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 Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 5:51 pm
@Gods- Clearly this needs to be brought up more often....you can't put anything for the summoning because you must EARN it by going to the Island and seeking out the sage to be taught. But before that you must be a CHUUNIN. Remove that and you will be Approved
@System- Approved
*Approved unless stated otherwise by any other approval crew member
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 6:30 pm
_CioccolatoRaggaza_
@Gods- Clearly this needs to be brought up more often....you can't put anything for the summoning because you must EARN it by going to the Island and seeking out the sage to be taught. But before that you must be a CHUUNIN. Remove that and you will be Approved
@System- Approved
*Approved unless stated otherwise by any other approval crew memberI meant to remove that part, but it must have slipped my mind when I was reviewing it. Sorry.
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Posted: Wed Jul 13, 2011 7:06 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 6:19 am
_CioccolatoRaggaza_
@Kirei- Sorry but your profile needs to be blank of any techniques >> And remove the Hyouton as well. Remove the summoning info too. Can't do that till you're a chuunin and only if you find the sage. Once that's done, post that you changed it and I'll look at it again.
@Chez- Approved
@RipYa- I'm approving this on the grounds that you've already been approved for the Hyuga bloodline. If you haven't, you better get approved. Approved
*Approved unless stated otherwise by any other approval crew memberRevised! ^^ (I'm Kirei...)
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 8:15 am
@Aoi- Approved
*Approved unless stated otherwise by any other approval crew member
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 11:17 am
 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Rayne Namaney Ukyo
Nickname: None
Age: 13
Birthdate: 12/3
Gender:Female
Height: 4'7
Weight: 93 Lbs
Nindo: " Do not dream of death, as if death itself was undone."
Personality: Quiet and soft-spoken, Rayne really doesn't like to repeat herself. She usually won't speak if it isn't needed, but she isn't one to keep quiet when she has something to say. Her temper is quick, and her tongue is sharp. She isn't one to just let something go if it ticks her off, she may be little, but that doesn’t mean she couldn’t kick someone’s arse.
Village: Kumogakure (Cloud)
Rank: Genin
Class: Bloodline Class
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Bloodline: Ukyo
Chakra Pool: 225
Chakra Color: Iredesent White
Chakra Element: Fire, Earth
Strengths:
• Artistry
• Ranged Combat
Weaknesses:
• Water
• Loss of her Scroll.
Fears:
• Water
• Being Buried Alive
Attributes:
• Learn Bloodline Techniques [1] Post Faster
• All bloodline techniques cost one rank less chakra to use
Class Attribute:
• Weak Blood: Bloodline technique effects slightly increased
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両
AC:
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Type: Sword
Weapon Range: Arm Length+ 1 foot.
Weapon Weight: 30 ounces
Weapon Location: A hilt on her thigh.
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Summoning Type:
Summon Sage: No
Pacts:
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
• 15 Shuriken
• 10 Kunai
• 10 Senbon
• 4 Bells
• 5 Explosive Tags
• 5 Smoke Bombs
• 5 Fuma Shuriken
• 50 Feet of Steel Wire
• 3 Small Scrolls
• 1 Medium Scroll
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|т є c н η ι q υ є ѕ|├▬
▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton: {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [ Transformation Technique ]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [ Substitution Technique ]
• Bushin no Jutsu [ Clone Technique ]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [ Act of Water Surface Walking ]
• Kinobori no Waza [ Act of Tree Climbing ]
• Kai [ Release ]
Katon
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Doton
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Bloodline Jutsu
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▬▬┤|G e n j u t s u
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▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
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▬▬┤|B u k i j u t s u
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▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬
Rayne grew up, just like all of the other kids in the clan, drawing, painting, doing calligraphy, artistic things. Things at which she excelled. Rayne was always quiet and shut off from the other kids, she did not appreciate, or like attention. She is still soft-spoken, though she speaks her mind more, and tends to open up a bit to people she trusts. She finds her solace in drawing.
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 11:27 am
Humm interesting approved ^.^
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 10:40 pm
 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Zane Xithyl
Nickname: Shrimp
Age: 13
Birthdate: 8/3
Gender: Male
Height: 4'9
Weight: 100lb
Nindo: " Enjoy every moment in life u never know when it will end."
Personality: cheerful friendly hyper
Village: Sand
Rank: Genin
Class: Bukijutsu
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Bloodline: The Shounin Clan
•Mission Expert (Passive)
D-ranked missions: -1 post to complete, +10 ryo
C-ranked missions: -1 post to complete, +25 ryo
B-ranked missions: -2 posts to complete, +50 ryo
A-ranked missions: -2 posts to complete, +100 ryo
S-ranked missions: -3 posts to complete, +200 ryo
•Ryouri-nin Status (passive)
Food consumed takes 1 post to digest, & another post for cool-down. Eating 2 posts in a row causes a food-related illness, due to the incompatibility between chakra foods.
Genin: Food contains +/- 5 chakra to those that consume it.
Chuunin: Food contains +/- 10 chakra to those that consume it.
Jounin: Food contains +/- 20 chakra to those that consume it.
Konin: Food contains +/- 40 chakra to those that consume it.
•Jinton (Passive)
Genin, Attribute: Slightly increased movements.
Chuunin, Attribute: Mildly increased movements.
Jounin, Attributes: Moderately increased movements, slightly increased jutsu performance.
Konin, Attributes: Heavily increased movements, mildly increased jutsu performance.
Chakra Pool: 200
Chakra Color: Light green
Chakra Element: Wind lighting
Strengths:
• Burst Shrimp : Zane uses his bloodline jutsu combined with his Taijutsu and Bukijutsu to help him avoid obstacles and become even faster.
• Taijutsu + Bukijutsu: Zane is able to combine his Taijutsu and his Bukijutsu to change their style to his own uses.
Weaknesses:
• Assassin's code : Zane will only use small bladed weapons.
• Shrimp's size : Zane 's small size and build is a weakness and he hates when people bring it up.
Fears:
• His mother (only thing that can make him sad )
• Being alone
Attributes:
• Dagger Master : While holding an Dagger Bukijutsu and Taijutsu Require half the chakra cost.
• Shrimp's Weapon : Custom weapons only take one custom slot.
Class Attribute:
• Arrogant Skill: Able to wield weapons with slightly advanced prowess
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両0
AC: 0
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Name: Xithyl's code
Weapon Type: Dagger
Weapon Range: 10 inch
Weapon Weight: 1lb
Weapon Location: on waist
Weapon Info: This is the dagger that Zane's mother used to end her own life....... Zane holds his dagger very dear and thinks that it is his mother watching over him as long as he has it.
Summoning Type: none
Summon Sage: no
Pacts: none
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
• 5 flash bombs
• 15 throwing knifes
• 5 explosion tags
• 5 kunai
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|т є c н η ι q υ є ѕ|├▬
▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton:
• Henge no Jutsu [ Transformation Technique ]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [ Substitution Technique ]
• Bushin no Jutsu [ Clone Technique ]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [ Act of Water Surface Walking ]
• Kinobori no Waza [ Act of Tree Climbing ]
• Kai [ Release ]
Fuuton
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Raiton
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Jinton
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▬▬┤|F u u i n j u t s u
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Sobagai Deba Sentou - Stage 0
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▬▬┤|B u k i j u t s u
Juurai Toorima - Stage 0
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▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
Kumogakure no Taijutsu - Stage 0
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▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬ Zane Xithyl was born to an happy mother and father who loved him very much. Zane's mother didn't come from his village she was from an small outside village and was part of the Xithyl family. His father was a cheerful man of the Shounin Clan. When Zane was nine his father died on a mission it was to kill the kage of an village the village wouldn't tell his family due to it wasn't suppose to be known. So his father died as an traitor to avoid an war...... and with this his mother feel into deep depression. A year later his mother one day told him he had a brother with the same last name as her but didn't tell him his first name as she never wanted him to know the shame of what she did. On the day after telling him she slit her own wrist with her family's dagger. Zane was broken by this for the next year he wouldn't talk to anyone he just held his dagger close to him and called it his mother's name. but one day he realized that he had to move forward he had to find his brother and make friends he wouldn't be like his mother. So Zane kept training to become a ninja to make his father and mother proud and to find his lost brother and to find his mothers broken past. Zane now lives with his clan but has changed his last name to his mother's last name to help find his brother.
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 11:09 pm
• Mission Expert + : Zane gains 2x AC when he completes a mission.
• Smart Shrimp : 5 + custom slots.
These are both denied. AC is easily gained through extending missions and/or during mini-arcs. A total of 13 custom slots is also a tad much. We'd accept 1.25x AC & 2+ custom slots. If you'd like the original amounts asked for, there will have to be some kind of offsets proportional to the gain.
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 11:31 pm
Your reworked attributes are good to go now, so TwilightZeo is approved.
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Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 11:45 pm
(one last thing changeing to sand village lol )
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 12:31 am
 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Ken Xithyl
Nickname:
Age: 16
Birthdate: July 2nd
Gender: Male
Height: 5'9
Weight: 159lbs
Nindo: "I'll shape my future with my own two hands.."
Personality: Easy-going, Cynical
Village: Sand
Rank: Gennin
Class: Animal tamer
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Bloodline: Katei no Neko
Chakra Pool: [175]
Chakra Color: Red
Chakra Element: Fire, Wind
Strengths:
• Ninjutsu
• Close Combat
Weaknesses:
• Water
• Genjutsu
Fears:
• Spiders
• Abandonment
Attributes:
• Increased speed
• Learns taijutsu in 1 less post
Class Attribute:
• C. Attribute [1] - Runt's Instincts: Senses slightly increased
• C. Attribute [2] - Close Knit: Able to understand and give signals to partner
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両0
AC:0
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Type: Metal claws
Weapon Range: 1.5 feet
Weapon Weight: 5 lbs
Weapon Location: on my hand
Summoning Type:
Summon Sage: No
Pacts:
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
• 10 kunai
• 3 flash bombs
• 10 explosion tags
• 7 throwing stars
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|т є c н η ι q υ є ѕ|├▬
▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton: {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [ Transformation Technique ]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [ Substitution Technique ]
• Bushin no Jutsu [ Clone Technique ]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [ Act of Water Surface Walking ]
• Kinobori no Waza [ Act of Tree Climbing ]
• Kai [ Release ]
Katon
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Fuuton
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▬▬┤|T a i j u t s u
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▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬
Ken grew up in a small village, where his clan lived separated from any of the great nations. He was only a kid when he's father, who had been a part of the Katei no Neko clan gave him the partner he would grow up with, a female baby tiger. Everything seemed peaceful until his father went out on a mission, that he had taken up from one of the major villages, because they desperately needed the money. He ended up never coming back and it was later that he had been announced as being KIA. His mother so filled with grief and not having an attachment to the village any longer decided it best to leave to one of the major villages, however she left her son behind thinking that it was best for him to live with members of his own clan. After having grown up inside his village he had come to realize that his parents had left him, and humbly thanked the people who had taken care of him as a child, he then set out to make his own path as a ninja.
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 12:25 pm
I'm not too sure about the first attribute, but pets CAN learn ninjutsu. Your character just needs to buy the necessary scroll. So change that one.
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 12:28 pm
 ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ρ є r ѕ σ η α ℓ • ∂ α т α|├▬
Full Name: Katon, Namida
Nickname:
Age: 12
Birthdate: June 21
Gender: Male
Height: 44 inches
Weight: 93
Nindo: "A Ninja's duty isn't to his people, but to his peoples hope."
Personality: Wise for his youth, self sacrificing, long fused volcanoe, respectful, childish, passionate
Village: Village hidden in the cloud
Rank: Genin
Class: Genjtusu Class
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c σ м в α т • ∂ α т α|├▬
Chakra Pool: 225
Chakra Color: Sakura pink
Chakra Element: Lightning, wind
Strengths:
• Genjutsu
• Stategist
Weaknesses:
• Self sacrificing
• Weak to water
• Not afraid of death
Fears:
• Afraid of Drowning
• Afraid of eternity
Attributes:
• Physical speed increased
Class Attribute:
• Perceiving Mind: Able to detect Genjutsu rank D
• Learn Genjutsu [1] Post Faster
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|c α r є є r • ∂ α т α|├▬
Ryo: 両 0
AC: 0
Missions Complete:
D Rank :: 0
C Rank :: 0
B Rank :: 0
A Rank :: 0
S Rank :: 0
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ω є α ρ σ η • ∂ α т α|├▬
Weapon Type: Katana
Weapon Range: 5 feet
Weapon Weight: 2.4 kilos
Weapon Location: right hip
▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|ι η ν є η т σ r у|├▬
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▬▬┤|N i n j u t s u
Maruton: {Start with the following six only}
• Henge no Jutsu [ Transformation Technique ]
• Kawarimi no Jutsu [ Substitution Technique ]
• Bushin no Jutsu [ Clone Technique ]
• Suimen Hokou no Waza [ Act of Water Surface Walking ]
• Kinobori no Waza [ Act of Tree Climbing ]
• Kai [ Release ]
{Your first element's name} •Raiton
{Your second element's name} •Fuuton
▬▬┤|G e n j u t s u
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▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬┤|н ι ѕ т σ r у|├▬
Katon is the son of a drunkard shinobi. His father named him after his favorite drink, which for Katon's sake, just so happened to change from rattlesnake brandy to Fire Whiskey. Katon's mom tried desperately to keep her husband in line, but he was to much a free spirit. Eventually she managed to convince him not to name their first child Katon, and he agreed. On the night of conception he went back on his word. While his wife was recovering, he put Katon on the childs birth certificate. Katon's life was ordinary, watching his mom and dad argue over the smallest of things, to watching his mom explode in a incredible rage that scared even his shinobi father. Other than these outbursts, he had a loving family.
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 2:34 pm
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