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Incoming long review. Brace yourself. sweatdrop

Choke their rivers with elven dead!

-evil glare of death- I hate you stare

That was a much easier read, thank you for working on that.

My main concern is that your mecha and your character have basically impenetrable defenses, anti-super-dreadnaught weaponry, avatar-level psychic abilities...well, I think the main concern isn't so much that. These appear to be symptoms of what I imagine my main concern must be....though I'm not sure how to put this into words.

This character and mecha mean much to you, I can see that. What we lack here is balance. The main concept to roleplaying is conflict. This can be a personal conflict, it can be an external conflict, but without the conflict, there's no story.

The sooner the conflict is resolved, the sooner the story ends.

Now it's good to have a conflict resolved. There's a reason why people who are avid fans of Naruto and Bleach hate the multi-season filler spree. But it's not good to have someone who can resolve any situation he's thrown against quickly and easily. This is where your character is now.

Hero. Current anime and movies are all about what a hero is: flashy, impressive, lots of powers so he can overcome everything that stands in his way. - ...but let's take a look at what really makes a hero. Who is he once you strip away all his powers? Is he still the same man? Was he only his powers?

Who were the real heroes in Lord of the Rings? Sam and Frodo.

Gimli and Gandalf, Aragorn and Legolas...these guys were the ones with all the fighting prowess and power... but while they were in their element, these two hobbits who had no adventuring skill whatsoever crossed a world they'd never been through before. Death awaited them at any misstep or wrong turn. And they only had the advice of a friend of the family...the advice that said that this ring that Frodo so loved should be destroyed in the fires of the most evil place ever to haunt legend. And yet Frodo and Sam did cross the world, barefoot, hungry, hounded by unspeakable evil spirits, dragons, orcs and demons to destroy this precious ring in the most forsaken part of the world.

The way Goldbrease is now, he will never have the opportunity to tell a story like this. While many people might cheer for him the way Legolas and Gandalf were cheered, no one would truly feel his plight. No one would care for his journey. He was never in any real danger, there was nothing particularly heroic. And if he did tell someone ICly about his prowess in battle, the odds are equal that he'd either get a kind cheer, or a jealous, "Well if I had a sword that could cut through battleships, I could do that too."

There is a lot of care I see for your character. I see that when you describe his potato-eating conquest, and when he cooks pancakes on the grill with his psycho control ability, while looking in the fridge for syrup. But this really cool sounding guy is completely buried under all the tech he has, all the psionic powers he wields, and all his super genius. You don't have to make him a total under-average joe, but you should do something drastic to his character design, otherwise he'll never have the opportunity for greatness.

You have the heart to become a good storyteller, but you have a long road ahead of you still. But then, so did Frodo.

and a space fighter jet with a gun capable of whipeing everything off the planet isn't over powered?

but thats not related to this.. exactly... but you have to take into consideration the price most likely to repair this mecha is around 200 billion gold. and my character has been threw alot of rp's developing hismelf.

Hmm? Format? If they really need a format suggest what I have in my thread. Toss in an intro section, description, abilties and skills, skip equipment, toss in some history to finish it off. (With references to which has been roleplayed out)

I'm not a big stickler for forms.

thats a good point. most people wouldn't go walking around makeing people go crazy thinking they have snakes and lobsters crawling out from under there skin.

well i get yah aileen on that the topic of dragging other people in sweatdrop . I wasn't dragging ther person in i was dragging the ship in... but I kinda forget that yah can't pull the ship in without the pilot.

infected with what? liveing beings? and wouldn't it need a power core the size of a battle ship to be able to fire that kinda blast? and..... why... is it called the sun cannon?

lindy's VW is confuseing.

anyways I had alredy toned down the mecha's speed. It was able to reach a speed that would be uncontrollable. (not to mention it would eat fuel like a pott belly pig run loose in a kibble and bits warehouse.)