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Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2008 6:50 pm
Here is the new profile: -General Gaian Name: Dark Angel of Sol Name: Dante Sol Age: 19 Height: 6' 2” Weight: 180 Species: Terran Job: Engineer Rank razz rivate Second Class
-Psychological Personality: Dante is kind and helpful. He is the kinda guy who if you harmed his friend you harmed him. Being the raised on a ship has increased his manners a lot. He is courteous to women, shows respect to everyone he doesn't know well, and he never gossips. Though most has his respect at the beginning, it's hard to get it back after it's lost. Likes: Tinkering, Reading, Talking with people, Body repairs, Dating Dislikes: Jerks, Disrespect for tech, Changing ship fluids. Goals: To become a Chief Engineer
-History Short History: Dante was five at the time of the attack. His family was staying the night at a hotel while the destroyer was being resupplied. He didn't know what was going on. Everyone was panicking. He saw a look on his father's face that will never leave his mind. His father, his mother, and him, “stole” a car after there own car was “stolen” and drove to the T.R.S. Chaos. The carnage was massive as Dante's mother held his head against her chest to hide his eye to the horror. As the car was getting to the ship, They slowed to be accompanied by an armed transport group. When they were about 80 feet, a Drathonian Flyer popped out the from behind the ship and fired a low level energy missile that hit next to the car. Most Died in that explosion; however, Dante was saved due to the car and his mother's body. One of the few surviving soldiers found Dante barely breathing. He took Dante to the ship where soon after Corporal Shawn Goodwill had his last breath.
You could say Dante became the T.R.S. Chaos's hopes and dreams. Formally adopted by Private First Class John Weller, Dante spent a lot of time wondering the ship and watching the engineering crew work on ships. He has seen some things that even some officers don't see. Sense there wasn't much for a young boy to do on a Destroyer so When he wasn't watching the Engineers, he was reading whatever he could get his hands on including upper level math and science courses, declassified blueprints, and fiction books. Later on one of the exploration staff found one of the last copies of the bible ever. Dante found it interesting to read but never got the worshiping. John and the rest of the ship's crew would spend a lot of money on book discs for Dante. When Dante got older, He started learning many different trades on the ship. He learned how to fly a starship when there was no danger, the physical limits of the body, how to fire a gun, and how to fix a starship.
When Dante turned 16 he when to a republic training school when he spent six months training to become a soldier. It was the first time he was without anyone from the ship for such a long period of time. Though he was scared pretty badly, He mad it out a stronger and more independent person. When Dante took a skills test, he found that he had to highest skill in math and engineering. He was admitted to the next phase for 16 weeks. He graduated at the top of his class and found himself reassigned to the T.R.S. Chaos. Back full circle, Dante kept on working eventually becoming second head of engineering. One day he had gotten a message that he was going to transfer to the Battle Hymn.
-Notes Appearance: http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z61/uBpNegima/anime_fire_vile-1.png Dante has lightly colored skin with a lean, lightly muscled skin. He has light brown hair and blue eyes. Distinguishing characteristics: 2 tattoos. One on the back of the left shoulder that says “Chaos Never Dies” with a picture of a destroyer in the middle and a similar one under his right that says “Last Hope” with a picture of the Battle Hymn.
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Posted: Sat Oct 18, 2008 12:18 am
Aside from a few spelling and grammar errors, it's very good. I love the detail in the history, and it makes an interesting story. everything ties in as it should.
I will accept this profile, but I reccommend that you work on your spelling and grammar. Try writing it up in word first, or, if you use firefox, running it through the built in spellchecker.
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Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 1:21 pm
-General Name: Arcadia Langdon Age: 23 Height: 5'9" Weight: 135 lbs. Species: Terran Job: Pilot Rank razz rivate Second Class
-Psychological Personality: Arcadia is a difficult woman. She's constantly sarcastic, and seems to be a pessimist, but in truth she's simply very wary, and likes to make all possible problems known to her allies. She also manages to come across as lively and perhaps even spunky with a strong will and focus. It's a difficult maneuver that comes naturally to her. She can also be rather flirtatious, in her own way; if you enjoy sarcasm even when it's aimed at you and can find something funny about her sardonic and rather dark humor, you'd probably love Arcadia. Likes: Comedy (in any medium), reading, techno, late nights with 'friendlies' and a few drinks Dislikes: braggarts, people who can't take a joke, and stupid drunks. and vegetarians. Goals: To be a good pilot; she doesn't care if she's the best, or the worst, so long as she does good for the Terran race.
-History Short History: Arcadia's parents were very... isolated. They were engineers and loved to spend their time together working; it's how they met and how they fell in love. As such, Arcadia never really got to know the rest of her family. So when the Drathonian attacks came, Arcadia's losses were minimal. She's considered herself very lucky, and treasures the fact that she was one of the few who was able to retain a cohesive family unit. It's kept her strong and has been a source of stability through her years of education until she became a pilot. With her parents' influence as aeronautical engineers, she quickly found a love for space flight; with the threat of the Drathonians looming, the chance to pay back her debt to the armed forces was all too powerful for Arcadia to pass up. Her parents were rather neutral on the idea, and no conflict ever arose; however, distance created a gap between her and her family, and although she still loves them, she communicates (or rather, attempts to communicate) with them very rarely.
-Notes Appearance: She's a little short of the average height, but she doesn't mind. Her hair is black, and her eyes are a hazel with more green than brown. And of course, she is in uniform more often than not, so she keeps very few "civvies" with her. Her body is toned from regular exercise, and her expression is usually curious or apathetic. Distinguishing characteristics: none, unless you count her seemingly pessimistic demeanor.
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Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 2:01 pm
It sounds like she and Steven are going to make great friends. A one-track minded man who's first love was flying and who still gets picked on at the age of 26, and a spunky pessamist who has a love for techno and hates hippies. Oh yeah, this is gonna be fun.
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Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 5:51 pm
Altogether an interesting character. The personality is original, and actually still having parents is somewhat unique for this RP. The history is nice, and I can see you went over it with a fine tooth comb to weed out errors.
Very nice as a second Character. She is now Approved and assigned to Green Squadron
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Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 11:28 am
I'm going to have a TON of fun with this...
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Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 7:14 pm
-General Name: Raji Sedhik Age: 20 Height: 5'4" Weight: 115 lbs. Species: Terran Job: Pilot Rank razz rivate Second Class
-Psychological Personality: Raji is a chipper girl with a love for flying. She's straightforward and sweet, but errs on the side of being easily manipulated. She comes from a huge family, and is used to always having to listen to everyone bigger than her. Her over-trusting nature is balanced by the fact that she doesn't like associating with men. Though not necessarily gay, she seems to have more interest in other women than men. Likes: curry, being alone in space, shiny new scimmies Dislikes: men, fighting, loud noises Goals: To help the UTR.
-History Short History: Raji is the ninth child in her extended family of twenty-three brothers, sisters, and cousins. Her family is very social, despite the fact that they are spread throughout the cosmos. When the Drathonian betrayal occurred, she lost several aunts, uncles, and cousins on several planets. Her father is a section manager of a large power conduit production firm, so luckily her family was living on a rimworld where the company's manufacturing base was. Raji always likes flying and the peace of space, so when she decided to join the military, she immediately opted to become a pilot. While Raji has her own reservations about the violence involved, she won't soon forget her lost family members.
-Notes Appearance: Raji is a short, dark-skinned woman with straight black hair to her shoulders and an unblemished face. She has very smooth Indian features on her small, child-like head. Her eyes are deep brown. Her build is very slim, and she is very physically fragile for a soldier.
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Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 7:41 pm
My word, Green squadron is going to become an Akamatsu Manga if this continues... Hrm... Though if it does Continue, Green squadron could make up it's own plot.
Anyway, Very intersting character.
There is one typo I noticed " Raji always like flying and the.." Other than that, the thing is pristine.
I'm going to Approve her, on the condition that if you neglect your other character, one of them is gonna die 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 8:18 pm
Since it would be unfair for me to Approve this character, I'd like to ask some of my players to go over it and see if they think it could be beneficial to their roleplaying.
-General Name: Emma Thompson Age:16 Height: 5'2" Weight: 97 Species: Terran Job: Pilot Rank razz rivate Third class
-Psychological Personality: Emma is a very upbeat, happy kind of girl. NOTHING gets her down. Between her bubbly personality, and optimistic attitude, you'll never find her sad. If you do, well, then the world is about to end, so you better run. Likes: Bright colors, Starships, people, lollipops, and candy. Dislikes: Drathonians, rap music, and vegetables. Goals: To Become famous. or something. She doesn't really care, so long as the universe is set right. Which, it will, of course.
-History Short History: When Emma was two, the Drathonians attacked her family home, Capturing and enslaving them. Emma and her brother, Seth, were sent to be killed, as they were too young to be useful. Seth, however, managed to escape with his little sister in his arms, and ended having to raise her as the two fended for themselves on the prison planet for several years, before a Terran raid was sent to free prisoners. Seeing Terran soldiers, the two found their way back to the prison and managed to find their parents being shepherded aboard a transport that was about to leave. They made it inside, but just before the hatch closed, a Drathonian sniper got a lucky shot, mortally wounding Seth, Who died in his family's arms. Resolute, Emma's parents joined the Terran military, to avenge their lost son, and the time they spent imprisoned. As soon as Emma was old enough, she was sent through training, and found to have an aptitude for piloting starfighters.
-Notes Appearance: Emma is failry short, and somewhat skinny. She is nothing remarkable, aside from her vibrant blue eyes, full of the spark of life. Her overall appearance is that of a young teen, giving the illusion that her age is much lower than it is. Distinguishing characteristics: Emma does not look nearly old enough to be a soldier.
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Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 8:52 pm
For my first point of order, I am just short of mesmerized at the baby boom of pilots! And I find myself being reminded of Rouge Squadron from Star Wars with all the new wing men I am getting! Bobbo is gonna have to serve a lot more coffee.
For my second point of order, I am very intrigued by this new character of yours, Kei. Very interesting past, and the fact that some of her likes are lollipops and candy after growing up on a prison world is nothing less than a Herculean task, and talk about just making the minimum age requirements. And she would fit in perfectly with our rag-tag squadron of flyboys. In my professional opinion, and with the power invested in me by the state of Minnesota (and an online degree), I give this profile a THUMBS UP! ((I would give an approved instead, but I don't know how much weight my opinion carries))
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Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 9:23 pm
Well, I was too lazy to specify how many years she was refugee on the prison planet, but it's somewhere around 5 or six. that means she'd have time to develop a taste for lollipops XD Also, the character is based off of another story i've been writing, and is essential to her "ism"
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Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 8:27 am
The only note I'd make here, straken, is that you don't have a wing of flyboys. You now have a wing of flygirls. Thumbs up.
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Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 8:56 am
You know I was kinda expecting a grander profile then that. Excluding that it's good. I say Bring her in. More pilots the better.
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Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 7:51 pm
I'd say three "Yea"s is enough. And now, HAREM SQUADRON GET!
I mean.. GO GREEN SQUADRON!
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