If stuff gets rather violent/escalated, they get a hold of some hired help from the same firm that handles the casino. After all, they aren't risking the same appearance that makes them famous and brings in the money.
Posted: Sat Jan 04, 2014 11:45 am
Maerua
But of course. That makes sense.
I imagine interesting side stories if any of our characters ever ended up in Gambino. Flings or relationships could blossom. A group vacation at the casino would facilitate these romantic ambitions, or something would go wrong and a mission would ensue. Endless possibilities.emotion_dowant
Hokay, finally put up my profile revision for at least my main character. It's a little longer than Jay's sample ones by about 3 lines, but I think I followed format pretty well aside from that. Lemme know what you guys think.
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Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 12:37 am
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It looks like you quoted my post to get the fancy bits razz I strayed a little from the template but nobody's required to use it exactly like I posted. People can pepper up the template however they like so long as its readable and covers what's necessary.
On the content itself, I could have sworn you were doing something different with the backstory (but I don't remember if I heard that or not).
Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 5:32 am
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Nariana
It looks like you quoted my post to get the fancy bits razz I strayed a little from the template but nobody's required to use it exactly like I posted. People can pepper up the template however they like so long as its readable and covers what's necessary.
On the content itself, I could have sworn you were doing something different with the backstory (but I don't remember if I heard that or not).
I like how you did your image alignment, but I'm totally lost as to how you did it. I tried looking at your post in a quote, but I was too tired to focus.
It looks like you quoted my post to get the fancy bits razz I strayed a little from the template but nobody's required to use it exactly like I posted. People can pepper up the template however they like so long as its readable and covers what's necessary.
On the content itself, I could have sworn you were doing something different with the backstory (but I don't remember if I heard that or not).
I noticed the small deviation, but I liked yours more.
I said the same thing to myself about the backstory. But then I thought that maybe the family blah blah wouldn't affect much.
Begin small rant of explanation for my thoughts on this:
What I really want most in this rewrite is to change her personality, so I included hints about corrupt business practices and how that could be emphasized later. I feel that's more substantial and easier to work with. I did little to show that pre-revision (if at all). Plus, it's a common trait among businessmen. You said once that it's odd if her record's squeaky clean and working for a gang. I'm working to incorporate a scandal somewhere.
If anything, I plan to rewrite her adolescence and focus on her post high school years. Seems like the time when she would most likely evolve and solidify her crooked personality. I always envision the typical above-average upbringing richer kids have, which is a boring thing. I rarely imagine an interesting childhood when it comes to her, unlike someone like Koji who lost his brother and whatnot that I recall. So until I find reason to affect her childhood and segue into something in adulthood, I just decided to leave most of the plain details as-is. There are personal stories, but they are currently omitted. And I'm not sure how I feel about a Bill Gates-type of engineer-- no college, make money in a basement.
Are you okay with this?
Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 11:22 am
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I like how you did your image alignment, but I'm totally lost as to how you did it. I tried looking at your post in a quote, but I was too tired to focus.
I'll figure it out today.
That's done with the " style='float:left' />
tag is used several times to provide an offset by n number of pixels, diagonally from the top corner.)
[imgleft]imageURL[/imgleft]Your text starts here, notice no spaces or returns on this first line
Nariana
I remember the personality bit.
Let me simmer a bit with the teen and later part of the timeline and something might come to mind. Crooked personality might be genetic, ingrained by crooked parents, or 'normalized' by the media, but it could be from a revelation, desperation to get out of a situation.... (and this is where I'm lacking more words. I just woke up, so it might be a bit.)
I like how you did your image alignment, but I'm totally lost as to how you did it. I tried looking at your post in a quote, but I was too tired to focus.
I'll figure it out today.
That's done with the " style='float:left' />
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[imgleft]imageURL[/imgleft]Your text starts here, notice no spaces or returns on this first line
Nariana
I remember the personality bit.
Let me simmer a bit with the teen and later part of the timeline and something might come to mind. Crooked personality might be genetic, ingrained by crooked parents, or 'normalized' by the media, but it could be from a revelation, desperation to get out of a situation.... (and this is where I'm lacking more words. I just woke up, so it might be a bit.)
you are seriously a codesaver (like a lifesaver, but for computer code). emotion_hug
Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 1:29 pm
Maerua
You awake now?emotion_awesome
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Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 2:26 pm
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You awake now?emotion_awesome
Enough to not p***k my fingers while sewing (making a wizard hat out of scrap cloth right now; would have gone to the store to get yards of cloth but we're practically snowed in over here), but still kind of foggy.
...or it could be from disillusionment. A naive outlook from childhood until she encountered cutthroat competition in the education system that changed her views, and similar experience when working that solidified it.
Could form into some thinking pattern like "'Fair' is from the perspective of who benefits the most. Most do not care about what's 'fair' for everyone because it often comes at their own expense. You will not be spared by other people, unless it's in their interest. Ergo, you should only look out for yourself."
Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 2:46 pm
Maerua
How cool! Sorry about the snow, though. (edit: ha ha, made a pun w/o realizing)
That's gold. I love it!emotion_dowant
Do I need to add something in the history about that, or not really necessary right now?
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Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 3:00 pm
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How cool! Sorry about the snow, though. (edit: ha ha, made a pun w/o realizing)
That's gold. I love it!emotion_dowant
Do I need to add something in the history about that, or not really necessary right now?
Uh, you can if you want. Don't paste it word-for-word though, it's too rambly. At least do what you can to rephrase it first.
Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 3:04 pm
Maerua
Yeah, I'm gonna like change a sentence. Watch it take me half an hour. xD
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Posted: Sun Jan 05, 2014 3:53 pm
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Yeah, I'm gonna like change a sentence. Watch it take me half an hour. xD
(Sorry for being afk, was stuck washing a ton of silverware that I didn't use at all)
I was more hoping you'd put it into your own words.
Fifteen minutes is my minimum. I always end up writing something out, then rephrase it a few times, then change it outright, rephrase again, then I notice there's a typo...you get the picture. And sometimes there's still typos that get through.
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