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First of all, you need to properly edit your first post as laid out in the rules.

As for the character... .wow. I hate to sound harsh, but this character is over the top to an extreme degree.

- Why was his father arrested without trial?
- His mother was a prostitute in order to feed her baby (overdone)
- Mother was murdered (again, why are 99% of RP characters always orphans?)
- Erik was raped, molested, beatened and burned from hundreds of foster families? I'm not saying the US adpotion center is perfect, but seiously? And there's no way he could go through hundreds of homes in 11 years.
- Also, the US Marine corps have a vigorous mental stability screening process. It would be very unlikely he could pass a psche screening for the officer career track with that much abuse under his belt.
- Again, it makes little sense that in modern day American people would beat and rape a child just because he was German? Even if he was Muslim, that would be a bit hard to swallow.
- Speaking of... he made it to the seocnd highest rank even available to the US Marines by age 24? Thats a lifetime goal for most career-Marines, he would be a prodigy to make to that tank by age 35.
- You can't join the Marines until your 17, just on that note.
- And he blew up a whole house of civilians and showed bo remorse?

Even IF all that was indeed true, you have to think about why Moreau would even want a man who seemed so mentally unstable on the island. And more than that...he would more likely turn him into a mouse than a Great White Shark. o-o

I would suggest you give the character a bit or reworking. Tone him down. Remember, these are susposed to be believable as not to break the setting of the island. You don't have to scrap the concept all together, but try filtering him through a few screens. I like the idea of an immigrant family, and I even like the ex-marine angle. Go with that, but put a little bit more development into him then just ringing him through every tradegy you can think of.

EDIT: I just realized the thread isn't in te guild. Which is fine, you don't HAVE to be, therefore you don't HAVE to format the first post like I said >.> But also, keep in mind that only quest threads made in the guild can be eligible for Questor-based events.

It could be worked that way, or just a wealthy businessman who wanted to "buy" or.. or long term hire her. I don't know the ins and outs of the hiring process of modern geisha. Are there such things as "live in" geisha that really rich men could have?