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 Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:14 pm
Preview I lay in my bed waiting for sleep to come and pull me into its depths. The bed was warm and comfortable countering the cold air that surrounded me in my bedroom as I lay their waiting for the inevitable. “Fish, are you awake?” I heard a tired voice next to me ask as I stared at the ceiling. “Yeah. I’m sorry if I woke you Michillia.” I replied looking down at her and patting her on the head. “It wasn’t you. It was what father told us. Do you think that war might break out across Sylph?” she asked me. “I think it already has. Father is high up in the military. He says that the elves have stopped contacting them in the Elsensia forest after Disava started destroying neighboring villages. Don’t worry though, we live far away from all that, we live here in Shinisa the southern capitol, it will be all right.” I told her, I could not remember myself speaking so much since our father told us hours before that war was a possibility. Suddenly I felt a warm hand wrap around me and then my sister’s head rested on my chest and I felt as she drifted into the depths of the night. One reason was because I felt myself drifting there as well.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:17 pm
"“Bachelors party! At a strip joint. I can’t believe that your are doing this!” Meta Knight said lecturing Fish and Trenn who were leaning on trees waiting for the others to arrive.
“I don’t see you going home.” Fish said with a smirk.
“Well I….” he stammered restlessly. "
I found that awesome. Nice chapter. And the end is near, huh? I hope your sequal/spinoff (whatever it is) is just as good, and I'm sure it will be.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:17 pm
That sounded great.
Great ending to the preview. Instead of saying like you were falling asleep, I think the "One reason was because I felt myself drifting there as well." you said instead really worked there.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:18 pm
Nice preview very interesting and odd as it may sound it seems like a different storytelling style it is a good taste of what is to come
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:26 pm
Seaphron
@Fish - It was out of place. The whole reason I used this place like that was a joke (my brother is getting married bachelor party) The joke IRL was that we called my mother up and were telling her we were in a strip club (I am 16) she spazed I just like adding little random stuff like that in. Sorry for the ramble of my personal life sweatdrop That would have been an interesting way to end it Fish... Hm... -gets creative- I think I am going to write the next chapter, I am really wanting to. I think you will like the final fight Fish -you didn't read it did you?- I don't think I could bring myself to let someone else write a sequel cause it would drive me mad if something I didn't like happened. I will think about that though.
I have decided though, that complete new story I had in mind is what I am going to do. I will show a preview for it soon.
Oh anyone who was wondering about the Midna Chef thing. I had a group of friends over and it was eleven and my friend was in the kitchen trying to act like Midna. It was a you had to be there thing though.
God, I'm excited for the next chapter, now, even moreso. Get to writing, and reread it a few times afterwards; go out with a bang. No, I haven't read it. I understand about the sequel. Still, I think it will be one of the stories that goes unfinished, and people will think about what the characters did after the story ended. Fan fiction! xd I like the preview, I was pretty surprised to find myself as the main character. It's looking good, and the added sense of emotion is definitely a plus.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:29 pm
lole Cult Team Go RP. >_>
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:30 pm
Waynebrizzle lole Cult Team Go RP. >_> Genius
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:36 pm
@Aku - Thanks.
@LF - Thanks, glad you liked it.
@Sauvie - Gotta try new things right? That is how I roleplay just to let you all know.
@Fish - Glad you are excited. But just to let you know the next chapter is the wedding not the end. The end is next friday and I am sticking to it. I have it typed, I just feel like being evil twisted
I can see that happening. One of my original ideas was to base a chapter after each character and what they went on to do. It was called In the Next Life (based off something said in the final chapter). Glad you liked the preview, but you won't be the main character the whole time. When I write in first person like this I switch characters off every few chapters.
For those who did not know all the lands mentioned in the preview are from my guild Land of Sylph where this story is placed in so if you look at who some Cult members are in my guild (link in signature) you will see who or what they will be in this story.
@Wayne - Your serious aren't you? -kidding-
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:39 pm
Seaphron @Aku - Thanks.
@LF - Thanks, glad you liked it.
@Sauvie - Gotta try new things right? That is how I roleplay just to let you all know.
@Fish - Glad you are excited. But just to let you know the next chapter is the wedding not the end. The end is next friday and I am sticking to it. I have it typed, I just feel like being evil twisted
I can see that happening. One of my original ideas was to base a chapter after each character and what they went on to do. It was called In the Next Life (based off something said in the final chapter). Glad you liked the preview, but you won't be the main character the whole time. When I write in first person like this I switch characters off every few chapters.
For those who did not know all the lands mentioned in the preview are from my guild Land of Sylph where this story is placed in so if you look at who some Cult members are in my guild (link in signature) you will see who or what they will be in this story.
@Wayne - Your serious aren't you? -kidding- That is a great Idea I would so read that
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:41 pm
Seaphron I can see that happening. One of my original ideas was to base a chapter after each character and what they went on to do. It was called In the Next Life (based off something said in the final chapter). Glad you liked the preview, but you won't be the main character the whole time. When I write in first person like this I switch characters off every few chapters.
For those who did not know all the lands mentioned in the preview are from my guild Land of Sylph where this story is placed in so if you look at who some Cult members are in my guild (link in signature) you will see who or what they will be in this story. Ah, good. I like the idea of Next Life, maybe you could do that sometime when you need a break from the new story, if that every comes around. And I would join Sylph, but I'm not the type for forum RPs.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:42 pm
Sauvie Seaphron @Aku - Thanks.
@LF - Thanks, glad you liked it.
@Sauvie - Gotta try new things right? That is how I roleplay just to let you all know.
@Fish - Glad you are excited. But just to let you know the next chapter is the wedding not the end. The end is next friday and I am sticking to it. I have it typed, I just feel like being evil twisted
I can see that happening. One of my original ideas was to base a chapter after each character and what they went on to do. It was called In the Next Life (based off something said in the final chapter). Glad you liked the preview, but you won't be the main character the whole time. When I write in first person like this I switch characters off every few chapters.
For those who did not know all the lands mentioned in the preview are from my guild Land of Sylph where this story is placed in so if you look at who some Cult members are in my guild (link in signature) you will see who or what they will be in this story.
@Wayne - Your serious aren't you? -kidding- That is a great Idea I would so read that That is a good idea, I think you should do it at least at some point.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:42 pm
I dunnooo. An RP of it would be neat, although I'd rather just read your stories. ^_^;
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:46 pm
@Everyone - I will at some point, there is a reason I am putting it back for a bit though. You'll see it sometime.
@Fish - Don't worry about it, you told me once awhile ago.
@Wayne - I was joking. Dont worry I wouldn't try that I don't see how that would work.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:51 pm
I would Join Sylph but I would be really lost and RP's arent my strong point
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Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 3:50 am
Seaphron I can see that happening. One of my original ideas was to base a chapter after each character and what they went on to do. That sounds like my mini story idea for Forsaken, I think I mentioned that I had considered doing more for other characters in the future. I delcare Copyright Infringment!!!! scream . Nah, only kidding, probably just my paranoid mind working overtime. You should have a subscribers list too, I'm sure it would far surpass the Forsaken one.
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