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 Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 4:24 pm
Rp Sample:
Camo opened the old, rusty door that lead to the roof of the abandoned hospital. He liked to come here to think. It was always very quiet and peaceful. He pulled the guitar case off of his back and opened it up, revealing an unassembled sniper rifle. He watched the people walk underneath him, completely oblivious to what they had done. He assembled the rifle and took aim at a man exiting a taxi. He was wearing a tuxedo and carrying a suitcase. On his fingers were many large rings. No one but Camo knew what the man had done. Two days ago a poor, homeless man died because this man couldn't spare a dollar. Oh well, an eye for an eye, a life for a life.
Camo peered through the scope and put the man's head directly between on the center of the crosshair, “Catch…” he whispered to himself. The man had just entered the building when a shot rang out. He slumped to the ground, a hole leading from the back of his head, and out between his eyes, a direct hit. He quickly disassembled the rifle, and put it back into the guitar case. He left only one clue behind, a joker card with a camouflage background and the number 318, his trademark and number of victims. Then Camo was gone.
I wrote this one up when I Pmed Mule, I hope that the sample doesn't have to be Naruto related. I know there wasn't much talking in there, but that is how that character is... sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 7:35 pm
Dontae Black .(.Kitsune_Masakazu.). Dontae Black Here's my sample: Dontae crouched down hiding in the tall grass to avoid detection from his enemy. He had been on the run for several days now without rest and his clothes were soaked with sweat and completely filthy. His black jeans and coat hung heavily on him as if they were weights made to restrain him. His scarf, which normally provided protection from the winds, now seemed more like a choke chain around his neck. Dontae sighed and tried to think of a tactic that could get him out of this situation. Sadly though, his brain seemed to be failing him at the moment, most likely due to fatigue. A second later, Dontae's body felt heavy. He felt the back of his neck, only to discover a dart. "Dang" he said, as his body gave out and he fell into a slumber. That any better?
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 7:38 pm
ViciousKira Example Saiya raised her head sleepily, eye's stil half lidded. She'd fallen asleep near the river early that morning due to the fact she'd been unable to sleep at home. She was too excited that in the next few hours she'd be in the acadamy with new people to meet. Saiya would have to get used to making friends and not enimies now! Rubbing the sleep from her eyes, she yawned and then stretched,raising herself from the cold ground. With the hum of the river beside her she'd slept like a baby, something she hadn't been able to do for about a year. Slapping herself on both sides of her face to wake her up, she put on a smile and skipped off to the awaiting school to learn new things she'd been waiting for since she was small. Making her dad proud enough so that he'd come back home was Saiya's dream and she'd do anything to make it happen! "Time to get started~!" She said happily as she began to run towards her future year!
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 7:42 pm
Camo_Sniper Rp Sample:Camo opened the old, rusty door that lead to the roof of the abandoned hospital. He liked to come here to think. It was always very quiet and peaceful. He pulled the guitar case off of his back and opened it up, revealing an unassembled sniper rifle. He watched the people walk underneath him, completely oblivious to what they had done. He assembled the rifle and took aim at a man exiting a taxi. He was wearing a tuxedo and carrying a suitcase. On his fingers were many large rings. No one but Camo knew what the man had done. Two days ago a poor, homeless man died because this man couldn't spare a dollar. Oh well, an eye for an eye, a life for a life.
Camo peered through the scope and put the man's head directly between on the center of the crosshair, “Catch…” he whispered to himself. The man had just entered the building when a shot rang out. He slumped to the ground, a hole leading from the back of his head, and out between his eyes, a direct hit. He quickly disassembled the rifle, and put it back into the guitar case. He left only one clue behind, a joker card with a camouflage background and the number 318, his trademark and number of victims. Then Camo was gone.I wrote this one up when I Pmed Mule, I hope that the sample doesn't have to be Naruto related. I know there wasn't much talking in there, but that is how that character is... sweatdrop
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Posted: Fri Oct 05, 2007 8:15 pm
mrgreen Thanks, why did you do the eek ?_________________ "Catch..." 
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Posted: Sat Oct 06, 2007 6:16 am
eh...do i pass or not? Sorry about misspelling things, my english still isn't very good ^_^'
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Posted: Sat Oct 06, 2007 1:26 pm
.(.Kitsune_Masakazu.). Mujin Inusukoshi Rping samplewhen I talk = Dark blueMy thoughts = BlueWhen others talk = CyanMy actions = Dark redMujin walks in to his class on his first day of school. Wearing a white Gi and black ninja shoes. Aw man why'd uncle make me wear these stupid clothes, everyone else gets to wear normal clothes.Mujin walks around the class looking for a seat, then signs and pulls up a chair next to some weirdo with blonde hair and an orange and blue jumpsuit. Hey, I'm Mujin. Haha, Mujin?! What kinda name is that! Mujin slams his head on his desk. Great I have to sit next to this jerk. There were no other seats so Mujin sat in class all day with his head down, because the jerk next to him was a total clown and wouldn't shut up while the teacher talked. Please day, just end for me.
Please, please, PLEASE only use one color for anything. Maybe use quotation marks for speech with everyone, and make a new paragraph or a tag (he said, "___" or "____," she replied) for new speakers. Thoughts can be put into italicsm too, or ended with the tag 's/he thought/pondered/mused/etc.
And it would probably be best to refrain from using yellow, cyan, or neon colors...they're a lot harsher on the eyes. Also try to refrain from colors that are really close together (blue and dark blue, red and dark red, etc.) or that clash (green and red, yellow and purple, blue and orange, etc.)
Can you redo this post with not as much color? And don't forget to look back for mistakes- I also noticed a few runons and spelling errors.Mujin walks in to his class on his first day of school. Wearing a white Gi and black ninja shoes. Aw man why'd uncle make me wear these stupid clothes, everyone else gets to wear normal clothes. Mujin walks around the class looking for a seat, then sighs and pulls up a chair next to some weirdo with blonde hair and an orange and blue jumpsuit. "Hey, I'm Mujin."he said "Haha, Mujin?! What kind of name is that!" said the blonde kid. Mujin slams his head on his desk. Great I have to sit next to this jerk. There were no other seats so Mujin sat in class all day with his head down, because the jerk next to him was a total clown. He just wouldn't shut up while the teacher was talking. Please day, just end for me.
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Posted: Mon Oct 08, 2007 2:14 pm
ViciousKira eh...do i pass or not? Sorry about misspelling things, my english still isn't very good ^_^'
@ Camo: That was very, very good. T T I miss roleplaying huge things like that.
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Posted: Mon Oct 08, 2007 2:17 pm
Mujin Inusukoshi Mujin walks in to his class on his first day of school. Wearing a white Gi and black ninja shoes. Aw man why'd uncle make me wear these stupid clothes, everyone else gets to wear normal clothes. Mujin walks around the class looking for a seat, then sighs and pulls up a chair next to some weirdo with blonde hair and an orange and blue jumpsuit. "Hey, I'm Mujin."he said "Haha, Mujin?! What kind of name is that!" said the blonde kid. Mujin slams his head on his desk. Great I have to sit next to this jerk. There were no other seats so Mujin sat in class all day with his head down, because the jerk next to him was a total clown. He just wouldn't shut up while the teacher was talking. Please day, just end for me.
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Posted: Mon Oct 08, 2007 6:32 pm
“Young master it is time to awaken.”
The eight year old Jericho groaned and slowly opened his eyes to see a ninja dressed in a dark blue ninja garb with a matching mask and a shiny metal plated headband. It was Hawk, his royal body guard since birth.
“What is it Hawk?” Jericho said rubbing his eyes. “Why do I have to get up so early?”
“Today we are going on a little field trip, what is the point in living in this world if you don’t take the time to look at it? You need to get out of this castle more often.”
Jericho groaned again and slowly slid out of his bed and made his way into the closest bathroom. He washed himself and brushed his teeth then looked in the mirror. He played with his hair, which came down just below his eyes and curled a little bit, for a moment then decided that he would just leave it the way it was. He put on his underwear then some black pants. He tied a golden sash around the top of the pants to keep them up. He then put on a black tank-top with the golden luck symbol on it and looked in the mirror one last time to make sure his father would approve before coming out of the bathroom.
Hawk handed Jericho a large bowl full of eggs and some chopsticks. “Lets go, you can eat on the way.” He said as he pulled Jerichos arm.
Once they stepped into the courtyard of the castle Jerichos father, Oni Ericsson, approached them.
“So Hawk where is it you are taking him this time?”
“I hadn’t decided yet sire, all of the world is beautiful so it should not be hard to find a nice peaceful place to broaden his horizons.”
“Ah this is true. Jericho, I got something for you.” Oni said and held his fist out in front of him.
“What is it?” Jericho said as he ran over to his father and hugged him.
“Close your eyes.” As soon as Jericho closed his eyes Oni put a tiger tooth necklace around Jerichos neck.
Jericho opened his eyes and grasped the tooth. “Wow dad, thanks, did you kill the tiger yourself?”
“Of course, what did you expect!” He said with a laugh.
Jericho kept looking at the tooth. “Wow…..”
Suddenly a scout came rushing up to Oni and pulled him and Hawk aside. Jericho started to eat his eggs but soon they returned and Hawk knocked the eggs out of his hands and grabbed him and commanded, “Say good by to your father, we must go!”
Jericho ran over to Oni and gave him a hug. Oni knelt over and put his hand on Jerichos shoulder and spoke. “Jericho, this may be the last time I see you, bu..” Jericho abruptly interrupted.
“What are you talking about, the last time you might see me? I will be back before the end of the day.”
“No, Jericho, we are about to be attacked by an outside force, and I have commanded Hawk to take you somewhere that will make you into a real man. I only hope that one day I will get to see what has become of you.”
Just as he finished his sentence flaming arrows started to rain down upon the courtyard.
“Hawk hurry and get Jericho out of here!” Oni commanded.
Hawk quickly dashed to Jericho and picked him up and ran towards the horse stable.
Jericho while crying and kicking yelled out and reached for his father as he got lifted away into the stable.
“No, Hawk bring me back!” He said in between tears and sobs. “I thought we were friends!” Hawk not saying a word set Jericho on a black horse then jumped on behind him. “I said go back! Please!” Hawk turned the horse around and kicked its sides and got it galloping. “Please Hawk, Please go back!” Hawk didn’t respond and took the horse down a hidden escape path. “Hawk no! Please! No!” Jericho then took his last look back at the castle through teary eyes.
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Posted: Mon Oct 08, 2007 6:51 pm
I like it Colt, can I call you that? Very dramatic, I hope to rp with you.
Unfortunately for you I have no say in this whatsoever, I'm just bored and haven't finished my character yet sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Oct 08, 2007 7:03 pm
yeah you can call me whatever you want, I dont care, but I am happy you enjoyed it...even though you cant pass me crying
hopefully I will see you around, and yeah trying to make a character is rough.
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Posted: Tue Oct 09, 2007 4:24 am
.(.Kitsune_Masakazu.). Mujin Inusukoshi Mujin walks in to his class on his first day of school. Wearing a white Gi and black ninja shoes. Aw man why'd uncle make me wear these stupid clothes, everyone else gets to wear normal clothes. Mujin walks around the class looking for a seat, then sighs and pulls up a chair next to some weirdo with blonde hair and an orange and blue jumpsuit. "Hey, I'm Mujin."he said "Haha, Mujin?! What kind of name is that!" said the blonde kid. Mujin slams his head on his desk. Great I have to sit next to this jerk. There were no other seats so Mujin sat in class all day with his head down, because the jerk next to him was a total clown. He just wouldn't shut up while the teacher was talking. Please day, just end for me.are my sentences to long? should I chop then up to make them smaller and leave out the cama's?
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Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 10:09 am
Mujin Inusukoshi are my sentences to long? should I chop then up to make them smaller and leave out the cama's?
@ Kawtic: While this is very long, it's also very fast for a post. Some of the sentences are long, too, and could be cut short or use comma's to make it a bit easier to read. It's also rather formal, so....pass.
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 5:00 am
"Hmm thats a very interesting talent, so do you have to speed up the molecules in your body or anything so that they can become how can I put it malleable enough to pass through objects?" Realizing he had gotten ahead of himself and hadn't even opened the door to his new room he put the key in the lock "Well here we go". He slowly opened the door and gazed in upon on the room, his eyes were instantly drawn to the window. He ran over to it and looked outside at the wonderful view of the school gardens. "This is wonderful, I think I'm going to like it here" He uttered softly. The then threw his bags on the bed and almost ran past the girl who had saved him. "Thank you so much!" he ran up to hug her but stopped in his tracks remembering his manners and somewhat shy. He then stated " Sorry for the rush but if your still interested in my powers come down to the gardens" and with that said he rushed down the stairs.
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