Sakura Ai
Length and Pacing: It went along at a nice pacing length until the very end, which seemingly ended a bit abruptly. But overall the fight and the suspense of the begining was excellent. I greatly enjoyed reading this post.
General Grammer rules: A few spelling errors here and there, and some sentances that should be linked. Overall you took care of this section with no promblem.
Personality: Sakura's past and attitude shined in your post here. I learned more about her and the way she is. Very well done
Use of Enviroment: A different way of battling.. Linking it into another world. That was very creative. And very different. I Guess Ria High can do more then just send robots now huh? you extended Ria's boundries here. and thats a good thing.
Details: I like the Mad hatter. XP and next time, have Sakura Ai's clothes actually get ripped off XD. J./k j.k
Overall. I Think you are among the higher RPiers. better then me.
8/8
Very creative post. Very Unique
~*Ria High School*~
Good ol' fashion Magical High school RPing.
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