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 Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 7:53 pm
Chapter 43 Added!
-Expect the End by 23/2/07-
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 7:58 pm
What? Feb 23rd?
DDD:
You'd better make another story after..
-reads-
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:02 pm
Nice chapter. Not as good as some others, but about average.
THE END!? SO SOON!? There better be a sequel. gonk
I can't help but notice that Tatsu hasn't shown himself since he was found. Not nagging, just wondering where he went.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:04 pm
huh, nice chapter Seaphron a little odd but still good
@end of the story: there Damn well better be a sequal this story is so damn good
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:04 pm
I'd rather have my stories too short than too long. It's a good length really.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:09 pm
That was a good chapter.
And Wayne is right.
Just... Make another story after.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:12 pm
@LF - Yep it is coming to an end. What did you think of the chapter? Nevermind.
@Tatsu - Thanks. Average is better than bad. The reason Tatsu hasn't been seen is... i forgot about him. Sorry. I brought him back for one main reason and seeing as I wrote out (not many have seen it yet) what I meant to with him, it slipped my mind. I will definatly be using him though (you gave me an idea) I have been a little spacy lately if yall couldn't tell so MY BAD!
@Sauvie - Had to try something a bit different. I don't know for me it worked for yall it was about average thanks for the feedback.
@Wayne - Exactly it would get crappy if I just kept dragging it on. So what did you think of the chapter?
And now I know you are all curious as to know of a sequel to this. Honestly I don't know if I will write one (as of now). The idea I had worked with isn't as fun or entertaining as I thought it would be so I have scrapped it. On the good news though. I have a very very vague storyline in my head that in no way will relate to this one that I am working with. Who knows we'll have to wait and see.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:17 pm
I think it was great. I can definitely start to see a nice ending coming up.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:20 pm
Seaphron
@Tatsu - Thanks. Average is better than bad. The reason Tatsu hasn't been seen is... i forgot about him. Sorry. I brought him back for one main reason and seeing as I wrote out (not many have seen it yet) what I meant to with him, it slipped my mind. I will definatly be using him though (you gave me an idea) I have been a little spacy lately if yall couldn't tell so MY BAD!
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Don't use him on my account. I want this story to be as great as possible. If you think using Tatsu would help it become greater, then do by all means. Otherwise, don't Just do what you think would make the best story.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:22 pm
Why don't you make a completely new story?
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:24 pm
Sorry Seaphron if I was a bit Direct in my comment, but you have one hell of a writing style that even hooked me and God knows getting me to read consistently is hard enough. But your story is great, as for a sequel I think if you have a good concept for a story as you did with this one write it out and if it isn't as well taken (which it should be) you can scrap it and start anew if you would wish to
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:36 pm
It seemed a bit out of place for all of us to be going to a strip club, but perhaps I'm just a bit out of touch with how you have the characters in mind. It was an alright chapter, and I thought that it may be the end, where all of the Culties got out, and I fought to the death with Echo. xd
Anyway, perhaps you could work with someone else and have them write a sequel someday.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:54 pm
@Wayne - Thank you 3nodding
@Tatsu - Oh no don't worry you just gave me an idea, to work with I am glad you reminded me I have a spot for you that I wasn't sure who to use.
@LF - That is what I meant.
@Sauvie - Don't be. That is how I like my feedback, I don't like the goody goody coverings on feedback (no offense to anyone) I am glad you said it how you said it.
@Fish - It was out of place. The whole reason I used this place like that was a joke (my brother is getting married bachelor party) The joke IRL was that we called my mother up and were telling her we were in a strip club (I am 16) she spazed I just like adding little random stuff like that in. Sorry for the ramble of my personal life sweatdrop That would have been an interesting way to end it Fish... Hm... -gets creative- I think I am going to write the next chapter, I am really wanting to. I think you will like the final fight Fish -you didn't read it did you?- I don't think I could bring myself to let someone else write a sequel cause it would drive me mad if something I didn't like happened. I will think about that though.
I have decided though, that complete new story I had in mind is what I am going to do. I will show a preview for it soon.
Oh anyone who was wondering about the Midna Chef thing. I had a group of friends over and it was eleven and my friend was in the kitchen trying to act like Midna. It was a you had to be there thing though.
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 8:58 pm
Hope the new story is great too.
Oh, and.. get writing D<
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Posted: Fri Feb 16, 2007 9:02 pm
ok cool Seaphron I really hope your next story is as awesome as this one
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