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 Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 2:54 pm
Ismaru Windsoul I can't wait to read more of them, but hopefully soon we will get the end of game update. Yeah. XD I'm sort of itching for the next game...I have ideas. ninja
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 2:55 pm
InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul I can't wait to read more of them, but hopefully soon we will get the end of game update. Yeah. XD I'm sort of itching for the next game...I have ideas. ninja I can't wait to read them. I might try writing for being GM at some point. I just need to improve my writing skills a bit.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 2:56 pm
I've been writing for ages. XD So yeah. >_>
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 2:57 pm
InternalHardDrive I've been writing for ages. XD So yeah. >_> I'll attempt to send you a link to where I wrote two chapters of a story that I discontinued, I hope I remember my name and password on the site.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 2:58 pm
Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive I've been writing for ages. XD So yeah. >_> I'll attempt to send you a link to where I wrote two chapters of a story that I discontinued, I hope I remember my name and password on the site. Okay then. <3
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:01 pm
InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive I've been writing for ages. XD So yeah. >_> I'll attempt to send you a link to where I wrote two chapters of a story that I discontinued, I hope I remember my name and password on the site. Okay then. <3 Here it is. War of Talnon, A Mercenaire's Tale I think in the dialog parts I use "he said" way to often.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:03 pm
Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive I've been writing for ages. XD So yeah. >_> I'll attempt to send you a link to where I wrote two chapters of a story that I discontinued, I hope I remember my name and password on the site. Okay then. <3 Here it is. War of Talnon, A Mercenaire's Tale I think in the dialog parts I use "he said" way to often. Not bad. ^^ One thing I do think you do too much, though, is telling rather than showing.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:04 pm
InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive I've been writing for ages. XD So yeah. >_> I'll attempt to send you a link to where I wrote two chapters of a story that I discontinued, I hope I remember my name and password on the site. Okay then. <3 Here it is. War of Talnon, A Mercenaire's Tale I think in the dialog parts I use "he said" way to often. Not bad. ^^ One thing I do think you do too much, though, is telling rather than showing. Thanks. How do I improve that?
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:13 pm
Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid"
When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest."
Showing gives more life to your work. ^^
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:15 pm
InternalHardDrive Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid" When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest." Showing gives more life to your work. ^^ Thanks IHD. I plan on writing something again soon, I hope. I just need something to write about...
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:19 pm
Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid" When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest." Showing gives more life to your work. ^^ Thanks IHD. I plan on writing something again soon, I hope. I just need something to write about... I know that feeling. XD It's hard to find something to write about.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 3:31 pm
InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid" When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest." Showing gives more life to your work. ^^ Thanks IHD. I plan on writing something again soon, I hope. I just need something to write about... I know that feeling. XD It's hard to find something to write about. Wielder came up with the introduction. xp I have an idea, but I don't want to write a Fanfic with an OC.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 4:08 pm
Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid" When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest." Showing gives more life to your work. ^^ Thanks IHD. I plan on writing something again soon, I hope. I just need something to write about... I know that feeling. XD It's hard to find something to write about. Wielder came up with the introduction. xp I have an idea, but I don't want to write a Fanfic with an OC. I have an interesting plot you could use if you twist it around a bit.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 4:33 pm
Return_of_Watanuki-san Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid" When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest." Showing gives more life to your work. ^^ Thanks IHD. I plan on writing something again soon, I hope. I just need something to write about... I know that feeling. XD It's hard to find something to write about. Wielder came up with the introduction. xp I have an idea, but I don't want to write a Fanfic with an OC. I have an interesting plot you could use if you twist it around a bit. I'll tell you what I can do with it, once I hear it.
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Posted: Sat Jul 08, 2006 4:41 pm
Ismaru Windsoul Return_of_Watanuki-san Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Ismaru Windsoul InternalHardDrive Well, essentially, you tell the reader what's going on. It's sort of saying like "He was afraid" When instead you could say something like "His palms were sweaty, and his heart thudded like a heavy leaden weight in his chest." Showing gives more life to your work. ^^ Thanks IHD. I plan on writing something again soon, I hope. I just need something to write about... I know that feeling. XD It's hard to find something to write about. Wielder came up with the introduction. xp I have an idea, but I don't want to write a Fanfic with an OC. I have an interesting plot you could use if you twist it around a bit. I'll tell you what I can do with it, once I hear it. Plot: Girl is new ruler of country. (Queen) She’s touring her new lands when it comes to her attention that she is being followed and such by the agents of this one guy. This one guy has plans to take the throne, and so he learns all this stuff about her, and wants to find out if it’s true or not, so he goes and meets her. So, not knowing that it’s the guy who’s been sending people after her and such, she meets him, and they fall in love. But the guy knows that he can’t love her because of his people are anticipating his take over and would kill him if he did. But he ends up telling her who he is, and she doesn’t care and all that, and she understands why they can’t get married and all that. But, she finds out she’s pregnant with his child. When the boy’s like four, then the threat on the guy’s life is gone, (so he thinks) and he can finally make his relationship public, but he gets really scared about proposing and stuff. The day he finally gets the courage to do it, both the girl and him get attacked. He gets hit on his shoulder and his legs and in so many places, and he loses a lot of blood and goes into a coma and such. The girl just gets hit in the leg, but is generally okay. So, she sits by his bedside for days, waiting for him to wake up and stuff. And he does, and then he proposes and becomes prince-regent and their son has a ‘legal’ father and they all live happily ever after.
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