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Posted: Tue Feb 24, 2009 7:03 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 24, 2009 7:12 pm
Okay, two quick things.
1. In at least two places, you have sentences that run like this: 'Still; blah blah blah is blah blah blah.' Since still is not its own sentence, a semicolon is not appropriate.
2. For the personality section, I would like to see a few more negative traits mixed in with the positive. He's childlike, right? Then, speaking from personal experience, he is likely to be lazy, put off work in favor of play, be selfish, be unable to connect with people on a more than superficial level, or, more likely, some combination of those traits. He's just a bit too perfect at the moment.
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Posted: Wed Feb 25, 2009 6:21 am
Too perfect, NOOO!! That was exactly what I was trying to avoid. Ok, ONE MORE TIME D=
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Posted: Wed Feb 25, 2009 3:48 pm
^-^ Already looking much better. I'd say that he has enough faults, now, unless you want to add more. Let me know when you're done.
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Posted: Thu Feb 26, 2009 3:58 pm
.::The King's Daughter::. b a s i c i n f o r m a t i o n Hello, My name is I Have Been on this Earth for About I am of the I'm staying in dorm number I'm currently enrolled in grade number
c o l o r m e p r e t t y
How I Normally Look
River is a relatively unassuming looking girl, with wavy brown, almost milk chocolate colored, hair which she commonly uses as a shield between herself and the world; from beneath these dark waves, round, pale blue eyes that seem almost shy, stare out curiously. She has olive tinted skin, bronzed by years in the sun, that’s turned all but golden because it’s tanned so darkly; her skin is littered with thousands of silvery scars and quite a few reddish brown freckles which she fondly describes as “cinnamon colored”. At first glance she doesn’t look like much, most of her face hidden behind hair that, while it only falls to just below her shoulder blades, still manages to fall so that it hides half or more of her face at all times; yet if one looks at her closely they would find that she has a strong stubborn set jaw and a triangular shaped face with a sharp chin, making her appear, not shy, but extremely determined.
Unlike most girls who have scars, River is chuffed with the thin white lines, and she bares her arms and legs proudly whenever she can, most often running around in tank tops or tiny shorts. Being a more outdoorsy girl, the first hint of this seen in her dark skin, her limbs are toned and shaped fairly well and are overall surprisingly muscular despite appearing to be a bit on the thin side. She’s very tall for a girl of her age, or any age really, as she’s 5’11” in her normal barefoot state, and this is only emphasized by what her mother always described as a “statuesque” appearance and her father referred to as “gangly”; her shoulders being relatively broad and her hands and feet appearing quite large compared to the size of her wrists and ankles. While her chest isn‘t flat, River is also not well endowed in that department, but more of a normal size. Over all she appears relatively average, though she is a bit on the thin side, however that may be due to the fact that she‘s still in her awkward adolescent stage and she hasn‘t quite grown into the height that she‘s recently gained. The scary part is: River’s still growing.
What’s hidden behind River’s obscuring hair is what makes people think of her as anything other than a gangly adolescent tomboy. Her pale blue eyes are fringed with thick dark lashes that have strangely golden red tips that catch the light, and her stubborn set jaw line is softened by a set of full lips which effectively turn what would be a scowl on anyone else into a childish pout. Her brows, dark and almost wing shaped, are a bit thick for a girl yet show promise of, if they were plucked into a semblance of order, arching finely. When annoyed, which she often is, she has a tendency of narrowing her eyes, pushing her lips into one corner of her mouth, and wrinkling her thin upturned nose slightly. Fairytale Appearance
Make-up is a girls best friend, right? So why does River compare wearing cosmetics to being covered in mud you can’t wash off easily? To turn herself from gangly tomboy to beautiful princess who, according to River, is “so obtuse she could only tell who was using her as a pillow by comparing hair color” requires drastic changes in not only River’s wardrobe, but also her habits. First of all, there’s the need to cover up every visible scar, and, considering she’s quite literally spider-webbed with them… well, it takes a lot of time and a lot of make-up to turn darkly tanned and scarred skin into unblemished and baby smooth skin. She does her best not to look like she’s wearing an immense amount of make-up, however, and therefore she avoids adding any mascara or color to her face aside from blush to give a healthy flush back to her skin; in fact, she even keeps her lip make-up down to a bare minimum of a colorless lip-gloss to just add a bit of shine and emphasis.
Luckily for River she has a pretty face and good skin, so she doesn’t have to dress it up too much to make it princess like, though she does find it hard to keep from scowling, looking annoyed, or even getting rid of her stubborn jaw set, and since she needs to pull her dark hair back from her face she can’t rely on her eyes alone to give her that shy and innocent appearance. With a butterfly comb pinning her hair back from her face and a carefully trained expression, River can go successfully from stubborn and brazen to modest and demure. She normally fluffs her hair out a bit to make her shoulders seem smaller and she also adds extensions to it to give it added body and length; after all, don’t all fairy tale princesses have long hair? Still, she’s only a freshman, and she often can’t keep her calm expression for any length of time without it collapsing into an annoyed glare at the fact that she‘s playing a character whom she considers to be brainless and one-dimensional.
Unlike most girls, however, River has a “secret weapon”: magic. Being of the Wicca religion, part of River’s daily regimen involves rising to greet the sun with a morning prayer and gathering dew to wash her face and hair in. She takes baths in cold water spiked with rose petals and essential oils, doesn’t put anything in her body that isn’t good for her, does a banishing ritual if she ever does break out, and she goes to bed nice and early. Maybe it’s the fact that she takes good care of herself, or maybe it’s the fact that River believes heavily that what she does really works; whatever the reason is, River is uncannily healthy and despite her scars has strangely smooth skin that has never broken out beyond the occasional pimple.
Though it’s easy with the right amount of foundation, blush and lip gloss for River to achieve a “natural” beauty, it does tend to be fairly hard to hide her height and oversized appendages, though luckily for her she mostly has a role that requires her to sit still and not move… except when she‘s running around threatening to kill herself. So long as she wears a long dress, preferably in green or blue, with flared sleeves she can hide her hands as well as her feet, and as long as her hair is waved out properly she can hide her broad shoulders. The only thing that could effectively make River appear to be small would be if her Sèan Ruadh, the Thirteenth Son for which her story is named, turned out to be tall and well-muscled; knowing her luck, though, he would turn out to be small and delicate.
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How I am
Unlike most girls of her age, River isn’t the slightest bit self-conscious about herself, despite the fact she‘s currently going through an “awkward phase“; she’s confident in herself and her abilities, knows her limits and what she can and cannot do, never feels shy in any situation… Let’s just face it, River has what adults consider a healthy ego and what other teenagers consider a big head. She’s stubborn and set in her ways, and she has a tendency to talk like someone twice her age. Her speech patterns are bizarre, combining uncommon slang words and severely shortened words all in a Southern drawl with words such as “discombobulated” and “analytical”, as well as “quite”, “rather”, and “indeed” thrown in. She’s normally easy to get alone with, joking with people and teasing, but she can appear at times to be harsh due to the amount of sarcasm she uses in her day to day speech and the fact she‘s rather blunt and to the point.
At times she can appear almost unemotional, bored and jaded with an outlook on life bordering on the downright cynical, but that’s when she’s in a bad mood. If you catch River on the right day and under the right circumstances she can be almost bubbly and talkative; sometimes even hyper. She’s an adventure seeker, sometimes a blatant flirt, and she takes life as it comes without thought. She likes to jump before she looks and worry about the consequences later, all with the confidence in herself that she can handle that bridge when she gets to it. She knows she comes off as arrogant, and she could care less, in fact she often goes to extremes in self compliments just to make people think she’s more conceited than she really is.
River’s a bit of a prankster, but not in the way that most would think. She likes to with hold information and watch people stumble along confused, or give someone the wrong answers to a question if they’ve annoyed her in the past. Most of the times she does this all with only the though that it’s all in good fun in mind, and not out of anger or cruelty; later she’ll always help out the person who she let become confused and she’ll make it up to the person who she gave the wrong answers to. She likes to take things that belong to her friends, like a favorite book, and hold onto it while they search frantically, only to lay it within their path when they’ve finally given up. River doesn’t go to great lengths tricking or fooling or setting up elaborate raps, she only goes through life with the mischievous spirit of a faerie.
River’s temper, however, on the rare occasion it’s upset, tends to be of almost epic proportions. She gets easily put into bad moods, though luckily she’s just as easy to cheer up, and she can be particularly snappy and sarcastic in those moods. Over all the bad moods don’t last long when they come, but on the rare occasion someone pushes her past her breaking point she can show just how violent her temper can become; luckily, though, she’s not easily provoked into fist fights, as it takes someone actually looking for a fight to push her into one as she almost always runs off to get away from people to avoid such an eruption. She has, however, gotten into fights in the past and it’s because of these fights that she now avoids getting into them; the last fight she got into earned her several new scars but ended with her as the victor. When River gets into fights she tends to enter into a berserker mode in which she won’t stop fighting until the other person either stops fighting or can incapacitate her.
A major downfall in her personality is that, though she's very intuiative about how people feel about each other, she's never been put in a situation where a boy actually likes her or treats her nicely; the only knowledge she has of boys being nice to her comes from her older brothers. The result? If a boy ever did decide to fall for River, they would be in for a long and arduous battle to convince her of the fact, seeing as how she most likely wouldn't understand what they meant and would be completely oblivious to the fact.
Since she’s arrived at Ever After Academy, she’s become almost introverted compared to her usual self, which basically means that she doesn’t talk to anyone unless she’s spoken to first. She’s extremely upset about the “trick” that was pulled on her, and though she likes the unusual school and the new settings, she doesn’t appreciate the fact she will never be able to go home again. How I came to be
River had a fairly good childhood, she was the youngest and only daughter of two loving Wiccan parents who let their children run pretty much wild, and wild they did run. River and her five older brothers ran barefoot all over the woods around the house where they lived, normally falling asleep where they dropped and sometimes not coming home at all as long as there wasn’t school the next day. They were the only house for miles, so her parents never worried about their children getting abducted, and most of the time they too would run about in the forest with them. It was a fun first five years, full of magic and wonder, and many of River’s scars were gained during this time by the thorns and twigs of the forest tearing at her as she ran through them in her unclothed little kid state.
When she started school things became more or less stricter, like her older brothers she now had to be home on weekdays and she couldn’t run where she liked when she wanted because of homework. It was also at school that River began to encounter prejudice against what she was, and though her parents often told her that she should ignore them and follow the Wiccan Rede, she often got into fights to defend her beliefs against the other children. At school she never had any friends, the other kinds either being too afraid or not allowed to be her friends because of who she was, but being an unusually confident child she didn’t allow this to bother her and she merely went through the motions of school life, waiting eagerly all the while for the time when she would get home.
River spent most of her life in such a state, defending herself at school and running wild at home, streaking skyclad through brambles and wrestling with her brothers and the dogs, earning her millions of thin silvery scars. Eventually she reached middle school, and it was here that preteen rebellion helped earn her first friends; tired of listening to their parents and ready for something strange and new at last, other children finally started paying River attention, and with her high self-esteem and healthy ego on top of her pranks she was able to quickly gain friends who actually liked her for her and not just because she was strange and different. Though they were never allowed to go to her house by their parents they would often sneak over and visit anyway, and happily River would show them her forest and allow them to sit in on her rituals with her family so they could see how real witches lived.
Of course everything changed when she finished middle school and the letter from Ever After Academy arrived. Her parents were eager for her to go, eager because they thought that a good formal education far from home and a place where people knew who and what they were would be good for her. Her parents, though they had let her run wild all her life, wanted desperately for her to be happy and to grow up without the stigma that being Wiccan had brought her; they were all proud of what they were but they wanted something better for their children like all parents do. So River did what her parents wanted her to, not because she wanted to leave her friends but because she wanted to make her parents happy.
After she arrived and found out what was really going on, River felt a strange mixture of elation and dejection; fairytales were real, but she would never see her family or friends again. Needless to say she’s not happy, and people like River aren’t easily reigned in for long.
s o m e o t h e r i n f o r m a t i o n
There's something else you ought to know
The only piece of jewelry that River wears is a pendant of a Gothic sun around her neck; it was a birthday gift from her friends and even in fairy tale mode it never comes off.
River also loves spicy food, horror movies, and books about vampires, werewolves, faeries, and thieves.
She also answers to Sunny, a nickname her older brothers gave her. Her full name is River Breeze Sunstone Hawthorne. .::Klepto_Kit::.My hair is short, above my shoulders, and really curly, kind of a odd light brown, dark blondish gray color that’s actually medium dirty blonde when it’s straightened; I seem to be going prematurely gray like most people in my family do, however, because I’ve recently started finding white hairs. My eyes are also a pretty strange grayish color; my friends like to refer to them as “granite” or, even more flattering, "opal".
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Posted: Thu Feb 26, 2009 4:23 pm
Oh yay, fresh meat! I've finished making my revisions, I believe. I might add more later if I get to thinking but for now I'm settled =D
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Posted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:05 am
OK, I finished the main profile stuff, but I can't find a picture.
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Posted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:32 am
*shrug* Well, you don't need one.
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Posted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:05 pm
Main profile stuff looks quite shiny, meaty too. With all these women Shiro'll have a hard time picking.
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Posted: Sat Feb 28, 2009 10:41 pm
Oh, that poor, poor guy. rolleyes
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Posted: Sun Mar 01, 2009 1:06 pm
L i f e has taught us that l o v e does not consist in g a z i n g at each other I pity him too xd A side-note, I had some fun putting together a button. I had some random ideas floating about, tell me if you like it?  B u t in looking o u t w a r d together in the s a m e direction
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Posted: Sun Mar 01, 2009 3:12 pm
Wow! It's beautiful! I'm absolutely horrible with that kind of stuff, so thank you.
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Posted: Sun Mar 01, 2009 3:14 pm
By the way... Accepted! ^_^ I'll get your profile up as soon as I have a spare second.
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Posted: Sun Mar 01, 2009 5:28 pm
=] You're very welcome!
[url=http://tinyurl.com/b8nwl3][img]http://i43.tinypic.com/2hfmbs0.png[/img][/url]
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Posted: Sun Mar 01, 2009 7:17 pm
^^ Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! I was a bit worried that you'd have me fix some things... On a random note, I'll be going back home soon (my dad and me had a fight so I've been staying with my aunt) so I won't have internet anymore... but I'll get my next door neighboors to fix their wireless router so I will be back! ... Insane urge to laugh evilly... (EDIT) I have been looking for pictures that could work for River, though. I don't really like this one too much, but I guess this would be sorta what she'd look like in fairytale mode.  This one could sorta be fairy tale form, too, though the hair's in the face and the eye colors off... It's hard to find River... I shoulda made her more girly looking...  I like this one, something about the grin is very River like, but I don't have a photobucket account so even if I fixed the eye color and made it smaller to use, there's not much I could do right now.  I really like this one... I might use it...  Why is it everytime I find something River like there's something off? I like this one, it could work for her fairy tale form if the eyes were right... It certianly has her defiant eyes and pouty stare.  Ha ha, random note: my friend posted this picture! Anyway, same as before, there are things off about this pic... but the eyes are kinda right and the hair falls in the face! By this point, I apologize for taking up your time...  Defiant expression, check. Brown hair, check. Hair in face, check... Just wish the eyes were right and the hair was wavy... Sigh, not even trying for the right skin anymore...  Anyone wanna help me fix them so they work? Which one should I pick?! STAY TUNED TO FIND OUT! >,< Haha...
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