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 Posted: Sat Aug 22, 2009 12:24 pm
 Name: Ur Code Number: 15 Looks like: 17 Actual Age:950 Aliases/ Nicknames: The Coded Shark, Sharkbait, and Ur Physical Description: Ur is a tall 6'2, his long red red runs down to the seat of his pants, and his blue-green eyes look like the deep ocean. He usually wears a normal white arrancar uniform, but he wanted to add his own flair so he put in black and red to the white. Ur's blade rests on his back around his waist, connected so he could spin it out easily to attack anyone. His hollow bone is a fin that is hidden beneth his hair. Zanpacto & Resurreccion:  Devor everything, Tiburón marcado (Scarred Shark)  When he goes into his Resurreccion form, his sword turns to water and splashes over him. A grey layer of hollow bone forms over him, it's stronger than most swords so normally the average shinigami can't break through it. His tail is about 7ft in length and with the added 2 ft from the fin on the end of it. Ur has three fins on him, one on his head, one on his back and one on the end of his tail. Special Accessories: His red gloves allow him to control his bloodlust and his feeding frenzies. The necklace on his neck allows him to control his emotions so he doesn't go into a feeding frenzy. Abilities: Sondio: A common arrancar move Cero: Another common arrancar move Personality: Quite,but when he gets into Feeding Frenzy he goes crazy. Kinda flirty and loves women. Biography/History: When Ur was alive he didn't do much, but sit down at his computer and blog about things that he liked. He was a surfer so he loved the water, swimming, anything that had to do with a liquid that he could swim in. One of his dreams was to be able to dive into a pool filled with Sunkist. Powers: Sondio: A common arrancar move Cero: Another common arrancar move Feeding Frenzy: When in his Resurreccion form, when he smells or tastes blood he goes crazy and a second personality know as Faust comes out, attacking anything and everything. Dimension Dive: This is a special technique that can only be used by him or other fish type arrancars. Ur can dive into and solid objects, coming out in a completly different area. When he concentrates he can dive into solid air. He goes into a indifferent dimension where no one in the normal world can see him, but he can see them. Ur can also come out and pull people into walls making an instant prision. Returning Teeth: This ablitiy allows him to heal over a period of time, like when a shark loses a tooth it is replaced by another. Role-Play Example: (Will get on that fast, but could you check everything else.)
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Posted: Wed Aug 26, 2009 8:04 pm
Name: Malak Knash Number: 5/50?? Aliases/ Nicknames: None Physical Description: He's 5'7 tall with green reptilian eyes, long wild dark green hair with a mouth full of sharp teeth. He wears a white hakama with an open white open robe with arrancar sandals. His body and his face is covered in black bandages. His Hollow hole is unknown, but his mask remains is his long white tongue with his number on it. Zanpacto & Resurreccion: Malak has a regular scimitar as his zanpkuto. The grip is dark green with the guard in the shape of a fang. Resurreccion: Shred reptil Form: Malak's body gets engulf in dark green flames and then cools down and his body turns into a skeleton of a dinosaur like creature with spikes running down from the back of his neck down to his tail while still attaining his clothing. Abilities Malak height and built grows into a bulky arrancar standing 6'7 tall. He attains a glaive, and with along with a few new enhancements to his body. Malak grows a 3 foot retractable blade coming out of his left hand. Able to spew green fire from his mouth. He has the ability to camouflage himself, making him hide 3/4 of his reiatsu. He's able to use his long tongue and use it to grab his opponent. And he's able to grow back his limbs if sliced off.  Special Accessories: His hollow hole is unknown, but his hollow remain is his tongue with the number on it, and his ody is completely covered in black bandages. Abilities: He's very agile and stealthy Personality: He's the exact image of a monster, but he's very honorable and formal to be one. He'll never turn down a challenge, from his fellow arrancar. He see's everyone as his family and wouldn't provoke them, unless they really piss him off. He may be an honorable warrior, but he still has the sense of a monster when it comes to a fighting. The more he fight, the more he'll show his past self, but still honorable. Biography/History: When Malak was a hollow, he had a monstrous intent to kill to be the strongest. As years passed and he finally became an arrancar, he believed he made his goal. Slowly his killing monstrous intent began to die down to a quite warrior, but it's not completely gone, some part of him still clings on to it... Powers: Sonido Cero- He pulls his head back and throws it forward, releasing his cero. Bala- As he open his mouth, he could fire as many cero, so long he closes his mouth as if he's reloading it. (Gran Rey Cero: It's dark green with black outlining) Hierro: Strong enough to stop a regular 3rd seat zanpakuto attack, Role-Play Example: There's been a new hollow hidden in Hueco Muendo. It's evaded Aizen's eyes for days until he heard about this "new" hollow. Now, after days of searching for him, he was finally found. He just entered his state of turning into an arrancar. Aizen took his mummified body back to Las Noches, where he will turn into a powerful arrancar, and who knows. Maybe he'll become a new espada. If he proves himself... 'Weeks passed since I ate my last hollow. Since then, I've been in this deep sleep, unable to move but stay in my deep sleep. I could feel something inside me changing. When will I wake? Am I dead? Why won't I wake up?'As Malak slept and dreamed, he finally saw a bright light. He slowly walks towards the light, and at the same time, his mummified body began to crack. Malak finally emerged from his cocoon, and then, he finally opened his eyes to see himself in a new form. He had long messy dark green hair, dark green reptilian eyes, and a pale skin tone. As he opened his eyes, the first thing he saw in front of him was a man named Aizen. "Welcome to Las Noches. My name is Aizen Sousuke Please state your name arrancar." Malak looked up at him like a newborn and couldn't help but obey. He struggled to say his name in his deep voice. "M-M-Malak Kna-Knash." "Welcome brother Malak Knash. Please stand with me with the rest of your brothers and sisters." Malak slowly stood up with a grin on his face and threw up his head and roared. A battle cry that shook the very halls of Las Noches. The most terrifying arrancar that has walked the earth has finally awakened...
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Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 1:38 pm
Accepted. Now you can post it in the Profile Section.
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Posted: Mon Sep 14, 2009 9:10 pm
Name: Nero vi Sombra
Number:84
Aliases/ Nicknames:
Nera
Physical Description:
Nera is a tall for a woman arrancar as she is 5'11, and has a line tattoo under her left eye to make it appear as if she was crying. Her arrancar uniform is different as the skirt is shorter and has parts of the side torn away making it seem ragged. Her top is a white arrancar jacket with belt-like wraps around the sleeves, and her hollow mask fragment are fangs that have moved down to her neck with a jaw line attached. Her hollow hole is below her navel area.
Zanpacto & Resurreccion:
The zanpakuto does not take on the form of a normal katana, but a large broadsword with a star like pattern. The hilt was bone like and she wore it on her wrist as a long blade.
The release command is "Defy, Atracción Lobo." Which caused a blue light to surround her as she released her sealed hollow powers. Her mask regrows around her face and she grows two horns by her ears. Her hands become gauntlet like claws with blue star patterns on them, her legs become boots with three claw-like paws coming from then with her clothing being replaced by a bra and miniskirt made out of bone-like material. Sun-like patterns come out of where her hollow hole is and she grows a spiked tail of bone-like fur.
Special Accessories:
Her arrancar uniform makes her stand out a bit and she always wears these belts around her arms and legs.
Abilities:
She is swift and agile, with flexibility as she can flip and bend to create strange attacks, with the ability to fight on her hands.
Personality:
She believes all life is born through death, once one dies, then their purpose begins. She is calm and prefers not to make combat unless absolutely required which reveals her cold personality and her lack of emotion unless she gets angry. She prefers honor and truth over lies and power, but unless they are needed to complete a goal.
Biography/History:
At a young age she was alone always as her father died and her mother tried to keep Nera happy, but couldn't keep up her promises and always disappointed both of them. She had a dog to always keep her company known as Shikyo. The dog was her best friend until one day, a burglar tried to rob their house and killed their dog. That night she was scarred with torment after losing the only thing in the world that truly loved her, and she rarely smiled after. She began to develop a tendency to do reckless things until her death by jumping off a cliff without knowing someone sabotaged her as she was suppose to climb down. She came to Hueco Mundo after being pulled in as a soul and became a hollow who wandered until devouring enough souls to become an arrancar-level hollow. She was taken a shine to and became an arrancar, however she disappeared after her birth and is said to roam Hueco Mundo until her return.
Powers:
* Bala (虚弾 (バラ), bara; Spanish for "Bullet," Japanese for "Hollow Bullet") Bala is an Arrancar alternative to Cero. The technique hardens the user's Spiritual Pressure and fires it like a bullet. Although it is weaker than a normal Cero, it moves about twenty times faster and can be fired at a much higher rate, but the damage is much the same. Stronger Arrancar can also fire a more powerful Bala, while retaining its twenty-fold speed.
* Cero (虚閃 (セロ), sero; Spanish for "Zero," Japanese for "Hollow Flash," "Doom Blast" in the Viz translation) are high-powered energy blasts that can be fired from various body parts, such as mouth, tongue, hand or fingers. Only Gillians, Adjuchas, Arrancar, and the Vizards have so far been shown to use Cero attacks, and it appears that stronger entities can use it more efficiently.
* Garganta (黒腔 (ガルガンタ), garuganta; Spanish for "Throat," Japanese for "Black Cavity") is how Arrancar and Menos-class Hollows move to and from Hueco Mundo. It literally tears open the dimensional fabric separating the worlds, revealing a tunnel of whirling, torrential energy that must be focused and solidified to create a discernible pathway.
* Hierro (鋼皮 (イエロ), iero; Spanish for "Iron," Japanese for "Steel Skin") refers to the hardened skin of the Arrancar, which is a result of their compressed spiritual power. While their skin is strong enough to block even released Zanpakutō bare-handed, it is by no means impenetrable. Stronger Arrancar generally have proportionally stronger skin than usual.
Role-Play Example:
Nera was outside in the desert of Hueco Mundo when a strong spiritual pressure filled the air. "Who?..." The pressure filled the air as multiple new reiatsu filled the space of Hueco Mundo, higher than ever, this was the beginning of shinigamification and Aizen's arrival. Days later Nera was bandaged as she was becoming an arrancar and heard only a voice saying ,"My fellow arrancar, it is time I demonstrate this, the Hogyoku with your own eyes." The voice said as light filled the room changing the bandage Nera from a hollow to an arrancar as her mask broke and she was now naked on the ground with a full human body, except the remnants of mask around her neck. Aizen the voice's owner asked ,"Who are you new ally of the arrancar?" The girl shook for a while and said in a quiet tone ,"Nera vi Sombra." She said as Aizen smiled a bit and said ,"Welcome to your new home.."
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Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 11:59 am
Sorry this took a while, but I finally got to reading your profile. It's looking pretty good, a little basic maybe, but you have some interesting ideas, and for that, I'd accept you.
As for the details-- maybe get into just *what* your gauntlets do. Do they just allow you to tear and scratch at people? Do they shoot something? Do they get superheated or extremely cold? See what I mean? Eventually, you'll probably develop special attacks with the gauntlets, but maybe you want to outline them? Unless they're more just for melee and her combat is augmented by cero and bala attacks. Also, your release phrase and blade name is interesting-- Attraction Wolf/Wolf Attraction (not sure which you were going for). Why is it called that? Just for kicks? I can see that in her resurreccion she gets kinda wolf-like. I thought of an arrancar version of a werewolf when I read it, but maybe I was mistaken (loooong day XD)
I don't know. I guess I'm sort of thinking aloud, now, but I would like to know more about your character. She seems interesting (and heavens knows we need more girl arrancar wink )
So! Ok, Jes, stop talking. You're accepted, but I'd love to see you flesh out that profile some, k?
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Posted: Fri Sep 25, 2009 11:46 pm
Name: Kanetsu Bane
Aliases/ Nicknames: None.
Age: 950 years old.
Rank/number:
Height: 186 cm (6'1")
Weight: 80 kg (176 lbs.)
Personality: Bane appears to be a laid-back and irreverent individual. He smiles a lot but seems not to have much to say. He is as he appears to be, laid-back showing as he is not in battle. When in battle his mood changes slighty, him now not talking at all, only to tell his opponents his name. Being so into his battles often makes him lose grasp of what he actually needs to do at times.
Theme Song(s): Disturbed; 10,000 fists in the air
Physical Description: Bane has black spiky hard. His eyes a red color. Bane's attire consists of a white hakama and a red sash; his white jacket is ragged with an upturned collar. The inner lining is red, the sleeves are rolled down, and Bane wears his jacket open. The remains of his Hollow mask consist of the right cheek bone being covered by the mask remnant, and his Hollow hole appearing in the middle of his left bicep. His skin tone tanned, with seemingly flawless skin.
Child-form: Bane’s Hollow mask fragments are placed diffrently from his older Arrancar form in the way that his mask when he is young is around his right eye. His eye seems to be where his hole is, the hole some how moves to the bicep of his left arm when he becomes the older Arrancar. Also bits of his Hollow mask are seen making a segmented collar that goes around his neck. His hair is still spikey with it being black as normal and his eyes are red as normal. We wears a black cloak that is torn at the bottom with a hood that he may wear depending on his mood.
Skills:
Master Hand-to-Hand Combatant
Master Swordsmanship Specialist
Great Spiritual Power
Keen Intellect
Enhanced Strength
Perceptive Combatant
Zanpakutō: Diabló (黒大魔 (ムルシ); Spanish for "Devil", Japanese for "Hells inferno, ref. Fire demon"). His zanpakutō's guard resembles a five-pointed star, while the sheath is white and the hilt is red. Bane’s Zanpakutō is also positioned on his left hip.
Encendido (戦雫始解(ラ・ゴータ); Spanish for “Flaming”, ref. Burning flesh.): Bane concentrates heated reiatsu at any point of his body or blade he wish’s to cause a devastating attack.
Infierno (城郭炎上(ミラ・ロ); Spanish for “Inferno”): One of his strongest attack’s; Bane smashes his hands into the ground in front of him, he forces reiatsu into the ground and guides a blast of fire that jumps up from the ground much like a volcanic eruption. These blasts reaching different heights and damage, depending on the amount of reiatsu Bane puts into the attack.
Incendio Pelota (灼海流 (イルビエンド); Spanish for “Fire ball”): Bane fire’s a fire ball made entirely of his reiatsu, these fire balls are about the size of a bowling ball and can be shot in rapid succession.
Llameante Defensa (万象一切灰 (・ハリベル); Spanish for “Blazing Defense”): Bane puts both of his hands out palms bent upward as reiatsu is released causing a shield like wall of fire to form. This wall of fire blocking most attacks, its heat being intense enough to burn things in the immediate vicinity.
Resurrección: Its release command is "Blaze" (鎖せ, hinote). Bane lowers his Zanpakutō to the ground, placing the tip of the blade in the dirt he looks out, as he starts to be enveloped in skull-shaped flames to which change his appearance within. Bane’s hair becomes red and is now long enough to reach his lower back. His iris is red with a clear white color tone to his pupil. A large red dragon tattoo forms on his lower back all the way up to his right shoulder and down to his wrist to which the dragons mouth opens. Bane’s mask fragments grow as they were just covering the right side of his jaw they now cover a large amount of his body, the fragment in his unreleased state covers his whole mouth now like a mask that covers both cheeks, his mouth, and chin in one large piece of his Hollow mask fragments. His knuckles are covered with small knuckle spikes to which are about three inches long on each knuckle. Fragments also seem to form a spine down his back, created by the individual scales found upon the flesh of a dragon. His Arrancar uniform and hakama seems to be torn but still intact covering his legs down to his ankles. Along with these changes a large scar appears in the center of his chest, this scar goes down to about his belly button. His weapon takes the form of a broad rapier, which resembles an elongated dragons tooth. This blade features a usual hilt of red with no guard, just the extremely large blade that Bane appears to be able to swing around with ease. This weapon appears to be about seven ft. In length and 400 ibs. A hole about the size of a melon is seen at the top of the blade where the tip is extremely sharp, along with the whole bottom side of the large blade.
Resurrección Special Ability: His strength and endurance further enhanced upon entering Resurrección. His speed also increased as he can move with the speed of a jet with ease and pick up the jet with one hand. His reflexes increased as well as his ability to use reiatsu based attacks. His spiritual pressure ad an whole becomes higher. His Heirro and Sonido abilities are also enhanced as he enters his release form. In this form, Bane has shown the ability to use some attack he used in his unreleased form.
Inflamable Apuñalar (灼海流, (イルビエンド), Spanish for “Flaming stab, Fiery lunge”): Bane swings his blade letting loose a large amount of fire to which is flung in any direction he desires.
Cero Ceniza (黒虚閃, (セロ・オスキュラス), sero cenzena; Spanish for "flammable Zero", Japanese for "Ashen Hollow Flash"): This Cero being exclusive to Bane, it works as a incinidary grenade, releasing a large amount of explosive heat upon striking something. The point at which the Cero actually hit is the point at which most of the damage would be inflicted. This Cero also travels at incredible speeds and is in the size of a large fist. This ability is presumably only used during Bane’s released form.
Fuego Dragón Emperador (大紅蓮 竜, (ウルキオラ・シ); Spanish for “Flaming Dragon Emperor”): This technique taking so much reiatsu from Bane, he normally uses this attack as a last ditch effort to win a fight. Bane summons a large black scaled dragon to which is about the size of Toushiro’s Dragon. Its black scales are extremely hot as flames are engulfing the shoulders of its small arms found on the belly, its eye brows also seemingly engulfed in flame hang from his face pointing upward. This dragon moves quickly as bane summons it from the tattoo found on his lower back and up to his right arms shoulder and down his arm. Bane holds his right arms wrist with his left hand as he holds his right hand out his fist closed tightly, he states the name of this attack, as this is said, The dragon tattoo found upon his body starts to move toward his hand collecting within the palm of his enclosed right hand then as a beam would have been shot reiatsu is collected within his hand, this attack taking so much reiatsu Bane usually falls from being to tired from using this Ability. Bane opens his hand after the appropriate amount of reiatsu has been released this causing a large dragon to form around Bane, this dragon immediately taking the offensive it attacks with its sharp fangs collapsing into its opponent like a beam slamming into its target then exploding upon impact this explosion is powerful enough to easily blow up a whole block at once. This technique however isn’t mature enough for use in every fight, taking so much reiatsu and all to use.
Powers & Abilities:
Sonído (響転 (ソニード), Sonīdo; Spanish for "Sound", Japanese for "Sound Ceremony")
Hierro (鋼皮（イエロ）, iero; Spanish for "Iron", Japanese for "Steel Skin")
Pesquisa (探査回路（ペスキス）, Pesukisa; Spanish for "inquiry")
Cero (虚閃, セロ, Sero; Japanese for "hollow flash," Spanish for "zero", Doom Blast in the Viz translation)
Bala (虚弾（バラ）, bara; Spanish for "bullet", Japanese for "Hollow Bullet")
Garganta (黒腔, ガルガンタ, Garuganta; Japanese for "black cavity," Spanish for "throat")
History:
Hollow (虚, ホロウ, horō) are a race of creatures which are born from Human souls who, for various reasons, do not cross over to Soul Society after their death and stay in the Human world for too long. Memories Bane seemed not to retain, for his past as a human was unknown, but his time in Hueco Mundo undeniable. Adjuchas (アジューカス, 中級大虚, ajūkasu; Spanish for "Stone Demon", Japanese for "Intermediate Great Hollow"), was the type of Hollow he was, Bane reached his second stage in the menos evolution. He had ventured with lesser Hollows he considered associates. Even though he rarely talked he was known for his great power at the lowly state of Adjuchas. His life as a Hollow was several hundred years as one day he awoke to the great power he had aquired through the proccess known as `Hollowification.` Him now becoming more Shinigami like he trained with his still Hollow like underlings in the hopes of being ranked highly in the Espada. His number at the time of training hadnt been declaired but being placed highly in the Espada was his destiny to which he planned on for filling.
A Hollow named Bane; His life as a Hollow was filled with an abnormal lust for souls, often making him fight his fellow Hollow. Through this fighting however his soul was merged with the Hollow he fought making him what appeared to be a dimwitted Gillian class Hollow. But due to his enraged ego and presonality behind his exterior he gained something else, other then being a Gillian. Bane had suprisingly retained his consciousness as he was still a Gillian he unlike the other’s didn’t stand around, he moved to attack the other Gillian in the hopes to become starter and evolve once again into something more powerful. His blood lust lead him to the killing of all the Gillian around him, his soul was full and ready to evolve eventually. He changed into the class of Hollow known as Adjuchas. His appearance changed immensly from the large dimwitted Gillian to the unique form he had retained through his evolution. He appeared to be in the form of a small dragon in its adolesence. His thurst to become stronger drove him to attack any Hollow in his path. Even other Adjuchas fell victim to his wrath. Eventually his change was near, he figured a few more souls would safice. He roamed the desert of Hueco Mundo looking for these souls but none seemed to want to face him. After a while the fear of reggression began to haunt him for he iknew if he reggressed their was 100% chance that he would lose his individuality to the vast reiatsu gained once you became Gillian, which to Bane didn’t seem like much in the place of your own soul. He soon came upon some other Hollow’s, two being adjuchas the rest being Gillian with their identity with held. They planned on attacking him but this was just what Bane was looking for to complete his evolution into the much more powerful, Vasto Lorde. He looked upon the other Hollows as in his way but after he killed the first Adjuchas off they wanted him to be their leader. After a while of being with his fellow Hollows they determined that they would never evolve at their current power level so they requested that Bane eat them to become more powerful, at first he denied this but after a moments conversation he began the proccess of consuming the other’s. Word got to him through the loss of his associates that Shinigamification was occuring, and due to one of Bane’s previous battles his mask was scared along with his chest. This being the halt in his evolution or so he thought for he knew that once you are injured by a Hollow of equal power your evolution will halt. He knew his destiny was to become more powerful and he would soon see how.
Years passed as Bane had become more power, retaining in his evolution a new high for his species. Him being one of the first of his class he knew his power was pride as he walked through Hueco Mundo a new warrior and combatant. This new form with the name of, ‘Arrancar.’ He was Espada material but he chose not to become one for he hadn’t wished to retain his old Hollow ways to kill and that’s all he would retain out of life. He sat in the desert waste land known as Hueco Mundo for a while until approached by low level Arrancar wishing for him to join the Espada in the hopes that he could be powerful with them as his Fracción. He however didn’t want to become an Espada so he killed one of the Arrancar for interrupting his peace, the other ran from the scene preparing to avenge their fallen comrade. After a few days of peace in Hueco Mundo the lesser Arrancar were back with a small pavilion of Hollow along side them. They attack the Arrancar in the hopes to kill him and rid him of his power, their attack was thwarted as they attacked a few more times after, one time being victorious they removed part of his mask leaving him for dead in this waste land. He retained a child-like form from this attack but with the destruction of all in his path he gained the ability to change from his older Arrancar self to the younger Arrancar he was forced into to lower his reiatsu level’s so he couldn’t been caught by the Arrancar to which would sense his high reiatsu. He escaped the joining of Aizen’s army long enough, the Arrancar figured he was dead for his face wasn’t seen or so they thought. He was right underneath their noses. 
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Posted: Sat Oct 03, 2009 7:33 pm
Does Bane have *any* flaws that make him a believable character? I'm only seeing Specialist, Master, Expert, Enhance, Keen, Perceptive, etc... It's wonderful that you want a strong character. Your fire-based zanpaku-to has some good potential. But you need a weakness/flaw to round out your character. We can't all be gods no matter how much we'd like to be.
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Posted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 4:54 pm
Jes-sama Does Bane have *any* flaws that make him a believable character? I'm only seeing Specialist, Master, Expert, Enhance, Keen, Perceptive, etc... It's wonderful that you want a strong character. Your fire-based zanpaku-to has some good potential. But you need a weakness/flaw to round out your character. We can't all be gods no matter how much we'd like to be.
I understand that. I noted these same features but in all the same way he has no special ability that is enhanced, for example how Nnoitra's Heirro is enhanced further then his fellow Arrancar. Bane has the Ability to use Heirro but is not specialized in using that technique like Nnoitra, let alone any of the techniques known to the Arrancar except perhaps for his Cero.
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Posted: Tue Oct 06, 2009 7:03 pm
It's not the abilities that concern me. After all, you never mentioned super hierros or anything. What I'm more concerned with is your skills, mainly:
Exiled-Katana Master Hand-to-Hand Combatant
Master Swordsmanship Specialist
Great Spiritual Power
Keen Intellect
Enhanced Strength
Perceptive Combatant
See what I mean, though? He's AMAZING at every necessary skill. If he has a sword, he's the master. If he's lost his sword, he'll STILL beat the s**t out of you because he's a master at that, too. If all else fails, he can just blow you away with his massive spiritual pressure or toss you to kingdom come using either his Great Spiritual Pressure or his Enhanced Strength. Is my objection slightly more understandable, now?
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Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 4:48 pm
Jes-sama It's not the abilities that concern me. After all, you never mentioned super hierros or anything. What I'm more concerned with is your skills, mainly:
Exiled-Katana Master Hand-to-Hand Combatant
Master Swordsmanship Specialist
Great Spiritual Power
Keen Intellect
Enhanced Strength
Perceptive Combatant
See what I mean, though? He's AMAZING at every necessary skill. If he has a sword, he's the master. If he's lost his sword, he'll STILL beat the s**t out of you because he's a master at that, too. If all else fails, he can just blow you away with his massive spiritual pressure or toss you to kingdom come using either his Great Spiritual Pressure or his Enhanced Strength. Is my objection slightly more understandable, now?
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Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 7:29 pm
Um.. Sure. Your first one wasn't bad by any stretch of the imagination. I'm just trying to pull him down from god level to a playable character. But sure. Show me the other one if that's what you'd like.
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Posted: Sat Oct 10, 2009 12:34 am
I was just about to say the exact same thing as Jes. The only thing he was missing was Superior Speed. Not bad though all you had to do was get rid of some of those skills or dull down the lot of them. Ok yeah that's all I had to say. Good job Jes lol lol
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Posted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 11:28 pm
Name:Rayz Hermenegildo (Rai-z Hermen-e-guil-dou) Number: 26 Aliases/ Nicknames:Beamz, Lazerz Physical Description: Zanpaktou: Guerra relámpago (Spanish for "Blitzkrieg") Rayz zanpaktou is a pair of gattling guns around his wrist that can shoot condensed spiritual energy like bullets. Resurrection:  The release command is "Reload". His zanpaktou crystallizes and begins to split apart multiplying the pieces and covering his body and more until he takes the form of a 5 story tall mecha. His released form covers him from head to toe in a thick body of hollow shell armor that's as strong as a normal Hieero but this form also limits his speed dramatically. There are several hidden areas over his body that can shift and open up revealing an opening where he can launch an attack. This plays to his advantage since his natural hollow ability is to release his spiritual energy as explosions and the armor is molded so there's more than one way fro him to utilize it. Resurrection Techniques:Presa (Barrage): A very vauge technique. Compartments on parts of his body open up and fire off a barrage of missiles filled with unstable spiritual energy that explode on contact. Magníficos Cañones Duales (Grand Dual Cannons): He gathers spiritual energy near the openings on is shoulder pads then fires them. The two beams have the power of two cero's at once. Asalto Lleno (Full Assault): Compartments all over his armor open up and fires off a barrage of cero's and missiles all at once making this move difficult to evade. Bazuca de Muerte (Death Bazooka): His chest panel opens up showing another hollow mask and it opens it's mouth and fires a giant beam with the power of an atomic bomb then falls off. This can be used once per resurrection. Deseche: Liberación Verdadera (Jettison: True Release): Rayz secret move. His armor crumbles and falls off revealing his true resurrection form. His normal body is covered in white cybernetic looking armor. This armor has all the capabilities of his larger form but it doesn't restrict his speed or strength in the least. Omni-Kamikazee: A last resort move that can only be used in true form. He builds up massive energy in his armor to where it is critical then releases it all at once in a massive explosion that destroys anything and everything near him. Using this undoes his resurrection and makes it so he cant resurrect again for 24 hours since that form would be unstable from the energy build up. Special Accessories:Rayz is usually found wearing a pair of black sunglasses. Abilities:Immense Spiritual Power: It has been noted that Rayz resurection at first is so big because of his large amount of spiritual power and explains why he can continually release such large amounts of it. Enhanced Pesquisa: Has more to do with his hollow origins but his natural hollow abilities further enhance his ability to sense things. Personality:Energetic and confident. He loves flashy things that stand out and has a tendency to say things like 'awesome' and 'groovy' in all his sentences. Biography/History:When Rayz was a hollow, he wasn't too intelligent and traveled to the human world on many occasions. He was known for going around factories and places like that to find souls but the number was always limited if not none and he thought he would starve so on pure impulse of hunger he began to eat anything he could find in the area, most of the items were types of weapons and high-tech technology and shortly after that he evolved into a Menos Gillian but now he had developed a craving for steel and human souls but couldn't find a way back and he forced his evolution to teh next stage becoming a Menos Adjuchas but his apperance was different from most Adjuchas. Later, a group of Adjuchas cornered him and tried to devour him and it was then that he removed his mask unleashing his Arrancar powers in one massive explosion that destroyed all hollows in a 2 mile radius. Later he found that his strange diet while being a hollw cause a change in his abilities and form and went to hueco mundo to be amung his fellow espada. Powers:Critical Mass Cero: Rays own signature cero. He creates a cero in his right hand and hols it then takes his left hand and creates another cero and forces it into his already made cero. He does this up to three more times to where the cero sphere is at critical mass then fires it with devastating results. He is open to attacks while charging this move up though. Bala: An Arrancar alternative to Cero. The technique hardens the user's Spiritual Pressure and fires it like a bullet from their fist. It is seriously weaker than a normal cero, it moves about twenty times faster and can be fired at a much higher rate, but the damage is much the same. Cero: high-powered energy blasts that can be fired from various body parts, such as mouth, tongue, hand or fingers. Only Menos, Arrancar, and the Vizards have so far been shown to use Cero attacks, and it appears that stronger entities can use it more efficiently. Rayz Cero is bright green. Garganta: how Arrancar and Menos-class Hollows move to and from Hueco Mundo. Kaname Tōsen and Kisuke Urahara have also demonstrated the ability to use the technique. It literally tears open the dimensional fabric separating the worlds, revealing a tunnel of whirling, torrential energy that must be focused and solidified to create a discernible pathway. Pesquisa: the Arrancar equivalent of the Shinigami ability to sense Spiritual Pressure. It functions similar to a sonar. Hierro: Refers to the hardened skin of the Arrancar, which is a result of their compressed spiritual power. While their skin is strong enough to block even released Zanpakutō bare-handed, it is by no means impenetrable. Stronger Arrancar have proportionally stronger skin. Nnoitra Jiruga claimed his Hierro is toughest amongst the Espada; being of higher rank than Nnoitra, Ulquiorra's Hierro appears to be much tougher. Sonído: The Arrancar equivalent of the Shinigami Flash Steps and the Quincy Hirenkyaku; it allows the user to travel at incredibly high speeds for short distances. Use of Sonído is punctuated by a brief static sound, in contrast to the "swish" sound used for Flash Steps. Role-Play Example:A young adult looking arrancar walked into the main room of the palace known as Las Noches still confused about what was happening. He suddenly stopped in his tracks sensing three immense spiritual presences near by and continued walking down the halls until he came to a room with three men sitting in high chairs. He knew that they weren't hollow, they felt more like shinigami and he reared back. Another arrancar came from the side and threw a punch at him that he easily dodged. "Why are shinigami here dude?!" He asked the new arrived arrancar and he replied. "How dare you speak about Lord Aizen in such a manor! For that, you must die!" The arrancar charged him, his claws ready to kill him and he jumped back and pointed his arms at the arrancar revealing his zanpaktou, Gatling guns on his forearms. He shot a barrage of spiritual bullets at the arrancar killing him in near seconds then Aizen stood up. "I'm impressed. How would you like to help me take on a new world?" He looked up at Aizen and grinned. "Why not? I'm in." Aizen sat back down and looked at him. "You'll need a name. Rayz Hermenegildo will be your name now." Rays crossed his arms and smiled. "I can deal."
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Posted: Tue Oct 13, 2009 2:52 pm
Looks pretty good, but I have a couple of objections.
1. For your Presa technique, there are no unknowns or vagaries about an attack. Please describe this power in full as opposed to merely stating, "A very vague technique."
2. Liberacion technique-- where does he keep all his missiles and whatnot? Hammerspace?
3. There are no signature ceros unless you have gained an Espada ranking. As such, your Critical Mass Cero is void until such time as you become an Espada.
*Also, I'm a bit leery of your Immense Spiritual Pressure thing. We all want immense spiritual pressures, but... I don't know. I'm deferring to Temor on this one. Temor?
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Posted: Fri Oct 16, 2009 10:06 am
Name: Pa Rot Yubastad
Aliases/ Nicknames: Hailfire peaks' firey side if I know.
Physical Description: Standing at a child's height of only 144 cm which doesn't match his adult features, Pa Rot wears a cyan headband over his forehead with tri-coloured hair hanging over the sides, the colours stylised like a pi graph-green on one third, yellow on the other and red on the other. A tuft of hair for each third sticks up wildly. He has one blue and one orange eye and very light skin, almost bleached white in colour. He's averagely built, not amazingly muscly or anything. His mask remnants consist of two "C" shaped bits of bone on either cheek, opening up towards his facial features. He wears the standard Arrancar jacket but also a white open jacket over it with fur around the edges. He also wears a ring on each of his fingers, each plain and golden. He wears the standard Arrancar legging and footwear.
Zanpacto: His sheath is quite unusual as it actually takes the form of a black leather whip he keeps coiled up and strapped on to the waistband of his leggings by a black ring. Everything past the handle is just excess however, his real weapon is in fact a rubbery metal sword which can double as both a whip and a blade. It can be flexible when needed and solidify when necessary too. The handle is black and the hand guard takes the form of a rather boring rectangle, aside from the fact there are miniature mirrors embedded on to either side of the rectangular hand guard. The blade itself is around 160 cm long.
Ressurecion:
Loro
Release command: Mimic
In this form two white, cloak like wings droop over Pa Rot's arms and his hair extends down to his waist. His helmet grows and the top half of the "C" extends up to his forehead before turning into what looks like the top half of a parrot's beak drooping over his face. Plumes of bright feathers of randomly assorted colours-blue, orange, green, yellow and red-are attached to his torso but his appearance is as it was prior to the transformation from the waist downwards.
This form allows him to fly, use his wings as shields as if they were metallic and most importantly allows him to use any special technique he has seen used in person. This doesn't mean to become as strong as somebody it just allows him to use their "moves"(like Grimmjow's darts or Abirama's steel feathers).
Special Accessories: Oh shizzle I've already said haven't I?
Skills: Skilled analyst.
Abilities: Standard Arrancar powers.
Personality: Pa Rot will say whatever comes to mind in his mind's 16th sub-mind's mind. He dislikes charging into a situation where he'll die but if confident in himself he might do so. He believes his life expendable so long as he doesn't die an ordinary soldier's death.
Biography/History: Pa Rot was often encouraged by his father to join in with the crowd more. He eventually gave in and ended up copying everyone else. He got into a bad crowd in his teenage years and got involved in a gang war in which he had his face shot off then swallowed it and choked then puked out all his internal organs and, shockingly enough, died. He then went up through the Hollow ranks to parrot-type adjuchas and became an Arrancar. He now decides to draw away from the norm.
Powers: Cero, bala, sonido, peskis, garganta, hierro, gonzui.
Number: 10/69
Roleplay sample: Pa Rot took a sharp right turn down the hall inside Las Noches only to unceremoniously trip over his own feet and go tumbling down the stairs. After several steps his foot touched ground and he used it to propel himself forwards through the air, landing on his feet mere centimeters away from Tosen who was walking past at the time.
"I really wish I had hit you" Pa Rot blurted.
"Who said that?" Tosen asked looking vacantly around. Pa Rot shook his head and walked off down another hallway but noticed Aizen coming the same way.
"You're looking pleased with yourself today" Pa Rot commented.
"There are many pleasing warriors joining our cause..." Aizen replied with his usual confident expression. It was almost as if he was looking straight through into Pa Rot as they locked eyes "All willing to even die for me"
Pa Rot's eyebrow twitched in annoyance. He did notice something though... to an Arrancar like himself, in a building filled with his kind, speaking so confidently like this, Aizen was that enigma Pa Rot was interested in. People will always blindly follow the norm. Aizen was what created the norm around there. As it was now, Pa Rot didn't see this norm as a worthy cause.
"I bet you're happy about that" Pa Rot answered masking his emotion with one of carefree joy. However, Aizen had already noticed that he had hit a nerve earlier.
'This one may be a "problem child"...' he thought.
"I look forward to seeing how well you do on the battlefield" Aizen finished then walked off past Pa Rot. That was his way. Never talking for long to those he deemed as second rate. Pa Rot glanced back at him.
'Three words from you and I am certain I will destroy you...' he thought to himself.
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