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 Posted: Mon Dec 20, 2010 10:46 pm
Gregar828 Please, dont post so many at once. Its better to post one or two at a time. Lightning beast is already a jutsu, but good inspiration from NUNS2. Having one beast as a C rank, then three as a B rank, doesnt make too much sense. No elemental combinations.
And so if I can make these just Raiton Element, but made with precision learned from being a Medical-Nin, would it be okay?
And I'll try not to post so many at once. I just had a bunch of ideas in my head at once and had to jot them down all over.
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Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2010 9:53 am
Your Rank:Jounin
Name of Jutsu:Hazy Servant Jutsu
Rank of Jutsu:B
Range of Jutsu:N/A
Jutsu's Element:Universal Genjutsu
Description:This genjutsu involves creating clones that appear real. Unlike bunhin no jutsu, these clones seemingly come into reality through a haze, and can feel as real as any other bushin. The difference is, they can't be destroyed by enemy physical attacks. When attacked, they turn into a hazy blur and any enemy attacks will phase right through them. If the enemy isn't a genjutsu specialist, or is one and is more than two ranks below, any attacks used by the genjutsu will appear to actually affect them. None genjutsu specialists of higher rank will not have this affect. The servants can take the form of anyone, dead or alive or even made up, and will not stop attacking until they run out of time. The base duration is four posts, but any more after taht the servants are alive will take off c ranked chakra. If a death blow is dealt by them and the enemy hasn't figured out that they are a genjutsu, than they will roll a ten sided dice. odd numbers will result in death, while even numbers will result in the jutsu ending and any damage they believe has been done will be removed. Also, when the technique ends, any damage they believe has been done will disappear. The base number of servants is one, two costs 1.5 times the chakra, three costs 2, then 2.5 yatta yatta. This genjutsu can in fact be kai'd.
Rp Sample
((Editing.))
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Posted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 1:46 pm
Akura Bashirou Name of Jutsu: Kurisutarurirīsu: Shin kesshō no hana, Crystal Release: True Crystal Flower Rank of Jutsu: E - S Range of Jutsu: 5 – 40 feet Jutsu's Element: Crystal Description: The user makes a single seal and makes a large number of crystals rise up from the ground. The user makes another seal and the crystals being form into flowers around the intended target similar to the way a grass patch is done. The flowers are 6 inches tall and are about 1 inch away from each other; if they are so much as tapped the flowers will shatter sending small needle like shards toward the enemy, and nearby flowers, making a chain reaction making other flowers nearby shatter, this domino effect will cease after a 1 foot of flowers ( 12 flowers ) are shattered. Crystal Range: E rank = 5 feet D rank = 10 feet C rank = 20 feet B rank = 25 feet A rank = 30 feet S rank = 40 feet Rp Sample Just after using his the genjutsu crystal flower, tenza jumped back gaining some distance between him and his enemy, he made a series of seals, letting his chakra exit his body through his legs and budding around him forming a field of chakra flowers, which then materialized into crystals. Two men, whom were surrounded by the crystal flowers, they began to laugh like barbarians at the sight of such a female-ish technique. One of the men rose his foot and Tenza sighed. “ I wouldn’t do that…” He told the man giving him a warning but he ignored it and stepped on the flowers, making them shatter and release small shards of crystal that stabbed on to the man, he began jumping around in one foot and got the crystals stabbed in his other foot, he tripped and fell on his back to even more flowers, which got stabbed on his back. The other man took a step back as Tenza made a seal, activating the flower’s next ability, he began to form seals and the flowers behind the man formed into a spear. “ You see.. under normal circumstances, I’d use the least jutsu possible, but while this is active, my techniques cost slightly less.” Tenza said as he sighed and the man slid down, stabbed by the spear.
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Posted: Thu Dec 30, 2010 2:13 pm
Your Rank:
N/a
Name of Jutsu:
Predetorial Presence
Rank of Jutsu: C-S
Range of Jutsu: N/a
Jutsu's Element: Naga Bloodline technique
Description: The user creates a field of ominous energy to stilfe their opponent. The field of energy is actually expulsed chakra that seeks out and attaches itself to living organisms around the user, weighing it down due to the difference in power. this jutsu is only usable against someone one or more ranks below you. however at the same rank, it causes slight discomfort, as well as the overwhelming urge to leave the user alone.
At minus one rank the affected can barely move, and can barely breathe evenly. The air around them seems to be crushing them, as well as closing in on them. This causes momentary discomfort, and extremely brief paralasis. The weight is lifted as soon as the affected comes to the conclusion that this is just a trick ( Only Special Jounin and up can do this, or another Naga member at genin and up ), or is scared into evading an attack. It also makes them want to run rather than fight after the effect is lifted.
At minus two ranks the affected is completely paralyzed and can't move. The user rarely attacks during this stage and merely moves around the affected taunting them, trying to coax something out of them, like a demon or something. as soon as the affected releases what it was the user tried to make them release, then they are freed from the jutsu. It also makes them want to run after the effect is lifted.
At minus three ranks and down the affected is not only paralyzed, but can no longer breathe for fear of setting off the user. ( This won't kill them, but it will make them have to gasp for air when they are released. )
This jutsu however has a limit of three posts. This makes it so the battle can't go on forever with someone paralyzed refusing to release something, even though every fiber of their body is wanting to.
Rp Sample
Sonji stood over his newest underlings, smiling down at them. One was academy ranked, one genin, one chunnin, one special jounin, one jounin, and his ever faithful sannin attendant stood next to them, ready to burst his chakra to lessen the burden on the children if need be. " All right, for your first Mission, I want you all to learn the meaning of fear. "He said, lowering his head and smiling. he slowly looked up and opened his eyes widely, a burst coming off of his body. the burst was strong enough that it had even knocked over a pile of papers on Sonji's desk. " Now, you all know exactly what fear is... You! Break it before I kill you. " Sonji said, pointing at the Jounin. Kami-naga lazily slithered around the office, apparently having already dispelled the jutsu before even the sannin. in truth he had never been affeted by it in the first place.
The Jounin tried to open his mouth, but found he couldn't. He began to panic and started to hyperveltalate. then he realised that he was still breathing. that calmed him down a bit and he calmed down, his breathing returning to normal, at least how it had been before. his breathing was labored, like he had just fought a battle to the point of death by exhaustion. The Jounin looked to his side and noticed the Sannin looking at him, and noticed that a current of something was slightly rustling the sannin's clothes. The jounin noticed also that it was only for a brief second. The jounin thought through all of his training what that could have been. Suddenly it hit him, There must be something attached to him, or some sort of Genjutsu, and the way to break a genjutsu was either to expel chakra all around you, or to stop the flow of chakra. He couldn't consentrate enough to stop his chakra, be he could sure as heck expell the chakra. He expelled a large burst of chakra and fell to his knees, the jutsu broken early. " Oh my god... How did... " The Jounin said looking up at Sonji, and realising that just the sight of Sonji made him feel like running.
" You are excused Jounin. Wait in the ground floor auditorium. the others will be there soon. They aren't strong enough to break this yet. " Sonji said smiling at the jounin. " Now, I want you four... to just wait. " sonji said smiling as the Jounin got up, turned around walked to the door and left the room, forgetting to close the door behind him the rest in the room couldhear his footsteps as he ran for dear life. " Now, Just wait. This experience will be over soon, but you'll always know fear to a higher extent when you look at me. " Sonji said looking at them. " When that fear is gone, then you will be strong enough to combat anyone. " Sonji said shaking his head and smiling.
The four ninja ranging from academy to special jounin stood there in fear of Sonji, only the special jounin was breathing. He tried to turn and look at the others because he couldn't hear them, but he couldn't move. He stood there, staring at Sonji's smiling and Kind face. This calmed him a little, but the fear he felt was omnipotent over this little bit of calmness. The chunnin was frozen solid as were the genin and the academy student.
A Couple of minutes later ( and a speech from Sonji to the fear stricken four ) the other four went down into the ground floor auditorium. they stood there in silence until the jounin spoke up. " You all do know what it was he did right? " He said, a thwacking noise heard as the sannin from the room smacked him in the back of the head. " You are to tell no one, you are to take the secret of that techinque's weakness to your grave. If you speak about that technique ever again, you will be punished. is that clear? " The sannin said smiling. " Good, you are free to go now. "
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Posted: Fri Dec 31, 2010 6:53 pm
Your Rank:
Academy
Name of Jutsu:
Item Storage Snake
Rank of Jutsu: D
Range of Jutsu: N/a
Jutsu's Element: Naga Bloodline Technique
Description: The user summons a snake, though the use of their bloodline's ability to summon a snake similar to their partner. The snake comes out of their throat, and is capable of swallowing items of small to large size, and storing them until the user wishes to produce them.
The size of the items range from a sword from the seven swordsmen from the mist to a crumb of bread. Yeah, that small. This jutsu also requires no handsigns, or the speaking of the name.
Rp Sample
Orochimaru laughed opening his mouth andtilting his head up, a snake slithering out and opening it's mouth producing a sword. " Kusanagi, Let's cut these foes to bits! " He said lunging with the blade.
One gory battle later ( Which spanned about five seconds, three of which was orochimaru's snake coming out of his throat, and one was it producing the sword. )
Orochimaru smiled, opening his mouth again and tilting his head back. the snake from before opened it's mouth as it slithered up into his mouth. orochimaru slid the blade slowly into the snake who slithered backward down his throat.
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 12:07 am
Your Rank: Chuunin
Name of Jutsu: Psionic Throw
Rank of Jutsu: D
Range of Jutsu: Bullet can be thrown up to 5 meters before dissipating, distance the victim is thrown is proportionate to the user's physical strength.
Jutsu's Element: None
Description: The user of this jutsu tenses the muscles in one of their arms as well as sending Chakra flowing down to the hand, when they release the tension of the muscles with a flick of their hand the chakra is released in a fast bullet that flies toward their opponent. Should the opponent be hit by the bullet of chakra, it disappears into their body and nothing happens for about a second then they are suddenly lifted off their feet and thrown down to the ground. The strength of the lift and throw is directly equal to the user's physical strength. Does not require hand seals.
Rp Sample
This guy was tough, not so much because of his actual power but because once he knew where you were and where your attacks were coming from, he could effortlessly deflect them. Shinzou had managed to use some of his earth jutsu to meld into the earth and get into hiding, knowing that the man would have expected an attack from below and that would have been the end of Shinzou. However, now in hiding, Shinzou had a chance to launch a surprise attack, but unless he could knock the man off balance, it was likely he'd still be able to block the attack or worse, counterattack.
Shinzou tensed the muscles in his right arm as chakra began to flow into it, a stream of power filling his veins, his fingers buzzing with excitement. The technique was ready, and now was his chance!
Shinzou burst from behind the rocks where he had been taking cover and flung his right arm out, loosing a bullet of shining chakra at his opponent while continuing to charge the man at full speed. The man in his overconfidence in his ability to block attacks swung his own arm out to fend off the bullet, but shock filled his face when the attack simply faded into his arm. Even more confidence bloomed inside him as he thought the attack had failed and he shifted his stance and prepared to counter Shinzou's rush. Just as his legs shifted into place, he felt mysteriously light as he found his body lifted into the air by some unseen force before being thrown to the ground with enough force to wind him. His gaze was fixated on Shinzou who was directly above him, having leaped into the air while the man was under the force of the Psionic Throw, his eyes widening in fear and despair as Shinzou descended upon him and the blades of Shinzou's claws pierced his throat.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 11:14 am
Sorry about the wait. You can go ahead and blame it on the guy who thought submitting a dozen jutsu at once, in a smaller than normal font on a dark background. For future reference, stuff like that makes it really hard for me to focus, and I end up fleeing the thread until I finally slap myself and get back to it. When making a submission, I ask that it be both well written, and easily read. Anything below size ten is just too small for me to handle in large amounts.
Without further ado, the jutsu.
Hark: Never submit a ton of jutsu at once like that. It makes bad things happen.
Lightning Beast: Despite what Gregar said, the only equivalent I’m seeing in the list is an S rank that looks more like a puppet to me. Unless someone else can find this in there, it’s not a duplicate. With that said, I’d like more information on what happens if the beast DOES hit. It looks good so far, but it needs that extra touch.
Lightning Beast Barrage: I’m going to have to say no on this one, simply because it’s a lot more like the existing one, and gives you three of the beasts, slower, but more mobile. That’s more like a temporary summon than much else. If you made it in such a way that they charge a set location from separate directions rather than apparently being fully mobile, and have it last one post, I’d be more accepting of it.
Lightning Beast Partial Transformation: I’m noticing a trend here. You can remove the capped section in there. Seeing as it only mentions the arms, I’d hope nobody would think it could be used elsewhere. Does this actually turn the arm into lightning, or does it encase the arm in lightning? And like the first one, what happens if it hits?
Lightning Beast Complete: I don’t think I can allow this one. Transforming completely into a creature made of lightning? I don’t know. Maybe I’m not thinking straight, but I don’t like it. Maybe someone else would think differently.
Shock Therapy: I rather like this one. Add in a note that you can’t affect organs directly unless you hit right on them, and it’s Approved.
Lightning Chakra Dissection Blade: I gotta say no on this one. It’s a mix of the chakra scalpel, the Kaze no Yaiba, and Chidori. Make it only a couple inches long and the electricity just strong enough to numb the area, and make it require the medic type, and we might have something.
Lightning Spitting Needles: I don’t really like it. Simply because of the wording in some places, and the effects in others. First, you say the lightning senbon cause serious injury. It’s pretty much confirmed fact that senbon cause little to no actual injury, and only do much of anything if they hit in the right spot. Like the jugular vein.
Second, you have it causing paralysis of the limbs for two posts if it hit’s a pressure point. I can already see the debate coming on, where I or another crew member has to step in and decide whether or not it did in fact hit the point, because the victim says it missed and the shooter says it didn’t. Fact is, most of us probably don’t know where these pressure points are to make that judgment. Lightning Senbon are a good concept, but I don’t like this version of it.
Akura:
Crystal Flower: This is pretty much exactly like the grass patch one, except you get a chakra bonus from it, and it looks like flowers, correct? If so, I’m afraid it’s denied. I don’t allow jutsu that make other jutsu cheaper. The method gave me pause for a while, but the fact is, if I allowed it on one, all crystal jutsu would have to get it, because they all leave shards lying around.
Kay:
Hazy Servant: Sorry, but can you clean it up a bit before I look it over? There’s some typos and grammatical problems that are making it difficult for me to focus on what it’s actually doing, and that’s a very bad thing to have in the jutsu list.
Neru: I’m going to ask Zin to give me his opinion on these, as he knows the bloodline much better than I do. The first one though, seems a lot like mere killing intent, which has been in and out of this thread multiple times, and is a rather touchy matter due to the paralysis. Just to let you know though, the two ranks down bit needs to be described a lot better, because it feels like it’s coming out of nowhere.
On the second one, no matter what Zin has to say on it, you’re going to need hand signs at the very least, as a summoning technique should never be free like that.
Auggie: I’m honestly not sure on yours. Please PM one of the other judges on the list. I might be able to focus on it better later, but not right now.
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 12:16 pm
Kk Hinote, edited. Sorry I took so long to post it. I kinda forgot I had it saved in my computer.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 12:24 pm
At this point it's just a flower version of the grass. Denied still.
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 12:26 pm
Wait what? It's just like the genjutsu, only real. You said you would love to see the real thing!
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 7:21 pm
Well, It is a bloodline ability, So I wouldn't expect you'd need handsigns. ( The summoning that is. )
I mean Orochimaru kinda just does it. I honestly think that half of the Bloodline jutsu should be free of chakra, but I didn't make it, and it makes some sense that they would cost chakra.
On the first one, I put that the user can't kill them, nor harm them really. Just taunt them for a while. I mean they can attack but nothing major. Maybe a punch or kick. Possibly a bite. ( But not from a Venemous Snake partner. ) I tried to make it not that bad, But then again I guess that it could be taken that way fairly easily.
But yeah, I'll leave it up to Panthers7.
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Posted: Wed Jan 05, 2011 7:26 pm
Akura Bashirou Wait what? It's just like the genjutsu, only real. You said you would love to see the real thing! Huh? Oh, I'd forgotten. The grass was genjutsu, and you hadn't made the real version yet? Honestly though, it'd be more effective if for all intents and purposes they looked the same rather than having one look like flowers. If that's the case though, let me know and I'll check it over again.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:35 pm
@ Neru: Come on man... that one rp sample was.... geez gonk
In any case here's my judgement on it: Usually I don't let anyone create jutsu's for a clan because they will usually steer away from my vision of what I gear it to be. But here's what I have:
*) Item Storage Snake: That technique basic. It is already in the clan's documents. It more or less a technique that is already learnt. Once you learn our Snake Summoning (3 Posts) you can store them within your snakes.
*) That seems something my Genjutsu has. If there eye contact made, and you edit it geared towards that, then I will accept it being more valid. ^^
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Posted: Fri Jan 07, 2011 10:01 am
I know, But it did get the point across. And isn't that all the Rp sample is for? ( It kinda hurt me to write something that short and choppy, but I didn't think it needed me to write a short story about it. )
Yeah, I kind of assumed it would be, but I couldn't find it. Could that possibly get added? ( Or a list of what we can do besides vomit snakes and store stuff in them? Or destroy a small army with a seemingly endless flow of them... )
Why Eye contact? It is forcing out your own chakra and attaching it to another person's body, making them feel awkward and weighed down. Mostly awkward, and when someone yells at you and you suddenly have this tingly feeling all over your body and you feel heavier to the point your muscles seize up, you normally freak out a little. ( Bad experience once... )
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Posted: Fri Jan 07, 2011 11:06 am
Hinote Tosatsu Akura Bashirou Wait what? It's just like the genjutsu, only real. You said you would love to see the real thing! Huh? Oh, I'd forgotten. The grass was genjutsu, and you hadn't made the real version yet? Honestly though, it'd be more effective if for all intents and purposes they looked the same rather than having one look like flowers. If that's the case though, let me know and I'll check it over again. Both the gen and nin are flowers man.
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