the enemy barely got away. Just as he was running away, Suou triggered the bomb. "Katsu!!" The statue erupted in a massive explosion. The enemy was caught in it, but managed through it. "Ha!! Is that the best you've got?! I'm gonna k-... What the hell?!" An army of miniature versions of that statue rained down over him. They all slammed into the ground and dove underground. "What?! Where are they?!" The man ran, only to step on a bomb. It exploded, sending him across the field, landing on another bomb, triggering that one to explode. He was launched back and forth for a few minutes from the explosions. When he stopped, Suou triggered them all. He jumped into the air and had created a Clay Eagle to avoid the mayhem about to unfold. The whole field erupted in an inferno caused by the explosions.
Name of Jutsu: Kugutsu: Kugutsu Bunshin no Jutsu [Puppet Style: Puppet Clone Jutsu]
Rank of Jutsu: D-S
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: N/A
Description: The user creates a simple clone of his/her puppet. It cannot use any sort of poison or explosive. No launchers can be used either. Only blades are useable. This is mainly used as a decoy and the clones can be dispelled if hit hard enough.
D-Rank - 1 Clone that is dispelled any jutsu or by a single hit.
C-Rank - 2 Clones that can survive a D-Rank Jutsu or 2 hits.
B-Rank - 3 Clones that can survive a D-Rank Jutsu or 2 hits.
A-Rank - 5 Clones that can survive a C-Rank Jutsu or 3 hits.
S-Rank - 5 Clones that can survive an B-Rank Jutsu or 5 hits.
Note: If the puppet being cloned is highly durable (Example: Massive Puppet made of solid steel with exceptional defense.), then only Chuunin or higher that is of Taijutsu or Weapon Master Class or a Sannin of any Class can physically harm the clones. The hit count is also raised by 5 hits and the puppet can survive up to one Jutsu Rank higher than what it could before at the level of Charka used.
Rp Sample
(This one will be shorter since it is extremely simple.)
Suou performed the necessary handseals and his Shinsui Suou Mark II Puppet was engulfed in an enormous cloud of smoke. As it cleared, eight more of that puppet appeared. Suou had Chakra Strings attached to each of them. The enemy hit three of them with a C-Rank Fire Ninjutsu and they poofed away. The rest rushed in and began to cut at him. The original jumped up and launched a rain of senbon that were laced with the Makai Yokai Poison.
Name of Jutsu: Underground Puppet Manipulation
Rank of Jutsu: B
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: Doton
Description: The user performed a series of handseals that are similar to Doton: Earth Military Movement. They then sink underground and are able to manipulate puppets from underground. Because the user is unable to see his anything from underground, he can only go below ground by a few feet. From only a few feet down, the user is able to feel vibrations and detect things on the surface.
Note: Must have Chakra Strings attached to puppets before using this Jutsu. Cannot attach Chakra Strings or Summon more puppets when already underground.
Rp Sample
(Again, extremely simple. Able to control Puppets from underground. I don't think this one even needs an RP Sample.)
Name of Jutsu: Nendo Kibaku: Tsuchisuima-Bomu [Exploding Clay: Earthswimmer Bomb]
Rank of Jutsu: S
Range of Jutsu: 80m
Jutsu's Element: Doton/Katon
Description: One of the most powerful Exploding Jutsu to be created so far. This requires a large amount of clay. Nearly 6 pounds of it. This takes 4 posts to prepare and takes 1 more post before it can go underground. The user first takes in 1 pound of clay orally and mold it in his/her stomach. They then do the same with 2 pounds of clay the next post and 3 for the next. They mold it and regurgitates it on the 4th post. It comes out in the form of serpent, but isn't very large. The user performs a single handseal and it transforms into a massive serpent that is about 10m long and is relatively wide. It is armored with hardened clay, but they are layed as scales to allow better movement. The serpent dives underground and will strike at whatever time the user chooses, but it must strike within 10 posts or it will shoot out of the ground and explode, catching verything within 80m inside the blast.
Note: If the serpent misses on an attack, it can immediately dive underground or go for another attack. It does not affect the count. It only last a total of 10 posts.
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Posted: Wed Apr 14, 2010 5:07 pm
Character's Name:Zin Your Rank:Genin Name of Jutsu: Kiri biggrin emon Gate Opening Element of the Jutsu: Darkness Rank of Jutsu:The Jutsu is a move in development. It enables my char. to get stronger as he grows. The demon gate opening has four stages.Or four Demon Gates.
*At Genin level,Zin can use the technique but only to the first gate release.
*At Chuunin,Zin level can release two gates and have a reduced effect if they simply open only the first gate. But the opening of the second gate will still have tremendous effect on the body.Also at this level the opening of the first gate will be able to last longer.
*At Jounin,Zin level,my char. will have the ability to release three gates. The opening of the first gate will have minor bodily harm,the second gate release will have a reduced bodily harm but not significant. But the opening of the third gate will actually have tremendous effect on the body. The first and second releases although will jave a stronger duration at this level.
*Finally at any level above Jounin my char. will have mastered the technique entirely. He will be able to open the last and final gate at the cost of a near to death exposure to the body. Also the three gates underneath the final gate will have a stronger duration.
Range of Jutsu:The move happens to the self,so there is no true range. Except for the range in which my char. will be able to hold the technique.
Jutsu's Element:No true element.
Jutsu Type:Again it depends on the char. Zin will be Taijutsu/Battojutsu based with very select few ninjutsu/genjutsu. If any.
Description:To begin with,my character developed this technique with the thought of the psychology of the mind and body. As well as wanting to gain power the of having either the curse mark or bijuu's without having the pain of....well having them. Thinking like his father, Zin wishes to gain power on his own accord.Going off the theory that everyone has a bad,evil,and rather unwanted side that lies within them;regardless of how powerful it may make them. Well my Char.(Zin) took this to an entirely new level. Instead of repressing the darkness that hides in our souls he would instead force it to reveal itself. Now time to describe the stages in which he named by the degree's of emotional dislike.
First Demon Gate:Anger *Abilities= In this stage there is a spike in the chakra. I wouldn't nessarily say the chakra is doubled but it indeed is a tremendous raise in power.Zin's attack has increased lightly but his speed is definately the focus of the form. In this form there is no physical change but their is a thin line of chakra surrounding Zin.He will also gain an increase with his poison that lies within his body.(Fangs) He will be able to hold his power for a sustained amount of time.(Which means only 5 posts). Although at higher levels,as said before,the ability to hold the power will be increased.(Meaning 10 for Chuunin&Jounin but 12 for any level higher.) *Weakness:After the time is up(Or 5 posts),Zin will take the repercussions of forcing the dark entity out of him. At a Genin level he will face tremendous pain even to a point of a comatose state.(Meaning I will do the pick a number option 1-10,which will depict the severity of the punishment. 1 being the lowest,ten being the highest.This method will be used through the majority of the technique.) Second Demon Gate Release:Hate *Ability:At this stage of the technique Zin is has another tremendous chakra boost. Speed and strength his near to doubled due to his basis the prominant basis of this technique being Taijutsu except for a select few ninjutsu's. He takes a small change physical appearance. The thin line of chakra has become thicker. The ends of his hair will start to become while as well as his entire eyes starting to form into milky white slits instead a normal pupil for a Naga Clan member..Zin will also be able to produce even more deadly poison,to where it is near to toxic. This will be the last powerful increase of his poisonous fangs.(At this level he can sustain the technique for 8 posts.) *Weakness of this stage:In this stage,depending on the level of my char.,will have a hardened effect. Like the first,it will put the body in an immobilizing pain. (My char. will be in this harmed state depending on what my outcome in the *post action* action. 1-10) Third Demon Gate Release:Rage *Abilities: In this state there is a doubling of the power of both chakra,speed,and strength. My character is also become more demonic in mentallity and will even attack teamates at this stage. There is also a huge diffrence in physical shape.The white tips at the ends of his hair will have also become brighter and rise up a little more up the strands. The slitted pupils will have become more apparent,and the eyes will have an intense glow to it. The last true physical feature will be the horns that protrude from both sides of the skull. They will take the shape that of a bull. Meaning a low dip from the base of the horn and a slow increase upwards. (1 inch protrusion.)(Also,the length of this move will be up to 10 posts before the reverse affects take place.) *Weakness of this stage: Like the other two there will be horrid pain my char. will have to face by bringing up this power. The pain,if you wish to inquire,will feel like burning needles stabbing Zin in every orifice of his body. His eyes may bleed due to the trama of using such a tremendous,yet deadly force.The recovery and injury time is also quite a punishment.(Meaning using the *post action* routine,he will have 10-15 posts to go through.) Fourth Demon Gate Release:Grudge *Ablities: In this form Zin is practically a demon himself. He has revealed the darkest portion of the human soul and brought it to surface. His speed,power,and strength in increased tenfold and there is no bias to whom his enemy is. Teamates and those around are in complete and utter danger if they think to reverse this move.His nails,the outlining of his eyes would turn black and half of his hair will have turned pearl white. The pupils will have turned into milky long slits. Also in this form Zin will not only have horns upon his head,which have also grew;in which they have grown to resemble that of a fully grown bulls but with Zin's bloodline the bone is more than deadly. But the other areas these powerful bones are protruding.And they are as follows:each bone that makes up the spine,the shoulders have bones shooting out horizontally,the elbow has a bone shooting out the back,around his wrist are bones protruding,his knee caps has a bone firing out from the front and lastly,there are bones shooting out the back of his ankles.At the tips of each of these bones will be doused with the toxic poison that flows through Naga Clan at it's limit.(Duration is a max of 10 posts.) *Weaknesses of this Stage: The pain is near to death to put it bluntly. Every muscle,joint and limb is in sever pain. Though some extremely high leveled medical nin may be able to help a little but the use of pulling out the darkness from one's soul is are harsh move. Yatho will have a very long recovery after using this techniqe. (15-20 posts to recover.) Some notes to further explain
*Zin has to open every gate in order to unlock the gate he
wants. (Meaning,if he wanted to unlock the third gate,he would have to unlock the first,second,then the third.)
*In which,the posting of each release will reset the posting timer. But that doesn't mean the posting is doubled. It simply means that one would have to post the max amount for that stage.
*As said before Zin can alleviate some of the pain if he uses the low level gates while at a higher level:
-At Genin level Zin can only use the first gate. Period.
-At Chuunin level Zin and use both first and second gates. in which the first gate's punishment for using the technique will be lessened.(By only 2 posts.)
-At Jounin level,Zin can use all three gates. The punishment will be lessened for the lower two.Meaning a decrease of two posts for opening the second gate at this level,and a decrease of four posts for using the first gate at this level.
-Any level HIGHER than Jounin,Zin can open all gates. The punishment for using the lower will be as follows:For opening the third will be a decrease of two posts.For opening the second will be a decrease of four posts,and for opening the first gate will be no punishment as that level is practically mastered.
*The last note I can really think of for now is that Zin,like the demons,angels,and Curse mark individuals,can train to be sane during these levels. Though this truly only pertains to Zin's third and Fourth Release it posting goes as follows:
-For control over the third there must be 10 posts.
-For control over the fouth there must be 15 posts.
-This is not including the recovery time.
Rp Sample: Zin slammed into the ground hard after taking the heavy hit to the face. He was currently in the 'Forest of Death' with his team mates and they were being brutally beaten. One teamate was being ruthlessly kicked,another was preparing herself to take a final blow from the opposing village and Zin was watching his opponent look down at him like he was a weakling. That urked,no killed Yatho inside that he was so weak. He was one of Konoha's prodigy's;or so he thought himself of such. Zin trained hard;blood,sweat and tears was shed to achieve the power that he wanted to obtain.To have his teamates never see him as a person who drags them behind;and being the youngest member of the team he had to force himself to be above them all. But there was one ninjutsu that he worked with their sensei that Zin knew not to do but he couldn't help it in this situation! His friend's were being beaten to an inch of their life and he was laying on his stomach,being as helpless as they were.Closing his eyes a man,looking just like Zin stood infront of him."Is this...my son? Coward! How dare you be of my blood and l your father. Get up.......Show your hatred.....It's in you.....Become what I couldn't achieve!!! The man slowly vanished as a spark of anger coursed through his veins as fast as his poison did to other's.Cloth's ripped to shreds;his signature overly baggy shirt was hanging uselessly over his lithe youthful,but palely cut frame. The opposing teamates looked and smirked as they looked their friend who was fighting Zin,"Oi.....I don't think you beat him well enough Gongu! That kid is still standing up." They all laughed as Gongu shook his head,"Nah don't worry....I'll finish this little b*****d off and take their scrolls. Once we're done with that we'll be ready for the finals."Gongu said as he started to walk calmly towards Zin. Zin sneered even more to his enemies;how they gloated at his injured teamates and himself. He was almost about to not use his cursed move until he heard the last words from Gongu,"Tch....And they called him Tae Long.......What a waste of life I say..."He gripped Zin's cut face and pulled him close,"How did you ever get out of the Academy?" That.......was the last straw for Zin. They hit the pride of his clan and he personally wasn't going to have it. Zin,burning with intense desire to rip the team into shreds,began to fill with strength. Glaring at Gongu,Zin pulled out his chinese long sword from behind his back and did a horizonal slice to his abdomen which missed but did at least cut Gongu's shirt."You have disgraced my village......hurt my friends........and worst of all called my clan cowards.......I...don't think you'll make it to the finals at all."Zin said as he spit blood from his mouth and looked at the opposing team;the killing intent that flowed through the boys veins seemed to be like a stagnant aura that radiated from his body,while the venomous fangs slowly slid down his small mouth. The once gloat that Zin's enemies had was vanishing quickly as well as the weakness he showed earlier was quickly evaporating. His teamates looked in astonishment to Zin as they knew he'd pull them through his turmoil but something about him made them fear him at the same time. He was......dark......just plain evil to be truthful. Zin closed his eyes and slowly got into a Wushu type stance.I'm sorry Sensei....I know you told me not to use it but......I have no other choice. He took a deep breath before opening his eyes,showing that killer's intent that radiated before in those emerald hues as he yelled out,"First Demon Gate Release:Anger!!!"With that a burst of chakra was released from Zin. Debris and rocks were scattered from the place that the boy stood as a thin line of purple chakra began to form over his wounded body;outlining every single definition of the young Naga. Zin stood back up,moving out of the stance and started to speak in a rather diffrence voice. It was still the soft voice that his wounded teamates knew except it was lightly dripping with venom. Ripping off the shirt that dangled uselessly off Zin's cut up body he spoke out,"Let me tell you now of the name of your killer."He said as a bone pushed out of his arm,making a bone-like sword,"I'm am Naga Zin...To you....It's 'Tae Long'.....And I believe you walked on the wrong team and you must now to put it bluntly....I'm going to kill you."Zin said softly before he vanished on spot.His speed had definately taken the bulk of the increase as he swung against his enemy who blocked at the last second."W-Wait.....you can't kill us....It's against the ru-"The enraged Naga sneered at the weaklings cry,no plea,for life but there was no mercy for them at this point.As the opponent was knocked back Zin landed softly on the ground before blazing forwards once more to attack relentlessly.Using his free arm to clasp his hand around the neck of his opponent as Zin cornered him,without a thought of the other's life Zin stabbed his blade straight up into the soft part of the chin. As the boy he held gargled and choked on his own blood to speak, as Zin yanked the blade out to let the blood spray before tossing the mortally wounded opponent to the ground.Zin slowly turned around as paled skin Naga boy glared at his other two opponents who were astonished by this deadly transformation and now zero morale for their lives. Vanishing once more, the other enemy and Gongu went back to back to see this enemy that was determined to end their lives. Out of no where,mud was thrown at them from multiple directions before they heard,"Doton:Shuriken no Jutsu!".As those muddle balls came,the suddenly split in half as the ninjutsu was actived and rock shuriken took their place. Unforunately for Gongu's partner, one had made Gongu have to roll out of the way, and made the rock shuriken hit and wound his companion,"G-Gongu y-"Was all he managed as Zim moved up and stabbed the second to last opponent, in his the lower spine. The opponent coughed and tried to move but his legs felt like cement had caved them in. Zin ruthlessly kicked him off his blade and held up his ninjutsu sign,"DIE!!!! Doton:Gou no Doro!"Suddenly a mud moat surrounded Zin and started to engulf the wounded nin. as he helplessly tried to make his legs move.Zin sneered as he looked at the clentching hand trying to fight for life before seeing it get vanquished into the earth. But unfortunately,Zin's lust to see the boy die,made him unaware of the danger from the his last opponent as he felt the stabbing pain of the kunai sink into his arm. Jumping over the mud moat Zin yanked the kunai out before narrowly dodging another strike by Gongu who was not fighting Zin while wielding another kunai. This only further enfuriated Zin more as he screamed,"That is the last ounce of blood that you will take from me!!!!!!" In Zin's state,he was able to rather easily dodge the cuts as not only was he heighted with speed,but also noticing that his once gloating opponent was fighting out of fear;and everyone knew that a ninja fighting out of fear is soon a dead one and unfortunately for Gongu, Zin was teaching the lesson. Once Zin saw Gongu do an over-hand strike he used straight sword to stab him right underneath the forearm,freezing his arm movements completely. But even so this wasn't enough just to immoblize Gongu as Zin pushed the blade hard into that soft spot of the arm pit.This would rupture the nerve and pierce the muscle of the joint between the shoulder and arm. Screaming in agony,Gongu tried to pry the blade from his useless arm before taking a barrage of Zin's fluent kicks and punches. Each kick was accompanied with a punch,and each punch was futher accompanied with a kick a tied into a fluid 'Dance of Death.' Zin did this ruthless barrage of strikes until he backed Gongu up into a tree,making his head and body smack into the truck multiple times before Zin gripped his face after the last punch and spoke venomously,"If you survive this remeber this.......Don't you ever.....ever.....talk about my clan or my village again."Zin with that,before Gongu could affirm this threat Zin withdrew his hand,with Gongu's face still firmly clutched,and slammed it promptly into the tree trunk. They body twitched violently before going limp,in which Zin carelessly tossed to the side. His friends were now up but staring at Zin with disbelief as they couldn't belive how fiercesome and deadly there friend had become."T....Tae Long?"They said nervously as Zin,hoping that using his nickname would bring him to.Turning around,glaring at them darkly before smiling a little,"I....I'm fine....Are you guys o-"He winced as the chakra line that outlined his body fadded and a piercing pain struck him. Zin fell to his knee's as his companion's still stricken by fear and body exhaustion still managed to run and help their friend as he went through agony for their sake. But they now knew what their sensei and Zin were doing so early in the morning at the training grounds;which was oddly always destroyed.
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Posted: Wed Apr 14, 2010 11:07 pm
Hark: Well I believe that the Nendo Kibaku: Zetsumei no Hara should be and S-ranked jutsu, and change the jutsu element to just earth, as this is not some kind of combination jutsu and I do not want people to be confused as to what the elemental weakness of jutsu is.
For the Kugutsu: Kugutsu Bunshin no Jutsu it seems overly powerful to me, I mean come on 25 clones that take 15 hits to destroy? The whole point of clones is that they are a short term or one shot kind of thing, generally they only stick around for a few moments before being destroyed or dispersing because they use a jutsu. If you are dead-set on this jutsu then I believe that the table directly below would be more reasonable.
D-Rank - 1 Clone that is dispelled by a single hit or any jutsu
C-Rank - 2 Clones that are dispelled by two hits or any D-ranked jutsu or higher
B-Rank - 3 Clones that are dispelled by two hits or any D rank jutsu or higher
A-Rank - 5 Clones that are dispelled by three hits or any C rank jutsu or higher
S-Rank - 5 Clones that are dispelled by five hits or any B-rank jutsu or higher
The reason the number of clones is drastically reduced is because when we were discussing clones the other day, we ultimately decided that any more than 8-9 clones is just too crazy, and considering that your clones are already a good deal tougher than the average clone, I don't want you to be able to make any more than five. In addition tougher Puppets do not change the number of hits necessary to dispell as clones are made from chakra meant to share characteristics with the original, but they are still are just imitations, meaning they are actually weaker than usual, just be thankful that I'm allowing more than one solid hit as it is. Also I'm sure you'll notice that I changed the jutsu level necessary to destroy a clone, this is because in reality all it would take to destroy any other clone is a single hit by even the weakest of jutsus
Underground Puppet Manipulation - I don't necessarily have any problems with this jutsu, but I have to wonder how one would be able to control what they can't see, perhaps I don't understand how earth military movement works, but my understanding is that you really can't see that much further when you're underground, so you would have to be just below the surface (meaning your head should probably be no more than 1-2 feet below ground level.
Nendo Kibaku: Tsuchisuima-Bomu - Again no real problem, but I would like to know just exactly how much else a character can do while they are molding the clay for this jutsu. I could understand them being able to dodge and perhaps even punch and kick, but I don't think they should be able to perform any other jutsus, simply because it would take a great deal of concentration to mold the clay.
Panthers: Give me a bit more time to go over yours, sorry for the wait, but I'm really tired
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