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 Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:16 pm
Oh it isn't a roleplay. *sits on Rookie agian*
Maybe she just hates the main?
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:16 pm
Acaelus Thorn I'll help to forgotten just tell me what you need Thank you. I want as many possibilities as I can help. (Sorry, for delayed response.)
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:19 pm
1 could be that the thing was good but turned bad after a war that he lead and won and spared the family ownly if she worked for him, that might work or give ideas
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:20 pm
ah she got me again *trys to move but can't*
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:21 pm
UNSC rookie _The Forgotten Raven_ The story is about the main character getting her kidnapped half sister back because she is the only living relative she has. to gain power or to save lives by working with him or maybe its the work between death might be that he holds wat is keeping them alive So early you meant minion? Oh that might work for minion. She is kinda sappy like that. Might be able to turn her good at the end.
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:23 pm
UNSC rookie 1 could be that the thing was good but turned bad after a war that he lead and won and spared the family ownly if she worked for him, that might work or give ideas You even better for her. But why is he evil what turned him into horrible evil demon thingy that he is.
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:27 pm
_The Forgotten Raven_ UNSC rookie 1 could be that the thing was good but turned bad after a war that he lead and won and spared the family ownly if she worked for him, that might work or give ideas You even better for her. But why is he evil what turned him into horrible evil demon thingy that he is. maybe a old rule that is every single 100 years 1 of this family turns into an evil lord and crushes the land and a different family has a knight that can beat them but the knight turns evil, so wat iam saying is it could be he was good but now evil becuse of a evil lord turned him that way
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:31 pm
UNSC rookie maybe a old rule that is every single 100 years 1 of this family turns into an evil lord and crushes the land and a different family has a knight that can beat them but the knight turns evil, so wat iam saying is it could be he was good but now evil becuse of a evil lord turned him that way Erm... sounds like lazy writing though. I want him to have depth and motivation but I have a Writers' Block on what would turn a guy evil. How many times does a guy have to be put down into the ground before a guy becomes evil.
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:34 pm
Old testament god had made a bet with a devil that if you push hard enough that gods followers would turn away from him. So he torturers this one guy even kills all his family and he asks why and god gets mad. How do you create that kinda of evil.
Edit: Yeah I'm not religious, sorry if I offended anyone.
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:37 pm
ok heres an idea, this could be 1 that has turned him evil
He had a best that was close and was the best thing that happened and 1 day this friend was killed by some assassin which leaves him, he crys becuse no on wats to be his friend till a shadow comes, and says i will be your friend i can stop you from cry i can help you, he belives in the shadow and the shadow becomes his friend but the shadow is truning him evil fast
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:39 pm
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:40 pm
UNSC rookie ok heres an idea, this could be 1 that has turned him evil He had a best that was close and was the best thing that happened and 1 day this friend was killed by some assassin which leaves him, he crys becuse no on wats to be his friend till a shadow comes, and says i will be your friend i can stop you from cry i can help you, he belives in the shadow and the shadow becomes his friend but the shadow is truning him evil fast Interesting. I could ploy many other things from that. Also would explain why things get darker later in my story. But what is the shadow. Where did it come from? Why is it evil?
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:45 pm
Also what things made him so easy to manipulate. Yes he needed a friend but why didn't he say no to doing an evil act. Was there anything else that made him want to go to the shadow. Was he always a demon. What is the difference between good and evil. How could he justify his motives. What else can I do to give my characters(my babies) realism, depth and life in the minds of others.
(Ops forgot ? marks again)
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:47 pm
_The Forgotten Raven_ UNSC rookie ok heres an idea, this could be 1 that has turned him evil He had a best that was close and was the best thing that happened and 1 day this friend was killed by some assassin which leaves him, he crys becuse no on wats to be his friend till a shadow comes, and says i will be your friend i can stop you from cry i can help you, he belives in the shadow and the shadow becomes his friend but the shadow is truning him evil fast Interesting. I could ploy many other things from that. Also would explain why things get darker later in my story. But what is the shadow. Where did it come from? Why is it evil? well i will give you some ideas 1 could be the shadow is really his inner mind talking to him 2 the shadow could be his best friends soul that is using him to kill the assassin and all that mocked him 3 the shadow could be his shadow but like a other side of him 4 the shadow could be evil becuse its mad up from evil thoughts
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Posted: Mon Aug 02, 2010 3:02 pm
UNSC rookie _The Forgotten Raven_ UNSC rookie ok heres an idea, this could be 1 that has turned him evil He had a best that was close and was the best thing that happened and 1 day this friend was killed by some assassin which leaves him, he crys becuse no on wats to be his friend till a shadow comes, and says i will be your friend i can stop you from cry i can help you, he belives in the shadow and the shadow becomes his friend but the shadow is truning him evil fast Interesting. I could ploy many other things from that. Also would explain why things get darker later in my story. But what is the shadow. Where did it come from? Why is it evil? well i will give you some ideas 1 could be the shadow is really his inner mind talking to him 2 the shadow could be his best friends soul that is using him to kill the assassin and all that mocked him 3 the shadow could be his shadow but like a other side of him 4 the shadow could be evil becuse its mad up from evil thoughts Hmm interesting. 1. Insanity is a bit over used though. I think it lacks real depth as well no offense. 2. Yes, but I want him to want world domination, this kind of evil would get hard to get them to rape a woman and kill her, her husband as well as attempting to kill a daughter and kidnaping the one that resulted from the rape. 3. He could have tried to purge the evil from himself but it make fired and made him evil or made an evil demon, but then why did he want to be perfect. So many questions to answer, how can make so the world has depth. I don't want a shallow villain. 4. Lack of depth again no offense. Also sorry I am being difficult, I need the world to make sense in my head and insanity doesn't cut it because of how serious I make things. I cover rape, murdering of family, suicide, and a few other controversial kind of things.
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