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 Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 7:57 pm
Anthony frowned. "Stop being so selfish!" he growled.
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 7:59 pm
Rose looked angerly, "We have numerous murders and clair missing and the Chief is wasting his time on protecting me while he should be using me to fine her!"
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:01 pm
Anthony sat back in the chair. "There are others who are on the case. I know that for sure" he said. His voice was back to normal.
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:01 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:04 pm
Rose shook her head, "That's not good enough! I should be out there as well! We're already streached thin these days."
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:06 pm
Anthony sighed. He thought of something. "I wonder if he wants you to make sure I don't go anywhere" he said.
The microwave went 'beep beep beep'.
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:13 pm
Rose sighed at the microwave, "Someone should get that." she turned back to Anthony, "That's a streach."
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:15 pm
"Maybe" Anthony said.
The agent took the meal out and came back with it. "Who is this going to?" he asked.
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:17 pm
Rose sighed, "I'll take it."
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:18 pm
The agent gave Rose the TV dinner and then went to do Anthony's.
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:20 pm
((Hey. I put this scene in my book, and I feel like there's something wrong wrong with it... Help Please?
Passage:
“Why? Why?!” He replied. He took a step back and looked at me gritting his teeth. “I… hate you and I love you with passions so deep you will never understand. I pity you, and I am compassionate towards you, but I loath your existence and abhor the very ground you walk on.” He said, pulling off a glove and throwing it at a statue of an angel. The statue fell over broken and the glove ripped. “You are my light, my poison, my pain, in ways you will never know! I want to break you, care for you, and make you suffer more then anyone else in this world has suffered!!” He yelled, throwing fire and kicking the roses. “I can do it, and I will... Then I’ll kill you on the day I can’t bear to see you alive any longer.” He said firmly. I looked at him appalled, too afraid to move. I wanted to run, but I couldn’t. I couldn’t do anything. The fire started to settle from the rain. “I am already dead a thousand times over.” He said, starting to calm down. He tried to pull off his mask but he couldn’t. “There is no end for me. There is no peace for me. There is no hope for me. I am already eternally damned… a thousand times.”
I mean, besides his anger issues. I feel like there's something off with the text... ))
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:22 pm
((Ummmm why is he angery?))
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:23 pm
((... maybe that's the issue with it... I donno... For set ups, it's pretty much it's the main chick of the story in a rose garden with this guy who is kinda messed up... He's mad cause he's jealous, and she's completely oblivious. ))
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:24 pm
Rose smiled and unpealed her lunch.
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Posted: Thu Mar 19, 2009 8:27 pm
((the text seems fine to me))
Anthony waited for his meal.
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